• Story: Lazy Eye



    [Sad][Shipping] Derpydash? I guess! (Ignore the star rating above, use the tag) 

    Author: Azure Spark
    Description: Inspired by the song of the same name by the Silversun Pickups.

    All she needs is a shoulder to cry on. A friend, to listen, to understand, to comfort her.
    And that's what Derpy's getting, right?
    Or is it?
    Is it enough to act like a friend?

    This is the true test of a good friend. Can Derpy do what she knows is right? Or will she succumb to her torn emotions?

    What is the right thing to do?
    Lazy Eye

    Additional Tags: Short Story, Night, Doubt, Shipping-Tease, Sad Ending

    40 comments:

    1. Saw this on fimfiction, good to see it over here too.

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    2. That picture is already enough reason to read this, but the description only reinforces my willingness to do so. It even has a sad ending(I love sad)! Soon enough, I'll read this.

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    4. read this over at FIMFICTION it's really good too bad it's already complete

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    5. Hmm...

      Those additional tags are screaming at me to stay away.

      Curse my incredible soft spot for Derpy! If it were anypony else, I'd probably read despite the tags.

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    6. Wow, I'm listening to the song as I'm typing this. Destiny is a funny thing. XP

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    7. Read this a few days ago, sad ending indeed :/

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    8. Read this a couple days ago, definitely recommend this story.

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    9. So let me make this clear: I really REALLY dislike this song and the Silversun Pickups in general. All their music sounds the same to me.

      I'm also not that big a fan of shipping Derpy with anyone but the good doctor.

      I'll give it a shot since these comments are giving it good reviews though. We'll see what happens.

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    10. I will give 5stars just cause i prefer the name ditzy doo

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    11. Damn that cliffhanger. Ditzy dash is a cute idea, I want them to continue so bad

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    12. i liked this story, i want to read more

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    13. As I said many times now, it was an amazing story. By golly the best in a long time. The thing is though, this story can't continue. It was meant to keep the readers thinking. It may be sad that it's finished. There's no reason for it to continue, it would no longer be sad. It's a one night stand friendship. I felt bad for two reason's 1) I feel like I have no heart for not crying at Ditzy's pain, 2) Ditzy's pain.

      Oh and by the way, I read it before it was even on FLMFic. ^.^

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    14. "Sad ending"?

      I don't think I'll read it then :(

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    15. Is it wrong that when I saw the title I thought of Fievel Goes West?

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    16. Holy crap, I love that song.
      >Reads
      >Puts Lazy Eye on
      Well, now I'm sad ;-;

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    17. >DerpyDash

      Ooo, this aught to be interesting =3

      >Sad Ending
      >Shipping-Tease

      ...never mind, I think I'll pass. ._.

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    18. Silversun Pickups? Awesome, enough for me to give it a read

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    19. There's gonna be a sequel where everything ends happily, right?


      please???



      As good friends, at least?


      Ditzy deserves to be happy!!


      .....please?

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    20. Read this on FIMFic before it was in EQD? Screw that! I read the freakin' GDocs version when she was still editing it! I even onced it over for grammar errors and such for it to be here.

      Congrats Azure! Awesome story, deserves to be here. And for those of you that haven't read it, why the hell aren't you?

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    21. @Llox Read it! Trust me. I'm not much one for sad stories either, but this was definitely good!

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    22. @TheSharp0ne No thanks. Not unless there's a sequel/follow up that makes things better. I hate sad endings with a passion. :\

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    23. First time I had heard Silversun Pickups, I had no idea the lead was a dude. :p

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    24. Someone make a story of Well Thought Out Twinkles. If any song screams "pony", it's that.

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    25. well the title suggests a shipping between 2 intelligent people (well thought out), and the name Twinkles suggests a ship between Twilight (kles) and either herself or a twin of herself (twin) so there you go, a shipfic of twilight and her clone. someone get on that.

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    26. I'm a little disheartened at myself that I choose this fic because there was a shipping tag. I'm sure that if there wasn't shipping between the characters that I would have just passed this up because it was a sad fic. But then again, without the shipping it wouldn't have emphasized Ditzy's dilemma on wanting companionship and realizing the falseness of the situation.(Or that she shouldn't take advantage of Dash in her state)

      I loved this fic, really engaging and just heart breakingly warm.

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    27. Damn, that end man... What a kick to the stomach

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    28. I DEMAND AN EPILOGUE WHAT THE BUCK HAPPENED D: did RD remember? did they just ignore it? did they get back together? OMG MY MIND IS FULL OF BUCK!!

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    29. I so need a good ending ;-;
      Loved this fic!

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    30. It wasn't so sad... It's more open ended (with sad being one of the possible outcomes).

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    32. I READ THIS BEFORE IT WAS EVEN POSTED.

      IN THE GOOGLE DOCS VERSION.

      HIPSTER MODE, ENGAGED.

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    33. It would be more... dramatic if the fic incorporated the whole lyrics. I know some parts of song's lyrics repeats several times, but I say it's fine to include the full version in this fic or expand it in your later arcs. Kinda sad to see if this is one-shot.

      Still, as someone pointed out, it's open-ended ending(ish), so it's nice, I guess.

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    34. This deserves more than a 3.9. It was well written, and with an open ending very thought provoking.
      (possible spoiler)
      Id love to see a continuation on this story. It can still be sad theme'd discussing how Ditzy is treated in Ponyville etc, and they dont HAVE to get together. Who knows what RD is thinking the morning after. Or if anyone else knows RD is a filly fooler. Just saying there is potential for this to have multiple chapters without ruining the excellent story written here.

      TL:DR Good Job Azure Spark

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    35. Sequel. Now. Two sequels, actually. One where Dash bitches Derpy out for 'exploiting' her while drunk, and another where Dash actually develops feelings. If you don't, I will.

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