[Crossover] [Random] [Comedy]
Author: Chengar Qordath
Description: Pinkie Pie randomly shows up at the apartment of one Harry Dresden, Wizard-for-hire. And then she does ... whatever it is that Pinkie Pie always does.
Forever!
My Little Denarians
Dresden Gets Schooled (New!)
Additional Tags: Stop Breaking the Fourth Wall Pinkie, Stop Ignoring Physics Pinkie, Stop Violating the Space-Time Continuum Pinkie, Stop Hurting my Brain Pinkie, Pinkie Pie is so Random
6 STARS IN 10 SECONDS FLAT
Dramatic Reading
Part 1
Part 2
244 comments:
First! :3
ReplyDeleteI agree with Pinkie Pie.
ReplyDelete...Those tags...
ReplyDeleteIt took me awhile to remember where i'd heard that name from before.
ReplyDeleteThose tags are random too, besides asking Pinkie to stop defying space time would be like asking her to stop partying.
http://panmilus.blogspot.com/2011/12/my-little-pony-fan-fiction-by-mua.html - a dark Fa fiction in Polish.... ;)
ReplyDeleteWhat is this I don't even?
ReplyDeleteAdditional tags for the win!!!
ReplyDeleteahahaha, that was hilarious. Made my morning.
ReplyDeleteDespite not knowing the characters or setting involved (Pinkie aside), I still enjoyed this story immensely. The author does a great job of providing you with enough information to know what's going on without breaking the flow of writing at all. The end result is a delightfully silly and wonderfully entertaining read. Also, it's quite short, so nopony has any excuse not to read it right now! :D
ReplyDeleteI'd like to read this, but I can't. I have to go make arrangements at the local insane-asylum in the event that Harry does a soulgaze on Pinkie Pie.
ReplyDeleteRandom doesn't even begin to describe this story, yet I have to agree - it was highly amusing.
ReplyDeleteWhat did I just read?
ReplyDelete*Twitch*..*twitch*....What...?
ReplyDeleteIf you ignore all logic however, and realize that Harry is awesome, and MLP is awesome, this story is epic. YAY! Harry Dresden is a brony now! Same with Harry Potter!
I've never seen any Harry Dresden...films? books? Whatever kind of stuff he's in. This is still hilarious.
ReplyDeletePinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie.
ReplyDeleteI laughed.
Dresden Files? *yay*
ReplyDeleteHa, Harry Potter at the end
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome. Pinkie Pie being random = awesome in general, and this isn't an exception.
ReplyDeleteWould be interested as to where this is set chronologically though.
ReplyDeleteHe's so crazy powerful in the more recent books.
If Michael is retired, this looks to be set right before Changes.
ReplyDeleteBTW, I wonder if harry will reference MLP in an upcoming book....
ReplyDeleteAnother Dresden crossover? On Earth? GAH! Reading now.
ReplyDeleteShort sweet and pretty amusing :) A little disappointed at the flow of the story near the ending... Seems like the author went "yea.. i'm kinda bored/don't know where to go with this from here... so lets wrap this up real quick like."
ReplyDeleteRegardless... a fun read
~FlutterTroll Approved
@Celestia
ReplyDeleteI don't know what happened last night. I woke up next to Screwball this morning. I went to the kitchen and saw 10k just lying on the floor. I ignored it and went to get some breakfast from the kitchen where I found a stallion tied up and gagged. Then Fleur came out of the bathroom and asked me if we were followed last night.
My head hurts and the only clue as to what happened was one of the Royal Guards Chariots outside and some armor and a helmet in my closet.
What the hell did I do last night?!
Also good story about my favorite pony; Piinkie Pie.
that was brilliant! and the ending is phenominal!
ReplyDelete(sigh) PINKIE STAY IN YOUR UNIVERSE! YOU ARE GOING TO CAUSE ...
ReplyDeletewait never mind keep doing that pinkie, that way ALL REALITYS WILL COMBINE IN TO ONE BIG PARTY
Some familiarity with The Dresden Files helps, but even so that was pretty good. I held it together as far as the call to Nicodemus before cracking up...
ReplyDeleteYay! another Dresden Files crossover :D
ReplyDeletei cant believe someone actually combined The Dresden Files with MLP........oh wait, i can. i think you just made both 20% cooler.
ReplyDeleteAwesomely hilarious.
ReplyDelete-
EDITING!
We'd been friends for years; killing a trolls, plant monsters, and ghouls together...
--- remove the "a"
I was a bit impressed the pony managed to say all that without once stopping to breath.
--- "breath" should be "breathe"
Fortunately, Murphy chose to swallow rather than spit, and managed to pull it off well enough to avoid the humiliating fate of choking to death on a pastry.
--- Uhhhh... The sentence is pretty fragmented and the innuendo is pretty jarring, might want to change it to: "Fortunately, Murphy managed to swallow and avoid the humiliating fate of choking to death on a pastry."
@Nimru
ReplyDeleteThis is actually the 2nd one on EqD. Check out "The Dresden Fillies: Strange Friends". It's a more serious crossover and HiE.
XD that was genius. Pure genius. Though now I am curious about Nico's comment about the cupcakes from ponies. And Murphy's brain broke XD Very nicely done here. The ending was pretty epic too. I could totally see that being another story, knowing Pinkie and her laws-of-reality-breaking abilities.
ReplyDelete@YetAnotherBrony
ReplyDeleteYou know, now I wish that'd happen. . .
that was great! :D
ReplyDeleteYup just another day in Harry Dresden's many days of strangeness.
ReplyDeleteYup just another day in Harry Dresden's many days of strangeness.
ReplyDeleteSeveral parts of this story had me laughing out loud, as a huge fan of MLP and Dresden. A shame it's a one-shot, though I doubt it would work well as a multi-chapter fic. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI have no idea who the hay Harry Dresden is but this was epic all the same.
