Story: a (Update Part 2!)

by Sethisto

[Shipping]

Author: otsihtes

Description: a

a (New Part 2!)

Additional Tags: a

162 comments:

louster200December 22, 2011 at 4:53 PM
A?

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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 4:53 PM
*facepaw* ROFL. Oh Seth, you silly pony... You're the best.
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Tanner GDecember 22, 2011 at 4:54 PM
I lol'd.
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AlexanderDecember 22, 2011 at 4:55 PM
6 stars, best fic ever.
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David ReinoldDecember 22, 2011 at 4:56 PM
Why is this not a star-6?
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ParasojaDecember 22, 2011 at 4:56 PM
how do I get to part 2?
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CrackyDecember 22, 2011 at 4:56 PM
a
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LukeDecember 22, 2011 at 4:58 PM
I can really feel the emotion conveyed by the characters to one another. Great. Just amazing.
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NOFURRDecember 22, 2011 at 4:58 PM
Wait wouldn't a part 2 be b?
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TyranomanDecember 22, 2011 at 4:59 PM
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TyranomanDecember 22, 2011 at 5:00 PM
So are there going to be 25 sequels?
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Rainbow DashDecember 22, 2011 at 5:01 PM
I cried at the ending
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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 5:02 PM
Never has so much been said with so little.

I give it A star.
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CircuitScratchDecember 22, 2011 at 5:02 PM
This was a great fic, and truly deserves it perfect 5-star rating. My only possible complaint is that it was a little short, and just left me wanting more!
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csos95December 22, 2011 at 5:03 PM
its... just... so amazing words can't describe
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Vikingen94December 22, 2011 at 5:03 PM
best fanfic ever
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LittleBrendonDecember 22, 2011 at 5:03 PM
That had to be the greatest ending i have ever read, you can see now how part 1 foreshadowed it, but it still hit me like a truck
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ClicheDecember 22, 2011 at 5:04 PM
It was more moving then all the other fics combined.
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Steve JobsDecember 22, 2011 at 5:04 PM
Talos does it again!
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joetraincoolDecember 22, 2011 at 5:05 PM
I laughed, I cried, it moved me Bob. (1 internet to those who get the reference)

Hey Seth, will you fix the Vinyl Scratch Tapes link, please?
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Ahiam94December 22, 2011 at 5:05 PM
Absolutely Breath-taking. This is a Fic that no one will ever forget.

...But seriously, A?
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XortbergDecember 22, 2011 at 5:06 PM
Dammit, it's down to 4.8 stars. How could anyone give this masterpiece anything less than 5?

Soulless heathens, whoever you are.
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HivemindDecember 22, 2011 at 5:06 PM
*ROARING APPLAUSE*
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JimperatorDecember 22, 2011 at 5:07 PM
Literary genius. I'm astonished.
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Nyte_CrawlerDecember 22, 2011 at 5:08 PM
my lord, this new chapter was just unbelievable, had me on the edge of my seat.
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RottweilerDecember 22, 2011 at 5:10 PM
This is the most awesome story ever made.

The plot, the climax, the characters, everything mixed so perfectly.

It made me laugh, it made me cry, it made me angry, a lot of emotions conveyed in one single story, the author is truly a genious.
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JoeyH3December 22, 2011 at 5:13 PM
Wow, this entire story was heartwarming, joyful, suspensful, and beautiful! The ending was completely unexpected, and the story had my on the edge of my seat until then!
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American DoofusDecember 22, 2011 at 5:13 PM
cant wait for part 3
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HawkysuDecember 22, 2011 at 5:13 PM
This story has encouraged me to write again. This is what fanfiction should be.

