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Author: wanderingbishop
Description: Everyone knows Fancypants is Canterlot's most important pony - but when did he become the most important? How did he do it? And where did he begin his rise to prominence? When Rarity puts the question to him, Fancypants decides to tell her his history in a series of letters, detailing his triumphs and tribulations on the road to the top.Letters from Canterlot (New Part 4!)
Additional Tags: History, romance, social drama, Canterlot, letters
32 comments:
Bout time for a story for these two!
ReplyDelete1st! my life is now complete
ReplyDeleteThis.......could turn out to be a very interesting headcanon story
ReplyDelete@mrsteroids ever walked away slowly from an explosion?
ReplyDeleteD: *walks away in shame* T.T
ReplyDeleteDoes Fleur have a goatee, or what is with the purple box around her mouth? :O
ReplyDeleteThat drawing of Fleur seems kind of... wrong. Might read this though.
ReplyDelete@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDeletehmmm no
@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDeleteThat purple box attracts all of my attention.
Why does Fancy Pants always remind me of Gatsby from The Great Gatsby? Am I the only one?
ReplyDelete@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDeleteBy Fleurs beard!
That beard is just the Europony style of fashion
ReplyDeleteThat beard is just the Europony style of fashion
ReplyDeletesomeone needs to draw a bearded Fleur for the drawfriend. That would make my day.
ReplyDelete@Dubs Rewatcher
ReplyDeleteYou are not alone, old sport.
Quite liked this one. Just a few issues with the writing style but I'm quite finicky when it comes to that.
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ReplyDeleteCongrats, we broke it!
@Dubs Rewatcher one of the greatest literary works of all time.
ReplyDeleteThis story, however sad as it may be, is not on par with it. Still a very good read
Obviously cropped the mouth from a Twilight vector and tried to color match it to... limited success.
ReplyDeleteOdd, "romance" in the additional tags, but "Shipping" isn't in the tags.
ReplyDeleteNot sure if want?
First damn sentence, and I get a "I simply MUST" from Rarity. Luna dammit.
ReplyDeleteThat's going in my FIMFiction Drinking Game, and I hope it kills me.
Having said that, I thought this was rather well thought out, and the prose is engaging. 4/5, and I'll be watching for updates.
When I saw the title I thought,
ReplyDeleteSO AWSOME!!! A play on Letters from Iwo Jima
Then I read tags and summery,
But it was a good read on the way home
@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDelete...blast. The colour correction on my monitor made me miss that *goes to fix issue*
@OtterMatt In my defence, it looked seamless on my monitor while I was photoshopping it together >_<
ReplyDelete@Bombedrumbum
ReplyDeleteClearly, that is a goatee.
It's Fleur's evil self from an alternate dimension: Fluer!
@Dubs Rewatcher
ReplyDeleteFor me, he makes me think of : Hugh Hefner.
Prologue :
ReplyDelete>Rarity apologised as the grey, blond-haired mail pegasus wobbled out from where she'd been squashed against the wall of the house.
-Huh... her door opens *outward* ?
>"Mrrowll," Opal replied, unimpressed with Rarity's ability to speak in italics.
-4th wall thing, here, why ?
1st Letter :
>I employed a unicorn by the name of Crystal Curl – a teal mare with a cream-coloured mane
-I like her mane, huh, I mean ‘name’.
>the dramatic display of the prototype's ability to handle extreme stresses resulted in a flood of new investors.
-Nearly crashing into a crowd in a catastrophic manner ?... Investors like those kind of things. ;)
2nd Letter :
>when a pegasus mare sat down opposite me at the table.
>For a cutie mark, she had a green rose vine, with a blood-red rose in full bloom.
-Somehow, I smell a trap in the form of a... ‘’black widow’’.
>More and more, I found myself setting time aside from my business to spend time with her.
>She began to take an interest in my business, asking what I looked for when buying up shares.
-Oh ho ! Danger Mister Will Robinson !
