[Crossover] [Sci-Fi] [Adventure] [Comedy]
Author: Blue Legend
Description: The Warp is a blessing and a curse to the Imperium of Mankind: it is integral to all psychic powers and vital for faster-than-light travel. However, it also the home of Chaos, a cruel force that corrupts all it touches. In the early 42nd millennium, a group of rebels hijack a freighter to travel to the Clearing, a hidden place within the Warp that resists the Chaos taint. A team of elite Imperial warriors are sent after them, but they are unprepared for the strange world that awaits...
Friendship is Sanctioned (New Part 11!)
Friendship is Sanctioned (Alternate)
Additional Tags: Warhammer 40k, SPEHSS MAHRENS, heresy
57 kommentaari:
SPEHSS MAHRENS AWW YEAH!
VastaKustutaOPERATION STEEHL REIGN
VastaKustutaFOR THE EMPEROR!!
VastaKustutaDEATH TO THE FALSE EMPRESS!
VastaKustutaCAPS LOCK!
VastaKustutaCAPS LOCK MAKES MY COMMENT 20% COOLER!
VastaKustutaWH40K Crossover.
VastaKustutaAgain.
PD: First in unlock capz.
HEHEHE, EVERYTHING THAT'S BEEN COMMENTED HAS BEEN IN ALL CAPS, AWWW YEAH!
VastaKustutaNow to end that.
May read this, if only to gain some familiarity with the warhammer universe/lore.
And now that somebody broke the combo, I'm free to say that I feel obligated to read this now, to repent for giving in to that temptation.
VastaKustutaAutor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.
VastaKustutaSo long as there are METAL BAWKSES, I am content with this fic.
VastaKustutaWait, a 40k crossover...and no GRIMDARK tag?
VastaKustutaTHAT'S EXTRA HERETICAL!
I would read it but I like 40k for the models I don't really read into the story behind it and stuff
VastaKustutaI can't believe this was written...
VastaKustutaI don't know if I should BOTHER to check it out, or whether I should just leave it alone.
This was a crossover that I hoped would just stay in art.
40K? IN MY PONY?
VastaKustutaHERESY!
Warhammer 40k without Grimdark?
VastaKustutaThat's like porn without nudity.
Goddamn Ponyfags ruining everything.
VastaKustuta@mycutiemarkisagun
VastaKustutarofl!
Interesting how the picture comes from my deviantart account without any any link or credit to either me or the original sketch by the brilliant John Joseco who besides Lauren makes the next set of perfect Pony arts
VastaKustutaOriginal sketch is posted on JJ's tumblr after his livestream
this colored picture was posted 2 days after that in my personal deviantart account after i gave it the colors:http://ridingengenere.deviantart.com/art/Space-Marine-AJ-260645557
A Warhammer crossover with a comedy tag instead of a grimdark one?
VastaKustutaThis I got to read. xD
@Cedric Bale
VastaKustutaaltho its a difrent person than the artists who did the actual picture if you want to see more 40k ponies plz visit the deviantart page and comment there and ill make the herecy about them bloom
Alrighty then, it's definitely got my attention. But two chapters in and I'm still waiting for stuff to start happening, lol. The ending of chapter two promises that stuff'll start happening next chapter, hopefully.
VastaKustutawait, "Six Blessings" and Chaos and...
VastaKustutaso in Warhammer 40K, the grim darkness of the far future where there is only eternal slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods, the ultimate power of the universe...
...is friendship.
that is genius.
In the grim darkness of the 41st millennium, there is only...
VastaKustutaWait, no grimdark tag? Ok, let's go again.
In the cell-shaded pastel of the 41st millennium, there is only SPESS MARE-EENS!!!
Better? I think so. Now to read!
Read the first chapter, Haven't decided how I feel about the story yet. The first chapter seemed a bit rushed. Also I'd like to point out that over 40,000 years the constellations above earth will look nothing like they do now. In only 1000 years the the stars Making up the 'Big Dipper' will have moved such that it will look more like a frying pan than a ladle.
VastaKustutaTo Jake Terra:
VastaKustutaSorry, the picture isn't what drew me here. If you're really concerned that your coloring of JJ's art is being used here, you can email Sethisto or someone else who works on this site (email addresses found on this page) and ask them to remove it.
@Demios
VastaKustutaಠ_ಠ
Hater detected.
Firing Orbital Friendship Canon.
W40K with no Grimdark tag.. With Comedy tag... O_o
VastaKustuta@mycutiemarkisagun
VastaKustutaFully clothed porn is hawt.
Have read, will ruminate. Have some well meaning, yet slightly sharpened criticism:
VastaKustutaFirstly, I know enough of WH40K universe to know the terms and references (warp, astropath, immaterium) but more important than knowing those is knowing just what is going on. If it weren't for the description, I'd have no idea whose on the freighter or why. A few key lines of simple
exposition early on would really help the reader make sense of why the things are going on as they are.
