• Story: Happy Hearth's Warming

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    Author:     Paxtofettel
    Description: Caramel spends Hearth's Warming Eve with the mare he loves.


    Happy Hearth's Warming

    Additional Tags: Cute, One-Shot, romantic, sappy, Hetero
    kolmapäev, 21. detsember 2011 op
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    77 kommentaari:

    1. Cloudy Kitty21. detsember 2011, kell 09:01

      Bonbon + shipping no Lyra?
      does not compute.

      VastaKustuta
    2. Sdash21. detsember 2011, kell 09:01

      That shipping is new to me...

      :)

      VastaKustuta
    3. Anonüümne21. detsember 2011, kell 09:02

      no lyra?! impossibru!

      VastaKustuta
    4. Tyranoman21. detsember 2011, kell 09:04

      This reminds me of Caramels light, that needs finishing!

      VastaKustuta
    5. Demose21. detsember 2011, kell 09:07

      This is going to get so many one stars, I can all ready tell.

      VastaKustuta
    6. Joe21. detsember 2011, kell 09:10

      inb4 rage over no lyr-

      too late.

      VastaKustuta
    7. goddess littlepip21. detsember 2011, kell 09:12

      I get the feeling that this one has an uphill struggle, breaking up the most accepted pairing there is to make it hetro. I love lyra generally, and always thought bonbon was a good match (at least fanon wise). I'll give it a fair shot, but I doubt it'll change my mind. All I hope is that wasn't made with the intention of turning pairings hetro by one of the (thankfully rare) homophobic bronies

      VastaKustuta
    8. RandomFanguy21. detsember 2011, kell 09:12

      I'm glad to see it got some improvements. I can't say I love one-shots, but when it's a new ship like this it's kinda refreshing. Cute but not spectacularly.

      VastaKustuta
    9. leictreon21. detsember 2011, kell 09:17

      I'll read it just because Bon Bon is being shipped with a colt for once.

      VastaKustuta
    10. toxopom21. detsember 2011, kell 09:23

      Finally! A hertro ship FOR ONCE! Not that I'm reading it, but it'd be nice if this fandom had more of them...

      VastaKustuta
    11. jmoon9621. detsember 2011, kell 09:25

      That kiss at the beginning was a bit too in depth and thank celestia the bedroom was censored. overall though, pretty cute

      VastaKustuta
    12. CTOONfan121. detsember 2011, kell 09:31

      A hetero ship. Finally! I'm not saying there's anything wrong with those who like same sex shipping, but think about it: if every character in the world is gay, WOULDN'T THE SPECIES GO EXTINCT?!

      VastaKustuta
    13. Overlong Analysis Cobalt21. detsember 2011, kell 09:36

      @CTOONfan1 Nope! Magic. Also in vitro fertilization.

      VastaKustuta
    14. CrimsonFire21. detsember 2011, kell 09:38

      Hetero shipping?!
      With BON BON?!
      THIS IS AN OUTRAGE!



      I'll still read this, now wont I...?

      VastaKustuta
    15. Dancing Lotus21. detsember 2011, kell 09:40

      Woah woah woah....woah.....why has this not happened earlier? It seems so obvious lol

      VastaKustuta
    16. Mr. Unsmiley21. detsember 2011, kell 09:41

      BonBon being shipped with someone other than Lyra? Has this even been done before?

      Also, I find it hilarious that slash shipping is so common in this fandom that this story needs to be tagged with 'hetero.' XD

      VastaKustuta
    17. goddess littlepip21. detsember 2011, kell 09:44

      well, I read it now, and I'll say it was ok. Not going to change my preferred shipping of bonbon and lyra, but it's not too badly written. It does however seem to be getting some major support simply because it's a heterosexual pairing, which I find a little depressing. Should like it because it's well written more than anything, not that it isn't gay