Thank you otsihtes, for this beautiful work.
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Sgt ByrdDecember 22, 2011 at 5:14 PM
I love that the internet has come so far that instead of using text to render the letter a, an image of the letter a is used, just wow.
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2007excalibur2007December 22, 2011 at 5:14 PM
Best fanfic of 2011.
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HyperPeanutDecember 22, 2011 at 5:17 PM
Past Sins has nothing on this.
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nifboyDecember 22, 2011 at 5:18 PM
AUUUGH IT'S A SOLDIER ANT QUICK INSCRIBE ELBERETH
elbereth
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***You have died.***
Do you want your possessions identified? [ynq] (n) |
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The Kilted OneDecember 22, 2011 at 5:21 PM
I for one am shocked and appalled!!!
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Crazy56UDecember 22, 2011 at 5:21 PM
...I don't get it.
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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 5:22 PM
Wow. This fic blew me away. It's so well written and clearly had a lot of thought put into it. Best fic of 2011 hands down.
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RolandDecember 22, 2011 at 5:26 PM
LOLOOwowlooAnonymous User 513: The opening line is such thAt hAs never been seen before. It simultAneously blends fAntAsy with reAlity and flAwlessly epitomizes the singulArity of ponykind. The tone in which the story is written is deeply personAl, which puts the reAder into A deep emotion stAte with eAse. I would hAve expected such mArvelous prose from A professionAl Author, but this just goes to show thAt even the best cAn rise from nothing. This is truly A mAgnificent mAsterpiece of literature.
wow, that was the best comment ever.
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Offbeat SoulDecember 22, 2011 at 5:26 PM
I'm not gonna lie, I cried like a baby.
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VaitinDecember 22, 2011 at 5:27 PM
Garbage.
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GodortDecember 22, 2011 at 5:27 PM
Best story ever.
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DawnmistDecember 22, 2011 at 5:29 PM
THIS STORY HAS CHANGED MY LIFE.
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marioandsonicDecember 22, 2011 at 5:31 PM
HOLY SHIT, THIS IS THE BEST FANFIC EVER!

The tastefully written sex scene between Twilight and Fluttershy was very well done, but my favorite part was either Pinkie Pie beating Deadpool at Age of Empires or Led Zepplin crashing into Celestia's castle.
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LordlyhourDecember 22, 2011 at 5:31 PM
Jeeze, how has this not yet got a legendary?
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Ignacio SantacruzDecember 22, 2011 at 5:32 PM
Predictable and cliché.
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EricDecember 22, 2011 at 5:34 PM
pft. 'a' is soooo played out by now. all the cool kids are already on 'b'. get with the times, sethisto
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BronyoffDecember 22, 2011 at 5:35 PM
The story was riveting brining me from tears to similes and tearing and rebuilding my heart. The best pony story around
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PopeHatSkeletonDecember 22, 2011 at 5:37 PM
I cannot freaking wait for b.
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RieszDecember 22, 2011 at 5:39 PM
You're the best fic ever a
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Black RainDecember 22, 2011 at 5:41 PM
Needs an award...
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HeinousActsZXDecember 22, 2011 at 5:41 PM
Reminds me of "B" on Newgrounds.
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DRTJRDecember 22, 2011 at 5:42 PM
It gave me joy, heart ache, and Enlightenment. truly a fic to end all fics. It is in a word perfect.
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KyroneaDecember 22, 2011 at 5:47 PM
I don't get it.
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MelodiaDecember 22, 2011 at 5:54 PM
Best. Fanfic. EVER.
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Corky64December 22, 2011 at 5:58 PM
The sex scene felt a little tacked on, and could have been written a bit better.

Other than that, the conspiracy involving B and C *really* got me. Amazingly done!
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DarkdriumDecember 22, 2011 at 5:59 PM
I feel I have to let you know that the link to the story is not touch-screen friendly at all.
That being said, I will open this link. Challenge accepted.
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AxanZenithDecember 22, 2011 at 6:00 PM
Words fail me.

I don't think I've ever been so emotionally gripped by a story in all my life.

This is a masterpiece.
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MaquabraDecember 22, 2011 at 6:03 PM
Almost as good as history of PonyArchive
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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 6:11 PM
aaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAああああああああああああ
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FordDecember 22, 2011 at 6:11 PM
This comment is brought to you by the letter f.

