Author: Mr. Boltitude
Description: Nyx has been having horrible nightmares. A tall faceless ponyFandom Crisis! Part 1
stalks her in her dreams. Then one morning, a crazy stallion in a blue
box crashes into the library saying he has a solution. Little does
anypony know her dreams are terribly real, and will lead to an
adventure unlike any other.
Fandom Crisis! Part 2
Fandom Crisis! Part 3
Fandom Crisis! Part 4
Fandom Crisis! Part 5
Fandom Crisis! Part 6 (New!)
Additional Tags: Wasteland, Nightmares, Muffins, TARDIS, multiverse
195 kommentaari:
This story is so full of what that you are awarded one Wut from the Republic of Pinchy.
VastaKustutaOh boy... I can see people complaining already
VastaKustutaThis I gotta ead!
VastaKustutaWhat is this I don't even
VastaKustutaNot sure if want..
VastaKustutaBut still will ead.
Nyx, as in Past Sins Nyx...?
VastaKustutaOh this better be a good story if it has probably the best OC Pony ever created in it.
Totally going to ead it. I'm sorry I couldn't resist. In all seriousness though, it does sound interesting.
VastaKustutaIs this approved by Pen Stroke? O.o I don't want to read it if it's going to just be a random off-shoot from past sins
VastaKustutaI have a feeling this won't be something I'll enjoy, but I must comment on the fact that this is probably the biggest mashup of tags I have seen.
VastaKustutanyx, slendermare and the doctor? this i GOTTA read
VastaKustutaI got to read this.
VastaKustutaRead it. I rather enjoyed it, but I do hope this won't be considered an actual part of the Past Sins continuity. The Doctor and Slendermane add too many complications to my concept of Pen Stroke's world.
VastaKustutaIf it IS Past Sins "canon" though, I'll adjust.
What is this I don't even...
VastaKustutaI'll be reading this, if only for purely moar Nyx, but not sure if do want or not right now.
I'll start reading it but props to ya on doing a story on a character surrounded by controversy.
VastaKustutaLOL WUT??????
VastaKustutaAhhh, I'll read this anyway...
This had BETTER have had permission from PenStroke! If so, AWESOME! If not, then SHAME ON YOU, BAD SIR/MADAM! TREVOR WILL MAKE SURE TO LECTURE YOU IN THE ROYAL CANTERLOT SPEAKING VOICE IN FRONT OF EVERYPONY!
VastaKustuta... IF you didn't get permission. If you did, then Excellence! Gotta read!
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
This needs Slendermane and Past Sins tags. Other than that, TALLYHO!
VastaKustutascampers off to read
LoL, I see massive Past Sins/Slenderman reference. Also I think I've seen this image on EqD lately.
VastaKustutaI loved Past Sins and I use to say it's the most loved/hated fic of the most loved/hated fandom.
VastaKustutaI can picture the neigh sayers already. Yes, feed me your rage >:)
I will take a look at it.
Crisis on Infinate Equestriai?
VastaKustutaMan, this is like...an orgy of fanon.
VastaKustutaAnd I'm loving every second of it. XD
Lookin' forward to more!
Amusing.
VastaKustutaThe Author here. Yes yes, don't worry, I got Pen Stroke's permission to use Nyx.
VastaKustutaDo i need to have read Past Sins to understand this?
VastaKustuta@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaYou got his permission first? THE POTENTIAL AWESOME HAS BEEN DOUBLED!
Well done, I look forward to future updates.
VastaKustuta@TheMunkis
VastaKustutaNo, but it wouldn't hurt.
Here's hoping Doctor Whooves will take Nyx to the future to see LittlePip (and Blackjack of course), though I'm guessing that wont happen.
VastaKustuta@TimeForSP
VastaKustutayou foal! Then fandom cannot handle that much awesome in a single fic!:P
@TimeForSP
VastaKustutaOh, on that note, and this might count as spoilers, can anypony help me get a hold of Kkat?
@TimeForSP
VastaKustutaActually, the tag "Wasteland" makes me fairly certain this fic will be taking a trip to the Equestrian Wasteland (not to mention that it's not much of a "Fandom Crisis" story if it doesn't touch on the most popular fic in the fandom).
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaO_o
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaYour best bet for catching Kkat is in the Google Docs chat right after a chapter of FO:E is published; barring that, dropping a line on the new FO:E comment page may work. However, seeing as there are twenty-plus spinoffs of Fallout: Equestria, you may be able to just assume you have permission to use it.
Krizak: The setting's open for use. The characters though... best ask for permission.
VastaKustutaI won't do a specific crossover unless I have the original author's permission.
VastaKustutaNyx, the Doctor, and our tall friend...
VastaKustutaSo begins the Grand Crossover Era.
Okay. I have to admit; not bad. I have absolutely no clue what Slenderpony is, except the human version is what Endermen in Minecraft is based on. I have never been into Doctor Who either, so I am missing almost all the references to that too. I hope it'll be okay with just the Past Sins background :3
VastaKustutaMother of god. A crossover... For crossovers. Seeing as crossovers are my favorite genre of fics, I'd best keep my eye on this.