ReplyDelete@Kyle Then you'll be happy to know that he's working on a full-length sequel titled My Little Denarians. You can find it on the Dark Lord Potter forums. And so far, it's working.
ReplyDeleteI approve.
ReplyDeleteNow I want to see the Harry Potter one.
ReplyDeleteIs it weird I could see this as a series of oneshots? Like, Pinkie shows up in random universes? Pretty much anything fiction could be crossed over.
oh i hope this continues, that was entertaining.
ReplyDeleteOh, man, that was beautiful. I need to get back into the Dresden Files even more now.
ReplyDeleteBEST IMAGE EVER
ReplyDeleteNever read any Dresden books, but I read pretty good things about them on TvTropes. Well, if the guy is half as deadpan as depicted in this pic, I guess these books are worth reading.
ReplyDeleteOK, you guys have convinced me. I will force myself to get some work done tonight, then I'm having a look at this.
ReplyDeleteRead this on fanfiction.net a while back, it was funny. xD
ReplyDeleteWoah what she's saying in that picture? That's my catch phrase except I use my name and yea I don't have those rays behind me n stuff
ReplyDeleteso much win...
ReplyDeleteNEED MOAR!!
@sledgehammer Yeah, I do have a sequel in the works. It probably needs one more coat of polish before it's ED-ready though; DLP gets the joy of looking over my rough drafts.
ReplyDeleteEpic... That line of "Hundreds of thousands is barely an atrocity" made me laugh my ass off.
ReplyDeleteVery choice. Have some stars!
That... was one of the funniest thing i have read in a looong time.
ReplyDeleteAll my stars
freaking hilarious! MORRREE
ReplyDeleteKind of lost the"willing suspension of belief" at the "boxed set DVD" bit.
ReplyDeleteSpeaking of bits, how'd she pay for the cupcake ingredients at the store?
If Jim Butcher was a brony, he might write something like this. Seriously, you nailed Harry, the girls were cute, and the mere thought of Harry fielding calls from all his mortal enemies (and a few friends) is enough to make me grin. Kind of wanted to hear what Marcone and Ramirez among others had to say, but I suppose you wouldn't want the shtick to get old.
ReplyDeleteThere is one thing I'm wondering, though...where did Michael get season 1 on DVD?
So, is this what I read while I wait for the next chapter of The Dresden Fillies?
ReplyDeleteFastest 6 star ever.
ReplyDelete@jayessell
ReplyDeleteSuffice to say there's a very confused cashier in the process of trying to convince himself that he just dozed off and had a really weird dream.
6-star, huh? Well, I'm just going to give it a very low rating so it'll become a 5-star again. Yup, I'm definitely going to do that.
ReplyDelete*reads*
Well... here are your 5 stars. *sigh*
@Chris It's one of the perks of being a former archangel.
ReplyDeleteDon't ask how I know... >_>
*reads title*
ReplyDeleteYES.
*reads*
FUCK. YES.
*finishes*
HELL. FUCKING. YES.
dangit now I have to finish Ghost Story as fast as possible so i can read new story D:
ReplyDeleteDamn, I want to read this but I'm only at book 4 of Dresden :(
ReplyDeleteThe concept of the nature of the realms beyond the Outer Gates makes perfect sense, as does the various concepts involving Pinkie Pie in the first chapter.
ReplyDeleteSometimes I love having an unconventional mind. ^_^
This is the most researched Harry Dresden/My Little Pony crossover of all the Harry Dresden/My Little Pony crossovers I have read (2). Sadly, the great knowledge of the Dresden universe is overly expressed, I don't care about Mab's rehab style. The books are more funny, less talky. You have noticed things in the most recent books that I didn't even think of, thats cool. You beat the other story in Dresden know how but the other one beats you in tone accuracy.
ReplyDeleteAnyways, will Harry know everypony because he became a brony in the previous story? That'd be cool.
@MegamanSora Try the Winter Magic Academy. Not a true Harry Potter crossover, but damn close.
ReplyDeletejust superb
ReplyDeleteAlways did enjoy Dresden. Adding Pinkie Pie again for another chapter makes this all kinds of win.
ReplyDeleteWait... My Little Denarians was made by the same author? Ok my stance has changed must read
ReplyDeleteThe second story does not seem to be as spectacular as the first. Mainly because there was excessive information dumps and exposition. Perhaps it may be because i am not familiar with the crossover. Still funny though. The story only becomes interesting after the appearance of Pinkie. Hopefully it'll continue on that note.
ReplyDelete@cheezesauce
ReplyDeleteA bit of exposition/infodumping is a necessary evil for any crossover. after all, I want folks who don't know the Dresdenverse to stillunderstand what's going on with the Dresden elements.
@ Chengar Qordath
ReplyDeleteYeah, but you could spread it out a little, only infodumping when it's necessary. For example, non-Dresden Fans don't know Harry's been injured, and Dresden Fans have already gotten a taste for Mab's kind of TLC so that isn't necessary.
Also, if the Outer Gates open into the world of fiction, where do beings like 'He who walks behind' fit in? He doesn't belong to any other realm of fiction and claiming he's Lovecraftian is a stretch at best.
@pmmccl01
ReplyDeleteThe Outer Gates open to worlds of fiction, but it's never said that's ALL they link to.
*POSSIBLE SPOILERS*
ReplyDeleteSo, denarians are planning to bring Discord to Earth, where he won't be limited by cartoon conventions. And we, bronies, would amplify his power by simply believing in him. This world is SO doomed...
Hmm... Is that duelling fanfics I see before my eyes? It is only yesterday that we got an update of Dresden Fillies...
ReplyDeleteSeriously, both are brilliant.
Just a note - watch his inner monologues - if his thoughts too are being censored, there was at least one thing he shouldn't have been able to think.
Chengar, you crazy sonuva bitch! IT'S SO AMAZINGLY META! I love you. :D
ReplyDeleteWoot! New Dresden crossover to follow!
ReplyDelete"FOREVER!"
