[Comedy] [Random]
Author: psychicscubadiver
Description: Twilight is an intelligent mare, and always has something to say. But when a group of bizarre creatures shows up at her library offering life long service and devotion, for once she's at a loss for words. Which is too bad, because she'd really love to ask: what's a human and why are they so weird?The Brony International Guard
The Brony Guard Unlimited (Sequel)
Additional Tags: If you could wouldn't you?
67 comments:
I'll read it for the LOL's
ReplyDeleteCool story bro
ReplyDeleteAgreed, Bombe. This should be good for a chuckle or too. :3
ReplyDeleteAnd if i could, i probably would too. :P
What?
ReplyDeleteMy dreams have come true
Okay, it's convinced me- IM READING IT.
ReplyDeleteThe description actully makes me want read HiE... added to the To Be Read list:O
ReplyDeleteYay, this finally got on here.
ReplyDeleteIs this going to be a "What are these apes doing in my house?" kind of story?
ReplyDeleteI read this on FimFiction last week. It is bucking hilarious. Even if you don't like HiE, it's worth reading for the sheer absurdity of the situation.
ReplyDeleteSounds interesting. I'll save this for later. I got stuff to do.
ReplyDeleteWhy they finished the transdimensional portal before me!!! and how they get my navigation source for ponyville , Reatarded Steeeler
ReplyDeletethis will be my emblem from now on :D
ReplyDeleteSounds like sheer fantastic comedy. Must read!
ReplyDeleteI would so do that~
ReplyDeleteNow to read.
Yep, I had many lols with that one.
ReplyDeleteI never read any fanfics, but this one made me mildly interested, I took a read and found that it was hilarious! Good job, I demand more ;3
ReplyDeleteLoved it! thank you for that good read man.
ReplyDeleteSeriously guys, you won't regret reading this one, lols to be had here.
ReplyDeleteHehe, this was a fantastic read.
ReplyDeleteConsider my curiosity piqued.
ReplyDeleteThat doesn't happen often. I haven't read a fanfic in a year.
lol another crazy story
ReplyDeleteTook awhile for this to get here
ReplyDeleteOh hey Look whose in the story.
ReplyDeleteThat was hilarious.
ReplyDeleteThat was really funny hahaha, I love it!
ReplyDeleteI SO JELLY.
ReplyDeleteBut really, great story. Very funny concept and great execution.
I won't say the ending wasn't a LITTLE dark, though.
Still, a very fun read.
Ugh...I hate HiE...I'll read it.
ReplyDeleteHahaha, this was hilarious. I eagerly await more.
ReplyDeleteFinally! This got on here! I wonder what's Seth's reaction was upon reading this...
ReplyDeleteI usually avoid HiE but this sounds awesome and you guys seem to like it. Off to the "to read" pile with ya!
ReplyDeleteThis was just awesome. Absolutely awesome. It actually made me laugh out loud several times and was amusing all the way through. It was a bit disappointing to see so little of the Rainbow Dash Division, but you can't have everything.
ReplyDeleteof course "they" would be in this story XD
ReplyDeleteto anyone on the fence
ReplyDeleteREAD THIS!
you will not regret it.
I read this last week as well.
ReplyDeleteFRIGGIN' AMAAAAAAZING
awesome read, loved the ending
ReplyDeleteVery funny and cute, 5 stars.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant, just brilliant!
ReplyDeleteBut the Twilight Division needs a few more Germans. Science and engineering is what we do best (except brewing beer). :D
She can have me.
This is probably the best, most thought-out way for bronies to actually travel to and stay in Equestria. Quite the amusing story, too.
ReplyDeleteSo the people who comment here get considered first to go, right? lol I would be torn between the Luna and Rainbow Dash divisions. This was an awesome read, well done!
ReplyDeleteThe Fluttershy division was SO WONDERFUL!! And I'd definitely choose the Pinkie division.
ReplyDeleteTo the MOOOOOOOOOON!! Heh.
ReplyDeleteLyra subgroup, oh yeah
ReplyDeleteI would go, and totally be in Luna Division. I REALLY like her mane. LOL
ReplyDeleteThat sounds hilarious think I'm gonna give it a read.