      VastaKustuta
    18. Saylisk21. detsember 2011, kell 09:54

      Trolling people is easy when you pair Bon Bon with somepony who isn't Lyra. XD

      VastaKustuta
    19. bestpony21. detsember 2011, kell 10:03

      At least in my opinion, most of the happy-there's-hetero folks (like myself) are simply happy for diversity. I adore how many same sex pairings there are in the fandom, yet I am happy for diversity. Isn't it better for there to be both same sex and hetero pairings prevalent in a fandom than one and not the other? I sure think so! I also feel it's unfair to judge the author for pairing BonBon with someone other than Lyra. Making assumptions like "Maybe this is anti-same sex and has a hetero agenda" kinda rings about as true as homophobic people saying "Maybe this is anti-hetero and has an 'agenda'.". I just think here's not the place for those assumptions!

      I will read and review this when I get home. Because I love Caramel. So much, (also, the description seems good)

      VastaKustuta
    20. Supreme Commander of Brony Mountain21. detsember 2011, kell 10:03

      It wasn't bad...
      It just wasn't great...
      And in the story it implied Lyra was sad because she had feelings for Bonbon too but she was with caramel

      VastaKustuta
    21. Anonüümne21. detsember 2011, kell 10:09

      @CTOONfan1

      you could also argue that the species being mostly female would be a problem for the species.

      really, the only way the world, as depicted, mass much sense is if there is a prevalence of same-sex couples, and other accepted methods of pregnancy.

      also, the massive number of same-sex shippings is probably do to the rather lopsided male-to-female character ratio

      VastaKustuta
    22. Matt Neighbors21. detsember 2011, kell 10:12

      I like me some straight shipping, no doubt, but this was just... um... fluff. There's nothing there, no story, no conflict, no events, no ANYTHING.
      Fanfic writers, take note: THERE IS NO STORY IF THERE IS NO CONFLICT.
      /lecture

      VastaKustuta
    23. pixelkitties21. detsember 2011, kell 10:15

      Bon Bon? Without Lyra? With a boy pony?

      What kind of crazy Elseworlds madness is this? Do not want!

      VastaKustuta
    24. bestpony21. detsember 2011, kell 10:20

      Aw, that was cute. It's a short quick read for those who want a light sweetness in their pony-happy days. The idea of Caramel as a hired hand and all the ponies from over Equestria coming to Sweet Apple Acres for work is a nice touch I found interesting. (Also, I found it hilarious that the author added an aside that the farm was the best producer of apples in Equestria...according to Ponyville. Nice and subtle humor.)

      I liked the attempt at a unique narration style, because it made me feel like this was one of those narrated holiday specials that show on television every year. That said, there were a few strange grammar issues like tense changes and an overabundance of passive voice that distracted me a little bit. I think those are a result of the narration style. Also, I found the part about Bon Bon liking the gentle caress of his hooves ect a little jarring, because I feel it would have been more effective to show that or let us assume it, because it's already obvious to the reader how much she likes him.

      A good, cute read. I'm glad I decided to read it, even though on my phone. Satisfied my Caramel-loving sensibilities. :)

      VastaKustuta
    25. Olivier 'LuaPineapple' Hamel21. detsember 2011, kell 10:21

      @OtterMatt
      It's called 'Slice of Life'.
      If you require conflict for a story, then I'll direct you to M. Bay's latest explosion filled assault on your senses.

      VastaKustuta
    26. Heavybull21. detsember 2011, kell 10:32

      @CTOONfan1
      well. unicorns can impregnate other lady unicorns. do you not read fanfics?

      VastaKustuta
    27. Heavybull21. detsember 2011, kell 10:34

      @Pyro Brony
      when it hit the bedroom scene i prayed to celestia it wasnt becoming a clop fic. i have had my accidental fill of them for the week,.......i still cant get the thought of rainbow dash getting plowed by a colt version of pinkie pie out of my head.....

      VastaKustuta
    28. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 10:38

      I must say, I definitely wasn't expecting this to be on EQD.