ReplyDelete"Oh, hi Pinkie!"
"Hi, Deadpool!"
"Doing another crossover?"
"Yup!"
GOD I LOVE THIS FANDOM. XD
Look, I just used an emote. I NEVER USE EMOTES, THIS STORY IS THAT GOOD!
@TheMagister
ReplyDeleteYeah, the Outer Gates are basically what separates Reality from not-Reality. Fiction-land is part of not-Reality, but there's a lot more out there.
"By the way," Twilight asked, "To what degree does magic in your universe rely on structured internalized casting of specified spell-forms within a defined magical matrix, as opposed to improvisational manipulation of magical energy to achieve the desired outcome?"
ReplyDeleteIt took a moment, but I've figured out what this means.
'Structured internalized casting' is building the spell and all of its related effects (the spell-form) before it's cast. This is generally how magic works in video games; you charge it up and let it go. Once the spell-form is released it's on its own with no further direction from the caster.
The 'magical matrix' was the hard part. A matrix is a structure in which something is created. Therefor, a magical matrix is a structure in which magic is built. She's talking about staves and such that can be used in spellcasting. In this case, the structured casting takes place within the magical matrix of a unicorn's horn.
The opposite of this, "improvisational manipulation" is maintaining control of a spell, perhaps changing its form while it's active. An example of this would be, say, creating a bolt of energy, guiding it manually through an obstacle course, and detonating it at the end. The manipulates the spell-form for the duration it its lifespan.
By not being internally constructed in a staff, horn, or what have you, the caster would have to basically throw the energy needed for the spell out into the open and form it from there without the aid of a matrix. Theoretically, it would be possible to cast an internalized improvisational spell by building it on a matrix and maintaining control as it's active. I wonder why she didn't think of that.
Silly Twilight. XD
Yet another MLP/Dresden Files crossover? And it has Michael Carpenter and Murphy? AND it made me laugh when I desperately needed a laugh?
ReplyDeleteFive stars for this one!
Just looked at the second story -- ooh, the Order of the Blackened Denarius and Discord? There's now way that can be good.
ReplyDeleteBut it can get even worse. Just think:
Harry Dresden is now the Winter Knight.
He serves Mab, Queen of the Winter Court.
Remember what we saw in Hearth's Warming Eve? How the three tribes came together to form Equestria? The endless terrible winter and the windigos? What if Mab is hoping to get Harry to do something that will unleash them upon Equestria again?
ok, this, this right here, it is freakin awesome. liked the first one, but I am LOVING the second, can't wait for more.
ReplyDelete@Solar Phoenix
ReplyDeleteI think this is simpler: the first is vincian magic (preparing a spell by the book like in Discworld or D&D, basically following a recipe that serves as a "matrix") as opposed to channeling the energy and improvising, trying to shape the desired effect with will and experience. One is dependable, the other is flexible.
@Solar Phoenix Yay thaumobabble!
ReplyDelete@Ardashir
ReplyDeleteThere is also now chocolate rain... which means a certain draconequus has entered the game. An entity with the ability to alter any and every part of Equestria's reality at his whims. And he may end up meeting a bunch of evil fallen angels.
Things are now officially 'worse'.
@AlondroI agree. Discord would probably love hearing stories of what Old Nick's done to amuse himself over the past 2000 years. "That whole Black Death idea sounds hilarious!"
ReplyDeleteAnd even worse: Nicodemus gives a Denarian coin to Discord. Or Luna. Or, heck, anypony.
I love this so much!
ReplyDeleteThe writing style is spot on, and I sometimes forget that what I'm reading is a peice of fanfiction as opposed to one of Jim Butchers short stories!
You know what having Discord in the story means don't you? When all is said and done, and the ponies are victorious, Harry gets to actually be in Star Wars at last! Won't he just love it when he finally watches Season 2, Episode 2?
ReplyDeleteHarry Dresden and Twilight Sparkle having a snark-off. This must be what heaven is like.
ReplyDeleteSo, the denarians were smart enough not to try to control Discord. Still, he will probably mess with them for no other reason that they are currently working together. Wizards are so much fun when turned against each other.
ReplyDeleteSurprisingly, this can still get much worse. For what we know, the Windigoes are still around. If they could get ice-age level powers from hateful ponies, what happens if they get a whiff of the coins?
Oh man, I just had a horrid thought:
ReplyDeleteDiscord takes Celestia to the Denarians and they give her one of the coins. A demonically possessed Nightmare Sun?
I have noticed one move away from the canon, I don't know if it was intentional on your part. The "princess in another castle" gag shouldn't happen as the "fax-machine" spell is attuned to Celestia herself. (The same way, letters always appear from Spike's mouth, wherever he is at the moment - Though the series, we get to see Princess reeiving letters and they always appear at her current location.)
ReplyDeleteLoving story and the AU version of Return of Harmony. Noticed a bunch of spelling and typo errors in chapter 3 but unfortunately since I'm reading on my phone, I can't properly post editing notes. I'd recommend going over this again. I mean there was an "=" sign in the middle of a word...
ReplyDeleteOkay. Least he got turned into a unicorn this time. One thing I probably would of changed is his cutie mark. He is fundimentaly the winter knight as well. I would likely of done a crystaline snowflake in the shape of a pentagram. Showing he is a wizard and a winter knight. Ohhhh.....I wonder if he will have power over the Windigos. Now that could be cool.
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar Indeed, as Terry Pratchett said, the plural of 'wizard' is 'war'.
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteTrue, but as far as I remember whenever we see her receive one of Twilight's letters, she's always somewhere within the palace at Canterlot.
Plus, if I have to retcon that, then we'd lose a cheesy Dresden joke. And that would be awful. Just awful.
Still wondering where the buck is Luna during all this.
ReplyDelete@Luna Epona
ReplyDeleteOh dear, Discord corrupting Celestia AND possibly entering the Earth realm... which, by the way, is a MUCH larger dimension than the pocket universe the ponies inhabit.
