Author: Fellstorm
Description: When Princess Celestia bans Blueblood from frolicking withing the Canterlot city limits, he strikes out for Ponyville, determined to prove to the world that he's his own stallion and get out from under his aunt's long shadow. Meanwhile, Big Macintosh pines for Twilight Sparkle, but knows she'd never be interested in a simple country pony. With the help of some stolen zebra magic, the two stallions switch bodies, triggering a chain of events that will turn life in Ponyville upside-down!The Prince and the Workhorse (New Part 23!)
Additional Tags: Freaky Friday'd, romance, comedy, light shipping, heavy shipping, brain-freeze (of the butt)
137 comments:
Dis description is quite short...
ReplyDeletePosted minutes ago and some [Spare the Children!] already gave it 1 star?! [Buy Some Apples]?!?! I almost feel compelled to upvote it just for that. may read it too. Looks like it has potential to be funny...
ReplyDeleteLol, nice concept. Must read.
ReplyDeletethis looks interesting...
ReplyDeleteWell, you managed to spell "Canterlot" wrong, which should be some kind of deduction, but since I love this idea of this so much, and it's pretty clever so far, have a fistful of stars.
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ReplyDeleteHow the hell do you see who gave the ratings?
ReplyDeleteBut I love bodyswap fics, can't wait to read this one, though will have to wait until tonight
@Melodia
ReplyDeleteYou cant see WHO gave them, I just saw one rating three minutes after it was posted and it was 1 star. Pisses me off. Damn trolls.
As for the [Oh noes!], I just want to spare the children and sensitive from my colorful obscenities. This time...
Notice how the "A" in "A"dditional Tags isn't bolded. Seems like that immensely popular fanfic made its way into this story as well.
ReplyDeleteWHELP, I just predicted the entire plot line.
ReplyDeleteHow do I get my story on here?
ReplyDeleteHow do I get my story on here?
ReplyDelete@Shizuka Ryuko
ReplyDeletewell first you submit it through the submit email address: submit@equestriadaily.com, then you wait for the pre-readers to read it and if they think it's good, then it gets posted
I read the title and thought "Oh look a prince and the pauper story, this might be a nice read."
ReplyDeleteI read the tags and thought "Comedy, I would imagine, and shipping... I need some brain bleach."
I read the description "Oh, thats not weird thats funny."
And now I shall read the story.
I approve of this story and want more.
ReplyDeleteIs it just me or is the A in Additional Tags not bolded like the rest of the text? Damn my OCD.
ReplyDeleteThis gonna be gooooood.
ReplyDelete"Hey Twilight, i really like your mane!" -ROFL XDDD
That Ampersand seemed like a lovely girl... a shame they couldn't make it work.
ReplyDeleteLots of fun so far. That was quite the royal proclamation that Celestia laid down. I note this Blueblood is less of a stuck-up bore and more clueless, which is entertaining in its own way. And Poor Big Mac... always falling for the intellectual types. He should totally have gone for Junebug. She seems sweet, if not the brightest flower in the field. I suspect his reputation is going to take a nosedive when this exchange occurs... not to mention the fact that he'll have to convince Twilight that he's not gay.
Looking forward to the coming comedy of errors!
loved the story really fun, blueblood running across the palace for that mare lol, Celestia ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE really fun... And mac trying to talk to twilight ,really good looking story looking forward for more
ReplyDelete@Harwick
ReplyDeleteAgreed, though I gotta admit his latent racism is a bit cringeworthy, if actually quite believable. And that scene with Applebloom was really cute-who knows, maybe he'd be good with kids? There must be SOMETHING he's good at. Except getting mares to sleep with him, I mean.
It was oaaaaay, I guess. Although I do agree with Harwick. I'll keep reading the next parts of the story, but it obviously won't be the best thing.
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ReplyDeleteYou spelled Canterlot wrong.
ReplyDeleteThe official spelling is Big Macintosh, per the grab bags.
Also, they don't speak English, they can't because England doesn't exist in their world.
This story needed a few more passes from a beat reader before getting released here.
