• Story: Your Best Shot (Update Part 2!)

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    Author: Potato Joe
    Description: A Mishap with the Elements of Harmony leave Twilight and Discord with each others powers.
    Your Best Shot (New Part 2!)

    Additional Tags: Body and magic switches suck.
    pühapäev, 11. detsember 2011 op
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    47 kommentaari:

    1. TenchiFreak511. detsember 2011, kell 13:02

      I'm glad to see this one up. I saw this on FIMFiction and gave it a look. Quite a fun little read.

      VastaKustuta
    2. Anonüümne11. detsember 2011, kell 13:02

      I've read this before. It's good, but Pinkie tends to beat you over the head with her medium awareness whenever she talks.

      VastaKustuta
    3. SuperGiantRobot11. detsember 2011, kell 13:10

      Oh THIS can't bode well...

      VastaKustuta
    4. Rodrigo Osorio11. detsember 2011, kell 13:13

      Sounds like the beginning of an awesome story.

      VastaKustuta
    5. Dr.Dͪ͊ͦḮ̘ͯS̔̐̓C̹̔Ò͓͙̫R̀͠͞D͙̫11. detsember 2011, kell 13:13

      Let the Chaos Ensue

      VastaKustuta
    6. Xeddrief11. detsember 2011, kell 13:13

      *hipsterglasses* I read this before it was on EQD.

      Seriously though, its a fun concept and well written. Curious to see what he'll do with...ah, sorry. No spoilers...

      VastaKustuta
    7. Unknown11. detsember 2011, kell 13:17

      Interesting. Even if I already have TONS of more fabrics to read with so little time. XD

      VastaKustuta
    8. Party Favors11. detsember 2011, kell 13:21

      Found this on FiMFiction the other day. A nice piece to chortle over, as are the other works he has going.

      VastaKustuta
    9. AJ11. detsember 2011, kell 13:24

      Oh, cool... glad to see this made it to EQD. It's such a fun premise and the first few chapters have been a kick. DiscoLight makes such an adorable monstrosity.

      VastaKustuta
    10. Cassius11. detsember 2011, kell 13:33

      This story is fairly solid with some exceptions, grammatically speaking, although you have a particular tendency to abuse the dash. The dash is a powerful piece of punctuation; use it with restraint. I have issues with the phrasing occasionally, but this does not detract from the overall piece. I feel the biggest failing of this piece is its inability to keep me interested.

      If you wondering why this story is ranked so low, having a somewhat interesting premise, it is because it has a horribly written synopsis. A synopsis is supposed to be an eyecatch for any prospect reader, and the readers here love judging based on premise and synopsis rather than actual content.

      VastaKustuta
    11. Municipal Engines11. detsember 2011, kell 13:42

      If Twilight has Discord's powers, and Discord is a shapeshifter, then couldn't Twilight just shapeshift back to her original unicorn form?

      VastaKustuta
    12. Ashton11. detsember 2011, kell 13:43

      Absolutely adding this to my 'watch' list. Sounds great but I'm gonna wait for it to finish first.

      >>Cassius said...
      >>...tendency to abuse the dash...

      On this site, that sentence puts very different thoughts in my head... *huggles abused dashie*

      VastaKustuta
    13. Unknown11. detsember 2011, kell 13:44

      Oh hey, nice to see this one come up to EQD!

      VastaKustuta
    14. Anonüümne11. detsember 2011, kell 13:53

      Seeing the comments, I'm gonna have to read it. Also, I've read enough grimdark fanfics so far...

      VastaKustuta
    15. kawoline11. detsember 2011, kell 14:00

      does fimfic hav more stories than eqd?

      VastaKustuta
    16. smokeydops211. detsember 2011, kell 14:04

      I loved this before it was on EQD *hipster*

      VastaKustuta
    17. TheMagister11. detsember 2011, kell 14:05

      It's about time this one appeared here.

      VastaKustuta
    18. AJ11. detsember 2011, kell 14:06

      @Municipal Engines

      Perhaps if she can ever figure out how to control them, she will be able to.

      VastaKustuta
    19. DPV11111. detsember 2011, kell 14:06

      @karrotline

      Anyone can post their story on FimFiction, FanFiction.net, Pony Fiction Archive, etc.

      EqD is a blog where submitted stories are first vetted for "quality" and content by a group of select pre-readers before being approved for posting.