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
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Dust FireDecember 22, 2011 at 6:13 PM
Yes finally i love this story!!!!!!
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SandovalDecember 22, 2011 at 6:13 PM
amazing
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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 6:21 PM
I've read this fic like 5 times already.
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CoconutswallowDecember 22, 2011 at 6:21 PM
@joetraincool
I do believe that'd be talking vegetables. *pompously adds internet to shelf*

Seriously though, about the story? Absolute trash. I give it one star. It had underdeveloped characters, a plot with holes as wide as North Dakota, and every cliche in the book. Plus don't get me started on the grammatical mistakes. There was one especially glaring typo that's just unforgivable. Does this author even know what a spell checker is?

It saddens me that this story already has six stars. This just shows how far EQD has fallen that the pre-readers would even let this through much less that the readers would obsess over it. If I were otsihtes I would be ashamed to even call myself a brony.

I'm done here. I hope you all are happy with your drivel.
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SebialeDecember 22, 2011 at 6:22 PM
>.>
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SanguinityDecember 22, 2011 at 6:23 PM
I haven't seen a fic this greatly written since Spideres. Sipmly awe-inspiring.
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NothingDecember 22, 2011 at 6:30 PM
@NOFURR Hell no, EVERYTHING'S a, lunadamnit
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Tenyo SciurusDecember 22, 2011 at 6:31 PM
a?

i c.
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GodBlogger247December 22, 2011 at 6:32 PM
@marioandsonic ..... Now I wish your crackfic was real.....
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GodBlogger247December 22, 2011 at 6:33 PM
GOD FREAKING GRIEF! This is going to be a running gag, isn't it? That's it, I quit!
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NothingDecember 22, 2011 at 6:34 PM
@PopeHatSkeletonthere will not 'b' a b...
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NothingDecember 22, 2011 at 6:36 PM
@Corky64on the contrary, there was no sex scene, just a lot of intimate cuddling. also, there was way too much description in the last few paragraphs. also, for an update, it was a bit on the long side... 5 stars anyways
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EkevooDecember 22, 2011 at 6:37 PM
This is no match for spiderses. Lose.
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iisawDecember 22, 2011 at 6:45 PM
Needs more character development.

A

There, that's better.
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AlbumholeDecember 22, 2011 at 6:45 PM
So... AWESOME
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SIaanmeDecember 22, 2011 at 6:46 PM
I can't.... I can't.... This fic has removed my ability to can.

I wept. I laughed. I gasped. I cried some more. Then when it was over I went back and read it five more times. Never has there been anything so moving as this. Words do not even begin to describe it.

Authors take note: THIS is how you write a fic. I'm now ruined for every other story out there in any medium.
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ArcanonDecember 22, 2011 at 6:53 PM
So...many...alicorns...

Well, I learned a few interesting things here. Didn't know things like THAT were possible, but I guess there's always something out there to learn...and brain bleach out later.
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RDashDecember 22, 2011 at 6:53 PM
I'm working on getting a PDF ready.
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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 6:53 PM
Really good 6
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80and56December 22, 2011 at 6:53 PM
I'm sorry. I know we all have unique tastes, but damn.

This just made me vomit in rage.

If I may offer a slight suggestion, make it a bit more "v"-centric. Then I'll see if I have a compliment to offer.
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OddendDecember 22, 2011 at 7:06 PM
This is just....Absolutely Beautifoal...I doubt I shall never read such greatness again..
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K. ChanDecember 22, 2011 at 7:09 PM
This story is so predictable. I just KNOW b is going to happen next!
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flagninjaDecember 22, 2011 at 7:11 PM
This is even better than spiderses. Srsly guise!
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C.Olimar788December 22, 2011 at 7:14 PM
That was... so moving. I... I think I will cry myself to sleep every night for the rest of my life. ;-;

WHY WOULD YOU MAKE SOMETHING SO EMOTIONALLY POWERFUL DANGIT

6/5
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Beige MonkfishDecember 22, 2011 at 7:14 PM
This needs a dramatic reading!
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ThePonyWithoutANameDecember 22, 2011 at 7:17 PM
While, it was starting to get very lengthy, I will look past that due to the amazing grammer free writing. It truly is worth more then five stars. Who would of guessed that he would of got that mare! What a twist. Oh and that fall, I cant wait to part 3. I just hope that my story is as great as this one! Keep it up seth.
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Gluttonous FruitcakesDecember 22, 2011 at 7:28 PM
The tears, they won't stop! Such Beautiful writing!