VastaKustutaAlso, to the people who speculate that this might include Fo:E;
VastaKustutaIt can't.
Remember that Nyx found the Library in her dream? If I remember correctly, it was not in any ruined town. Ergo, it can't be the Fo:E wasteland, since that still has Ponyville standing.
Not to mention that Fo:E is set 200 years in the future; not 10000.
Yay Nyx!
VastaKustutaI love Nyx but i'm not sure if I should be exited or scared witless. Oh well, Geronimo!
VastaKustutaDifferent author to past sins
VastaKustutaI dont like it when other people use other people#s OC's
I have read, and I am intrigued. Looking forward to more!
VastaKustutaThe premise has me deeply intrigued. However, I'm going to wait for more parts before I start reading, I always prefer to let the story build itself up a bit before I read it.
VastaKustutaOoh, this has promise...my favorite OC pony with my favorite fanon pony. This may just be the crossover of all crossovers! I eagerly await more!
VastaKustutaI don't think its a spoiler but im going to warn anyway.
VastaKustutaMeep invasion? Is that a Phineas and Ferb reference or is there another group of aliens with that name I don't know about?
Otherwise I like the story. Should probably read Past Sins though.
@The Jack:
VastaKustutaNo offense, but use your brain. The Doctor said that they were heading to the MOST peaceful/best part of Equestria's (future) history. Does the wasteland SOUND like the most peaceful part of its history? One should say not! The TARDIS simply messed up... BIG surprise! (Though one DOES have to agree about the missing tree, no houses, ect.)
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
This is insufficiently complete! Write more!
VastaKustutaDoctor whooves? I gotta ead! Lol im a little late for that
VastaKustuta@Fanozelda9
VastaKustutaThere was a race of aliens called the Meeps in the Doctor Who comics. Just a little reference I threw in for any hardcore whovians who stumbled across the story.
Crossover or a crossover of a crossover? Dear. Sweet. Celestia. We've crossed the streams!!! Run!!!!!!
VastaKustutaNyx fic by different author?
VastaKustutaMy interest is piqued.
*reads*
This was very interesting, looking forward to future updates.
VastaKustutaI don't know about reading this. Past Sins was amazing, and had an ending that tied up all loose ends. Nyx EARNED her happy ending. I wanted to see more of her, but accepted that any new media involving her would defeat the purpose of her ending.
VastaKustutaBut seeing a crossover of the most popular fics does sound interesting. I will be watching this fic closely.
I can see this becoming a mix and match or everything and anything it can. Some Silent Ponyville in there too.
VastaKustutaYo dog, I heard you like crossovers so I put crossovers in your crossover so you can crossover while you crossover.
VastaKustutaIf this somehow included FO:E, I would have no CHOICE but to read it. But since it might not, I'm going to have to choose to read it.
VastaKustuta... *clicks the link*
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaSolaris90 here.
Oh my gosh, this sound like the most awesome fic idea ever! Past Sins was incredible, most things I've read with Slendermane and Doctor Whoof are incredible, so more than likely THIS will be incredible!
Hey, any chance you might work in references to other fics? As someone who's fics share several characters and events with It's a Dangerous Business, Going Out Your Door, I'm more than happy to allow other writers to use whatever stuff they want from my stories. They're Knights of Equestria and Equestrian Knights, if you're interested. :)
Hmmm... Nyx, Slendermane, AND Doctor Whoof. It all sounds awesome, but there's A LOT of ways for this to go wrong here. Not sure if want, but I'm willing to give it a chance.
VastaKustuta[Vega] YES! YES! [/Vega]
VastaKustutaA fandom crossover is one of 3 things I desperately wanted out of this fandom that didn't exist yet!
Here's hoping this turns into a straight rip on "Sliders" and as many alternate "fandom" versions of Equestria get visited as possible.
Um....HELLO PEOPLE.
VastaKustutaYou DO realize that we're talking FANFICTION here? As in, FICTION DONE WITHOUT THE PERMISSION OF THE CREATORS?
It never fails to amaze me how people seem to think that someone fanfiction deserves to do things with full permission and blessing when the majority of fanfiction goes and fails to do just that.
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaKkat doesn't mind if parts of Fallout: Equestria are used in other fan works. She says to pretty much everyone who asks permission that she's fine with it, the only downsides are that she herself shall not be reading them until she has finished her story, and all side fics are non-canon to her story (which in my perspective eliminates a lot of potential headaches all-round).
Still, if you want to drop a line to her through the comments (she does read the comments, all of them) and tell her what you're up to then by all means do, it won't hurt to.
That aside, I'm gonna read this as soon as I've reduced the amount of stories in my "ongoing" list. Until then, this'll sit in my "Must Reads" folder
Bahaha, this was awesome XD. Can't wait for more installments.
VastaKustuta@Melodia
VastaKustutaYes but this is a community. And we want harmony. Not butthurt.
Also, other than Nyx which is a fan created character, everything else is up for grabs that's in this story.
Part of me hopes you somehow get Littlepip into this story... Along with Batmane and Pinkiepool!
VastaKustuta@The Jack
VastaKustutaIf you read the tags, multiverse is one of them... Therefore it might end up being involved.