I-I'm sorry bronies. I cannot allow Discord into any of the Earth mega-verses. His power would become far too great.
*he takes out a small crystal with a black void at its heart* I must do this, for the safety of the multiverse... *and so he projects the tiny pocket of strange matter into the Ponyverse, shattering its quasi-dimensional cage as he does so*
At least.. the end will be quick. It is for the greater good. (the best reason for evil ever!) >:3
@Luna Epona
ReplyDeleteChapter 4 opens with Luna's reaction, in the Royal Canterlot Voice, no less.
"...Hmm, it looks like the author's simply working Dresden into an episode's existing cano- hold on, that bit of dialogue is new... I guess some stuff ended up on Studio B's cutting room floor or someth- wait, what's Discord doing? ...HOLY CRAP!"
ReplyDelete@Chengar Qordath
ReplyDeleteYou do realize Dresden Fillies used the same excuse to make the same joke? XD
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteReally? Huh. Must have missed that. Looks like I'll be editing that scene after all.
I did not see the star trek reference coming... and I'm pretty sure if they kept going Pinkie would've won the yelling contest.
ReplyDeleteI'm a bit sad that the maze scene and the discordified Mane 6 didn't happen. More importantly though, why did Discord reveal the location of the Elements? I figured you could do whatever you wanted with the middle of the Discord story as long as the start (the scene with Celestia and Discord that you did worked well) and the end (finding the Elements in a book not even guarded for the lulz) was kept the same.
ReplyDeleteBasically, I'm surprised that you are making the plot so drastically different by disrupting the previously expected end of the story. I guess it's not bad persay, but you are now totally out of the plotline of the episode.
chapter 4 isn't working
ReplyDeleteSo, were it the Denarians that made Discord go off-script, or was it just their appearance that disrupted the story?
ReplyDelete1 Liked the jokes, but that is a given.
2 One instance of Dash saying "people"
3 It seems Harry has already told the ponies all about Denarians. Did he warn them not to touch the coins?
4 I can't see how Rarity's episode could prepare her for anything that might happen.
A lot of funny jokes, but the 'Harry Jr' gag is getting a bit disturbing.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I'm finding it hard to be afraid of Denarians given that they're ponies now. Hopefully further description will rectify that.
Done some more thinking:
ReplyDelete1 We haven't seen the elements yet... I guess they aren't really in the book.
2 What's with the rule about not hitting the audience? Isn't Discord invulnerable anyway? My theory is that he can be hurt - his reality warping can render anything but the elements of harmony harmless, but you CAN sucker-punch him.
3 Either way, the rule can serve two purposes - first, Discord can break the game at any moment by putting himself in harm's way. Two, perhaps Denarians can be tricked into hitting him. That won't make him default the game but might take a denarian or two out of the picture.
4 I wonder what Denarians think about taking part in the game. I think they might have lost control of the situation...
I'm actually considering reading Dresden Book so I can continue reading this series without fear of spoilers.
ReplyDelete@Sourcils
ReplyDeleteSame here.
I just read Chapter 5. ...Ow, my heart. Damn you, Denarians, and DAMN YOU, DISCORD!
ReplyDelete@Jason Shadow Holy bucking manure... THIS IS NOT GOOD!! They need ultimate super-heroes ASAP!! *calls Ichigo, Goku, Negima, Naruto, and Vash the Stampede!*
ReplyDeleteNow it's ON, beeyatch! ;3
After Chapter 5 the story needs a [GRIMDARK] tag now
ReplyDeleteI just read Chapter 5. Discord may have just made the biggest mistake of his life. He may have discorded Harry -- but that doesn't mean Harry will be on HIS side.
ReplyDeleteFirst thought after chapter 5. I feel SO sorry for whatever demon gets stuck trying to share a mind/body with Pinkie Pie.
ReplyDelete@Seraphem
ReplyDeleteI honestly wouldn't be all that surprised if the demon that possesses Pinkie finds somepony (or somedemon) already there in her mind. She certainly has the Voice Of The Legion (YOU PINKIE PROMISED!).
Also, Chapter 6 was made of awesome.
OK, two things.
ReplyDelete1 If the library turned into an arena, what exacly were Rarity and Twilight throwing? There shouldn't be anything available.
2 We totally need someone to draw a picture of ponified deanarians.
That was GREAT. I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
ReplyDeleteSeriously, crossovers with The Dresden Files always make me laugh. If anyone is interested, there's one at FiMFiction. The Dresden Fillies. Good one too.
the perfect Harry way to fight a mind-control demon: act as cliche and predictable as possible
ReplyDeleteOh Lordy that was a fun chapter. Loving the return of the snark!
ReplyDeleteOk, I have read the last chapter and it dawned on me just how bucked the world is.
ReplyDelete1 After all the talko of how dangerous the knowledge of the Outside would be in the wrong hands, we pretty much got Rainbow Dash on live tv. Even wizards who don't own TVs will learn of such an event and someone somewhere is bound to make a connection.
2 A tornado implies the fallen have been well attuned and now have full access to their hosts' abilities. Imagine what evil Twilight can do out of cartoonland. With a demonic energy source handy, we can assume her capable of acting at her full power. Just one example - during the Ursa Minor incident, she was able to milk a barn of cows, a block away from her. That's high grade telekinesis... with no line of sight required. Now think of the many squishy parts humans have.
3 All other interested parties will be rushing to that park - even if Discord isn't there, the situation is likely to escalate rapidly.
And finally, with Lasciel taken out and Deidre dead, there are 8 coins to go round between the five ponies. Who do you guys think got which one?
ReplyDeleteMy current guesses are:
Rainbow Dash - Prziel
Applejack - Magog
Fluttershy - Exael
Rarity - Deidre's coin
Twilight Sparkle - Ramiel
I somehow managed to forget Pinky Pie. Pergaps because I have no idea what fallen she might get
ReplyDelete@YetAnotherBrony
ReplyDeleteSaid somepony/demon probably being Pinkamina Diane Pie.