This deserves 7 stars, we need to create a new rating system just for this amazing piece of literature.
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modulusshiftDecember 22, 2011 at 7:31 PM
Ponies' responses:
Twilight: "Really?"
Pinkie: "b! But not /b/."
Rarity: *looks perplexed for a second, moves on*
Fluttershy: "That was...nice."
Applejack: "Ah don't think that's a good use of a page."
Rainbow: "Twilight! I finally finished a book! And you said I never would."
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Westy543December 22, 2011 at 7:32 PM
My mind has been fully enriched by this long and thoughtful fanfiction. It really shows that the brony community is always capable of truly magnificent things.
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mehog125December 22, 2011 at 7:33 PM
Can't wait for b
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DarkApostleMattDecember 22, 2011 at 7:37 PM
I have no idea whats goin on
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DarkApostleMattDecember 22, 2011 at 7:37 PM
must be too deep for me apparently
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James BoltDecember 22, 2011 at 7:38 PM
hmm 6 stars, might put it in my folder to read later, does anyone recommend this?
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OtherunicornDecember 22, 2011 at 7:42 PM
eh?
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AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 7:50 PM
SO GOOD!
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Corey W. WilliamsDecember 22, 2011 at 8:06 PM
a is the best fic ever.

It makes Moby Dick look like Plan 9 from Outer Space.
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statooseDecember 22, 2011 at 8:08 PM
Okay, what?
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Sunset SprinklesDecember 22, 2011 at 8:26 PM
I was seriously expecting a story xD
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Menelaus RedzDecember 22, 2011 at 8:31 PM
Yeah, definitely an amazing story! 6 Stars!!
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Bronygirl09December 22, 2011 at 8:32 PM
B?
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ScherzandoDecember 22, 2011 at 8:34 PM
Past Sins? Fallout: Equestra? Pffft, move over! "A" is the new face of fanfiction.
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DPV111December 22, 2011 at 8:42 PM
Where's the shipping? I was expecting ab or ac at least.
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BattraDecember 22, 2011 at 8:42 PM
Best Fic Ever
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DPV111December 22, 2011 at 8:44 PM
Also: EDITING!

""a""
---should be "A."

Great otherwise, even with shiptease.
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Spikely WhiplashDecember 22, 2011 at 8:50 PM
@Bronygirl09

We don't talk about them.
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ismbofDecember 22, 2011 at 9:29 PM
Wonderfully written! Now, I simply cannot wait for a sequel.
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RyunosukeDecember 22, 2011 at 9:31 PM
I can predict that this is gonna be a 26 part story.

Cant wait to see what happens next!
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CivanfanDecember 22, 2011 at 9:34 PM
Sorry, I can't agree with the way you're developed a's character.

After a's traumatic experiences, I don't think he's be anywhere NEAR ready for a relationship.

That otsihtes ear for dialogue is as sharp and heartwarming as ever, though, so I can overlook it.
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Nova25December 22, 2011 at 9:37 PM
I... huh... I literally have no word ? Huh ? How novel.

Presented to you, by letter : E... EEEeeeee !!! : http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=4T8PxaMlsPw#t=10s
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eaglehoovesDecember 22, 2011 at 10:03 PM
Wow. I'm speechless. I'm almost ready to can my own project after reading that - there's no way I can compete with this. Any plan for an e-reader version so I can take it with me?
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richfilesDecember 22, 2011 at 10:04 PM
@Beige Monkfish

The Dramatic Reading of "a" has been up since September!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uRkGJWPaduw
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richfilesDecember 22, 2011 at 10:12 PM
@DarkApostleMatt

It IS deep. What nopony recognizes it's in fact a 42 chapter epic adventure, with ALL the letters stacked behind each other, instead of after each other.