Welp. I read the first chapter and so far I have no problem with it. Rather enjoyable even. So please, do go ahead and continue. I'll be interested to see where it goes.
VastaKustutaOne thing though... I don't remember Nyx ever calling Twilight "Momma" in Past Sins. Did she ever do that? That was a wee bit jarring.
What I can't help but notice is how in the dark the Doctor, Nyx and Twilight are about certain important facts; he doesn't know who or what Nyx is, Nyx has no idea that her friend Dinky and her mom travel with a madcolt in a box and Twilight got blindsided by Derpy's casual comment about her marital status. That means that the only the ponies who knew all the facts at the start of the chapter were Derpy and Dinky!! Also, I gotta know who was trying to stuff Spike's brain in the giant robot scorpion.
VastaKustutaPast Sins?
VastaKustutaDoctor Whooves?
Slendermane/Slenderpony?
Possible Fo:E reference?
Potentially doubled FUN?
So much wat.
still might ead though, sorry Violet Droplet, couldn't resist.
Is this fanfic planned out, or being written on the fly? With an idea as crazy as "stuff a ton of crossovers into one story", I wouldn't mind if it were being written without any planning, lol. But hopefully there is at least a centralized plot that's already figured out.
VastaKustutaO.o
VastaKustutaFandom reference spam may be just about the best thing ever.
I like companion Derpy. It excuses almost any unusual thing she might do in canon. And she appears at ease with knowing things she shouldn't. And Dinky the half-timelord being friends with an alicorn? Oh god yes.
VastaKustutaOkay, just finished reading the first chapter, and it's actually pretty decent. I also noticed a Silent Ponyville reference, and what I'm assuming is a Fallout: Equestria reference. It's like a mashed-up shared universe of all the most popular fanfics. Sneak in a reference to "It's a Dangerous Business, Going Out Your Door" and you'll be golden.
VastaKustuta@dinodude0091 And somepony with broken wings, and someponyelse overcome with the resulting Nightingale effect.
VastaKustutaRead this chapter. Sp far it feels very promising with what you're doing.
VastaKustutaWould be nice if you could stare what fanfic crossovers you are working on for this story seeing as how I know nothing about Doctor Whoof and Slendermare.
Where does this tie in to the other fanfics of this fandom? I really want to know. If someone tells me, will the author please state so on this story post?
Please continue this story. I definitely want to read more of this and also for the various fanfic references I may have seen/not known yet...
@AlanJCastonguay
VastaKustutaNope.avi
"RD has Balsa-wood wings" fics (and most likely any other fic that features somepony with broken wings as the central element) have been officially outright banned by EqDaily ever since Rainbow Dash pulled off the "Tactical Rain-nuke" on that Old Barn in "Lesson Zero", remember? Besides, "Misery" scared the ever-loving crap out of me when it got to the part with the bi-polar-ism.
@dinodude0091 Eyyyup.gif - I refuse to accept RD impacting the ground during the rainnuke, and it was a controlled stunt regardless. Angels with slate gray wings.
VastaKustutaSounds doomed to fail, but...IT CAPTURES MY INTEREST.
VastaKustutaSlenderman. Enough said. http://www.youtube.com/user/MarbleHornets
VastaKustutaI don't see what all the fuss is about - this story's off to a great start. If you're worried about the memes taking away from the story, don't be. The pre readers on this site are good; you don't see really bad stories here.
VastaKustutaAutor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.
VastaKustuta@StoicI changed my mind, you likely can get a hold of kkat, besides I doubt you have much need for permission since rowing about your OC's being in other's fictions is like hypocritical, especially since characters in the fanfiction are from the show the fanfic is derived from and used without permission from license and copyright holders...so have fun with that. Love you're having pen stroke lend you a hand he is a true writer. Even developed a story for his pony character..
VastaKustutaon with your story,
I look forward to reading all about it in future chapters, please throw in a reference to "Through the Eyes of Another Pony" by Cardsoflafter. That is, if you wouldn't mind as the story itself is a paradox of self insert oc pony human into Equesria, bt it written with such hubris it is awesome.
Well I love you guy so later...
book marked
So far so good, I've wanted to do a Pony multiverse (or Ponyverse if you will) story but I've got my own on going story to work on.
VastaKustutaJust finished reading this chapter. While I haven't seen enough of the story to cast judgement on it yet, I am intrigued. The concept itself has so much potential, and a huge potential to fail. From what I've read so far, you can likely pull it off. You know how to write the characters and you are apparently deeply familiar with their backgrounds, so no worries about them going terribly OOC. I don't recall seeing any typos, and your writing style is such that I never got jarred from watching the scenes unfold in my mind's eye. Not meaning to sound pretentious or anything (as I've never written any fanfic), but I get the feeling that this here fic's gonna be good. I think I know just where you're going with this (everywhere), but I have no idea how you'll get there.
VastaKustuta@Stoic:
Bring in Through the Eyes of Another Pony? I'm trying to imagine Firewall's reaction to meeting Nyx, or the Doctor's reaction to Firewall. If we could get Lafter himself to help...8D What would it be like to read about firewall from a non-first-person perspective? Could Lafter's particular brand of awesome even translate into this multiverse?