      As the author of this story, I just want to say that I really don't have problems with you guys liking LyraxBonBon. You have the right to ship whatever the heck you want. However, I do wish that you would accept my shipping preferences and not complain about how Lyra should be paired up with Bon-Bon despite the fact that LyraBon isn't canon.

      All I'm trying to say is that you should judge the story on whether or not it is well written, not because the pairing is not to your liking.

      Also, to those confused with the depressed Lyra thing, that is actually a reference to another story I wrote called "Close to You" which you can find on my deviantart page.

      Anyways, this story is meant to be a cute fluffy little one shot. It is in no way meant to insult or antagonize those who ship LyraxBonBon. I apologize in advance if I insulted anyone because of this story.

      Bona Fortunae, Paxtofettel.

      VastaKustuta
    29. Riverfort21. detsember 2011, kell 11:10

      Sorry. I don't like bonbons that have caramel in them.

      VastaKustuta
    30. Seleenium21. detsember 2011, kell 11:14

      I love this new ship...

      VastaKustuta
    31. SteveNoBeard21. detsember 2011, kell 11:57

      WHAT?!?!?! Bon Bon with no Lyra? BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

      VastaKustuta
    32. DPV11121. detsember 2011, kell 12:27

      Homewrecker :P

      VastaKustuta
    33. ClosetBrony21. detsember 2011, kell 12:27

      @CanterEdlund facehoof I see what you did there.

      VastaKustuta
    34. Matt Neighbors21. detsember 2011, kell 12:34

      @Olivier 'LuaPineapple' Hamel
      You don't seem to realize what conflict means. Here's a hint: Explosions ain't it.
      There's no character development, there's no growth, there's no challenges to overcome, there's just a slightly stilted explanation of somepony's personal fanon. That's not good writing.
      Slice of life may or may not be storytelling, but it's still not interesting if nothing happens to the characters. I could tell you all about my last trip to the grocery store, but I'm right in thinking that no one would want to read that, either.

      VastaKustuta
    35. DPV11121. detsember 2011, kell 12:34

      Anyway. I don't read shipping for the romance of the pairing really. I only read it either as an element of a really good story (ie adventure or comedy) or because I really like the characters involved (whether I consider them a "valid" pair or not is irrelevant I just want to D'awww over my faves). Hetero ships I tend to avoid because although they are no more or less ridiculous than F/F ships, I don't really know or like any male characters from the show, so there's no point.

      VastaKustuta
    36. Shiranai21. detsember 2011, kell 12:36

      @Paxtofettel

      I admire your bravery by writing a fic that flies in the face of the most popular and accepted pairing in the fandom.

      You're right, either way. None of the pairings are canon. I doubt that we'll ever see conclusive proof of Lyra/Heartstrings and Bonbon being a couple in the actual show anyway.

      VastaKustuta
    37. Matt Neighbors21. detsember 2011, kell 12:36

      @DPV111
      The best two hetero ships I've read so far are hooves down FlutterMac from "The Logical Option" and OCxLuna from "Through the Eyes of Another Pony", for exactly the reasons you stated. There was a story in progress, characters got together as a result of the story progressing, and you bought into it because the chars were established and you knew them.

      VastaKustuta
    38. Olivier 'LuaPineapple' Hamel21. detsember 2011, kell 12:59

      @OtterMatt
      I was aware of what you were referring to by 'conflict', but sadly you didn't pick up on my sarcasm in the second sentence.

      VastaKustuta
    39. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 13:06

      I must say, after reading some of these comments, I am rather sad.

      I was hoping that the people here would at least not be biased and give this story a chance. Instead, most of you are rejecting it merely because it involves a Straight pairing with Bon-Bon. Guys, what ever happened to "Love and Tolerance?"

      It's these things that make me wonder, "Is being a brony worth it?" Is it okay to be a part of a fandom that rejects someone because they break away from what is one of the most popular pairings.

      I really sad, really sad.

      VastaKustuta
    40. the feh meh21. detsember 2011, kell 13:15

      Bon-Bon being shipped with a stallion?!

      THIS. IS. SHOCKING!