      So yes, there are many more stories out there than on EqD, but usually the ones on EqD are the better ones.

      VastaKustuta
    20. DPV11111. detsember 2011, kell 14:08

      Anyway. Great story. I'll give it 5 here, but rated 4.5 on FimFiction due to Pinkie being really really annoying in this.

      VastaKustuta
    21. ToonNinja11. detsember 2011, kell 14:09

      Wow. I'm actually really digging this. More please.

      VastaKustuta
    22. Ben Gibson11. detsember 2011, kell 14:23

      Oh this is pretty good! i like where it's going!

      VastaKustuta
    23. Admiral Sparkle11. detsember 2011, kell 14:40

      This story is amazing, and Discolight is waaaayyyy cuter than she should be.

      VastaKustuta
    24. Muffinsforever11. detsember 2011, kell 14:42

      It's pretty interesting so far.

      VastaKustuta
    25. AlexReffand11. detsember 2011, kell 15:05

      Where's the pinkie pie fourth wall tag? It happens enough to warrant a warning int he tags.

      Good story so far.

      VastaKustuta
    26. Phoenix Quill11. detsember 2011, kell 15:54

      Cool that it made it to EQD,
      Been following this one for a while, and Im simply waiting for the next chapter to come out.

      VastaKustuta
    27. crris1411. detsember 2011, kell 16:25

      in a way...i expected a fanfiction like this to happen...IM-A READIN

      VastaKustuta
    28. Spikely Whiplash11. detsember 2011, kell 16:37

      I was turned off right at the beginning. It seemed to be a pretty half-assed reimagining of Return Of Harmony Part 2. Rainbow Dash shows up, still discorded, even though she should have been completely drained of any desire to leave "Cloudsdale". Also, Celestia shows up to save the day, despite establishing that she is unable to lend assistance to the Mane 6 in Part 1.

      Do I really want to read any further if the author isn't going to bother with consistent characterization?

      VastaKustuta
    29. Anonüümne11. detsember 2011, kell 16:55

      Lol this story's already open on an other tab!

      VastaKustuta
    30. karim11. detsember 2011, kell 17:16

      To be honest, this is quite a decent fan fiction. At first, I thought it might not quite make it, but as I continued on, I realised it was in fact really interesting, albeit rather unrealistic.

      VastaKustuta
    31. Alondro11. detsember 2011, kell 17:27

      @Tast

      *Scotty appears* Aye! This is just a wee problem, lads! All yeh need ta do is reverse the polarity of the Heisenberg compensators and amplify the negative flux on the transporter pads!

      *Bones attempts to analyze Twilight with a tricorder, which goes all wonky near the chaotic magic* Dammit, Celestia! I'm a doctor not a magician!

      VastaKustuta
    32. Alondro11. detsember 2011, kell 17:29

      @Tast

      He also threatened to kill Pip. That means his evil has now kicked up a notch from 'sly trickster' to 'psychopath'. AJ, hit him REALLY HARD with that mace. But not on the head. That's too easy a way out. Right between the hindlegs, if you get my drift. >:3

      VastaKustuta
    33. Armageddon11. detsember 2011, kell 17:29

      @Spikely Whiplash
      for fun? Isnt that why anyone reads fanfics?

      VastaKustuta
    34. Bryan11. detsember 2011, kell 17:52

      @Alondro

      He may simply be desperate now. He could afford to be merciful when he had godlike powers, but now he's got to get stuff done the hard way.

      VastaKustuta
    35. Tundra11. detsember 2011, kell 18:48

      I'm an anonymous user and what is this.

      VastaKustuta
    36. SightlessOne11. detsember 2011, kell 21:22

      Okay, this is a pretty good story. The concept is unique enough (well, actually I don't think its ever been done before) to make it interesting.

      VastaKustuta
    37. Wanderer D11. detsember 2011, kell 21:52

      @Spikely Whiplash Yes, because fan fiction is all about "What if" not "The series dictates"

      VastaKustuta
    38. Pikari11. detsember 2011, kell 23:39

      I can't say I appreciated some of the early humor ("Dust this *****!", "made a quick check of her..."). Pinkie Pie's breaking of the 4th wall seems a little too extreme (mature rating? websites?), and her behavior seems a bit odd, even for her. But the concept is very interesting, and the storyline itself looks solid. Overall, a good fanfic.