>On reflection, Liquid Satin's cutie mark was so fitting – a thorned vine, entangling and snaring those drawn in by the beauty of its flower.
-Yeah, that was kinda, at the same time, a subtle yet obvious hint in retrospect.
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Well, this story is one that is quite interesting and very easy to read, I have to say.
Quite good so far, yes.
Part 3 = win. I'm glad I kept up with this. Can't wait to see where it goes now!
ReplyDelete3rd Letter :
ReplyDelete>She had used card-counting – a technique of play that involves memorizing which cards have been dealt out, and using that knowledge to guess which cards the other players have.
-Isn’t this ‘’technique’’ illegal in most Casinos ?
>I saw all the manipulation and deceit of my former fiance.
-I thought the marriage never actually occurred, no ? So, how can it be ‘’former’’ ?
>He informed me Fleur-de-Lis was an assumed name, and that her true name was Elizabeth.
-...Really ? ...you REALLY did this ? (sigh) Seriously ? -_-
There’s no good, or interesting, reason to do this, yet you did it ? I am relatively disappointed by this cheap hit.
>left Mareseille far behind, changing her name and scrubbing out all trace of her history, before coming to Canterlot to start a new life.
-*mumble grumble*... yeah, yeah... changed her ‘’real’’ name, for her ‘’new’’ name. I still say that the previous ‘cheap hit’ was unnecessary.
>Consolidating our companies would make us one of the largest conglomerates in Canterlot.
-...unlimited power ?
>After several minutes of pondering, I admitted that I couldn't think of a good reason.
>We were married by year's end.
-Sounds a bit funny, I guess... usually people go through the opposite.
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Good chapter... for the most part.
@Nova25
ReplyDeleteActually card counting is technically legal in casinos. The thing is if a casino catches you card counting they can still ban you from the casino since it is in fact their private property.
@Nova25
ReplyDeleteActually, fiance referrs to someone you're engaged to, not someone you're married to, and they did get engaged.
The use of Elizabeth didn't work? That's a pity. I was thinking "You know, it'd be great if I could work in the secondary canon name in a way that made sense, and since the alternative personality people give Fleur tends to be a playboy model..." Also, it does serve a purpose - namely that if her name was Fleur-de-Lis to begin with, it makes it harder to deny it's her in the final chapter.
4th Letter :
ReplyDelete>From two of the major players in Canterlot's economy, we became a corporation that dominated the financial landscape of the city.
-Not entirely sure why, but... This sounds like a ‘’MOUHAHAHA’’ moment. ;)
>looking for a specfic mare
-‘’specific’’ (small error)
... Wait a minute ? I just thought of something... Isn’t Fancy Pant telling Rarity (a relatively random pony, from his perspective) about Fleur’s ‘’scandalous’’ secret past (since Letter 3, in fact) ? I will take a wild guess and say that the ‘secret’ is revealed, but the effects negated through ‘’something’’ (friends? Celestia? A piano on Satin’s head?) happening at the Eve party ...
>A storm had come down from the north, and the first gust of wind had ripped the ship's anchor cable free from it's mooring.
-7 wholes days left ? Bah, this will be easy... *Insert big storm* ...damnit !
It’s as if the storm knew ! ...a conspiracy, I tell ya.
>we had no gaurantee that
-‘’guarantee’’ (small error)
>Sure enough, Silver Podium and Liquid Satin were socially ruined.
-Hippity hip hooray, indeed. *puts monocle On*
... Well, it seems like my prediction was right about Fleur’s secret , but still... Rarity still know the true ‘truth’ about Fleur. I know that Fancy Pant might, somewhat, respect Rarity, but to trust her with such an important secret ? Maybe he’s one of the (apparently rare) ponies who know that she’s one of the Elements of Harmony ? ...
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Well, overall this was a pretty good story. Fancy Pant really felt like he was ‘telling’ his own story to Rarity.