Another thought: will the characters in this fic be sliding into different timelines/continuities when they cross into other fics, or are they all in the same timeline and universe? Could PastSins!Twilight run into Night'sFavoriteChild Twilight or meet with a Twilight that never knew Nyx at all? What would this alternate Twilight think of her otherself's relationship with Nyx? Would she be weirded out? Curious? Intrigued? Jelly?
While I'm on the subject of AU's, any chance of us running into those charming colts from On a Cross and an Arrow?
I can't wait until we start seeing fanart of this...all of my favorite fanfics, OC's, background ponies, and members of the Mane6... My head might just aspload from the awesome!
I frikkin love it when a fic gets me theorycrafting. Are you excited? 'Cause I'm excited! I've never been so excited except for those times Past Sins updated, but what could beat that?
Pardon me, I tend to get a bit carried away when I find an idea I like. :3
@autobotgodzilla Not bad Boltitude. Already off to an excellent start. Considering since I've already read a majority of the fiction available on EQD I figured it was only a matter of time before someone flipped out a crossover crossover fic, and I'm glad to see that (at least from the start) it's written by someone that can curtail Sturgeon's Law.
VastaKustuta@Stormcaller "It would be bad… Try to imagine all fiction as you know it stopping instantaneously and every author in your fandom exploding at the speed of light." (sorry, couldn't resist XD)
Also, for the love of Celestia, can somepony explain to me what 'ead' means?
Lets see, its only chapter 1 and we've already got references to Past Sins, Dr Whooves, and the Slederpony. Can't wait to see who gets added in next.
VastaKustutaOoh this looks like fun! More please ^^
VastaKustutaOr meeting Two Ships That Pass In The Night's Twilight..
VastaKustutaDid that person got the permission for using Nyx ?
VastaKustuta@Nova25
VastaKustutaYes they did, Nova. Yu're a little late to the party XP
Interesting! Can't wait to see more.
VastaKustutaIt's like "League of Extraordinary Bronies!"
@DPV111
VastaKustutaHuh... what does this is supposed to mean ?
All I did is ask a simple direct question, to get a simple answer... which I got.
So... all is good. ...?
@Nova25
VastaKustuta"Late to the party" is an expression that usually refers to a topic being brought up that had already been addressed previously.
It was intended as a friendly jibe and not meant to be an insult.
@DPV111
VastaKustutaI didn't take it has an insult ? I just wondered what this meant, in this situation.
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>"Nothing, Dinky; Daddy's just trying to fix the TARDIS," Derpy answered
-~Yay~ Dinky and Ditzy. :) ...oh, and The Doctor.
>She found the nearest seat with a harness and buckled up.
-That filly learns fast. ;)
>She decided stopped and take a water break.
-''to stop'', maybe ?
>"Hello, Mr. Doctor," Nyx said cheerfully, yet confused
-''cheerfully, yet confused'', that sums up pretty well the reaction of most people who encounter The Doctor. ;)
>"She's my adopted daughter."
-Adopted ?!
Maybe on a ''legal'' point of view, but genetically speaking she's rightfully Twilight's daughter... You know, she was made using HER *blood*, and then bits of Luna/Nightmare's magic.
I would think that Twilight, of all ponies, would always say ''her daughter'' rather than anything else.
> "Yep! Nothing brings two ponies together like stopping a Meep invasion," she said.
-Meep ? ...huh ? Wait, what does this reference ?
The marshmallow meeps (or it is peeps) ? That one alien who said ''meep'' in 'Phineas and Ferb' ?
>but if she needed a scarf of sunglasses, she was ready.
-Wait ? A ''scarf of sunglasses''... ''of'' like, MADE of sunglasses ?
Well, that's one way to recycle your old sunglasses, I guess ?
> I nearly had my brain put in a giant robot scorpio
-Remembers me the robot scorpions of the 'Old World Blues' expansion of F:New Vegas.
>"Outside, you'll find yourself ten thousand years in the future, Equestria's golden age.
>Outside the TARDIS was a wasteland.
-You know... The Doctor's success rate with his space-time travels could easily be compared to Twilight's success rate with new/experimental spells, at this point.
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Well, light but still interesting story so far. Ditzy and Dinky are there together, big bonus points... Nyx is there, well, Nyx is good. And, with Twilight super-magic and The Doctor sonic screwdriver, nothing can stop them ! ...for too long, anyway.
@Nova25
VastaKustutaWhoops! That was supposed to be scarf OR sunglasses. Thanks for pointing that out, the mistake has been fixed.
> Whoops! That was supposed to be scarf OR sunglasses. Thanks for pointing that out, the mistake has been fixed.
VastaKustutaNOOOO! I truly enjoyed that Nyx has packed sufficiently to allow for the potential for bringing a "scarf of sunglasses" into existence!
To be perfectly honest, I was hoping for more randomness but this good too. Can't wait to read more!