Quite a hilarious take on what would happen if Harry got DisQorded. Cheesy b-movie villain okGO!
@shadowfalcon76 Heyyyyy... those world domination plans weren't cheesey!
ReplyDeleteThey're the same as mine, in fact... dammit. >:C
This story now deserves the first 7-star rating, for ultimate cross-over awesomeness and writing super-geniusness.
@Alondro
ReplyDeleteNot until "It's A Dangerous Business Going Out Your Door" gets a 7-star rating.
I am so eager to see how the girls get written up when they're both Discorded AND demonically possessed. Hoo boy!
ReplyDeleteI also wonder if their appearances have changed at all, and/or if Michael will be dropping by to see them and find out what's going on (he and his daughters like the ponies, remember?). Because if the Knights of the Sword get involved, then it'll either get very nasty or very good. Hey, rthe Knights took Sanya in, and he was an ex-Denarian. They might well know ways to help free the girls.
And something related to the very first story that I'd not thought of until now: what happened when Pinkie Pie dropped by Gentleman Johnny Marcone and handed him the invite to Harry's party? Oh, to have been a fly on the wall...
@YetAnotherBrony
ReplyDeleteThat one was awesome, and kept me reading for the full 7 hours, but wasn't nearly as funny as Darth Dresden.
In related story news, we have outsiders now. People from the land of make believe. Ponies from beyond the gate and under demonic influence. I wonder at what point the White Council will decide to get involved.
The White Council? Hoo boy, after everything they've been through in recent years... That could be the equivalent of pushing the big red button, especially if they decide that the best solution is simply to kill the mane six.
ReplyDeleteHmmm, which would lead to war (or something) with Celestia... I wonder if the so-called 'Black Council' was involved in any way with this whole mess?
Speaking of Celestia... she is discorded too but I don't think Nikodemus would be stupid enough to add a coin to that mix... I suppose Discord left her in Equestria to guard the elements.
ReplyDelete@YetAnotherBrony Well, I'll have to see how the ending goes for a full comparison. The ending of "Dangerous Business" was rather out of left field. The World Snake seemed too much like a 'last boss' rather than a meaningful adversary, only there to provide difficulty in retrieving the flower instead of a plot-relevant antagonist. A better rationale would have been if it was deliberately keeping them from the flower for nefarious purposes related to Twilight's recovery. BUT, in that case its existence and importance to the story would have to be introduced very early on. As it is, it simply doesn't fit into the rest of the narrative, and then is practically forgotten once they cure Twilight, further indicating it as a mere plot-convenient object. There is also the business with the cave and the crater which are at best barely covered. In a story, one should never go into detail about extranious side-plots one doesn't plan on expounding upon immediately or later on. If they have no relevance to the story, they are best left out. I always look to "Lord of the Rings", and how everything in the narrative had a definitive purpose toward driving the story and developing the world in which it occurred. Side details not expounded upon, such as the Valar, were mere mentions so they didn't distract from the important depictions.
ReplyDeleteThis tale follows more closely to that ideal, keeping very tightly to the things that matter to the story, describing the places and things that are important for the reader to visualize.
Hmm... Harry comments how he wouldn't like to see what deamonic shapeshifting would do to a pony. But he did see it, just two episodes ago, didn't he?
ReplyDeleteAlso, bony wings. I think I was spot on with my first guess.
Why were the appliances in the store powered up? I know TVs are sometimes but as far as I know the store was evacuated - and Harry's powers don't burn things that aren't on.
ReplyDelete...Is there an option to edit comments here? The more I think of it, the more I find to nitpick on... Considering there was a tornado, it is weird that there was power at all. (Its all fridge logic - while I was reading, I did enjoy the story very much)
ReplyDeletethis is the most amazing thing i've ever read in my life. kudos to you good lad.
ReplyDeleteOk, this was awesome. Guess Harry will get his Star Wars in the end?
ReplyDeleteI realise that I'm going to Tartarus for asking this, but if Harry lost Harry Junior going to Equestria has Rainbow Dash picked up a Rainbow G***?
ReplyDelete@God
ReplyDeleteI'm sure you'll have plenty of time to think about the answer to that question ... ON THE MOOOOOOOOOOOON!
But actually, no. Harry's naughty bits gets censored in Equestria, but as an Equestrian native Rainbow Dash just doesn't have them, unless she ravels somewhere that has a rule changing her anatomy similar to how Equestria's rules changed Harry.
By the way, Forever and MLD have been posted on Fimfiction, for those who prefer than site over FFN. Links:
ReplyDeleteForever: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/9743/Forever!
MLD: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/9904/My-Little-Denarians
I am busy now but I will try to make a tvtropes page for it sometime next week.
ReplyDeleteMy thoughts as I was reading the chapter:
1 Lash really is the voice of reason in the group. With her springing from Harry's brow, I am expecting an Athena reference at some point.
2 so... no Vincian magic here... that means its not Krynn. I thought Nick sent them to fetch the dragon orbs.
3 This world accepts ponies but what of others? Pinky could remain a pony even in Warhammer 40k but she is special. If they run into some SF setting and Dash is rendered anthro, she will be useless and that means no air support for the fight...
4 lol... oh, so that's where they are. FUS-RO-YAY about to become canon.
5 Aaand the story earns the grimdark tag. Also, Deamonshy's faux-affable manner is perfectly chilling.
6 Harry falling to his death will probably become a running gag. Especially if the next setting is Star Wars.
7 Aerial combat. I was expecting Deamonshy to milk her mind control for all it was worth. But that would make the story just that - predictable. Nice to see Dash use her brain but the damage worries me - Lash can only heal Harry.
8 ...party nerve gas... Pinky is a bit of a one-trick pony...
9 ...and instantly makes up for it by breaking demonic mind control with the power of chocolate. Awesome.
With what we have seen from Dash and Pinky, Twilight is going to be sooo broken...
