[Shipping] [Dark] [Sad]
Author: pmcollectorboy
Description: After the battle with Discord, Rarity still has nightmares about the rock that Discord had tricked Rarity with. Concerned, she goes to Twilight for help. Slowly, Rarity delves into the maddening practice of golemology as she carves a statue out of the rock and brings it to life. But what price is there to pay for her creation and who will get to pay it?Stone Hearts (All Links) (Update Part 2!)
Additional Tags: Rarity, Tom, Frankenstein, Tragedy, Horror
66 kommentaari:
already? a tomxrarity fic?
VastaKustutathat got approved?
wow.
Wut.
VastaKustutaThis was expected
VastaKustutaSaw this pop up somewhere... I'll try it out.
VastaKustutableh.... fanfiction.net.
VastaKustutaI hate that layout.
Well that was quick. But inevitable, I suppose.
VastaKustuta...wut
VastaKustutaHERE COMES TOM!
VastaKustutaNowords.jpg
VastaKustutaWat...
VastaKustutaInteresting. When the description started out it made me immediately think of Silent Ponyville...
Hey, Jake Heritagu! Make a Silent Ponyville story with Rarity and Applejack! They need some psychological torture too!
Anyway... I guess it looks interesting. I'll read it later when I don't have to study for an exam...
what is this i don't even
VastaKustutaSeriously, I am simultaneously intrigued and frightened. Despite the tags, I expected something a little more Pygmalion and less Frankenstein. It's pretty good for all that, and I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for updates.
When I saw the rock, then the tag that said shipping...
VastaKustutaI laughed my ass off! I don't even care if thats not the case it's still funny as hell
My Mythometer is going off the charts, but I can't remember who that guy was that married his own clay statue. Something Greek, I know.
VastaKustutawhat the hell is this?
VastaKustutaSomeone desperately needs to redo the shipping chart... season 2 has opened portals into untold realms of the freakiest and oddest fan fics to ever be typed. The future in uncertain, comrades.
...so now... do I read it?
Now, the fic itself. Not bad! I wanted to have Tom brought a little more to life, y'know, but can't have everything in the first chapter. I'm sure the character development will be great.
VastaKustutaSo.. [Shipping] [Dark] [Sad]
VastaKustutabut no [Comedy] tag?
@P. Pony Ponyson
VastaKustutahttp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aphrodite#Pygmalion_and_Galatea
Lame story :P
VastaKustutaIs it just my imagination, or did Rarity just randomly screw Twilight at the end? Wasn't this supposed to be TomxRarity?
VastaKustutaThis is gonna be good.
VastaKustutaAm I the only one who's getting a weird deja vu moment? Just reading the description kinda reminds me of that story "Prince Charming."
VastaKustutawww.equestriadaily.com/2011/05/story-prince-charming.html
A RarityxTom fic?!
VastaKustutaOh lord... XD
Author here. From what I gathered, the pre-readers were kinda turned off by the first chapter because of its steamy nature, but not enough to prevent its posting. It doesn't get much worse than that. In fact I think it gets better. I gave Rarity in this story an extremely flirtatious nature that is probably not canon, but I deemed the character change necessary.
VastaKustutaTo answer the question, yes this is a Tom X Rarity fic, but I've got plans because I honestly couldn't see how anybody getting shipped with a rock would work other than the whole "make a golem" route, and then an idea came to my head. The infamous scene in question is Rarity's attempt at blackmailing Twilight. Yes, it worked.
@YeowzaMare You know what? Despite the Dark tag and the light horror themes I've got planned, there ARE funny bits. I just don't know if it's enough for a Comedy tag.
Looks like the admins of Equestria Daily forgot my Google Docs links and my FimFiction links.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1z_YU-Hylf5nwrIjBJ7f18STSF6nFOljg0PB_xJagzuE/edit?hl=en_US
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1028/Stone-Hearts
I was also responsible for Rarity's Tale, but I went under a different name for that one. I'm revising it BIG time and I'll have it reposted as soon as this side project is out of the way.
Wow, sounds interesting... Now I have about 80 fics I want to read... I should start one of them.
VastaKustutaIs it weird that I want to read a TomxBloomberg fanfiction? O_o
Well I'm interested after reading the first chapter. Decent set up to the story, and good pacing. I'll give it 4 stars for now and see where this goes.