It's SUPER deep!
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PoshDecember 22, 2011 at 10:13 PM
Just a pale imitation of "R" if you ask me.
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XortbergDecember 22, 2011 at 10:15 PM
I'm almost offended that this hasn't been tagged as 6 stars yet. MAKE IT SO, SETH.

Actually, I don't think 6 stars does it justice. Tag this as Equestria Daily's first ever... 7 STAR STORY.
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PS2GatorDecember 22, 2011 at 10:32 PM
DEAR LORD! THE SARCASM READINGS ARE OFF THE CHARTS!

*BOOM*
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jazman71092December 22, 2011 at 10:34 PM
really, you guys? really?!
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Lynx AmurieDecember 22, 2011 at 10:35 PM
manly tears were shed
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MattatattaDecember 22, 2011 at 10:40 PM
This is the greatest fanfic I've ever read. Forget Past Sins, forget Fallout Equestria, forget It's A Dangerous Business! This epic, fillies and gentlecolts, stands head and shoulders above those tales, and raises the bar to heights previously unheard of. I thoroughly recommend this brilliant saga to everypony, and eveypony should read it, lest they want to be eaten alive by regret.
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Nova25December 22, 2011 at 10:43 PM
@PS2Gator
*Monocle falls* Egads ! Dear chaps !
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Nova25December 22, 2011 at 10:45 PM
@Mattatatta
''It's A Dangerous Business'' did it first obviously... it's all hidden in the title, ya see ? ;)

It's A : Dangerous Business :3
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DCNPonyDecember 22, 2011 at 11:20 PM
This is just stupid.

The main character is clearly a self-insert, and a shameless one at that. The romance subplot it tacked on and CLEARLY just for the author to indulge his sick fantasies, dragging the reader along kicking and screaming.

The mid-story twist was... "okay". I wasn't really expecting it, I'll give you that, but it didn't really have any real impact either. I think it could have easily been removed and the story wouldn't have suffered. In fact, I think it would have made it better.

1/5 Stars. I added the one because I did like the scene with Pinkie Pie and the washing machine.
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XplayerDecember 22, 2011 at 11:33 PM
I most definitely will be following this fic. It's a modern masterpiece, and instant classic!
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TylendalDecember 23, 2011 at 12:01 AM
Sethisto is trying to hide his identity by writing his name backwards. He's obviously a vampire.
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TomDecember 23, 2011 at 12:08 AM
otsihtes totally isn't sethisto backwards.
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JandalfDecember 23, 2011 at 12:47 AM
This needs to be a 6-Star story. When this is finished i want a printed version.
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Crusty BreadDecember 23, 2011 at 12:53 AM
So...when is the video coming out?
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BareeDecember 23, 2011 at 1:01 AM
A+
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R10t Pol1ceDecember 23, 2011 at 1:23 AM
999
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RedSquirrel456December 23, 2011 at 1:37 AM
In all seriousness, what the hell?
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DrNazusDecember 23, 2011 at 2:46 AM
Give this a rating of Star-A
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RainbowLeader 510December 23, 2011 at 2:52 AM
Eh, it was a little short for my tastes. 3/5 stars.
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DeRockProjectDecember 23, 2011 at 3:11 AM
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DeRockProjectDecember 23, 2011 at 3:12 AM
This is the most disgusting insult to literature I've ever seen. Yet the quantity of rabid fans who will defend this fic against even the slightest of insults makes me question my faith in humanity. Otsihtes should be ashamed of himself for creating this abomination and its fanbase and I believe a few of the more sane bronies will agree.

5 out of 5 stars.
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DeRockProjectDecember 23, 2011 at 3:13 AM
Crap. I don't know if I'm doing this right. Maybe I should've wrote a 7-paragraph essay first.
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lHEARTburgerDecember 23, 2011 at 3:15 AM
this story deserves 5 stars for its humour xD
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KerrahDecember 23, 2011 at 3:37 AM
http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/AAAA
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AnonymousDecember 23, 2011 at 3:42 AM
Why no ponified "a" image?
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Agile WingsDecember 23, 2011 at 4:42 AM
This was so beautiful, A was an amazing piece of work.
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TosxychorDecember 23, 2011 at 5:21 AM
FANART NAO
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TosxychorDecember 23, 2011 at 5:26 AM
Also, the subtitle should be: "Sweetie Derelle: the Aaaaaabridged Version".
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Sgt ByrdDecember 23, 2011 at 8:43 AM
Fan art already