ReplyDeleteJust remembered... Deanarians have corrupted everyone.
ReplyDeleteEven Bob from accounting?
Especially Bob from accounting.
@Braininthejar Very true. And don't forget, this time around Discord also grabbed Celestia. What if Nicodemus gave HER a Denarian coin? Anyone else up for the Hellion Queen?
ReplyDeletejust a note before I dig into the latest chapter, becuase of this fic I am now reading the Dresden Files, and I am LOVING it. THANK YOU! (almost through Death Masks)
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteAs someone who does a reasonable bit of troping in their spare time, getting a TvTropes page would be awesome.
@Seraphem
Great to know. Have to admit, introducing pony fans to Dresden and Dresden fans to ponies is one of my favorite things about this story.
actually, Dresden should think about grabbing a few things while he's Outside:
ReplyDeletea magic jet pack. seriously, he's completely at a disadvantage out in fantasy/sci-fi world.
better guns. he might find himself in a no-magic world filled with bulletproof monsters, like Alien or something.
better armor. same reason, and a helm of some sort wouldn't hurt; gotta hate snipers. Wouldn't put it past AJ to go Engineer or something on him in a no-magic world.
some sort of antimagic device, doesn't matter which. And probably some sort of adamantine, mithril or adamantium. otherwise going against Celestia and Twi is just going to end in lots and lots of pain.
maybe a few tings from 40k. helpful if you want to stop a Chaos Spirit ;)
try going to Exorcist, Left Behind or one of those cheesy over-the-top religious worlds too to get some Crosses of Demon Slaying, or maybe Solomon's Mines to get a Seal of some sort. helps when fighting the demon-possessed.
Pinkie would be able to push out a fallen angle just to do something silly.
ReplyDelete@The Wandering Magus
ReplyDeleteThe problem with such equipment is that it tends to be owned by rather powerful people, who need it on regular basis. You think Harry has enough resources to do an extra battle en-route?
As for WH40000... Nick world-hopping is bad enough. We don't need to introduce the idea of Outside to deamons of Chaos.
So, is Pinkie Pie now wielding the power of CHIM? Given her Partillery, it certainly sounds like she was heavily abusing console commands. If so, would she retain that power once she leaves the world of the Elder Scrolls? God does exist in the world of the Dresden Files, after all.
ReplyDeletehttp://fallingawkwardly.wordpress.com/2010/10/25/the-metaphysics-of-morrowind-part-3/
As soon as I saw the Clairvoyance spell and the mention of a Dragon slaying spell I thought, oh man, this could be Skyrim. And it was. :D
ReplyDeleteAlso, come to think of it, seeing Lashiel's reaction to winding up in Panty and Stockings with Garterbelt would probably be pretty funny. For those that don't know, it's a parody of Western "adult" cartoons like South Park and the Adult Swim stuff, about two fallen angels who are trying to buy their way back into Heaven with magic coins they collect from "purifying" ghosts.
ReplyDeleteBuck yeah Chapter 10! I, for one, welcome our new Snarky Jedi Wizard overlord. Also, Fluttershy once again proves why she is Best Pony.
ReplyDeleteJust read Chapter 10. Yow. Ponies, Dresden, and Star Wars? Truly amazing.
ReplyDeleteHmm, this was happening during the first three movies. Hey, you don't think this was all going down on Coruscant while everyone else was going to Kashyyk to celebrate Life Day with Chewie's family, do you?
(Just wait, let's see who gets that reference...)
@Jason Shadow *lies in a disjointed heap on the ground, convulsing and foaming at the mouth. Paramedics rush in.* We've got a Code Rainbow! Awesome overdose! At least 20% more awesome than his body could handle all taken in 10 seconds flat!
ReplyDelete"You would prefer we make poor Rainbow ride on a shoddy little pair of twigs that fall apart the instant somepony so much as sneezes at them, I suppose?" Rainbow shot back archly.
ReplyDeleteThat was supposed to be 'Rarity shot back archly' I assume?
Hmmmmmm....
ReplyDeleteI'm calling it now. Twilight is on the moon. The sun is stuck at noon, so the moon is stuck directly 'underneath' Harry.
@God
ReplyDeleteHaving Derpy in chapter must have caused some of the derpiness to influence me. Fixed now.
Argh... I didn't make that tropes page. I will make it next week, I Pinky promise!
ReplyDeleteAs usual, my comment in the form of my thoughts while reading chapters 10 and 11.
1 So... Star Wars, just as Harry wanted. No blue twi'lek Dash though.
2 How will they pay? Harry won't use mind magic... ah, ok.
3 These deamons are going down fast. Seems Harry managed to find a way to power up through being genre savvy.
4 As expected, Jack got Magog. It seems I guessed half of the coins right. Also sith Rarity.
5 Very nice combination of demon magic and the force. I too got fooled when she used claws against a lightsaber. Fluttershy trying her usual stuff... didn't Rarity have a lightsaber?
6 Pinkie, you idiot!How is Magog so smart?
7 Did that hag just deliberately push all of Harry's buttons? In Star Wars? She is sooo dead.
9 Looks like Dash saved the day but now she is bleeding like a One Piece character. That's really bad news outside of One Piece universe.
10 Rarity's lightsaber explained. Fluttershy being awesome.
11 The next chapter starts and I finally understood the title of the previous one: just like with the gala, Harry got his wish and then everything went to hell. I wonder if Dash makes it or will the author actually off her and have Harry wield loyalty instead.
12 So, they went with Last Action Hero solution. That will save them a detour to collect the dragonballs.
13 Sorry... much as I love the story, that joke was so groanworthy, it killed the mood.
14 I was wondering whether Harry would consider stormtroopers human - poor aim and all, their reason for existence is to be killed by heroes.