Well, here's my crappy fanfic. It's not the best.... and never will be. The title is crap, which goes perfectly with the actual story. Here it is: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/5279/Baconetta%3A-A-Crispy-Tale
ReplyDeleteWoah, 218 views. Da-yum!
@Rainbow Dash
ReplyDeleteWhy did you link your story here? This is not an advertisement section, the comments section is for story feedback, and only for the one story the section was created for, which is not yours.
Good story, keep it up!
ReplyDeleteThis is an interesting idea, I'll give it that.
ReplyDeleteAs for the overall follow-through, that remains to be seen.
I hear about the extensive vetting and editorial process by EqD's prereaders, and then most of the stories which make it through to the site have egregious grammar errors, and often spelling errors too.
ReplyDeleteMaybe the editorial passes should be used for editing?
This story's grammar and spelling are fine, except for the consistent misspellings of names from the show, which, y'know, should have been caught by SOMEBODY.
I am loving this story so far. It has a pleasantly Wodehouse-ian feel to me, but maybe that's just because it actually contains a valet.
ReplyDeleteSpeaking of which, HALLELUJAH, someone who doesn't have the palace guards inexplicably working as servants! I like Tombs' stolid nature. You get the feeling he's seen things nopony should while working for Blueblood.
Keep up the good work! Prince Blueblood's outfit (complete with buttless chaps) really did make me laugh out loud.
Actually, now that I reread Celestia's rant I think I know where his racism was inspired^^
ReplyDeleteD'awwww Big Mac!!!!! I wanna hug him...
ReplyDelete@NorsePony
ReplyDeleteProbably the premise, prose, jokes etc. were good enough for the pre-reader to think that it stood a chance. They're usually swamped so they can't give full edits/reviews to submissions.
Doesn't mean that the name mispellings are any less a problem. Just saying.
It's true though, a lot of stories posted here are in dire need of editing -- usually it's reletively minor, but still multiple simple errors.
ReplyDeleteI didn't notice any in this one. It's pretty good so far, albeit perhaps a bit slow. I agree with Unknown, Blueblood having a butler feels so much more natural than guards.
Technically he's a valet. A butler is the head of the household staff, a valet is more of a personal assistant.
ReplyDeleteLOVE it :D
ReplyDelete@Commentatrar Yeah, but most people don't know that.
ReplyDeleteI lol'd at Blueblood's attempts to sound like Big Mac. "Eyop?" and "durr ..." especially. :)
ReplyDeleteDid....did you just make the Freaky Friday thing interesting? SORCERY!!!
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to Big Mac going for Twilight. I wonder what the pony equivalent of "I can't believe you would hit on me after being a massive douche to Rarity" would be.
wow, this author writes fast
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ReplyDeleteI do so love Pinkie Pie.
ReplyDelete@stringtheory
Perhaps, or perhaps the story is finished already and the author is throttling parts. It's a sensible strategy -- you don't have to worry about having an uncompleted story, and it keeps ongoing interest in the fic.
I am really enjoying this story :) Good job!
ReplyDeleteFrickin daily updates win!
ReplyDeleteI feel that there is a bit of wasted potential in Twilight discovering Blueblood's identity immediately after the body switch. I might of liked to see a few scenes where they interact without Twi hating him. It would have been entirely possible, I think, and it wouldn't need to affect the current paradigm.
ReplyDelete^No, i find that actually really good. Cause now you could ask yourself why it is that her thighs got quivy - was it Blueblood´s body or Big Mac´s charm?
ReplyDeleteReally good chapter, i loved how you described Twilight as Arabian exoctic flower. <3
I always thought that an Arabian/Indian humanized Twilight lookes the best. Though that´s just a personal preference.^^
why isn't there moar yet? *sniffle, sniffle*
ReplyDeleteThis is such a cute story! I think that Big Mac is secretly gay but his crush on Cherilee and Twilight are just too cute. I want him to find his sweetie! Anyway, I hope you update soon. ^^
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ReplyDelete@ketchup504
ReplyDeleteEnergy weapons may be quiet, but they glow like flares. Worse than tracers in terms of giving away your position, especially at night.