VastaKustutaHow about a 'Vinyl Scratch Tapes' reference or two? That's fanon enough to warrant mention, right?
this was a very interesting read, can't wait for the next chapter :)
VastaKustutawow, everything is going wrong and it is just the second chapter
VastaKustutaSorry chapter two took so long. I'm going to try to update at least weekly, but no promises.
VastaKustutaOh my God he's on the TARDIS.
VastaKustutaDerpy, quick! Give him twenty bits and don't wife in the club!
@Sun Ray
VastaKustutaIt's fan fiction, none of it's canon.
Just read Chapter 2. "What the fuck just happened?" was my exact reaction to the Sugarcube Corner scene.
VastaKustutaUm... yikes. someone's really loosened the barriers between universes for the TARDIS to slip into a R63 universe so easily.
VastaKustuta....Okay, who tied the Strings in knots this time?! *goes off to untangle them, snarling*
VastaKustutaI don't always read Incomplete fanfction, but when I do, it's because of Derpy and Nyx.
VastaKustutaWHY CAN'T I HOLD ALL THESE CROSSOVERS?
VastaKustutaThis is just getting better and better.
Oh, also (y u no edit button?), replaces Princess Luna? ... What happens to Princess Luna that she needs replacing? o_o
VastaKustutaSPOILERS AHEAD
VastaKustutaSo...which R63 'verse did we just cross into? I'd initially hoped for On a Cross and an Arrow, but R63!Spike's name in that one was Spines (although I think Barb is a far superior name).
At least Nyx being sedated probably means the poor thing will finally get some rest.
Anyhow, what in the hay would make Nyx need to replace Luna? Isn't Luna an ageless alicorn princess? Only thing I can think of right now (aside from canterlot getting nuked by a necrotic pink cloud) is that Luna went mad again and had to be banished to The MOOOOOOOOOOONA again.
Re: Pinkie Pie's scene:
The crap just happened? What is this a crossover with? Should Dinky trust this Pinkie Pie over whatever other Pinkie Pies or Rainbow Dashes she meets and smash them with a hammer?
Reading this chapter was a bit like drinking a Pan-Galactic Gargle Blaster (getting one's brain smashed by a lemon wrapped around a gold brick). Can't wait for the next installment!
Haha! The number of Derpy's daughters has been doubled! I can very much work Dinky's new sister into this fic (possible spoiler).
VastaKustutaWell, it's not completely the Cross and Arrow universe; that's because it's got one of Starscream's clones in it!!! (My guess is that the embittered mailstallion is going to channel Fanzone or something.)
VastaKustutaIs it odd that the only thing I thought during this chapter is how goddamn adorable it would be if Nyx started calling Dusk "daddy"?
VastaKustutaFirst word in description is Nyx.
VastaKustutaCue the neverending torrent of butthurt.
Nyx, Slendermane, The Doctor, the R63-verse, Transformares? Fillies and gentlecolts, this here is EVERYTHING the fandom has created put into one story...
VastaKustuta...and it WORKS!
Also, Nyx calling Dusk "Daddy". Perfection would be achieved.
Impressive. I've read a lot of pony fics in my time, and this is the first time one has caused me to actually stop reading, stare blankly for a few seconds, and actually say aloud "What."
VastaKustuta@Nine
VastaKustutaIs that because you came to an interesting plot point, or was something poorly written>
My reaction to the end of chapter 3: wut. O_o Dear heavens, this just got 300% more random.
VastaKustutaNoticed a few tropes, made page.
VastaKustutahttp://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Fanfic/FandomCrisis
So rainbow Blitz just solos Slipstream while everyone else goes back to the party?
VastaKustutaI mean COME ON. We all saw that Screw Attack death match.
Slipstream's not Starscream.
VastaKustutaSlipstream understands the concept of subtlety for one.
Ohgosh, now there's transformers XD
VastaKustutaThe only thing that could make this even more amazing is if Megatron and Pinkie started singing together. :P
@Chaos Knux
VastaKustutaWow! Thanks.
Currently imagining Nyx meeting the Genderbent Luna.
VastaKustutaNyx: Hi! I'm the reincarnation of the evil persona you wore a thousand years ago when trying to set up eternal night, but I'm a little filly!
R63!Luna: ?!?
>Transformers
VastaKustuta>all of my wut
I feel like this should've lost me, but instead I want to read more... maybe I should see a doctor?
Okay quick update. Part 4 may take a while. I'm writing these out of order now, and Thanksgiving is coming up so I'll be busy.
VastaKustuta@TheMunkis
VastaKustutaNo, but read it at some point anyway. It reads like a pro novel instead of a fanfic, and I would be absolutely ecstatic if Past Sins ended up as a series-end movie.
Ever type up a long-ass post, and then some error makes you need to come back, and the thing is irrecoverably erased? Yeah. Just happened to me.
VastaKustutaShort version: I'm enthralled, can't wait to see more whenever it comes.
=I turn into a dick=
If you decide to jump to some random parallel plane to escape something, I gotcha covered with the roleplay group of which I'm Democratically-Selected-High-Overlord.
http://www.tinyurl.com/ponyrpbiographies
It's definitely AU because we have unacceptable things in our backgrounds. (Celestia's son being Twilight's husband and father of two kids, a forgotten foalhood friend of RD, royal assassins, a blatant Nyx ripoff, etc.)