      VastaKustuta
    39. TenchiFreak511. detsember 2011, kell 23:47

      @Spikely Whiplash

      When you make such scathing criticisms, be sure to actually be accurate about them. Posing a what-if scenario, which is basically what this story does, is not even remotely the same thing as desecrating a character's personality in the story.


      Discorded Dash showed up. By the time the Mane Six went after her, she had stopped worrying about Cloudsdale. To assume the possibility existed for her to wonder on the scene at the time Twilight was attempting to fix things with "THE NEW RAINBOW DASH" is not inconsistent characterization.

      Celly helped save the day (more or less). Nothing in the episode outright stated that she was incapable of helping with the fight against Discord; which means it is also not inconsistent characterization.



      What you are actually looking for is "I don't like the premise," which is fair enough but not at all the same thing as "this story has major problems" and is more along the lines of "this is your problem rather than the author's."

      VastaKustuta
    40. DPV11113. detsember 2011, kell 19:43

      New Chapter!

      VastaKustuta
    41. Celestia13. detsember 2011, kell 20:54

      *Spoilers*

      I must admit, I didn't like this. Pinkies characterisation seemed very off to me and some of the humor just didn't fit what I like and though the premise interested me i'm not sure I like the direction it's going.

      while Discord may have been more desperate I can't see him acting like that, he went a bit far and I really didn't expect what happened to Trixie (and I don't even like her much)

      I don't think it's badly written it simply doesn't suit me at all, I found it hard to keep interested.

      VastaKustuta
    42. DPV11114. detsember 2011, kell 21:27

      I will say that I love all the stuff with Twilight.
      All the stuff with Discord is just... meh.

      It's almost like 2 stories.

      VastaKustuta
    43. Ultra The HedgeToaster5. jaanuar 2012, kell 05:10

      ** TWO NEW CHAPTERS! **
      ...well, more like one and 0.02 chapters. :/

      *also, SPOILER ALERT!*


      I didn't quite get the "WHAM" joke, despite considering myself quite literate when it comes to internet culture.
      Also, I "read" fanfics by converting them into audiofiles through text-to-speech software.
      That last chapter had about 6 minutes of "WHAM WHAM WHAM WHAM" in it, so that seemed even more pointless. *rolleyes*


      Concerning Trixie, as I'm certain several people before me have stated, that seemed a bit ...extreme.
      Well, alright, you DID set the stage for Discord being more than merely a "meany-mean-pants" this time around prior with the scene of him threatening to throw an innocent child off a cloud, so it didn't come COMPLETELLY out of left-field.
      (Although there seems to be a lack of "dark/grimdark" tag up there, which is somewhat annoying for people who just want to read a quick MLP-fic to lighten their mood, and then bump into stuff like that. -_-)

      Obviously, still, I'd prefer for nopony else to be brutally murdered.
      Also, he SO totally has to PAY for his crimes. >:-[

      But again, as for Trixie... well, I don't know enough about magic to say if you can recover from being ripped into pieces like that even if Discord was to lose his new-found powers. o___o;
      Just one thing: Make sure her fate is known.
      It would be a rather sad and especially cruel death if noone ever even found out what happend. :´(
      (maybe don't tell the poor townsponies, they'd be traumatized for life... just, say, have Discord spill it out himself while trying to intimidate the others or something)




      But generally, I find the story/concept interesting and am looking foreward to further chapters. Well, just please don't wack your readers with a hammer for 90% of a chapter next time, 'k? ;)

      VastaKustuta
    44. Anonüümne16. veebruar 2012, kell 05:51

      I gotta say with this newest Chapter Seth would probably love this story

      VastaKustuta
    45. terrycloth16. veebruar 2012, kell 10:31

      Twilight gets the powers of the spirit of discord and becomes completely ineffective.

      Discord gets Twilight's powers and is suddenly a major threat instead of a joke.

      This is why 'OP' is her middle name.

      VastaKustuta
    46. Bugsydor16. veebruar 2012, kell 11:35

      Oh man, dat Wham Episode...XD

      You, sir, are a Troping Champion!

      I like how Discord is kinda taken care of now. And the scene with the book pit was genius. I wonder what Twi's mosh pit was like? Was it filled with Twi clones rocking out to a good Beethoofen?

      Keep up the awesome, PotatoeJoe!

      VastaKustuta
    47. Sleipnir17. veebruar 2012, kell 01:16

      Discord was wham-ed exactly 598 times. Sheesh

      VastaKustuta

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