I think i'll just come out and say this but ... Of ALL the stories on here, i've never had to go back and check for updates on any of the stories more than this story right here! And it's disappointing for me to keep finding that not an update has appeared in the longest time V_V so what i'm trying to say is, i love your story! And i would absolutely love to see it finished! I've been faithfully checking back on this story for the past 2 weeks and will continue to do so until you have a part 5 out and ready!
ReplyDeleteits just me or i think a part is missing? well about the new update... EXCELLENT really good reading loved the tombs character cant wait for more and want to se how this work for big mac and blueblood :)
ReplyDelete@LacionARG
ReplyDeleteFor some reason part 4 has been dropped and the "Part 4" link links to part 5
Another great chapter! Tombs continues to be fantastic--intelligent and crafty valet for the win! Clearly he is The Best Pony.
ReplyDeleteThis story has such a subtle, clever sense of humor. I loved that the spread in PlayMare was identical to the spread in the other magazine aside from one crucial detail. (Scandalous!) And then poor Fluttershy. But where oh where can Rarity be?
Oh, I also had to chuckle at the line that made it sound like Big Mac felt that ruining one of Rarity's gowns was worse than publicly humiliating her. Now my headcanon is that he's secretly a hugely passionate fan of ballgowns. Oh yes, there's many a copy of Clotheshorse Magazine hidden under his mattress . . .
I guess the author just got the first parts quick, and is doing things normally.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, still an amusing fic, though *I* wasn't too surprised...
Ok, I see someone derped a bit...
ReplyDeleteFrom what I can tell, chapter 4 was posted a while ago. The new chapter was accidentally linked to here as chapter 4, and this was fixed later, and put into another story update but only 5 is new (from the 'really early morning technically' update).
YESS!!!!!!!! You are a shampion my friend! Now, if you'll excuse me, i gotta read this part..
ReplyDeleteIt's a decent story but as the others have pointed out the spelling errors (namely in the name of one of the main characters) really detract from the story. He is named after an apple Macintosh is not a Scottish surname. luckily its a simple problem that could be fixed with a simple 'replace with' command in word.
ReplyDelete@TheVampirate
ReplyDeletehttp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/McIntosh_%28apple%29
He can be named either Macintosh or McIntosh, they both sound the same. People from the show have spelled it both ways at various times.
ReplyDelete@Commentatrar
ReplyDeleteI stand corrected on the apple but his official name is "Big Macintosh" (see blindbags, hearts and Hearts and Hooves Day episode synopsis etc.) and it should be fixed.
OMG i love you
ReplyDeleteoh god such an awesome update :D
ReplyDeleteTombs as always a really cool character and big mac also <3
the apologises with Rarity and the scene with Twilight were excelent and cant wait how big mac will act about twi since he is no in his body, and he will have to tell her that it was him but not him at the same time wow thats going to be cool lol
the party scenes where perfect and all the alcohol thing was great
and blublood feeling what is hardwork lol
cant wait for your next update :)
Such a lively story, the part with Pinkie Pie and Tombs caught me off guard there for a minute xD
ReplyDeleteHorses can't vomit but oh well. Can't talk either but, what the hay why not? lol
ReplyDelete@Brony001
ReplyDeleteAside from the obvious "they can't talk either" that you pointed out yourself, it has been established explicitly in "Applebuck Season" that Little Ponies can vomit as well.
@Fellstorm
ReplyDeleteI was hoping I could get your permission to use some of your materials in a story I am attempting. Is there a way I can contact you?
*After reading some more parts*
ReplyDelete...
Okay. This holds potential at least.
I can't find any immediate faults. That's usually a good sign.
@amccordford
ReplyDeletePM me on FiMFiction would be the easiest way : )
Oh. Blueblood and random girl inside her home alone? This cannot be good.
ReplyDeleteDayum, you're a fast muthafucka.
ReplyDeletewell chapter 9 was awesome :D
ReplyDeletei love the characterization of big mac and blueblood and how the story is developing and as always i will say that i love Tombs character damm its should be a canon pony lol
Brain freeze? in the butt? AHAHAHAHAHHA
cant wait for more
Looks like that Banana *dons epic sunglasses*...was Split
ReplyDeleteYYYYYEEEEEEEAAAAAAHHHHHHH!