      I didn't know I could read!

      lol

      VastaKustuta
    41. the feh meh21. detsember 2011, kell 13:17

      But yeah, I'm gonna give this a read. It's a nice break away from the usual lesbian stuffs.

      Now somepony ship Lyra with a stallion!

      *is shot*

      VastaKustuta
    42. Shiranai21. detsember 2011, kell 13:17

      @Paxtofettel

      I wouldn't take it too personally. Some people (Not everyone, or even most people, but some) hold onto their fanon too dearly.

      VastaKustuta
    43. Tundra21. detsember 2011, kell 13:17

      A heterosexual shipping? In the MLP fan world? Is this legal?
      ...
      he he.
      (Just think people: twin sister and/or clone.)

      VastaKustuta
    44. Carcer21. detsember 2011, kell 13:22

      @Paxtofettel

      I must say that you apparently can't read, because most of these comments are either saying "I read it and it was ok" or something along those lines or *jokingly*, and fairly obviously jokingly, expressing shock at the pairing. There's a couple which I would interpret as possibly genuine rejection based solely on the premise out of all the comments. Nobody's even attacking you (except for me, just now): you have the thinnest skin I have ever seen.

      VastaKustuta
    45. the feh meh21. detsember 2011, kell 13:22

      Bon-Bon being shipped with a stallion?!

      THIS. IS. SHOCKING!

      I didn't know I could read!

      lol

      VastaKustuta
    46. Tundra21. detsember 2011, kell 13:25

      @the feh meh
      Someone should do that just for the LOLs.
      *bricked*

      VastaKustuta
    47. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 13:25

      @Carcer

      Perhaps I may have overreacted, and I do apologize for that.

      VastaKustuta
    48. pixelkitties21. detsember 2011, kell 13:29

      @Paxtofettel

      Please don't interpret the joking and ribbing as outright disdain. Honestly, the story was fine and most people here seem to have enjoyed it.

      Look, it's not just about fanon or sacred cows...uh, horses. Lyra and Bon Bon are pretty beloved for a number of reasons. It's something that just works. I find it hard to see the pair apart at this point. It's a cute pairing, and while folks are attached to it, that doesn't mean they're necessarily attacking you because you bucked tradition a little bit.

      That said, if you're going to put yourself out there- in terms of art, writing, whatever- you're going to get feedback both positive and negative with a mix of lols and disinterest in there too. Just be proud of what you've done, take criticism with a grain of salt, feel good about the praise, and keep doing what you love.

      That said, Lyra and Bon Bon really ARE the cutest couple ever. =) It's an uphill battle trying to get past that level of adorable-ness. =D

      VastaKustuta
    49. Carcer21. detsember 2011, kell 13:30

      @Paxtofettel

      It's cool. I didn't exactly bust out the tact for that response either. Just don't go getting yourself worked up over nothing! It's not good for you.

      VastaKustuta
    50. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 13:34

      @Carcer

      I know, I know, I just get rather sensitive about these things.

      I guess being near Ponibooru has done a lot of bad for me.

      But I thank you for kicking me into shape.

      VastaKustuta
    51. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 13:35

      @Pixelkitties

      I really don't hate LyraxBonBon either, hell I think its cute to a degree.

      What I don't understand is people calling it canon when really, it's not.

      Plus, I think a little variety in pairings is a good thing.

      VastaKustuta
    52. Kailea21. detsember 2011, kell 13:57

      It was a sweet story, and there was conflict in the story (rather than what another commenter said). It's a basic plot, but Caramel is meeting Bon-Bon's parents for the first time and they stress out a bit.

      Thank you for leaving out the bedroom scene, btw. And it was a nice pairing, although both of them were a little too sugary-sweet for my taste.

      In terms of the actual writing- there are some spots where you left out punctuation at the end of quotes. Also there were many unnecessary and cliched phrases that could easily have been implied (like Caramel waking from his slumber- you can just say he was waking up). I realize you were going for a more stylized writing style (I'm guilty of the same thing) but it can be distracting and slow down the reader.

