[Normal] [Adventure] [Friendshipping]
Author: Koolerkid
Description: On secret assignment from Princess Celestia herself, Twilight investigates a powerful magical artifact for clues to the mystery of Luna's transformation in the evil Nightmare Moon. Incautious use of the artifact sends Twilight hurtling back in time. Can Twilight discover what caused Luna's transformation? And will she ever make it home again?
My Choices: Twisted Tales Through Time: (New Part 7!)
Prologue | Chapter 1 | Chapter 2 | Chapter 3 | Chapter 4 | Chapter 5 | Chapter 6 | Chapter 7 | Chapter 8 | Chapter 9 |
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Additional Tags: Time Travel, Alternate Universes, WAFF
58 comments:
Irsty wirsty
ReplyDeleteMent firsty
ReplyDeleteThis looks great! It has time-travel!
ReplyDeleteConsidering my favorite fic so far is past sins, I am defiantly gonna read this story
ReplyDeleteLooks interesting. Gonna read!
ReplyDeleteInteresting.
ReplyDeleteLuna and Twilight (+)
Adventure (+)
Friendshipping (o)
Trixie (-)
Time travel (-)
Alternate universe (--)
Off to "to-read" folder.
I would put this in my "to-read" list aswell, but as it is I am far behind on stories I've yet to read in there.
ReplyDeleteI'll come back as soon as I've read those since this looks really interesting.
Interesting story. I'm a bit iffy on the temporal jumping around, it makes it fairly obvious what ends up happening, and I personally don't really care overly much about what happens to Trixie/Twilight as much as what happens to Blue Star.
ReplyDeleteI wish I had a time travelling artifact, maybe then I could find the time to actually read all these interesting fanfics!
ReplyDeleteI don't have time to read the whole thing, but I gave the prologue a look.
ReplyDeleteIt's got an interesting premis, introduces ideas seamlessly, and is an easy read with well written dialogue. Definately give it read if you get the time.
uhm ... waff?
ReplyDelete@Minalkra
ReplyDeleteWAFF = Warm And Fuzzy Feelings
Thanks for all the interest, guys!
Ha, WAFF is the name of my local NBC affiliate. I know it really stands for 'warm and fluffy fanfiction', but it's still funny to me.
ReplyDeleteAnyways, keep writing! I'll love to see more.
Love it, LUUUUURVE it.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading the second chapter, I'm still unsure about this.
ReplyDeleteI think I'll reserve judgment until a few more chapters.
I don't know about anybody else, but I'm a sucker, read that, a SUCKER for alternate universe fics. So you have my full attention and I'm eagerly awaiting more.
ReplyDeleteAlso, that last scene was just TOO CUTE! So far, the WAFF tag is living up to expectations.
well, uhm, i like it. to be honest, i'm a tad confused. spoilers, so caution.
ReplyDeletePrincess Luna and Celestia set up this Batman gambit to free their friend ... Blue Star or what-have-you, encouraging this pony couple, starting a town, that sort of thing. yet they don't know who the Element of Magic is, which of the students it is? the self-sacrifice of Twi in becoming the Nightmare is an interesting thought (keeping the time-line intact and all). it's well written.
i want to see what happens when Nightmare Twi gets fixed by the elements and drops her illusion. that will be a riot.
Great start, well written so far, and an interesting premise.
ReplyDeleteI will be following this eagerly.
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ReplyDeleteIt'd be cool if "send" were "sends" in the description. It might sound a little bit over-the-top, but leaving grammatical mistakes in the story descriptions frequently convinces me to skip over fics entirely. I'm sure I'm not the only one.
ReplyDeleteHearts and smiles etc. etc.
Edit: I deleted my previous post to correct a grammatical mistake. The irony in that isn't lost on me.
I must say that I am intrigued. Is someone being possessed by something inevitable? If so, what about the second helmet? After all, Twilight brought a helmet back in time what happened to the one that was already there? Are there now two nightmare horses going to run around or what?
ReplyDeleteUMMMM, SOLID 5 STARS AFTER 35 VOTES?!!!
ReplyDelete/Picks jaw up off the floor
Kooler has talent, and the work is well written. He has given us a start, and a look at what will come. He doesn't try to obscure the story needlessly, but instead gives us Point A and Point B and is slowly filling in the between parts.
ReplyDeleteAfter all, the Journey is sometimes greater then the destination.
More?
ReplyDeleteHoly crap, this story is amazing. Take all my stars!
ReplyDeleteHeh, I was thinking the exact same thing @Nocturna.
ReplyDeleteAlso, looks like this is the My Little Avengers author, which is one I had been meaning to read for a while, but hadn't gotten around to. Looks like it has jumped to the top of the list.
Pretty good so far. My only gripe is that it's a Google Docs fiction. Makes it a pain to keep track of. Much prefer FiMFiction. Oh well.
ReplyDeleteThis is looking great. I agree with The_Owl though.... I'd love to see this posted onto FIMFiction where it would be easy to track.
ReplyDelete53 Votes and it is a complete 5 STARS 0_0
ReplyDeleteI think this is a new record. I cannot wrap my head around this, even though this story is REALLY AWESOME, there is usually someone who down votes just cause they don't like the picture or some other silly reason.
Anyway, congratulations KoolerKid, you made a 6 star story
Sounds like a good fic. But what I really want to know is WHO DREW THAT PICTURE? Its so cool <3
ReplyDeleteLooks awesome... Now why don't you return my E-mails!? I offered to help proofread your stuff but you stopped sending it! I guess the problem might be with the e-mail service itself, but still!
ReplyDeleteThis has Time Paradox written all over it...
ReplyDeleteVery interesting so far though! On my to watch list.
Hey, I remember looking at this back on Pchan.
