[Shipping] We haven't had any good old Rarityjack ina while, so have some!
Author: AbsoluteAnonymous
Description: After the Gala, Applejack has a little too much to drink, and Rarity agrees to escort her home; but then, much to Rarity's embarrassment, Applejack decides that right then and there is the perfect time to confront the unicorn about their true feelings for one another.Diamond in the Rough
Additional Tags: Awkward, Drunk, Gala Aftermath, Oneshot
41 comments:
I was waiting for a Rarijack to pop up, ever since last Saturday. <_<
ReplyDeletehmmm time to read this fic then fall asleep and get Skyrim tomorow.....hopefully >_>
ReplyDeleteYou mean this ISN'T based on Friendship is Withcraft?
ReplyDeleteMan...
I prefer google docs since they're easier to download in pdf for reading on my ipod, is it possible to download these as .doc or .pdf as well?
ReplyDeletethis shipfic suffers a common problem with shipfics.
ReplyDeleteit doesn't go anywhere. >=|
Needs a proofread. Funny story though, made me chuckle. Good ten-minute read. WizardShy, we're done here.
ReplyDeleteVery nice short read, definitely a heartwarmer and it got me smiling. Only thing I would've love to see (and earn an extra star from me) was if the story actually went on a bit longer and described the next day and where their relationship goes. The way it is now the story just kind of ends with no real resolution.
ReplyDeleteThat said, everypony should give it a read and 4 stars from me :)
@The Posh Mothershuckler
ReplyDelete"I come from a rich family and you like to eat apples."
Five stars, but I would love to see this one continued! You've got something beautiful going here, and I'd hate to see it end too quickly!
ReplyDeleteVery nice. A different take on your typical RariJack fic. Then again, the only other ones involve sex, a journey in a faraway land, forcing Rarity to participate in a rodeo, and... mine. Which is pretty cut-and-dry, as far as shipfics go.
ReplyDeleteThat said, I agree with what a lot of other ponies are saying. If you make Rarity's proposition to AJ such a big deal, then you've got to give it to us. Give us the closure of Applejack's answer. The ending you have now, while in some ways appropriate, is lacking and unsatisfying.
Still, four stars, easily.
"Complete"?!
ReplyDeleteOh now this is just a tease :P
- Oh, please let it be a one-shot.
ReplyDelete- Enclosed are all 70 chapters.
I see that I wasn't the onnly one hoping for a 70 chapter epic about Applesack and Charity.
ReplyDeleteGod I hate these lesbian pony stories. Why do so many people like them? It makes my stomach churn. (No, I'm not homophobic, I just don't like seeing such stories about MLP.)
ReplyDeleteRarityxApplejack? Awesome. Can't wait to give it a shot.
ReplyDeleteGahhhhhh. I hated the ending. I really did. I really hope there are more parts to this otherwise wonderful story, because an ending like that just left a bad taste in my mouth.
ReplyDelete@General Mike
ReplyDeleteThey're cute and funny, and unfortunately most fics are ships.
@General Mike
ReplyDeleteWHY does it make your "stomach churn"?
If you read it and found it distasteful that is your fault for reading it. You knew what it was about.
If you DIDN'T read it and it still bothers you just because it exists you either are very immature to care ABOUT things you do not care FOR. OR you have a fundamental objection to the content which DOES make you homophobic.
On another note, can anyone rate the level of humor in this? It sounds amusing but I tend to be bored to tears by shipping if it is not also adventure or comedy.
ReplyDeletebueno!!
ReplyDeleteI've read this before, but I can't remember if it was here or on FFN. Is this the first time the author submitted it here?
ReplyDelete@General Mike Personally, shipping stories don't interest me at all, whether straight or lesbian, and I've encountered others who feel the same. However, for some reason they seem to be popular, so just learn to ignore them because they aren't going anywhere.
ReplyDelete@DPV111
ReplyDeleteI found it at the "Chuckle a bit" level.
It's marked complete but feels incomplete. There's so much potential for a great second chapter.
I liked it. Short and sweet.
ReplyDeleteOkay, I probably should have been getting ready for work right now, but not only is this a Rarijack story, you used my fanart, to boot! So of course then I had to read it, and it's only polite if I leave my thoughts afterward, right? =^.^=
ReplyDeleteAllow me to say first that that was a very cute story. I don't read a lot of fanfiction, simply because I don't usually have the time to, but I have of course read some of it before and am quite aware of how awkward or poorly-written most shipping fictions can be. In my opinion at least, this was very nicely written and was paced very well, and you did a very good job capturing Rarity's thoughts (well, I think anyway). At least, I always figured that what she most admired about Applejack would be her simple honesty and the fact that she's never tried to be anything but what she is, while Rarity in contrast, as you so nicely put it yourself, is constantly worrying about putting her absolute best face forward. Literally and figuratively, every moment of her life.
So yes, basically I think you captured their dynamic very well, and that's always a good thing as far as I'm concerned. And a small point of mention for me, even though I thought it was slightly OOC, I absolutely cannot get that mental image of Fluttershy downing shots "like an old, bitter alcoholic" out of my head; that was absolutely hilarious! Seriously, I do believe I'm going to have to draw a fanart of that moment now, so thank you for that. ^.^
My only real complaint about this story? It was far too short! And that ending was just so ambiguous, you left so much hanging! I do wish you'd reconsider the one-shot status and give us at least one more chapter (*ahem, puppy eyes* @_@), but for what it is, I think you did a lovely job.