ReplyDeleteLol it's a good story I lmao at trollestia
ReplyDeleteThis was so brilliant. Thank you, just thank you. I so so so hope there's going to be more. This read like the perfect pilot to a much larger series. Made my day.
ReplyDeleteWhy did it have to end?
ReplyDeleteTROLOLOLOLOLOL
ReplyDeletewell the ending should have been expected.
ok that ending did i expected, and seththisto is the Twilight follower? i thought he like trixi moar.
ReplyDeleteThat ending was good.
ReplyDelete"But as Pinkie saw Twilight her face brightened, losing its haughty expression. “Hey Twilight! We’re playing a game! Do you want to join in? You could be the royal magician protecting the queen of sweets from the terrible machinations of tooth decay and other villains."
ReplyDeleteTAKE MY STARS! ALL OF THEM!
So humans go to Equestria and Dashie, Pinkie, and Rarity promptly go mad with power.
ReplyDeleteAnd dare we ask what will become of Trixie's loyal minions?
The division leader checked the list again. “Item number thirty-four.”
ReplyDelete“Refresh my memory.”
“We will not, and I quote, ‘Help you get your groove on with Rarity’.”
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Hilarious! Loved every moment. This is the kind of story HiE fics should strive to be like.
ReplyDeleteI understand that this is just supposed to be a funny story, but I can't help but be creeped out by this. There are enough of you that enjoy Cupcakes and plot pics, not to mention the fact that I know for fact that some of you would willing partake in something half baked like this, gives it an eerie vibe.
ReplyDeleteYes! Read this on FIMFiction, I knew it would make it to EqD!
ReplyDeletePoor, poor Celestia Division. Its gonna get mighty cold on the moon.
Our flag has been formed my brothers and sisters of the herd.
ReplyDeleteThat, was bucking hilarious, pleasepleaseplease write a sequel/continuation.
ReplyDeleteThat, was bucking hilarious, pleasepleaseplease write a sequel/continuation.
ReplyDeleteImagine if he had said princess molestia lol
ReplyDeleteI feel obligated to read this for some reason.
ReplyDeleteAnd if I'm being honest, I'd probably pledge lifelong servitude so long as I got to live in a perfectly canon world. Hell, that's true for most Disney-like worlds. Everything's colorful and you can solve all problems using friendship? Count me in.
pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletemake a sequel!!!!!!!!!!
make this a long big-ass series!!!!!!!!!
seriously, this was cute, awesome, interesting, funny and a lot of good things! :D
@Fuzzyhead12 It was explained that the B.I.G.'s leader (who can be assumed to be Sethisto) wanted to be in the Trixie division, but the others convinced him to stay in Ponyville so he joined the Twilight division.
ReplyDeleteAs for the story, I was intrigued enough to insta-read this and I loved it! I was laughing a lot throughout and I loved how Seth and Cereal are in it. I wonder if they know they're in here, and if so, what they think of it.
>“Eskimo ponies are mighty cold.”
ReplyDelete-‘’Eskimo’’ ponies, you say ? ...which would be, like, kinda-extra fluffy to better resist the cold climate ? ;) ... :D : http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lyri30jRKg1rodjx7o1_500.png
>“Uh, hey Twilight?”
>there’s a group of … creatures on the front lawn.”
-Oh no, those are humans ! Quick Spike, use the insecticide before there’s an epidemic !
>“Ponyville goes through a different crisis every other week. Can’t I sit one out for once?”
-Well, this starts good. Twilight with a light, yet interesting sense of humor. :)
>and yes, we can speak your language.”
-Aliens always can perfectly speak English, when we encounter them, so why not ponies from another dimension ? ;) (Any speak French there, by any chance ?)
>Until a triumphant voice in the crowd broke it. “Aha! Told you they were real, Bon-bon! Who’s the crazy pony now?”
-Ahh, Lyra... You can bet she’s gonna LOVE this situation... and their opposable thumbs.
