Author: goldenCapitalist
Description: Six friends, six lives. Each go on to pursue their dreams and live their lives, but will their friendship withstand the test of time?Stand By Me Part 1
Stand By Me Part 2 (New!)
Additional Tags: Life stories, Friendship, Mane 6, Growing apart, Long
28 kommentaari:
Awwwwww sounds cute
VastaKustutaoh dear... sounds more like a sadfic to me...
VastaKustutaThis sounds EXACTLY like one of those fics that will be so heartwrenchingly sad that I'll have to mend my broken heart with duct tape.
VastaKustutaI'm going to read this anyway, am I not?
Sounds interesting.
VastaKustutaLol, Twilight is awesome. She managed to teleport her entire house over there? Aww Twilight, why u so awesome?
VastaKustutaHmm. Too deep. Not in the mood. Maybe later. Need something simple and sweet right now.
VastaKustutaI am instantly reminded of that awesome movie.
VastaKustutaThe first chapter is more of a set-up, a prologue. It's setting up what Twilight will be doing for the next several years. As for sad, this story is not sad yet, and doesn't address what the description said...yet. Hence the incomplete tag.
VastaKustutaCan't wait to see what happens next. :)
This is just a prologue, but I'm not really into it. Meh.
VastaKustutaGonna look forward to story updates for this one. It's always interesting when the princesses get involved with Twilight and her friends.
VastaKustutaHm, I wonder how the rest of this story will be like. This first chapter was pretty good and it had lot of potential, so I'll look forward to the updates!
VastaKustutaI'll definitely have to keep watch on this one, enjoyed the prologue.
VastaKustutaFrom the premise, this has the makings of a great fic if done right. Will deffinitly keep an eye on it and at the least read the first few chapters as they come. Hopefully I'm enticed to follow it through to the end.
VastaKustutaReading this one, i have become hooked. i want to know what happens to twilight now. I cant wait for the next one. This is sure to become one of my favorite fics. which , so far, just consists of Fallout Equestria, and now, this, keep up the great work. :)
VastaKustutaGOD! I WAS PLANNING TO WRITE SOMETHING ABOUT THIS. MY TIME TO SHINE HAS BEEN STOLEN D:
VastaKustutaDescription is intriguing, I'll bookmark this for later
VastaKustutaI hope that it doesn't chage tags in the middle It's really annoying when a fic changes tone drastically (just look at The Sun is Tired...though not too much as it's horrible) -- so far it's really potentially good, and even if there's some bittersweet, it can easily stay 'normal'.
VastaKustutaIt's magic, you don't gotta explain shit :( Also, her friends were PLUCKED from their daily lives (what if somepony was in the bathroom) and had to SIT THROUGH all that magic power and mechanisms talk. I kinda hated this whole scene and dropped.
VastaKustutaWere this further into the story, I wouldn't mind, but the promised conflict from the story description was nowhere to be seen yet. I was really interested in that premise!!
I'll probably give this story another try a few chapters in. For now, that wasn't a very good start.
I've a feeling this fic is gonna have a [sad] tag from the description.
VastaKustutathe "seal on Twilight's magic idea" fits pretty well with the series.
Liked it. Looking forward to more. I love how Twilight has even MORE magic.
VastaKustutaChapter one doesn't match the description at all, but that's fine because we can see the beginnings of Twilight's departure. I'll assume this story will have a moderately slow ramp up time. That said, I'm interested to see how you handle this story and the inevitable flood of emotions/nostalgia/regrets that can come from this premise.
VastaKustutaOnly criticism I have is your use of verbs and your repetition of nouns:
-Use active verbs (get rid of 'to be' verbs everywhere you possible can)
-Use pronouns and/or inference when talking about something, your current use of nouns is repetitive and can use some cleaning up to make this story flow much better.
Summary: Good story, needs more work on writing.
First I want to start off by thanking everypony for their reception of my first try at writing a fanfic. I thank both the positive and the negative remarks. The positive help me keep on, and the negative helps point out what is lacking. I also want to apologize for the wait for the next chapter; it's been a hell of a week, and next week will be even busier, so my writing time will be this Thanksgiving break. I'll have the chapter done and edited soon.
VastaKustutaAgain thank you all, and I hope that you keep reading as my story progresses!
so, is this story not going to be finished? I really liked the first chapter.
VastaKustuta@SharonI know it has been an extremely long time since I first was lucky enough to have this story posted. And I know that I have been slacking in this respect. But my life has just been so busy these past few weeks... I won't go into detail, but I've been unable to fall asleep before 1 am every night.
VastaKustutaBut don't listen to me make excuses. I am absolutely determined to see this story to its completion, even if the other aspects of my life suffer because of it. I will get this story done. And I will update the story with the next chapter soon.
I apologize for keeping you all waiting. Really, getting Sharon's comment cut me deep, because it feels as if I've failed my readers. Which I have. So I want to thank you all for not just forgetting this story and leaving it in the dust. I WILL finish it. Thank you again.
New reader. Loved it! Looking forward to more ... apparently like everyone else. It's your own fault for being awesome! Yay!
VastaKustutaWell, haven't seen that movie in a while.
VastaKustutaGuess I'll have to rewatch it while reading this.
Just want to apologize about the delay for chapter 3, midterms are here. I will once again begin work on the chapter after this week. Thank you again!
VastaKustutaOf my three favourite stories right now, this one is second only to 'Human', but that has progressed further, with time this might become #1, not that im saying its bad, im just super picky about my stories.
VastaKustutaI know what you mean about the lack of time to write, i have the same problem with my own writings, i dont write pony stories yet though.
in addition to the rest of this comment, i believe that this would work really well as an episode, maybe as a start of season 2 part episode. i would pay money for this to be an episode.
anyway, keep up the good work, ill try not to write so much next time.
- Jordan (The World Eater)