That was certainly good and old. Perfect ending I think.
ReplyDeleteIt definitely has potential. You could continue it and expand on their relationship more rather than ending abruptly. I'd love to see more of this story if you would make more of it.
ReplyDeleteIt's good for fanfic.
ReplyDeleteFor Rarity to fall for Applejack -- without any change on Applejack's side, other than expressing interest -- seems out of character for Rarity. The story would have been more effective, had Rarity been talking earlier about how she wants someone in her life, someone unlike Prince Blueblood.
Saw this on fimfiction. Great then, great now. The ending is a perfectly done subversion.
ReplyDeleteTo the author (for those who haven't read the story yet, there are some spoilers in here);
ReplyDeleteWell this is the first Rarijack story I've read (I actually have many others bookmarked, I just haven't sat down and gotten around to reading them yet). I was pleasantly surprised by this. I actually never thought much of the Applejack-Rarity pairing. Though I understood that "Look Before You Sleep" had a lot to do with it , I still didn't see much there that could be used to build a relationship between the two.
This short story however effectively sells me on the pairing by actually thinking carefully about the reasons for it and introducing those reasons rather deftly. The reasons for why Rarity might feel romantically inclined towards AppleJack are presented as a part of her aesthetic appreciation of beauty making it very much a natural part of the character's personality. Then from there you go outwards to describe how Applejack, by her very nature, clashes with this aspect of Rarity's personality, what that says about Applejack, and how Rarity comes to appreciate Applejack's actual character. And in doing so the prose never lays it on thick.
There's little of why from Applejack's side, but arguably there doesn't have to be since the story is focused on Rarity's perspective in this case. Moreover, with a character like Applejack, sometimes it might be enough to say, 'just because'...or maybe I'm sold on the way you introduced Applejack's feelings for Rarity by using the Gala as a spring-board. AJ simply asks Rarity if she got to dance with her prince, and then offers to dance with her. It's such a perfect, simple romantic gesture, perfectly in suiting Apple Jack's character that it has me hooked.
As for the ending, well I'm divided on that one. I actually do enjoy ambiguous endings having soaked up enough modern literature to appreciate an ending that leaves the reader guessing and thinking. Also, one could easily make the case that the proper climax of the story isn't the beginning of AJ and Rarity's relationship, but rather Rarity's decision to give things a try. (Which does set it apart from most shipping fics.) On the other hand I'm just not sure if this ending works though I cannot properly describe why. I may need to think about it more.
@Hexplosion
ReplyDelete"The ending is a perfectly done subversion."
Since I'm still making my mind up about the ending I'd be interested in hearing more of your thoughts on this point. Why do you feel it's perfectly done subversion?
This has much potential for a longer story. Also lol'd at the image of Fluttershy downing shots like a grizzled alcoholic.
ReplyDelete@Adam Crocker
ReplyDeleteBecause it's a funny, clever twist ending that plays with the reader's expectations and doesn't go on longer than it needs to (provided you find the joke worth the read). Because that's part of what the story is. A joke.
If you want to talk about this as a literary critic, than I guess you could say it makes our beloved marshmallow equines more fallible and; therefore, relatable to us people. Keeping in mind that part of what makes the show popular in the first place is that the characters are able to interact with each other in creative ways that make them seem like more than mere cartoon characters based on an 80s toy line, Applejack's drunken confession to Rarity and following confusion in the morning makes it seem more creative and slightly realistic, an unexpected element similar that which surprised so many when they saw the FiM for the first time and got them hooked.
This existing just makes Friendship is Witchcraft funnier. Apparently things get really juicy in chapter 14!
ReplyDeleteOnly a couple complaints: I don't like the way the Mane Six's situation was layed out. At the end of S1E26 they were all happy, then this story tore that appart.
ReplyDeleteAnother complaint is the ending. The fact that Jack didn't remember ruined it for me. From what I can tell, that meant it WAS the drink speaking :( (Correct me if I'm wrong.)
Other then that, good read, but I feel the downsides overshadow it too much for me tastes. Oh well. Good writing, none-the-less.
I would like to see a part 2 just for kicks....anypony else?
ReplyDeleteI really liked it. It was pretty wholesome and not too emotional, which is a big cliche' in most shipping stories (and I've read tons os shipping) but I feel the ending left a cliffhanger, even if unintentional. maybe you could make a part two?
ReplyDeleteGood story you got here. Gotta say that Rarijack is growing on me. :) I feel that this needs a Part Two though...is one on the way?
ReplyDeleteI support the guy above, we need a second part...pleaseee XD
ReplyDeleteYet another here who agrees with the idea of a follow up to this story. The end isn't a cliffhanger, it just stops dead in it tracks. This story is clearly good enough to make us readers want more!
ReplyDeleteThis story could very-well be represented by a piece of lindt chocolate. It is delicious, and no matter how many times you have the same piece, it is still delicious. However, having one tiny piece of even the finest Chocolate can leave a bad taste in one's mouth. Author, please give us more Rarijack flavoured chocolate?
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