>These creatures are crazy, and if anypony knows crazy, it’s Pinkie Pie.
-She even wrote a thesis on the subject. It was written in chocolate milk.
>“Yes o’ sugary one.” They shouted in return, their expressions amused.
-Heh. This is quite silly and funny at the same time. ;)
>You could be the royal magician protecting the queen of sweets from the terrible machinations of tooth decay
-That’s Colgate’s role, obviously ;).
>Their small, revealing shirts made Twilight confident they were females. The upper abdomen was an odd place for udders
-Oh wow... even if I knew a joke like that was coming, that’s still quite awkward... yet funny, yes. ;)
>The horrible gelatinous blob hissed as the humans darted closer forward
>“there’s a reason I said not to mess with anything in Twilight’s lab.”
-Twilight has her own trans-dimensional portal ? Does it led to the 666 layers of the Abyss (D&d) ?
>our hands, especially our opposable thumbs, let us manipulate tools and objects with precision.
-Hurray, for our opposable thumbs. ;)
>most of us are from America, but there’s a few Brits and Canucks mixed in.
-Huh... what about the load of Europeans (and Russians, etc) ?
Also, «"Canuck" : slang term for Canadians. Its origins are uncertain.»... Uncertain you bet ! I (and anyone I’m asking) never heard that word in my entire life... and I live there.
>Until now they'd just acted like two-dimensional characters, and annoying ones at that.
-Well ? Twilight is awfully fast to judge, isn’t she ?
>Your team is all scholars, mostly science majors.
-I’m surprised that Twilight didn’t instantly ‘perked up’ after hearing this.
>The B.I.G. has more than enough to pay for all the extra animals.
-Huh, wait... Didn’t one of the groups’ leader say they were ALL doing stuff ‘for free’ (or something like that), no ?
>“All the finances are being handled by the Rarity division.
-I bet this division’s leader is one of those fancy/eccentric multi-billionaire(or just millionaire) guy ;).
@Nova25
ReplyDelete>They brought back several gems. We sold those and used the funds
-Owww... No fancy eccentric rich person financing the operation ? That would have been interesting...
>“You’re welcome,” called the division leader as she left. “Oh, and my name’s Cereal−”
-Ahh... I see ;). I suppose the leader of Trixie’s group is Set--...
>And as for my name? You can call me Seth.”
-Wait ? ...huh, it’s because of what the guy at Fluttershy’s cottage said, right ? That he’s not with Trixie, right now ?
>He sighed again, staring morosely at the lunar landscape. Yeah, that did not go as planned.
-Celestia ‘THAT’ much of an angry pony, seriously...
Also : Owww... Finished already ? Well, let’s see when the next-..
>Labels: Complete
-NOOOOOOoooooooo !
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It was a quite a silly, but also funny story... with a good number of cute and also rather ‘awkward’ moments.
Certainly one of the best, if not THE best story about ‘humans in Equestria’ in those last few months (that I have read, between the many stories I read).
I somewhat hope this isn’t really a 1-time only story... would be interesting to have the author’s answer about that ?
There’s SO MANY things left hanging and/or unresolved, that would make for a very suitable continuation. I’m sure many would agree.
Also... Mmh... If I had to chose ONE(1) group, which one would it be ?
ReplyDelete''Mmm'', indeed... If for 'real', this question becomes harder to answer...
Some hesitations between 'Pinky Pie', 'Twilight Sparkle' and 'Luna', honestly.
Would probably be on rotation, between the 3 of them.
And, about ''time''...
>Additional Tags: If you could wouldn't you?
-Again, harder to anwser.
Most probably be a ''vacation''-like thing... Like, going only during Summer, and during the Holidays, you know ?
Also #3... So many thoughts and theories about the 'Future' of those groups and stuff and etc... Quite interesting to actually think and theorize about stuff.
The premise was interesting enough to make me read HiE, and the story did deliver!
ReplyDeleteI feel there should have been a few smaller divisions(maybe instead of 25 in Trixie one, 5 each) for the few other ponies we hold high like Lyra, BonBon, Vinyl and Octavia for example... argh this needs a sequal!