15 Yes, getting gutted by Vader would be a surprising death.
16 So, did Discord mess Equestria up so badly... nope, a fanfic.
17 Flaming what!? I must find the time to read that one someday.
18 Wait... cupcake Pinky can't hop worlds, can she? Also canon Pinky seems to take her existence quite well, she is probably the toughest of the six when it comes to trauma.
19 calling Derpy a village idiot is unfair. She was clumsy only as far as it was funny - she did get the job done and well.
20 In the end, a well timed lampshade saves us from a lot of fridge logic.
21 Take back Equestria... it is a real blessing that they get to fight Twilight here and not anywhere else.
@shadefox
ReplyDeleteSeconded
@Chengar Qordath You have made this story too awesome. I died from it. But have no fear! I was brought back to life on the Outside... in every possible way! I'm now a cyborg ghost demon tulip! :D
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to seeing the Tropes page.
For the record, Harry's going to be reevaluating his initial assessment of Derpy's intelligence quite a bit in the coming chapters.
Finally started the page - only 11 tropes so far (although evil Harry's ridiculous outfit does 7 different ones in one entry) but I will expand it. If anyone is willing to help, I would be grateful for inserting the trope examples from the story on appropriate trope pages.
ReplyDelete48 tropes and counting. I knew a Pinky promise would make me get things done
ReplyDeleteStopped by TvTropes to have a look. It's a very nice page.
ReplyDeleteOk, I am done for now (the structure of Tvtropes is such that you can keep adding tropes to a work endlessly if you look close enough - but I think this is enough at least until the next chapter)
ReplyDeleteTell me if I missed anything important or misinterpreted anything.
Oh... oh crap. Twilight's been... crap!
ReplyDeleteHuh, Luna will try to be the new Element of Magic? Hmmm.
Okay! I'm calling this right now. Harry will end up wielding the Element of Magic, because he has built a better friendship with the rest of the Bearers than Luna has. Am I right? Am I right?? Uh, I guess you aren't telling me even if I am right. Darn.
Same here. At the moment, Harry is a perfect fit (though he will look absolutely ridiculous wearing a tiara) But confirmation of Twilight being on the Moon is actually good news.
ReplyDeleteThere is one more place that is "below" Equestria, you know, and denarians already have enough monsters on their side as it is.
@Braininthejar *next pony, who appears to be a crudely drawn red stick pony* I just wanted you to know that we're not doing Princesses anymore and we're just going to have Presidents from now on.
ReplyDeleteTOOOO THE MOOOOOOON!!! BEEEEYAAATCH!!
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteI find the fact that you posted about being until the next chapter a couple hours before I tossed up the next chapter amusing.
So, Applejack pulled a "My Fist Forgives You" and "Hit Me Dammit," Harry referenced "The Starscream" half the Resistance is running off of "The Closest Thing We Got" (Like Luna being the new Twilight Sparkle) and probably a couple more.
Go add some more tropes, troping slave!
Someone has already added those, so I referenced ThePowerOfFriendship (with the subversion in Dash' brainwashing), added Tessa's betrayal to the starscream example and Dueling Shows (with The Dresden Fillies, which was the first mlp fanfic I troped)
ReplyDelete@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteThanks muchly.
Er, I mean, *whip crack* Work harder, troping slave!
Hey, don't update so fast! I don't want the story to be over already.
ReplyDeleteYou might want to cut out the orgy comment - the joke is funnier when it isn't explained ;p (also, I wonder if Pinky did that one on purpose - she seems to know a lot from her travels)
Hands on forelegs would really be impractical - it would be better to add whole limbs... I guess the best way would be to start with pegasi wings and modify from there. Some pegasi are already able to use feathers as fingers.
Hmm... Derpy switches between derpspeak and spyspeak freely and doesn't seem to be faking either. Does she have split personality or what?
The existence of Shining Armour and Cadence brings up some interesting questions - she exists despite not having been mentioned in the series yet at that point. Does that mean the connection between worlds goes two ways? The things that do exist in the fictional universe manifest through the minds of the people writing the script?
Someone has already added GettingCrapPastTheRadar and ObliviousToLove. I added DarkestHour, DangerouslyGenreSavvy, BavarianFireDrill and ItsQuietTooQuiet.
ReplyDeleteDoes PowderKegCrowd apply?
Oh, did you make Lyra and Bonbon use a Shaekspearian euphemism on purpose or was it an accident?
ReplyDeleteI'd say Powder Keg Crowd applies.
ReplyDeleteBon Bon and Lyra's reaction once Pinkie reveals that she's talking about pranks probably also counts as a Sure, Let's Go With That. Pinkie's proposal of a "group pranking sesison" sounds like Accidental Innuendo to me.
Cadence being around is another example of Discord messing with things; the next chapter will actually have Pinkie commenting on how Cadence is showing up early.
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteSure, let's say that the Shakespearean euphemism was a deliberate demonstration of my sophisticated literary technique.
Wait, I don't remember Harry teaching Rainbow Dash those particular words. Discord/Denarians' influence? Either way, Lash wouldn't be pleased.
ReplyDeleteChapter 13: Dear lord, THAT came straight out of left field.
ReplyDelete"Now there are three of them!"
"This is getting out of hand..."
Also, RAINBOW DASH! Language!
Also also, ha, jokes at Dash's expense. THOSE jokes at Dash's expense. And Lyra. And Bon Bon. This was a great chapter.
Having thought about it, I disagree with Dash' statement. The royal guards have all the effectiveness of imperial stormtroopers and the whole team should have more than enough power to take on Cadence, as long as they don't let her throw too much mind control around. Also, she is clearly "straight-discorded" so no power of love for her.
ReplyDelete@Chengar Qordath
ReplyDeleteWait... if story continuity works that way, that would mean Pinky knew about Discord's coming as well... ?
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteDid you really just indicate that you expect Pinkie Pie's oddness to be logical and consistent?
If she isn't, somene will call her out on that.
ReplyDeleteI suppose Derpy is experienced enough to find an antidote by herself...