Secondly, the dialogue felt a little forced and unnatural. Try reading it out as if you were doing so aloud, and keep in mind the characters personalities (for both settings of the story thus far). Nothing needs a drastic change, just a bit of smooth edging really.
I have to agree with Zephyrion, it feels rushed a bit.
In my own opinion (and I'm not saying I'm right at all) the two halves of the story didn't seem well jointed. That said, obviously they're not going to mesh perfectly ordinarily, but this was like you could have axed either side entirely and only brought in the reference to crossover at the end with a line or two (which is sort of what you did).
With some honest work on your part, this will be a story I'd keep my eyes open for updates of. I do wonder though, if it isn't actually a grimdark story, and you've simply not tagged it as such because this first chapter isn't? Or are you going to be grim free for the course of it?
...but humans in Equestria? Don't know if I want that...
So far, the fic looks...okay. I'm sure it'll pick up once we go along, but for now, it's just okay.
VastaKustutaOh, the line about full scale invasion is very clever and it's cringe brilliant foreshadowing like that this chapter needed a bit more of to knit the two halves together.
VastaKustuta@Jelfes
VastaKustutaUuummmmmmm... reading a my little pony fanfiction crossover is NOT the way to get familiar with 40k universe/lore. I haven't read this yet, but I highly doubt he could do the whole damn thing justice. Its freaking huge.
Go read a codex online or something.
OT: this looks interesting. I take it the Clearing is Equestria. I actually like that idea in a way.
In the chaos of the Warp, there is a soft, nuggety pony center.
Good so far but I demand MOAR!
VastaKustutaMY LITTLE PONY WARHAMMER40K?!?!?
VastaKustutaINB4 HORUS/LUNA HERASY!
This is of my taste - WH40k/MLP crossover fan fic, but not grimdark - awesome. I find it well written too.
VastaKustutaRD + space marine terminator armour + sonic rainboom = best soldier ever
VastaKustutaLet's see ... Magic-8 Ball, will Discord turn out to be an agent of Chaos?
VastaKustuta*shake shake*
"Almost Certainly."
Ok, I'll admit, when I first saw this and the tags attached to it I said, "nope!" I usually don't find that sci-fi crossovers fit in very well with Equestria. But after passing it up three times in a row, I finally gave in. That pic just looked too badass.
VastaKustutaAnyways, GREAT STORY! It's well-written, has very few (if any) grammatical mistakes, and keeps the plot moving without rushing it too much. So far, the plot is believable, although still a bit of a stretch for me. Great job overall!
I can just imagine what'll happen when those space marines get a load of Equestria's magical inhabitants... and Pinkie's parties!!
And Mr. Floats was just sheer genius!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
o.O And thus Trevor's prayers were answered... A Warhammer 40k crossover... And... Wait a second...
VastaKustutaWHAT IS THIS RUMPUS?! No Grimdark tag?!
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
A 40K that ISN'T Grimdark?! This has caught the attention of an Inquisitor!
VastaKustutaWH40K.... without grimdark.... with comedy?
VastaKustutaNot sure if that computes. But am watching with interest.
METAL BAWKSES.
VastaKustutaNo Orks? I'll be watching for chapter three
VastaKustutaOh god this is awesome. Not to mention it's bucking HILARIOUS.
VastaKustutaSeriously, mixing ponies and WH40k is the greatest idea ever. Not because both of these things are awesome, but the two combined create something extremely silly!
An interesting story so far. Looking forward to more.
VastaKustutaThank you all for your comments. I'm really encouraged by the response I'm seeing.
VastaKustuta@Zephyrion
Good point on the constellations. I've made a small revision in that passage to correct that.
@ambion
You've brought up some valid criticisms, and I'll keep them in mind. Also, I can confirm that the story will remain non-grimdark.
Deathwatch on Equestria? Whoa man, this is going to be interesting.
VastaKustutaAs long as the enemies of teh Emprah still draw breath I shall continue to read this awesome fanfic.Great job btw
VastaKustutaHoping more is still coming!
VastaKustutaI couldn't stop laughing at the idea of any imperial forces landing in Equestria because of the whole space Nazi approach they have to xenos and different anything
VastaKustutathe servo skull being abducted by pinky was what really sold me on continuing to read this
2 thumbs up and the Inquisition demands you make more =)
As far as it goes so far, not entirely sure if want, but more want than unwant. Mr. Floats needs to be drawn, mustache, hat and all. Interest is growing, despite my brain being snagged on this being a WH40K =/= Grimdark
VastaKustutaI can't help but imagine a bunch of space marines and technicians piling up on a view screen at some point, all going "...what-the-emperor?" Looking forward to some considerable lols at their reactions. Bonus points if the hardass marine becomes a brony.
Why hasn't this updated yet?
VastaKustutaTEN THOUSAND YEARS LATER:
VastaKustutaHey, stuff's happening! :D
Just wanted you to know, this story still has fans. Keep at it!
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