So yeah, not saying I want it to happen, just saying the option is there if **you** want it.
Hey, when is chapter 4 coming out? did you give up on the project or something? too bad. i liked it.
VastaKustuta@ZachZRipper
VastaKustutaI'm almost done with part 4. Just hang on a little bit longer.
ok, i can't wait! keep up the great work!
VastaKustutaArgh! Wow, I'm so conflicted. I worship at the altar of Past Sins and Nyx, but I think Dr. Whooves is a blight upon our fandom. I have no idea if I'm going to love this story or hate it -- or both. Guess I'll have to dive in and find out.
VastaKustutaYay! Chapter 4!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH autobotgodzilla!!!
VastaKustutaJust like the Doctor hates pears, I HATE cliffhangers.
VastaKustutaWhen I started reading this I was expecting it to be some kind of horrible lamooning thing. I was pleasantly suprised at how well it all fits together, even if the cast of characters is... electric, to say the least.
VastaKustutaI guess it probably hels that I already liked most of the various pieces of fandom you threw in there but its been a good story so far, I've enjoyed it a lot.
hey! Mr. Boltitude! yes! you!
VastaKustutayou awesome! 8D
@Hawkeye92
VastaKustutaWhat's a lamoon and why is it horrible?
Thinking he meant lampoon
VastaKustutaLittle bit surprised that no one's commented on the stinger at the end of the chapter.
VastaKustutaGive it time. I haven't read it yet.
VastaKustutaOk...
VastaKustutaIf you were referring to this:
""Next Chapter: An in-depth analysis of the administrative policies of the Cloudsdale Weather Facility.""
And it means what I think it does...
I will kill you.
By which I mean I will 1 star you.
To put that in perspective I have you 5 starred right now.
(Stick to stories on EqD, mmmkay?)
I'm guessing it's hinting at The Rainbow Factory?
VastaKustutaNever read it, barely even know about it. Is it Like Cupcakes and SAM?
@Chaos Knux
VastaKustutaIt's loosely based on the awesome song of the same name.
Basically it's Soylent Green with Rainbows and Pegasi instead of Food and Poor People.
It's not as graphic as Cupcakes nor as depraved as Sweet Apple Massacre.
Only OCs are killed in fic, although it can be assumed that Scootaloo gets killed after.
Scootaloo is the Protagonist and Rainbow Dash is the antagonist.
Oops did that spoil it? IDGAF.
@Magical Trevor
VastaKustutaI realize this has already been settled, but why should the writer get permission to use Nyx? It's not like PenStroke asked permission to use the MLP:FiM characters in HIS story.
@CanterEdlund
VastaKustutaIt's just the polite thing to do. Also, it's in the EqD rules.
Speculation:
VastaKustutaDinky and Nyx escaping from Cupcakes' Pinkemina, manage a dimension jump and find themselves outside Fluttershy's cottage. They knock on the door "fluttershy, help us, we need to hide." "Of course girls, come inside" -evil smile-
-next scene- Nyx and Dinly are tied up with, uh... anti-magic rope and are about to be [fed to a bear/sacrificed to a demon god/thrown on the bunny fire]. (because this is the Friendship is Witchcraft version of Fluttershy)
Slendermane appears behind the pegasus and Nyx is really concerned. But instead he 'communicates' something along the lines of "excellent work my dear, the Dark Ones will be pleased. now gimme some sugar." FiW Fluttershy responds in a way that's somehow horrifying. But then Pinkemina arrives on the scence and is immediately jealous of both situations she sees happening (because Pinkie-shy shipping is really cute, but what if they were BOTH -evil-?) The resulting confusion allows Nyx and Dinky to escape. They find FiW Pinkie Pie and get her to use her portal song to reach the next fan-fic world. and possibly recruit robot sweetie belle along the way?
well... now I just HAVE to wait for chapter five.
VastaKustutaWill their be any references to My Little Dashie?
VastaKustuta@Kevin
VastaKustutaIt's worth considering.
I like the premise and the characters are portrayed in an OK way, but The pacing is much too rushed in my opinion. In action scenes, this can be ok, but from my point of view, you don't seem to give the topics that are being discussed enough time to develop in a realistic fashion, thus creating some moments where, even though there hasn't been a true OOC moment, it has come pretty close. Understandably, in action intense cases, this isn't always possible, but in times where the pace is or can be slow, I recommend that you should take the time to develop the scene and emotions more, instead of briefly summarizing everything that isn't supposed to be a brief summary and forcing the characters to come in, say a line or two that states what they are going to do, then leaving. I hope you take my advice into consideration and use it to fulfill the potential that this fanfiction has to offer. Your plot is very good and matches the Doctor Who(oves)-esque style that you have set it up with and that can only improve with the improvement of writing quality. I hope that you continue to keep doing the things you are doing right and improve upon the areas that you are not strong in. If I am not being very clear, then please ask me to elaborate and I will do my best to get my point across with proper examples. Thank you for writing this fanfiction and I hope that it grows from a diamond in the rough to a brilliant star!
