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Author: Johnny Bruton
Description: Rainbow Dash takes part in the Pegasus Grand Prix, but without the help of one of her friends it doesn't look like she can win.Cloud Racer
Additional Tags: Racing, Training, Short, Teleplay, Fun
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Author: Johnny Bruton
Additional Tags: Racing, Training, Short, Teleplay, Fun
Sildid: Author: Johnny Bruton, Complete, Fanfiction, Normal, Rainbow Dash, Star-4, Story, Twilight SparkleShare This!
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I need a twenty minute read. This will do nicely.
VastaKustutaIts a telescript? I thought it was supposed to be a story. Whatever, it looks promising.
VastaKustutaI'd almost swear this was an actual teleplay from the show.
VastaKustutaWell done.
she wants to cheat? well whatever makes her happy if i read
VastaKustutaThis should be an actual episode
VastaKustutaI think this is a script for an actual episode.
VastaKustutaJust maybe :3
heck i dont know
Page 7 was all messed up.
VastaKustutaI'd. *LOVE* to see this as an episode! Awesome job =D
VastaKustutaTeehee
VastaKustutaR.D looks.. chubby.. in the picture :P
Also great story, I could really see it in a episode
Reading this fic as a teleplay was very interesting, and it really does feel like a normal episode of the show. One mistake I noticed during the first race (I think page 8 or 9), Rainbow Dash says, "If one more person passes me", which should probably read "If one more pony passes me". Typographical errors aside, the story was great; I liked it a lot.
VastaKustutaMan, that was a great episode!
VastaKustuta*checks title*
Oh, wait, just a very well-written scriptfic. Never mind.
But seriously, this was really well done. The only problem I had with it was, as Pikari above me said, the one typo.
MOAR
@theownageftw
VastaKustutaAtt lhe ponies have bellies, no matter how fit. Just like real equines. It comes from all the greens they eat.
oh man these fanfics start to pile up ... better not waste time during christmas
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