• Story: Substitute Harmony (Update Story 2!) !)

    [Random] [Comedy] [Dark] He asked me to completely axe it since he redid the entire story.  Also chapter 5 is added.

    Author: Blayze Kohime
    Editor: Florentine
    Description: When strange ponies from another world suddenly pony-nap all her friends, Pinkie Pie must find a way to defeat their master all on her own. Blamed for the crime herself, she has no help from Celestia and just about every pony in Ponyville is convinced that she's finally cracked. Who can she possibly find to fill in for the other elements to defeat the ancient evil behind it all?
    Substitute Harmony

    Additional Tags: G1 vs G4. Harmoniously insane.

    [Random] [Comedy]
    Description: Pinkie Pie wakes up with a hangover after having too much cider on to
    find that her cutie mark has been stolen! What's more, it seems that a
    mystery pony is holding it for ransom for forty cakes. Forty cakes!
    That's four tens and that's terrible. Desperate for revenge, Pinke has
    a plan to turn the ransom around on the thief.

    This occurs in the same universe as my story Substitute Harmony;
    reading that is not necessary, but these characters have been through
    those events; I've taken steps to avoid outright spoiling of that one
    though.

    This is also a very loose parody of the 1996 Mel Gibson movie "Ransom"
    (and thus of the movie that was based on). And that's terrible.
    CUTIE MARK (New!)

    Additional Tags: Dude where's my cutie mark?

    46 kommentaari:

    1. > (Update: Chapter 5)

      Seth, you must be getting confused pretty easily these days, this is a new fic, right?

      VastaKustuta
    2. Great, my comments are being sent to the spam folder again.

      What I had said was, #1 corrected my mistake of thinking Seth derped(all links to the chapters are at that link) and #2 I was already reading this fic in the non-revamped form so now I've gotta read it all over again!

      VastaKustuta
    3. Is that picture specifically about this story? Because if so, I might read it just for the slightly disturbed-looking pony with a bomb for a cutie mark.

      VastaKustuta
    4. The old version was just fine, but okie dokie lokie. I really hope you kept Inky and Blinky the same though. They were hilarious. If you don't mind me asking, why did you revamp it?

      VastaKustuta
    5. I was wondering when this was gonna update, but it's been revamped? I wonder why that is...

      VastaKustuta
    6. @Cedric Bale

      Yup, her talent is blowing things with bombs, especially stuff like rocks, but anything really.

      It was revamped because the author wasn't satisfied with the original story I guess. I'll re-read it when I have the time, but the first story was really cool to read.

      VastaKustuta
    7. Yay, you're/it's back! So... welcome back!

      I'll get to reading later on. Very interested to see what changes you've made.

      VastaKustuta
    8. It was revamped because the original was a speed-write. The main characters are basically the same, though I made the G1 ponies more like themselves and less like evil clones. The ending of five is significantly different in that it plays better into the later story.

      VastaKustuta
    9. ... If you had happen form what One understands *is in the middle of chapter 6*, you REALLY screwed up. How and why would Pinkie have gone back in time to release him? They only went back in time because of all the chaos. There would be no chaos if Pinkie didn't go back in time, and she couldn't have, which makes this fic officially un-professional. Seriously, work on your logic a bit more. There's no reason that any of that would have happened. You didn't think everything through. Other than that, pretty good fic. (Sorry for sounding so rude. It's jsut a paradox that you didn't think through much, and that just... REALLY irks me.)

      ~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

      VastaKustuta
    10. And yet again, pinkie's ability to completely decimate the fourth wall saves the day!

      VastaKustuta
    11. Autor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.

      VastaKustuta
    12. @The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor

      It's sort of meant as a lamp-shaded gag, not as a serious plot point. Calling it unprofessional isn't entirely fair, considering that there are very well-loved shows (like Doctor Who) that are practically a tangle of contradictory time loops. Not to mention movies like the Terminator, part 1 and 2 of which is a stable time loop that folds in on itself, but were still pretty well liked. :p

      Reposting to add this fun reference link: http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/StableTimeLoop
      javascript:void(0)

      VastaKustuta
    13. @The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor
      You never really read much stuff about time-travelling and/or on the various parallele realities, haven't you ?