ReplyDeleteCongrats on getting up! (I do hope to see future chapters in my queue.)
This story is awesome enough, but it's the My Little Avengers author?
ReplyDeleteNo amount of speed in updates will be fast enough. This easily has potential to make it into one of the best ever pony fics.
An easy read that maintains my interest throughout the chapters. I like how natural the dialogue comes along, and the transitions between different points of view are smooth. And having filly Twilight and Trixie cuddling together makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.
ReplyDeleteGreat story, all my stars.
I love this Story :D Its surprising, unpredictable and it SUCKS IN!!!! just WOW...
ReplyDeleteI want MOAAAAARRRRR!!!!
ReplyDeleteSolid 5 after 63 votes is a new record.
ReplyDelete...Wow
Congrats Koolerkid!
*SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS*
ReplyDelete...just finished reading the story so far.
Oh my. This is heavy.
From the image, I wouldn't have guessed it would turn out like this. You got me gripped right from the start.
Twilight going back in time, saving Luna from the Nightmare but effectively taking her place ... oh boy.
I like your portrail of Trixie. It makes a lot of sense, and it's uplifting to see things turning out better for her in this timeline. :)
However, on the other hoof, it ... well, it's just sad to see history rewritten. It means that everything Twilight went through with her friends was ereased. ;(
She may get to see them again, their alternate timeline selves, anyway - yet they won't remember the time they had spent together. ;__;
Good to hear though that she got close enough with Celestia and Luna before her banishment so she'll have somepony to turn to when she comes back. :)
Heh, can't wait for their reaction when they find out she was Twilight Sparkle all along! :D
(guess it'll pretty much reveal itself when Twilight's being blasted by the rainbow, s'ppose that'll shatter the illusion too)
Plus, I'm curious how the whole "two potential bearers of the element of magic"-thing will turn out.
Can the element of magic be split between the two? After all, they both share the same talent, and have grown to be the closest friends. It would actually make sense.
Can't wait to read on. :)
...
So ... Spike was actually *created* by Twilight's magic? Okay, that's new. :O
@LavenderSkies
ReplyDeleteits from a guy going by wingwind
After 74 votes the story was still solid 5 stars.The 75th vote brought it down to 4.9.
ReplyDelete@WizardWannabe
ReplyDeleteDo it like me:
Convert fanfics into audio via text-to-speech software, maybe mix in some music, and stuff them on your mp3 player!
I listen to fanfics every day on my to and back from work! ;)
...by the way, I just wanted to mention that I am interested in *equal* parts to learn more about Twilight and Trixie as well as Twilight.
ReplyDeleteI like the concept behind this fic. You've got me interested in both present and past story lines.
ReplyDeleteTwilight and Trixie as fillies and best friends are impossibly cute.
That's an interesting theory about Spike's birth. I don't think I saw it anywhere before.
Twilight technically hasn't broken her Pinkie promise yet because she's still performing her experiment.
All my stars, can't wait for the next chapter.
"Meanwhile, a little less than one thousand years later"
I hope this was a joke... Time doesn't work this way.
i hope that hasbro would make this episode in season 3 and of course edit the prologue a little bit or maybe make it into a movie hmm i like that
ReplyDeleteThis... This is going to be interesting.
ReplyDeleteSo Twilight went back in time, took the banishment/evil in Luna's place, and is going to return?
I'm really hoping that the whole timetravel/NMM thing gets revealed and isn't pushed under a rug by Twilight.
I really hope this story hasn't been abandoned. It was such an interesting concept, and had such great writing.
ReplyDeleteAccording to author's blog, the next chapter is already finished and is now being proofread.
ReplyDeleteThis was an awesome update! Nice to see that Twilight... I mean Blue Star has some oomph behind her.
ReplyDeleteAnd Celestia with the Royal Canterlot voice? Awesome.
Please keep the updates coming!
Great story! It was a whole different experience going back and reading the first chapter again after finishing the third. That's good writing!
ReplyDeleteI really like this story. A lot. And the last update was excellent. Really, the only thing I don't like about it is that time travel here isn't casulty-free like is shown in canon.
ReplyDelete@drkHD
ReplyDeleteWell, Kooler started this fic before that episode even aired. Besides, she didn't even travel through time on purpose or with a spell designed for it. It's been shown quite a bit in the show that lots of things can go wrong with magic.
@drkHD
ReplyDeleteWhy would you dislike it? Stable time loop is the most boring form of time travel.
@drkHD
ReplyDeleteApples and oranges. They were completely different spells that happened to have similar effects. In It's About Time, she temporarily projects herself backwards without really 'breaking' the fabric of time. In this fic, she accidentally tears a hole in time itself and falls through, disrupting the normal flow of history.
Why isn't there MORE!?
ReplyDeleteFurther, why isn't this on fimfiction.net?
@Christy "Dame Helen" McFarland
ReplyDeleteActually... It is, here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/16358/
Okay at chapter 7, I am stumped on how AppleJack is in the same time-line as Twighlight Sparkle, 5 years before Princess Luna's transformation into Nightmare Moon and before the one thousand year banishment. It rattles my mind to wonder why and how she fits into this story at that point in time. Could you please tell us all how this fits into the story in that point in time. Im not trying to attack you story I'm just wondering why,how, and what is it to put a character that doesn't exist yet... Dont get me wrong I am intrigued by this fanfiction. Im just stumped on why
ReplyDelete@FoxMane
ReplyDeleteIt's G1 Applejack; I've been using the G1 equivalents of all Twi's friends for her friends in the past. Posey = Fluttershy, for example. It's just that Applejack is the only one who shares a name with her G1 counterpart. In-story, it's just a common, hereditary name for the Apple Family. Sorry for the confusion.