      Otherwise, nice, simple story. The pairing worked for me, but the story was very sweet and romantic and there wasn't conflict between characters which would have added a lot to the story (as other commenters have mentioned)

      VastaKustuta
    53. DPV11121. detsember 2011, kell 14:52

      @OtterMatt

      The only het ship I enjoyed was the first one I read. First ship, first het shif, first large fanfic, first OC fic. Getting Lucky.

      VastaKustuta
    54. AlanJCastonguay21. detsember 2011, kell 15:57

      Yay Lyr... WHAT???

      VastaKustuta
    55. Ray Twilight21. detsember 2011, kell 16:09

      Something new and refreshing. A great read.

      VastaKustuta
    56. Daxter Galaxy21. detsember 2011, kell 17:09

      How is she straight?

      VastaKustuta
    57. Forderz21. detsember 2011, kell 17:14

      I got nothing against this story, but.... Lyra + Bon Bon... just works. It just works.

      You're fighting an uphill battle against a ice troll in a blizzard while wearing a suit made of greased rubber.

      VastaKustuta
    58. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 17:27

      @Forderz

      Frankly, I always saw them as friends. Just because they appear in a few scenes together doesn't necessarily make them a couple.

      VastaKustuta
    59. Michelle21. detsember 2011, kell 18:38

      It makes me sad.. BonBon with anyone but Lyre is not right! xD

      VastaKustuta
    60. Anonüümne21. detsember 2011, kell 18:49

      I am the artist who drew the image used as this story's cover. Personally, I've always just laughed it off when people complain that I chose to draw it with Caramel and not Lyra. Most of such comments have been in good humor, although I have run into some people who were genuinely upset at me for drawing Bon Bon with someone other than Lyra, let alone a stallion. I've got several points that I'd like to make about this kind of reaction:

      1) It's just a TV show.
      2) Barely any romantic pairings in the show are official except characters like Mr. and Mrs. Cake.
      3) Standing next to a character =/= official love interest, or else the Mane 6 would undoubtedly qualify as some kind of romantic commune.
      4) Even if Lyra and Bon Bon were an official couple, what is so threatening about someone who enjoys seeing one or both of them with different characters? It would hardly be the first time a fan preferred their own ship to an official one-- especially considering how trivial a character's "canon" sexual preference is when it comes to shippers.
      5) There is plenty of Lyra and Bon Bon shipping art and fanfiction out there to look at. People making shipping art and fanfics of them with other characters does not inhibit your ability to enjoy any of that.

      VastaKustuta
    61. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 18:50

      @Michelle

      I'm sorry you feel that way.

      VastaKustuta
    62. Cedric Bale21. detsember 2011, kell 19:03

      To the people who have undoubtedly rated this 1-star purely because it depicts Bon-Bon as being straight and/or romantically with somepony other than Lyra:

      Tolerance
      tol·er·ance [tol-er-uhns]
      noun
      1. a fair, objective, and permissive attitude toward those whose opinions, practices, race, religion, nationality, etc., differ from one's own; freedom from bigotry.
      2. a fair, objective, and permissive attitude toward opinions and practices that differ from one's own.
      3. interest in and concern for ideas, opinions, practices, etc., foreign to one's own; a liberal, undogmatic viewpoint.

      VastaKustuta
    63. Paxtofettel21. detsember 2011, kell 19:13

      @ Cedric Bale

      Exactly

      VastaKustuta
    64. Riverfort21. detsember 2011, kell 22:57

      @Cedric Bale

      Tolerating something =/= liking it. We can tolerate something but still vote against it.

      VastaKustuta
    65. Nova2521. detsember 2011, kell 23:07

      @CTOONfan1
      *Raise an eyebrow*...*put on glasses*

      *Cough* Genetically speaking, it is entirely possible to have female-female reproduction if you have the proper science and equipment...
      Plus... 'Magic', here (MLP:FiM), would also tend to largely *facilitate* this process.