VastaKustuta@Cedric Bale Maybe you should see The Doctor..... lol.
VastaKustuta@GodBlogger247
VastaKustutaHey, thanks for the feedback! I think what I'm going to do is get the story done, then go back and do some rewrites to adress any problems with it. And yes, examples would be lovely. Anything to make it the best story it can be.
@autobotgodzilla Ok. I'll scrounge up some examples soon. Also, the rewriting it later thing might be a good idea, since if you go back now it might cause the story to be derailed in an unexpected fashion. At any rate, finishing it first will allow your plot to be finished and established so any improvements can be easily checked to see if they have any unexpected impact on the story or not. So, keep up the good plot and I will be back with those examples sometime before the end of..... next year. I may get distracted. ^-^;
VastaKustutaSorry it's taking so long. The holidays were rough and I haven't really been able to get back into the rhythm of writing. I promise it's nowhere near dead.
VastaKustuta@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaMind if I lend you some ideas you could use?
@Eddmario
VastaKustutaLet's hear 'em
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaMaybe throw in a reference or two to some more Doctor Who episodes?
Also, when do you think we'll see the next chapter(s)?
@Eddmario
VastaKustuta1. Maybe, but probably not. This story is meant as my love letter to Friendship is Magic and the fanbase surrounding it, not to Doctor Who. I put Doctor Whooves in it because he's a big part of the fandom. Mind you, I cheated a bit putting in a Transformer, but hey, I saw some cool fanart.
2. Soon, hopefully. I'm working on it, don't worry.
HAVE ALL MY WUT'S. HAVE THEM ALL.
VastaKustutaHOLY S***! Thats a majority of my headcanon right there! All of fiction existing on different dimensional planes, matter-resistant barriers, transversing them with modified vortex manipulators!
VastaKustutaAlthough my layout concerns dimensional zones, different for humans and ponies, and various subdimensions radiating out from a base dimension, aka fanfics and fanon radiating from the original show. In my mind, the VMs can jump between subdimensions, but the barriers between dimensional zones are too strong and require a TARDIS.
All in all, spooooky.... One of the reasons I liked this fic so much is because it sounded like something I would write. Now it appears that I have a long-lost twin or something.
Awwwwww. The human in chapter 5 didn't ask the one burning question I would have had in his situation:
VastaKustuta"Does that mean I too am a fictional character in some story in another universe?!"
'Cause that would be an interesting conversation starter.
The only way the human would have been better would be if he were reading Fandom Crisis! at the time.
VastaKustutaOkay, now Studio B and Hasbro NEED to turn this into a movie when it's finished. Same with Pas Sins.
VastaKustutaWow, 2 updates on the same day? That's a first
VastaKustuta@DPV111
VastaKustutaGuess you're gonna have to kill and/or one-star me.
Well this certainly is interesting.
VastaKustutaOh, and I kinda skimmed part of (the entirety of) part 6 until Derpy appeared. I read Rainbow Factory, so I know what was going on.
And I must say I like the "Real" way Derpy described to make rainbows.
@ChaosDX1
VastaKustutaWell, I did make a couple edits, but if you read the original it should be fine. As long as you read the princess part and the Derpy part.
@ChaosDX1
VastaKustutaThey could also use pictures of families to make rainbows.
Well I haven't killed or 1 starred you, but that's because this is a good story... But shame on you for validating a gluefic universe. SHAME.
VastaKustuta@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaOr crayons, if "Rainbow Dash Presents" is to be believed (only exposure I've had to the original fic).
On the story related note I'd like to first say that I enjoyed the first four chapters. Messages from past/alternative selves, messgaes from future friends, references to On a Cross and Arrow, it's been a little hectic but enjoyable. However, these last two chapters have felt kind of... lost...? I think that's the word I'm looking for. There's a certain sense of vagueness as to where the plot is going, especially now that you're borrowing heavily from two more fics and using the viewpoints of so many people who seem to have no idea what is going on.
So many things are crossing over chaotically that it feels like the only solution is for the characters to find an omniversal Deux Ex Machina and hit the big reset button. Maybe give the Big Bad Reality Renderer some more blacked out screen time? So we can get a grasp on who exactly the protagonists are meant to be railing against?
Just some thoughts.
>no random tag
VastaKustutaWhere is the random tag >:O
@ Ch. 5
VastaKustutaFor the love of Celestia, I hope that story is made up. If not, you need to get your head checked.
Also, when are you getting back to the actual plot of the series instead of ripping off other fics?
Will their be a scene where Rainbow Blitz tries to protect Scootaloo from Rainbow Factory Dash because she reminds him of Scootaroll and gives Rainbow Factory Dash a Reason You Suck Speech?
VastaKustutaAlso do you think that Rainbow Factory Dash would act completely dumbfounded on why Blitz would protect her even though she failed the test.
Also I can totally see Blitz telling Rainbow Factory Dash that she's pathetic even for a Filly-Faker.
P.S. that's from making me a MacGuffin for chapter 5.
VastaKustutaP.S.S. I love that little joke where you said that I used the wrong there for a sentence but said that it was OK since it the internet and then in the next chapter you did a similar mistake. That's pretty clever!