VastaKustuta@Codric
VastaKustutaNo, not at all. Cause y'know, a tree and a boulder can have some pretty intense shipping moments...
I personally don't like shipping... But TomxRarity sounds... Intriguing.
This won't end well…
VastaKustutaWell I'm hoping the star rating will go up once I've posted chapter two. I wasn't writing this with the idea of making a masterpiece in mind because the concept of Rarity being shipped with a rock was such a royally screwy idea, and so that is what I wrote. A royally screwy story.
VastaKustutaJust wait until you see what I've planned for the epilogue.
If anybody would like to drop me ideas on what is inherently wrong with chapter one(Red), other than the concept and the sauce, and how to fix it, I'd like to hear them.
@Timber
VastaKustutaIn more ways than one, I guess.
@pmcollectorboy
VastaKustutaThe whole Rarity jumping Twilight's bones thing is sort of out of nowhere and kinda weird. I mean, if a friend found you masturbating, would you really let them suddenly screw you? And vice vera: Finding a close friend masturbating, the last thing I would think of is to 'help' them. Even if I want something from them. The whole part at the end felt weird and kinda sudden. I might even say it felt out-of-place considering the mood of the previous scene and the supposed mood of the whole fic.
@pmcollectorboy
VastaKustutaPretty much Municipal Engines posted. Rarity pouncing on Twi came out of nowhere, and was pretty damn OOC.
Well. Wet dream, not masturbating, but same difference, I suppose.
VastaKustutaI was actually trying to build to only an implication of sex and have something else happen, but then my brain fizzled out on that because I didn't like the pay off. I also had an idea for a second set of chain of events but felt this way led to a slower build up towards the climax(heh heh).
Have patience, guys. I'm building on a theme. This is actually a mix of horror and romance, but not too heavy on either.
@Codric
VastaKustuta~~~
"... 'As Bloomberg extended his roots across Tom, his root hairs feeling every rugged facet, every hidden depth, he knew that this was more than coincidence. This... was destiny.'" Twilight looked up from the pages at Fluttershy, the yellow pegasus standing there awkwardly and attempting to hide behind her hair.
"... Okay, Fluttershy, I know you've got a passion for literature, and you're not a bad writer, but... Really? A rock and a tree?"
Fluttershy blushed and crossed her forelegs, rubbing them nervously.
Twilight frowned. "And this goes on for over fifty pages! How did you come up with all this?"
"... P-Pinkie Pie let me borrow her dad's book on rock f-farming and Applejack told me about how trees... Pollinate." she blushed again, more fiercely.
Twilight shook her head and sifted telekinetically through the pages, skimming over the text and occasionally repressing the urge to gag. In the middle, she found an unnumbered page that seemed to be written on different paper, and peered at it.
" '"Oh, Bloomberg, I want to feel your roots interlocking with mine, our xylem beating in harmony..." Fluttertree said, he-' Wait."
Twilight looked back at her friend, somewhat visibly disturbed. Fluttershy was blushing so brightly she was radiating heat.
"Th-th-that w-wasn't meant t-to be in th-there!" she stammered, grabbing the sheets of paper from a speechless Twilight.
"I'd, uhm, b-better be going, th-there's a lot to do, I- I have to change Hummingway's b-bandages and... Bye!" she shot through the door, scattering a few sheets of paper in her wake.
Twilight stared at the open door, her eye twitching.
"... I thought Rarity's romance novels were bad..."
~~~
@Miyajima
VastaKustutaThat's great! Write it!
@Miyajima
VastaKustutaDo it! Or so help you, you'll never see the dark again!
I mean... please do.
TOM is going to be alive.
VastaKustuta@Miyajima
VastaKustutaI haven't loled so hard in a long time.
"pre-readers were kinda turned off by the first chapter because of its steamy nature"
VastaKustuta....
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@Miyajima make it happen!!
VastaKustutaAll right! That's it! Time to bust out Chapter Two(Orange) and amend this atrocity! 80% more exposition, 20% more fun, and only 1% steam.
VastaKustutaI liked this one.
VastaKustutaWill read more.
For the love of Celestia......
VastaKustutaDid someone really write this?
When I saw the picture, the title, and the shipping tag, I was at a loss for words. seriously?!?
well, people seem to be enjoying it.....a little... Fine, I'll read it when i get home later tonight. This better be worth it. I hate little more than a badly written story.