      Have some Michio Kaku : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dFLzV5ziWDI

      VastaKustuta
    14. You never know. They might have actually been thrown forward in time. It seems like they're trying to capturing the elements and Celestia before they can do something which is probably imprisoning Helios. Other than that, we really don't have any concrete reference points to determine the relationships between these two worlds.

      This is complicated, but I'm hooked.

      VastaKustuta
    15. Gosh, a time loop. Urg... I like them, but they can be confusing as all got out. The evil ponies spur events that lead to the villians release, who then goes and makes the ponies evil, so they can spur events that lead to his release... Ugh. I wonder if we'll get something that can be considered a starting point.

      VastaKustuta
    16. I saw this when the previous chapter was updated but didn't pay it much notice. Saw the latest chapter come out and decided to give it a go.

      Spent almost the next two hours reading it =P

      Loving this group, Inkie, Blinkie, Pinkie, Trixie, Dinky and Gilda. Epic =3

      VastaKustuta
    17. Yay! Thanks for another chapter! Trevor eagerly awaits chapter 8! (Don't make Trevor disappointed!)

      ~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

      VastaKustuta
    18. This is one of my favourite fanfics. I really like Helios, he's a good villain. He is evil in some ways, but good in others and not just evil for the sake of being evil. I can understand his point of view, even if I disagree with his actions.

      VastaKustuta
    19. I thought one of the recent drawfriends had a pic with all the (pony) villains from this piece. But I can't find it now. x.x

      The time loop is kind of weird but at least it's a *simple* one. As opposed to Double Rainbow where the author gave up on making sense of it because it got too complicated. x.x

      VastaKustuta
    20. I posted a journal entry in my thing on FIMfiction for those especially confused by the time loop, but I wouldn't suggest reading it until you've read through chapter 9. Also, it seems that most of the comments are ending up there: I respond more there and they are neatly divided by chapter which can keep you from getting spoilered while half-way done :p

      VastaKustuta
    21. @Dragatus

      Well, after this latest chapter, you may want to rethink the 'good' aspects of Helios. He's pure evil, just a very good liar until he no longer needs somepony. No one with any true goodness in them would do what he's doing. No, I can clearly see why he was imprisoned at the risk of the death of their world. He was a maniacal tyrant, a ruler as a cruel god, righteous only in his own eyes. But a monster to anypony else.

      VastaKustuta
    22. @Alondro He's meant to be a 'well-intentioned extremist". His goal (saving his ponies) is one that the heroes appreciate in principle, but his methods of accomplishing it force them to stop him anyway. He also shares Celestia's beliefs about justice and order, but unlike Celestia believes that the ends justify the means of accomplishing it.

      I like the articles for "Well-Intentioned Extremist" and "Utopia Justifies The Means" at tvtropes.org

      VastaKustuta
    23. Ya for Luna!

      Chapter 9 did darken my view of Helios, but chapter 10 lightened it again. I also like how he can trick somepony by telling the truth. :D

      VastaKustuta
    24. @Blayze Kohime

      Ah, from my examinations of history, 'well-intentioned extremists' are often the most wicked of all, for they feel justified by their cruel and sadistic acts of evil, and thus move ahead without hesitation. The latest chapter seems to suggest that indeed Helios will be doing exactly that. Not to mention, he's clearly insane. And he doesn't know Luna's back, eh? Oh yes, he's clearly either missing a large chunk of 'the big picture' or is sliding right off the deep end into Pinkamania territory.

      VastaKustuta
    25. @Alondro

      You are right, historically speaking the worst dictators were all 'well-intentioned extremist'. Helios does terrible things, and thinks its okay because he (falsely) believes the crimes of his enemies to be worse and because 'utopia justifies the means'.

      Obviously, if he knew that Luna was still around, it wouldn't be nearly as much fun for him to meet her. :)

      VastaKustuta
    26. Love the new chapter. The part with the gardner especially is pure gold.

      VastaKustuta
    27. The garden scene was just golden! I could only imagine what would of happened if they kept fight XD.

      VastaKustuta
    28. @Blayze Kohime

      I'm rather surprised that the Rainbow attacked them at all. It's purpose was to only destroy that which was of darkness. If anything, Helios would have been its natural target now! Twilight was ever only the bearer of the Rainbow. Once released, it acted of its own accord.