(I'm horrible, I know)
If that filly starts talking, I wonder how awesomely he'd flip out on Blueblood.
I think it's the banana that was doing the splitting IYKWIM....
ReplyDeleteI read chapter 9 and all I can say is one word:
ReplyDelete*facehoof*.
Ha Ha Haa!!! That one gave me a good laugh! Big Mac "You sure nothing happened," looking at him with squinted eyes. "Nope, So siree, just brainfreeze in the butt." I just love how your characters come to life in this story!
ReplyDeleteHow big can he be that Banana Split needed bandages? oO
ReplyDeleteAlso Tombs best OOC ever written, it´s like he and Pinkie were meant to be. XD
Wish we´d had such a chara in MlP, but i guess alcohol wouldn´t be looked at to kindly in a kid series.^^
Oh, this story is great. I especially liked the part about the banner saying, 'Sorry about your butt!'
ReplyDeleteAw, man! Blueblood gets alllllll the mares.
ReplyDelete@evenfall
ReplyDeleteBlueblood's swagger in Big Mac's body is dangerous at any speed.
Let this be a lesson Big Mac: never confront and reassure a mare with sexuality issues unless you want them to jump you in an odd attempt to prove their sexuality to themselves.
ReplyDeleteDoes Twilight have feelings for Big MacIntosh?
She doesn't swoon like every other mare but she does seem like the type to focus more on her studies or otherwise rationalize away the feelings by convincing herself she doesn't have a chance even if she tried. I mean, her thighs did go quivery so there's something there, right?
Was that a Dark Tower reference in Chapter 7? If so I love you!
ReplyDelete@syd
ReplyDeleteI thought it added a little to the Princess's mystique :-)
Oh, lord. I feel very sorry for Big Mac. And for Banana Split.
ReplyDelete@Tundra
ReplyDelete*Reads chapter 11*
...and the awkward situation worsens.
Great. Just great.
What's with the Royal Interlude? It seems yet another story has taken a turn for the dramatic epic that it hasn't even delved in to previously. Not necessarily bad, but usually it happening means Very Bad Things. This fic has been quite enjoyable so far, and I hope I don't have to give it up./
ReplyDelete@Tundra
ReplyDelete*Chapter 12*
Dream sequences? Just when I'd thought I'd seen everything...
(sigh) It's not a bad tool to use in fiction, but I'm not sure if this is the best place for that tool.
Some readers skim over dream sequences in order to resume the "real" story. Just a fair warning I thought I'd give.
LOL
ReplyDeleteStory was here
_____________________________Ended up here
Mind = blown. Story got weird fast...and I like it ;p
I liked it. :)
ReplyDeleteVery much liked the fact that you put "Hey Jude" in there.
ReplyDeleteEulalie. EULALIE.
ReplyDeleteEulalie, the lingerie designer.
I doff my cap to you, good sir! (I thought I detected a Wodehousian appreciation for good humor! ^_~ )
@Tundra
ReplyDelete*After reading chapter 13*
And the plot/storyline resumes.
Not much to say this time except "good work, keep it up."
Oh man, i've run out of words to say, and i dunno any uppity class words to make my opinion sound reasonable so i'm just gonna say my opinion plain and simple! Your story is very entertaining, meshed with the perfect mixture of heart-to-heart scenes, real-world emotions and encounters, giggling at the funny parts.. Your story is just a delightful roller coaster of laughs and emotions!!
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ReplyDeleteHonestly, I think the subplot of Rainbow Dash struggling with her sexuality is amazing. When this became intertwined with the main story in chapter 10, it blew my mind. Also, I feel that the royal sisters side story could potentially ruin the fanfic. Please stop.
ReplyDeleteBeetles song wut.
ReplyDeleteAnd ass. Teehee.