      VastaKustuta
    66. Nova2521. detsember 2011, kell 23:15

      @Cedric Bale
      « Definition of DICTIONARY DEFINITION
      : a definition reporting established meanings or uses of words or symbols — compare stipulative definition »

      Also, I tend to agree with @CanterEdlund here.

      VastaKustuta
    67. Paxtofettel22. detsember 2011, kell 03:12

      Eesh, the ratings sure have plummeted.

      Is is that bad of a story?

      VastaKustuta
    68. Paxtofettel22. detsember 2011, kell 05:31

      I do apologize for whoring myself like this but, if you can, please check out my other stories on Fimfiction.net and tell me what you think.

      Reviews help me grow as an apiring fanfic author.

      VastaKustuta
    69. Cedric Bale22. detsember 2011, kell 07:10

      @CanterEdlund
      @Nova25
      My comment was directed more at the people seeing the picture and description, getting into a tizzy, and voting without actually reading what they're voting on. I was not trying to imply that you should like it for not reason, I was saying not to vote it as 1-star purely because you don't agree with the pairing.

      If you read it and decided that the grammar was terrible, that the plot was boring, that the characterizations were rigid and unrealistic, that the romance was flat, that the humor just made you cringe, etc. etc., then by all means, rate it appropriately based on THAT. As it is, the star rating on this story is completely unreliable. (but that's nothing new, is it?)

      VastaKustuta
    70. MeshMeal22. detsember 2011, kell 14:32

      Its a straight ship
      Dealwithit

      VastaKustuta
    71. MeshMeal22. detsember 2011, kell 14:33

      Its a straight ship
      Dealwithit

      VastaKustuta
    72. Melodia22. detsember 2011, kell 17:35

      Ok, finally reading this...

      Putting aside any feelings about the couple (which is fine for me, I'm not big at all on "omg Lyra/Bon-Bon are the OTP), or the fact it's straight, which is also perfectly fine...

      ...this just isn't a good story. It's totally and completely pointless. I'm all for a nice "slice of life" story where there's no real conflict, but this is completely void of anything. Nothing, at all, happens that isn't completely and utterly generic drabble.

      That isn't to say it's badly written, as it's not (and wouldn't have made it to the site in the first place), but I have to wonder if there'd be far less praise if it were Lyra instead of Camarel?

      I don't mean to be harsh, but really, seeing all the praise this story gets reminds me of all the stupid shit that gets so many positive reviews on FF.net because people seem to think that any criticism is a flame or a troll.

      VastaKustuta
    73. Paxtofettel23. detsember 2011, kell 13:13

      @Melodia

      It's okay, as long as you gave it a chance and gave it a review based on the story itself and not on the pairing.

      VastaKustuta
    74. Paxtofettel28. detsember 2011, kell 13:00

      @Cedric Bale

      Um, was the last part directed towards me? If so, ouch.

      VastaKustuta
    75. Cedric Bale29. detsember 2011, kell 07:23

      "As it is, the star rating on this story is completely unreliable. (but that's nothing new, is it?)"
      That part? No, that was directed at EQD, lol. I love this site, but the star ratings are terribly unreliable on any post with controversial content. Also, Bon-Bon being straight being considered controversial amuses me greatly.

      If you mean that whole second half, that also wasn't directed at you. It was directed at anyone thinking I was saying to rate high even if they didn't like it. That wasn't my original message at all.

      If you want some advice for yourself, I'd say to just not get discouraged. Even if nobody liked this, just keep writing. Can't get better if you don't try.

      VastaKustuta
    76. Paxtofettel29. detsember 2011, kell 14:34

      @Cedric Bale

      Phew, I was scared for a second there. I know that I am an amateur when it comes to fanfics, but this fic certainly wasn't that bad (Certainly better than the stuff RagingSemi puts out).

      But, I thank you for the advice Cedric. I means a lot for a noob like me

      VastaKustuta
    77. DPV1119. jaanuar 2012, kell 20:50

      Autor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.

      VastaKustuta

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