      VastaKustuta
    29. @Alondro Helios is one of the original designers of this type of magic and has had a month to fiddle with its properties. I'm basically using it as a plot device to direct the plot where it needs to go (which is always what it was for). :p

      VastaKustuta
    30. Ah, I see... so Helios corrupted the Rainbow of Light...

      *walks into the story and sucker-punches Helios in the face* Asshole.

      ;3

      VastaKustuta
    31. New chapter O_O

      I HAVE WAITED MY ENTIRE PREVIOUS FEW MONTHS FOR THIS DAY

      VastaKustuta
    32. Finally an update! BRB, gotta read.

      VastaKustuta
    33. @Scherzando I hope you did other things while you were waiting :P

      @Dragatus Sorry for the delay, I am a bad person and should feel bad >.>

      VastaKustuta
    34. No, you shouldn't feel bad. You should feel good about getting the story moving forward again. :)

      VastaKustuta
    35. Just got to Ch 11.
      Reading...

      Huh... Blueblood. Being a jerk, but not an ass.

      Wait... he's covering for something.

      Oh hey it's Helios. And Blueblood is nonchalent?

      Blueblood is deliberately and tactically withholding information about Luna?

      What have you done with MLP? Why are the former antagonists so likeable?!? This is pretty awesome!

      Hope we see more of Secret Agent Blueblood soon.

      VastaKustuta
    36. Oh man, I knew something was amiss with Blueblood. All he had to say was "Faust".

      Love how you developed Inkie and Blinkie. Great, workable talents. Working in Ditz's travel experience without outright stating it was good too. The Gilda/Ditz thing kind of came out of left field, but it works I guess. Kind of funny that Helios thought Selene had been killed if it's possible for Celestia to regen a head. And wow, massive Trollestia for her part in the events.

      Helios mentioned being bothered by "The Time Pony". Would be interesting to see what happened to elicit that comment.

      Very good job overall!

      VastaKustuta
    37. Excellent fic. Everything just ties up together perfectly. Truly deserves the 6 star. Love the team, hope to see more of them in the future!

      VastaKustuta
    38. @Luminous Yeah I tried to leave hints about Blueblood through the whole thing :p As for Gilda and Ditzy/Derpy, that was just sorta me making a pair that hadn't ever been made and lamp-shading a few common ones in comments.

      @Docstonge I'm still brainstorming one more, but we'll see. Still have to get the epilogue tacked on before I consider it complete.

      VastaKustuta
    39. This was such a fun story from insane beginning (blowing up Princess Celestia!?) to outrageous end (reversing the polarity, of course!). Thank you Blayze for everything.

      VastaKustuta
    40. it's finally complete! yay XD congrats! I can't wait to tackle the last 3 chapters once I catch up with a few more fics here <3

      seriously great fic! hope to see a new project from you soon! (not TOO soon PLEASE! I still have a ton to catch up with from 4 months ago ><)



      P.S. *hugs google account*

      VastaKustuta
    41. Huh. I actually thought it was already finished, though it explains why there wasn't an "Complete" post for it. Not bad managing to fit it snugly between Return of Harmony and Lesson Zero - I'm guessing Blueblood's (Helios') promise to Rarity is an allusion to her success in Sweet and Elite (and his cameos in Becoming Popular)?

      That said I find it rather awkward that the Dream Valley counterparts were just... forgiven. I mean sure the Mane 6 were understanding with having been Discorded, but they never tortured other ponies excessively and relentlessly - or even for pleasure (well, Flutterbitch went out of her way to bully the others, but it was never really violent). I dunno, I guess I just don't feel comfortable that they were just... let off the hook.

      I don't think I ever got over Surprise beating the ever-loving sh*t out of Twilight =\

      Oh well, with that depressing note aside, great story all the same! Glad to see you came back to finish it =)

      VastaKustuta
    42. So I take it Mrs. Cake made a full recovery?

      VastaKustuta
    43. Ok, well, the hilarious thing about this, is me and a friend of mine were planning on writing a fanfic JUST like this! lol

      VastaKustuta
    44. @Docstonge Yeah it was actually mentioned just before Blueblood met Helios and directed him to Princess Luna.

      VastaKustuta