I must agree that the Royal Sisters portion of this seems a bit odd, but I believe Fellstorm is a good author and has something in store for this, most likely to do with the whole soul-switching zebra magic. Anyway,I have to wonder how Big Mac will take the news that his body is now no longer his own... I also don't think he gets it that even if Twilight falls for him, she'll actually think she's falling for Blueblood, not him. Anyway, good job Fellstorm, I enjoy the story, and keep writing.
ReplyDeleteDat blatant Beatles reference.
ReplyDeleteI have to applaud your commitment to equine puns all throughout this fic, though especially in chapter 8. I know all too well how annoying those can be.
ReplyDeleteNow, now, this can't be the first "walk a mile in another's shoes" type story that also involved physically switching bodies, but it is among the few I've been in general where - as a rule - the two seem to be enjoying and making good on the switch rather than spending all the time struggling. We have Tomes to thank for that, I think. A good majordomo is truly worth his weight in gold!
And, good lord, Rainbow's confounding sexuality and that vile magazine. LOL. On the other hand, it seems like things are taking a sudden turn for the serious post chapter 9/10. I'll have to keep an eye out for more.
Seriously?
ReplyDeleteI don't mind a bit of clop now and again, so long as it's appropriate for the story, but this is too much. Blueblood, fine. It's part of his character. I can even live with Rainbow Dash's aggressive lesbianism, even if it is over the top even for her. But Pinkie and Tombs? No. Not only does it not make sense for either of their characters, but it takes away from the story without adding anything. My heart now sinks every time the pink pony walks onto the page. Throwing pointless sex scenes into a story that started out so sensibly is, I'm afraid, only ever a sign that the author has lost his way. Add that to dream sequences, ludicrously dark subplots and general waffling about and I don't see any reason to continue reading this. I considered hanging on for one more chapter to see if it improves... but I said the same thing two chapters ago.
Perhaps the author needs to take some time off to properly think about where this story is going. That is all.
@Tundra
ReplyDelete*Reads up through chapter 15*
...
I... need... a... cold... shower...
and... some... mind... bleach.
*shivers*
My mouth is gaping wide open at that scene in Chapter 15, what could Pinkie Possibly be doing with Tombs that makes her scream out BINGO!!! Ha ha!! I'm enjoying this story to tha MAXX!
ReplyDelete@Nine
ReplyDeleteYou are really gonna hate this next chapter, dawg.
Things with RD come to a head, lots of PP and Tombs doing serious talking and all that stuff with the Congo comes full circle.
I wasn't gonna, but I might throw in some princess on princess action if the readers demand it.
No trollin': The story is kinda out of my hands. Not to say out of control, but I kinda take a more holistic approach to writing, you know? Feel out the vibe, don't fight it. If something serious or dark happens, I'm not gonna keep it out just because I want the story to stay inside a particular genre.
Somebody said something to the effect of "If you're not pissing someone off, you're doing it wrong."
I would never deliberately piss off the readers, but I'm not gonna hide something from them just because they don't want to see it.
TL;DR
You follow your heart, I'll follow mine. It makes me happy to see people enjoy the story, but that's not why I do it.
@Commentatrar
ReplyDelete> I wasn't gonna, but I might throw in some princess on princess action if the readers demand it.
PLEASE NO, OH GOD NO...(multiply this by 100 and you have my reaction)
> The story is kinda out of my hands.
so you're saying that the trope "I just write the thing" applies to you? I'll accept it as an excuse...but some other people might not...
be very careful with this story, you're risking alienating at least some of readers (a.k.a. me), especially those who were expecting a light-hearted romantic comedy (you're doing that part pretty well) (again, me), by putting in grimdark sub-plots (if we wanted that, there's 100+ other stories) and gratuitous sex scenes (it's a romance story, not a clop one, if we wanted clop, there's 1000+ other stories), well at least the sex is kinda off screen...
plus can you upload this story to FIMfiction? It's just easier to follow that way
@stringtheory
ReplyDeleteAptly put, TvTropes. Yes, I am saying that.
If you wanted grimdark, why would you go to 100+ other stories when there's perfectly good grimdark in mine?
As for clop, I'd like to imagine the sex in the story is more fun than gratuitous, but everyone has different thresholds.