That link was made possible with the a tag :P
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GramisDecember 23, 2011 at 9:37 AM
I was Blinded by the pure awesomeness of this fic!!
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AimeeDecember 23, 2011 at 10:20 AM
They say brevity is the soul of wit. Therefore, this is objectively the BEST FIC EVER!
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banjo2EDecember 23, 2011 at 10:24 AM
Guys, this is just the novelization of the Newgrounds flash, b. Go watch that instead, it has pictures.
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The CommanderDecember 23, 2011 at 10:24 AM
Meh, it was good, but not as good as Past Sins. It was kind of lacking in character development. Also, I felt the twist in the middle was kind of stupid and contrived. It just appeared out of nowhere. You need to establish that kind of thing. A main character can't kill another one for no real reason. Pinkie is random, but not THAT random.

Otherwise, I liked it.
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CátsyDecember 23, 2011 at 4:06 PM
the intro was amazing but that ending was confusing =/ I still think it needs a bit more editing. Great job though and hope the next chapter can clear up that crazy cliffhanger ending I just read!

P.S. but a big deal really but try using a bit more spacing there at the end to make it look more professional.
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CátsyDecember 23, 2011 at 4:10 PM
@The Commander while it isn't fair to compare a Shipping fic to a Normal one I will say that the character in this story had just as much character as the OC in Past Sins. You should re-read the story from a different perspective and I'm sure you'll understand just how much character was put into them.
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CátsyDecember 23, 2011 at 4:16 PM
For a ship fic I got to say this had a lot of A but very little amounts of T.
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AlondroDecember 23, 2011 at 4:22 PM
@2007excalibur2007

A brilliant use of minimalism. Worth at least $65 million. *art critic*
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AlondroDecember 23, 2011 at 4:24 PM
@The Kilted One

I KNOW!!! And I thought "Cupcakes" was graphic and disturbing! I mean, sure 'a' is brilliantly clever and witty in its writing style and descriptive narrative, but was it REALLY necessary to have them die like that?
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Nova25December 23, 2011 at 8:09 PM
@Tylendal
Like Alucard and Dracula.. or Draclau.
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Nova25December 23, 2011 at 8:10 PM
Wow... and just to think that are not even the 1st of April ? :3
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SlotosDecember 23, 2011 at 10:36 PM
I request more characters.
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Display NameDecember 25, 2011 at 2:27 AM
You know, it's stories like this that are the true masterpieces of the world. The ones that leave your mind open to interpretation, and allow you to experience every possible event you can imagine, simply because of how beautifully simplistic it is. I dare say, this is almost as good as BLANK PAPER.
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AnonymousDecember 25, 2011 at 10:18 AM
I don't really see what all the fuss is about. This fic is far too long for my tastes and spends too much time describing ponies. Honestly, I think the author was trying to cram an entire novel into a short story.
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StursDecember 25, 2011 at 11:55 AM
That was a work of genius. In fact, I would go as far as to rate this story...

An A.

*does the CSI sunglasses thingy*
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Dusty the Royal JanitorDecember 25, 2011 at 3:31 PM
BRILLIANT! I give it an A+
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AnonymousDecember 26, 2011 at 1:05 AM
Shades of the infamous StrawberryClock!
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Forte CanterDecember 26, 2011 at 6:48 AM
Jesus fuck the plot twists. Seriously it was Rarity all along? What the hell? I mean when you think about it it actually starts to make more sense than Fluttershy but seriously wow. I honestly can't get enough of this.
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twohumanDecember 26, 2011 at 6:31 PM
To be honest, I like C better.
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Ultra The HedgeToasterFebruary 2, 2012 at 11:32 AM
Personally, I thought the story focussed too much on the main character. :P
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Sir0ChickenJanuary 18, 2013 at 3:38 PM
Awesome story!
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