ReplyDeleteBut how the hay did Harry undo the spell on Cadence? He had no memories of her true self he could make her relive...
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteIt'd down a subtle difference in how Harry's brand of mind magic works vs. Twilight's. Twilight is directly placing the memories into her friend's head, while Harry's more nudging the pony's mind to access all those memories on it's own.
Ok then...
ReplyDeleteStealthHiBye, GodzillaTreshold, PutDownYourGunAndStepAway, BarrierWarrior, FauxActionGirl, WhatTheHellHero, BoundAndGagged, SchrodingerFu, anything else tonight?
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteNothing else springs to mind.
I think I remember Harry commenting that he hoped watching the series would give him enough knowledge of Dash to restore her mind...
ReplyDeleteAnyway, a different question: I am going to add another trope but I have to make sure: Why didn't Cadence use her charms? They don't require a loving personality (Twilight performed one while temporarily insane) so I am guessing she just lacked the experience to find any combat application for them. Am I right?
@Braininthejar
ReplyDeleteYeah, Cadance just isn't a fighter. The Want it Need it spell could have some scary combat applications (like casting it on a grenade) but that sort of thinking wouldn't occur to Cadence, and Saluriel (like any proper demon) wasn't overly impressed with the whole "love magic" direction of Cadance's powers.
Also, considering her ties to The Power of Love, being Discorded/Denarianed was probably hampering her quite a bit.
Well, you probably noticed that the "want it need it" spell is inspierd by the mythological "apple of discord" ;P
ReplyDeleteShe could also focus the charm on herself to get herself some suicidally obedient slaves. Both of those uses would surely appeal to a deamon - we are lucky that Saluriel is such a one trick pony.
Come to think of it, they were extremely lucky - that could have been the creepiest fight in the whole storyline.
ReplyDeleteHave to agree there; if Cadance had wound up with a different coin from a demon with a proper appreciation of what she could do, she would've been scary.
ReplyDeleteNot a big spoiler, so I don't think there's any harm in revealing that Cadance getting a coin was kind of a last-minute choice for the bad guys; she got the one was supposed to go to Twilight, on account of Twilight getting sent on her lunar vacation.
Since Nick needs Twilight alive, the Moon must have some sort of atmosphere -Not a big spoiler but is means Fancypants might still be alive. (he is stuck on the moon but he isn't stuck there with a bored demon)
ReplyDeleteHmm. She could still pull a Pell but the plot has just gotten another kind of interesting. You might receive some threats if we don't get the next chapter soon.
ReplyDeleteShe should have built an altitude and rainboom her instead of kicking. That might have caused enough damage to give her a chance to escape.
Now the question of whether cartoon ponies have souls have become really important. If they do, all we need is a single trip through the Outside and a 5000 gold diamond... (sorry, couldn't stay serious for long)
ReplyDeleteFurther thoughts:
ReplyDelete- It seems they need help from elsewhere now - getting another fictional universe into the game could give them all the adventage they need, or completely destroy the plot. Both they and you must step carefully here (then again, I am sure you already have a plan...)
- Cadence is restored to normal. What happens when she meets Celestia? Nobody knows that at the moment but between the two of them, Shining and Cadence actually have the power to defeat her.
- Fluttershy remembers more from her possession than she lets on. She has turned from "a nice, shy girl who can stare you down into submission if you push her" to "a nice, shy girl who can shout you through a wall if you push her". The law of conservation of detail distates, that someone Will push her before the end of the story.
- Where is Derpy? Did she manage to neutralise the demon venom?
- With all her power, Celestia still can bleed. Harry should have tried to sucker-punch Discord back in chapter 3.
- I wonder if any of the fanfic Dash could fill in for her.
@Braininthejar DASHIE NOOOOOOOO!!! Why does Dash always have to die! Oh, yeah, because she's the somewhat stupid impulsive risk taker who sacrifices herself for the team. Like Randy Quaid in "Independence Day".
ReplyDeleteAnyway, it's time Harry realized that he's also a fictional world character and the only ones who can save the day are... THE BRONIES!! Here we come to save the daaaaaaaaayyy!
*bronies do a mad rush on Celestia... who instantly turns them into ash.*
Huh, well that didn't work. Maybe we just need more people. (throws half the population of China at her) Still not enough! (continues this failed plan over and over, expecting different results, clearly demonstrating his insanity)
@Chengar Qordath At this point, it's pretty clear they need to visit the anime worlds and get ahold of Goku, Naruto, and Kurosaki Ichigo.
ReplyDeleteNow that would be one bad-flank climactic battle!
Of course, Equestria would be reduced to space dust, but for a good cause... our entertainment! (wicked laughter)
I'm just looking forward to the point when the Mane Six are back together and Celestia has been freed of the coin -- because then it'll be Harry, the girls, Celestia, and Luna versus Discord and Nicodemus. Now that would be a battle to see!... Provided you were a few hundred miles away and out of the blast radius.
ReplyDeleteThe good things in this chapter were realizing they needed to take Celestia head on but had no ability to do so and Fluttershy retaining the shout ability giving them the hint that maybe they should play the bad guys' game and use the resources of the outside.
ReplyDeleteOn the other hand Harry has a spell that breaks Discord's control and Dash could have just flown him up to her back.
Or like others suggested, have Pinkie pull them outside or use a better attack against Celestia.
Also if Dash wasn't willing to hurt Fluttershy or Pinkie seriously while Discorded or even Applejack (she only tackled her, didn't try to brain her) I'm surprised she was willing to be so vicious with the Princess she obviously has massive love and respect for.
It just seems like too many idiot balls, plot contrivances and scenes for their own sake. I'm assuming that Fluttershy's shouts, and Pinkie and Harry's current grief reminding them of the prior conversation of turning Dash into a cyborg with laser eyes will clue them in to get help from the outside, but really Flutter's shouts should have been enough.
Dash has just been the punching bag of the whole story to the point that the end of the chapter had almost no actual impact. I'm just desensitized to it here.