Just from the description I can see Past Sins, Silent Ponyville, and Doctor Whooves. The tags seem to imply Fallout: Equestria and Derpy, too. This should be delightfully jam-packed with all things brony!
VastaKustutaChapter 5 was great. I love a little meta in my diet. Helps keep me regular.
VastaKustutaChapter 6... I see why it came out so quick...
Lotta pasta there... Copy pasta...
I honestly think you should revise that and just start with maybe a 2-3 paragraph flashback summary from Scootaloo leading into Derpy's appearance rather than just (mostly) pasting in the first half of Rainbow Factory to do the setting for you.
While I have a low opinion of Rainbow Factory (not just because it's a gluefic but because I think it's a dumb story that has no right being as popular as it is) I do not necessarily appreciate other stories messing around in the events of another fic. Alternate endings and sequels I am fine with but not direct interference. I just hope with the allusions of what Sparkler and Pinkie Pie are doing this fic is not going to turn into a glorified version of the meta series Protectors of the Plot Continuum.
Also if in the next chapter RF Dash tells Blitz he has "beautiful eyes" before falling to her doom you will win a trip to the moon in the universe where "the taste is of a cheese".
VastaKustutaWell no wonder Chapter 6 came out so fast, less than 5 pages of it was actually written. Not to say that I'm upset, because I understand how ridiculous this fic is to keep track of, let alone write.
VastaKustutaBut I'm still looking forward to future updates in this.
Autor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.
VastaKustutaWhat does PPPPP stand for anyway?
VastaKustutaPinkie
VastaKustutaPie's
Party
Protectorate
Police
part 5, felt out of place.
VastaKustuta"I think what I'm going to do is get the story done, then go back and do some rewrites to adress any problems with it." I'm afraid that there is a definate problem with part 5. it's written in the wrong narrative. it breaks the immersion from parts 1-4 making it almost as hard to follow as Brave New World. (I had to get that book on tape just to be able to get through it)
VastaKustutaNyx is missing completely, it's like you gave up writing the story and just decided to shove other stories into this with a bearly connecting plot, if any anymore.
I don't understand what happened. You weren't doing half bad, and I was enjoying the new story involving Nyx, then after chapter 5 you just fell off track into some random crap that I don't follow. I really don't understand what you were going for.
VastaKustutaAUTHOR COMMENT TIME!
VastaKustutaOkay, so, chapters 5 and 6 happened, and there are some legitimate criticisms for these ones.
Chapter 5: I realize this one is...different. I pretty much described how this one came about in the chapter itself. I was having a massive two month long case of writer's block, I decided to read My Little Dashie, I got inspired to write. Really spur of the moment sort of thing. I any chapter was better than no chapter.
Chapter 6: Sigh, I'm sorry. I've read the criticisms and there all pretty much correct. My only defense, and the reason I did it, was the idea of either Derpy or Pinkie jumping out and ruining everypony else's plans halfway through the story amused me far too much. I don't regret it, and the original author seemed to enjoy it.
Just take my word for it that everything will tie together in the end. I will do my best to make this story worthwhile. I also really want to eventually rewrite this after I finish, and these two chapters will probably be the most changed.
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaI FIGURED THAT any chapter was better than no chapter.
i for one think that this story is coming along wonderfully(i think i see where your going with all of this)
VastaKustuta@Chaos Knux
VastaKustutaAnd where'd that come from?
@Sinigangus Medic: I HAVE NO IDEA! :D
VastaKustutaI just made it up just then. It fits PPPPP, right? I'm sure somepony knows the real one.
autobotgodzilla definatly does, everypony else, im not sure about
VastaKustuta@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaMaybe, but the way you wrote Ch. 5 makes it look like something that actually happened to you instead of something you wrote. And that makes you look insane.
@Nimbus the Unicorn
VastaKustutaIf I wrote Ch. 5 believably enough that it seemed like an account of my life instead of something I made, insanity is a compliment. Really though, I was just trying to mimic the style of My Little Dashie. So maybe the guy who wrote that is insane.
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutasomething I made UP.
Agh! why can't me write sentences good.
@autobotgodzilla
VastaKustutaI read My Little Dashie (okay, more like skimmed it, but I read enough to make a comparison), and in that story, you can tell more easily that it's a work of fiction, but in yours, you start out talking about your writers' block and in the midst of all that, Sparkler suddenly appears. Not to mention since your story deals with space/time a bit more than My Little Dashie it's a bit easier to pick out holes in the story (for instance, if Sparkler and co. are working to fix the space/time continuum, how is it that the narrator remembers what is happening since it's been erased from history?). Either way, I'm more concerned about the fact that you included random unrelated stories instead of making them completely different ones, I and probably other readers don't really care considering they're completely different genres attracting different kinds of readers, I'm only really interesting in what's happening in the plot with Nyx and the Whooveses and co. Adding in random unrelated stories feels like kind of a f*ck you to the readers.
Just found this again after giving up after chapter five failed to materialize a few months ago, I've kinda overdosed on grim-dark from other fics so I like where this is going.
VastaKustutaDo one with The Conversion Bureau.
VastaKustuta