• Story: Scootaloo in Cloudsdale



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    Author: Tamar
    Description: After realising that Scootaloo has never been to Cloudsdale, Rainbow takes the filly to the citadel of the pegasi, much to Scootaloo's excitement. A short sketch for Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo; gentle friendshipping.

    Scootaloo in Cloudsdale
    French Version

    Additional Tags: Cloudsdale, Slice of life, Day off school, Rainbow the mentor, wings

    31 comments:

    1. Well, since it'll happen anyways, I'm not too sure about this one. Seems nice.

      What, thought I was going for first? Nah, I'm already too late.

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    2. @MyLittleHellspawn And then you get the first comment.

      In other respects, this seems like a really sweet idea. Will read, just as soon as I finish the other million and one things I have to read.

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    3. Looks good. I'll be reading this later, I think.

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    4. Its really adorable and nice!!!! ^_^

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    5. Um... This is basically saying "Take Scootaloo and put her in a random new setting". Pass.

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    6. @Baron

      Considering the premise of the story and the fact that Scootaloo is a pegasus, what's so random about Cloudsdale?

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    7. Guess I'll put it on the list.. Also, I really like that picture.

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    8. It was a wonderfully sweet, innocent short story. Just some nice "Rainbow being a positive mentor" stuff - but well written and enjoyable.

      4.5 stars from me =)

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    9. A question. Every fic says Scootaloo can't fly, was it ever said in actual series that she can't fly?

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    10. D'awww. This was so sweet. Some positively adorable Scootalove.

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    11. "On second thought, let's not go to Cloudsdale. Tis a silly place."

      I don't know how that got in my head, but it did. That aside, this is a great story, totally worth reading.

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    12. I read this the other day. It's great and adorable. :)

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    13. One of the best stories I've ever read under 5000 words!

      Thanks

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    14. Now that was an nice bit of light reading. Personally I liked the premise of Dash showing Scootaloo Cloudsdale on the grounds that this is effectively a part of Scootaloo's heritage as a pegasus. It makes for a nice angle on portraying Dash as Scootaloo's mentor, and the idea of the pegasi having their own unique cultural history in Equestria as fliers is certainly an idea worth exploring further.

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    15. @Digiz.SLO

      It's never been said in canon that Scootaloo cannot fly, but at the same time, Scootaloo has never been seen full-on flying. When she has used her wings, she's either been dragging her hooves along the ground, or simply delaying the effects of gravity for a few seconds longer.

      But no, there's nothing in canon that says she cannot fly. She could take to the skies in the next episode as if it were nothing for all we know.


      Anyway, this was a nice read, well worth the time

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    16. It's a nice piece of Scootalove, But I can't get Rainbow Factory out of my mind, Especially during the part when they're at the rainbow factory.

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    17. This needs to become an actual episode. There is not enough Scootaloo going around.

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    18. Very cute fic. Scootaloo and Dash have a relationship just begging for development in the show. I hope they get to it and make it a little something like this. Although with a little more, shall we say, growing pains. I picture Rainbow developing into the bonding role after initially rejecting Scoots.

      My only real complaint about this fic was that Dash seemed just a little OoC. Otherwise, great job. Seeing the sights of Cloudsdale in all it's splendor was fun reading. It's still by far the most interesting locale in FiM.

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    19. Great story! I was half-expecting a bit at the end where Dash let Scoot "fly" (glide/fall) a few hundred feet on the way down, to top it all off. Don't know why, it feels like it would make a good bit.

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    20. I really enjoyed this story. It was a nice slice of life. I think the show would benefit from this type of relationship between Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash. It sweet and really lifts ones spirits.

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    21. Simple easy to read and fun. nice story :D

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    22. Very sweet. This needs to be the plot of an episode.

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    23. @Mattatatta

      Finally someone who's not too blinded by fanon to use common sense.

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    24. @Digiz.SLO, @Mattatatta

      There's also the fact that Scootaloo's wings are proportionally much smaller that those of the adult pegasi, suggesting that they're either underdeveloped or simply haven't fully grown in yet.

      That, plus it makes for a really great story, as has been demonstrated numerous times. I hope that the show writers have picked up on this particular bit of fanon; it's one of my personal favorites and there's definitely potential for an episode centered around the subject.

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    25. So, yeah! French version! Massive thanks to Magnuclean for that. He messaged me out of the blue saying he wanted to translate it, and here we are.

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