Chapter Two should be in the pipeline by the end of the day. No idea on when it'll be posted after that. Honestly, Chapter One is a fluke. I thought it was a funny fluke, but. . . eh.
VastaKustutaThe rest will turn things around, and I think you'll like when the horror elements kick in.
Unless you guys just really don't like sad stories that are dark(ish).
@Apsuenbwyfer11
VastaKustutaHey. People were asking. Maybe they were joking, but I saw it as a challenge.
@MiyajimaI can but implore you to write this story, sir. It will be the Romeo and Juliet of the 21st century.
VastaKustutaI'm liking it so far! Poor Rarity. And Tom. Alone, in the rain.
VastaKustutaCRYING ROCKY TEARS (possibly).
it was bound to happen sooner or later
VastaKustutaI've waited for a RarityxTom to show up, and so it does, and author is going to deliver. Much happy.
VastaKustutaAutor on selle kommentaari eemaldanud.
VastaKustuta@Miyajima
VastaKustutaThat was gold. XD
Well... though the ''general idea'' isn't really unexpected...
VastaKustutaThis is still starting to get 'a bit' ridiculous.
I don't understand from the comments - should I read this or no?!
VastaKustutaWell, though I confess I wound up here and read this story out of morbid curiosity alone, I suppose giving you my feedback is the only polite thing to do, really.
VastaKustutaWe all knew a fanfiction about this pairing was inevitable, but I doubt I'm alone in having expected little more than a ridiculous and poorly-written [clopfiction, most likely] story as the end result. Instead, color me surprised my dear; you actually came up with a believable (well, within-the-confines-of-our-cartoon-pony-universe-believable, of course) storyline that seems promising thus far, and you write with a great deal of poise and insight into our cast's thoughts and feelings, in my opinion. While I can certainly see that this will likely get quite grim, thus far I feel it's shaping up nicely and am curious as to how it will progress.
Cheers!
@Miyajima
VastaKustutaWhat the... Wow... I love it. You are awesome. All my money - take it!
No, wait, I need it. But... you're still awesome.
how is this nót tagged "comedy"..?
VastaKustutaRarity is mine, Tom! You get away from her! Don't make me get a sledgehammer!
VastaKustutaAs Jefles said... "this was expected."
VastaKustutaI can't possibly fathom why I enjoy this, but I do. Keep writing, please! >.>
Fun to read. Which is weird, because it's... Tom.
VastaKustutaAnyways, on a side note...
this story first appeared after the point in time where I submitted a story to the pre-readers... and now this one's been updated.
Does that mean it's safe to assume mine's been rejected? It's my first story submission so I have no idea what time frame to expect.
Unless you get a message saying it's been rejected, it's probably safe to assume your story slipped under radar. You should either get an email saying "added to queue" or a request to revise. Wouldn't hurt to politely ask them what happened.
VastaKustutaEnjoying it!
VastaKustutaLooking forward to more. Thanks!
This is now my favourite fanfic.
VastaKustutaMind my Canadian spelling of favourite.
In any case, keep it up.
I think it's cool and different! I liked the first chapter... Rarity's reaction to twilight was just a way to show how mad she really is.
VastaKustutaOh you guys flatter me. Honestly when I started writing this, I wasn't aiming for five star material. I just wrote this to be goofy because I saw a need for a Tomity situation after the first two Season Two episodes. I thought others would also jump on the bandwagon, but it looks like I'm the only one providing at the moment.
VastaKustutaI'm hoping people are enjoying my creative methods of displaying sexual tension in this story. If you hate the layout of FanFiction, search for it on FimFiction. I gave the links for Fan, Fim, and Google Docs, but it looks like only one set got posted.
I'm hoping to get this out of the way quick so that I can go back to my revision of Rarity's Tale and finish that. Then I've got a mega epic, super long, Scootaloo adventure I've got planned that I'm anxious to start.
Just read Ch. 2 TOM CAN SPEAK TOO RARITY IN HER MIND
VastaKustutaHey, authorperson. Write more plolx
VastaKustutaHey there! Just thought I'd let you know I really enjoyed this; I dearly hope it hasn't been consigned to the "forever unfinished" pile!
VastaKustuta