I realize reading back my previous comment that I may have sounded a little closed to constructive criticism, which is not what I wanted to convey at all. I love constructive criticism and welcome it with open arms. I'm certain that the things I've learned writing this fic will help me to improve my next one (and improve even as I write this one) and reader feedback is crucial to that.
To answer your Fimfiction question: *nose twitch* It is done!
Hah! This chapter was awesome. Random sex scenes fits well with this story's Pinkie.
ReplyDelete@stringtheory
ReplyDeleteAlso, this is just for Stringtheory:
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Princesses Luna and Celestia were totally smooching. The stress of being the only immortal beings in Equestria finally got to them.
"Oh, Celestia!" cried Luna as she kissed her sister in a way that was totally wrong for a sister to kiss another sister.
Celestia was way into it.
***
Because I wrote it, it's now canon for my fanfic, but because I wrote it in a reply to you, it's only canon for you. Everyone else, when they read "The Prince and the Workhorse" this didn't happen. Every time you do, remember that this scene did, in fact, take place for reals.
U mad?
Nah but seriously man, I appreciate your feedback a lot. I try to reign it in, but my favorite stuff is almost always stream of consciousness (Chapter 10 was all stream of consciousness and it is my favorite chapter). The problem with SOC is you also get chapters like chapter 12, which I also loved, but which freaked a lot of people out.
Trust me guize, I'm going somewhere with it. At around chapter 13 it all clicked for me and now we're gonna start winding down into the endgame.
@Commentatrar
ReplyDelete@me
Still a better love story than Twilight
@Commentatrar
ReplyDelete> Aptly put, TvTropes. Yes, I am saying that.
I assume the version of "I just write the thing" you're applying to yourself is form 1, "the plot gods made me do it" and not form 2, "The Characters Said So", and if you call in form 2 to explain Pinkie x Tombs...*cracks knuckles*...
> If you wanted grimdark, why would you go to 100+ other stories when there's perfectly good grimdark in mine?
I'm not a huge fan of mood whiplash (yes, tvtropes is amazing), I prefere my grimdark levels to at least have a constant baseline and not go away entirely
> As for clop, I'd like to imagine the sex in the story is more fun than gratuitous
I never said that gratuitous didn't equal fun, it's just that the whole Pinkie x Tombs plotline is just confusing, in my mind it went like this: they meet at the welcome party -> alcohol gets introduced to said party -> everyone at said party gets drunk -> random late night stand in closet -> semi-planned sexcapade at sugar cube corner, am I missing anything? because looking back at this flowchart I'm not seeing any 'they explain why they're attracted to each other' part, you could try to pass off part of it as Pinkie being Pinkie, but that's just a cop-out answer in my opinion at least
@Commentatrar
> U mad?
la la la la la, I can't hear you...
> my favorite stuff is almost always stream of consciousness
I write all my essays for school in a stream of consciousness format (the teachers don't seem to care that much), so I totally know where you're coming from
> now we're gonna start winding down into the endgame.
over so soon? good thing I have 15+ other fan-fics I'm reading
@stringtheory
ReplyDelete"Endgame" is a term I may have misused. I mean all the plot threads are gonna start closing off and I'm not opening any new ones. That's gonna take like... between four and ten more chapters.
And of course this story is just a launching point for the whole "Tombs and Blueblood" adventure franchise.
Plus a followup story that will tack directly onto the end of this one.
Pinkie and Tombs's attraction to each other is possibly a bit more subtly implied than I had the skill to do. In my mind it always worked because Tombs is such a stick in the mud most of the time and Pinkie is so spontaneous that their energies just sort of collided. I think you have to at least admit they make a cute couple.
Potential spoiler alert: Princess Cadence (Tombs's old commandant) is also pink.
@Commentatrar
ReplyDelete> "Endgame" is a term I may have misused.
the term you are looking for is 'midpoint'
> I mean all the plot threads are gonna start closing off and I'm not opening any new ones.
good luck with not starting any more plotlines, if you're still letting your stream of consciousness run the story
> And of course this story is just a launching point for the whole "Tombs and Blueblood" adventure franchise.
this should be interesting...
> Pinkie and Tombs's attraction to each other is possibly a bit more subtly implied than I had the skill to do.
I think you had a Relationship Writing Fumble there (god, I love tvtropes...), and hopefully you're learning from it, so the future works will be better
> In my mind it always worked because Tombs is such a stick in the mud most of the time and Pinkie is so spontaneous that their energies just sort of collided. I think you have to at least admit they make a cute couple.
okay, that kinda makes sense, it's been said already, but you could've written that into the story better
yes, I guess they do make a cute couple
> Potential spoiler alert: Princess Cadence (Tombs's old commandant) is also pink.
no shit, captain obvious
Oh how I love Pinkie Pie.
ReplyDeleteNot a fan of mood whiplash though, as I said earlier.
Is "toss some serious shit into silly comedy stories" the new thing lately? Because this isn't even the only one.
ReplyDelete@Melodia
ReplyDeleteWould it help if you thought of it like the Venture Bros.? That show is hilarious, but it deals with some pretty serious dramatic themes, and there will be gags happening onscreen even during an emotional moment.
Get baited, Rainbow Dash!
ReplyDelete@Commentatrar
ReplyDeleteNever seen it.
And really, despite the apologies in the latest chapter, I just can't wrap my head around RD bucking someone to near death like that.
@Tundra
ReplyDelete*Through chapter 17*
This seems to have recovered some momentum from the lackluster events of the previous chapter.
...
I'm probably wasting comment space now.
All this just builds up the pressure to be released when the truth finally comes out.
ReplyDeleteLolwutthefuckjusthappened.jpg
ReplyDelete18... what in the holy mother of any fucking thing in this universe did i just read?
ReplyDelete@LacionARG
ReplyDeleteJust me getting into the holiday spirit. The real chapter 18 is in progress.
@18 what is how did I don't even... BAH!!! I hate April fools day...
ReplyDeleteTwiyon indeed.
ReplyDeleteChapter 18
ReplyDelete>:(
BUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-
i love this author...i hate chapter 18...though if he was to leave out the "u mad?" retardation at the end, i would've just taken it in stride and laughed my ass off some more with this hilariously unprofessional writing, just so funneh.
ReplyDelete@Commentatrar lol i know i was suprised of the fun that it was lol cant wait for the real update :D
ReplyDelete@Zabuzazminion
ReplyDeleteJust for you, I took the "U mad?" out. I wasn't altogether happy with it either to tell the truth.
Probably going to regret this, but in Chapter 18, what does it mean when it says "The activities concluded with a score of 4 to 1" and the part about Tombs being "guaranteed a point no matter what"?
ReplyDeleteWas wondering about this story. Nice to see it's not dead...
ReplyDeleteAt first I wasn't sure if this would be good but this is one of my favorite fics so far!
ReplyDeleteOH my god, a MARE kissing a MARE! Scandelous!
ReplyDeleteProtip: If you want comments on ED, don't post to FiMFiction.
ReplyDelete@Melodia
ReplyDeleteI get like a bajillion more comments there, that's why I made the swap.
Chapter 23,
ReplyDelete...
That was WAY too abrupt for a life-threatening situation.
"Normal?" Hardly.
As I said in fimfiction
ReplyDeleteCelestia manipulated Twilight down to biological level to be her weapon (not much different from canon really).
Shining Armor and Cadance brainwashed Big Mac into sleeping with someone else... kinda like rape in a sense...
Celestia ordered said brainwashing on her nephew, which turned out to be an innocent pony. Even is he was Blueblood, he MIGHT had have true feelings for her and was twisted into cheating anyways.
And they got away cleanly and laughing...
@Natzo
ReplyDeleteFor now...
@Tundra
ReplyDeleteCelestia is not the narrator. She's only saying that because it keeps the spotlight off her (and the fact that, from the beginning, this is essentially her fault).
Oh look, the old comment system. Hi.
ReplyDeleteThis does look like a pretty awesome fic even though I've barely managed to read the first bit of it.