[Normal] [Adventure]
Author: KupoMechanic
Description: We all know of the legendary exploits of Dr. Whooves, but what about the other ponies who happened to gain an hourglass cutie mark? This is The Hourglass Society, a government organization charged with guarding time itself. We join one young pegasus named Brown Sand, as he is recruited into the Society and quickly finds out the Risks, Rewards, and Responsibilities that naturally come with your special talent being the flow of time.
The Hourglass Society: Prologue
The Hourglass Society: Chapter I
The Hourglass Society: Epilogue
Additional Tags: Time, Was, Always, Decided
32 kommentaari:
The gathering of the Time Lords?
VastaKustutaStory... episodes... story... episodes...
VastaKustutauh.... can't decide. Is this incomplete?
@wackyteen I would assume so with there being an epilogue, but that's only an assumption, I really don't know.
VastaKustutaOops, meant to say that I would assume not.
VastaKustuta@Jelfes
VastaKustutaWho knows, seeing as it's a "Time Lord" fic, the author could've gone a step up and put the chapters in the order they happened, rather than chronological order.
@Display Name Well that's just confusing, but very fitting for this kind of story...
VastaKustuta@Jelfes
VastaKustutaEeeeexactly.
@Display Name
VastaKustutaThis is correct folks, it is currently very incomplete. Hint: It's actually a plot point that you're getting the end near the beginning.
And furthermore, I would like to make it clear now this is NOT a Dr. Whooves fic. He'll be mentioned a few times as having a few run-ins, but never be shown. So put that worry away if you know nothing about Dr. Who.
is it supposed to be Torchwood?
VastaKustuta@KupoMechanic
VastaKustutabut he's still a time lord?
dang, i was hoping for another alternative interpretation fic...
anyways, i might actually read this one. seems interesting.
@Canvas Wolf Doll
VastaKustuta@Blue_Lightning
Okay, let me clarify.
There are no Time Lords here. I have no idea what Torchwood is other than the few things I've read on TVTropes. I've only seen one complete episode of Dr. Who. (Blink)
This is a completely original time-travel fic, filled with new rules, ideas, plots, and so forth. Any and all possible connection to Dr. Who can and will be regarded as hilarious by the author.
@KupoMechanic
VastaKustutaWell that really does clear things up thanks, btw Torchwood is a spin-off of Dr. Who it's much darker though aimed towards more of an adult audience.
Okay, this sounds too cool...
VastaKustutaThis is an unique fic for the Pony fandom. I like the idea of having the chapters slightly out of order. I just hope I can keep everything straight as we continue.
VastaKustutaTime Travel can be hazardous to your head.
I finished the prologue, and while the idea is certainly unique and interesting, so far I must say the writing is okay at best. I noticed more than a few spelling errors and you repeat too many words, use some of those synonyms man.I saw large 3 or 4 times in one paragraph, open a thesaurus and expand your vocabulary.
VastaKustutaBeyond that there's unnecessary descriptions and the dialogue can seem awkward, especially when you add in those "he gazes at the ceiling dazed" lines in the middle of speaking.
I'm too tired to go on, but I'll read the next two chapters and see if those problems are reserved only to the prologue tomorrow. Even if that is the case however, you should go back and revise, as I was turned off by the first impression.
Like I said before though, interesting idea and I really hope it gets better, this could turn out fantastic.
Just gonna point out that Contrast's thought process during the prologue (the whole "okay, this already happened, therefore I need to go back in time to do that so it can happen" logic) is very similar to the Season 5 finale of Doctor Who. So, yeah. Just figured I'd mention that.
VastaKustuta...Also, it says "person" instead of "pony" near the end of the prologue.
An hourglass pony called Brown?
VastaKustutaGREAT SCOTT!
@Dusty the Royal Janitor Too cool? I certainly hope so. If not, I'll simply have to add more ice puns like Mr. Freeze into Colgate's dialogue. And nobody wants that.
VastaKustuta@CTVulpin The entire order is written at the very beginning, so you shouldn't have too much trouble. I have a huge timeline already written out. If you do later on, ask away!
@Basharoonskis
Hmm. I notice now how I repeated a couple words near the beginning. Not the three to four in one paragraph, but certainly a couple. Thanks for the catch, they might have been inserted while editing.
The unnecessary descriptions and dialogue however, not sure what to say to that. For some reviewers, the descriptions were a major positive, and the idea of them moving around in the middle of talking (even sentences!) I'm certainly willing to defend. Some even mentioned I didn't have enough descriptions. The awkward phrasing gets mentioned every so often through my stories, and my only response to that is it's literally the way I think. That isn't a rebuke, it probably is awkward to a few, but I'm simply giving an explaination.
Nevertheless, I am always open to taking ideas in consideration, both positive and negative. I already have some ideas to make it less awkward, so again, thank you.
@Display Name Ha! Hilarious.
Also, what person? It was... always like that.
@Qur'a 'Morhek
*holds head*
How did I NEVER think of that? I mean, seriously, I've never thought of that. Why did I not think of that?
I'm serious here. Never made that connection until you said so. I'm laughing so hard you don't even know.
This is really good, ill have to continue. :) I'm assuming you're going to explain some of the stuff mentioned in the epilogue.
VastaKustutaI just read the entire story. It's very fullfilling in that it...
VastaKustutaWait...
Ah yes, ofcourse, only three stories in this timeline...
Great read, I enjoy it. Will read more.
Dammit, I was totally kicking around an idea based on all the hourglass cutie marks! I'll have to see what you did with it...
VastaKustutaso... confused. Oh god I am soooooo confused. read it all, but you had better pump out more chapters to make this shit make SENSE before the end of this author...
VastaKustutaoh god my HEAD.
wha??? HUH ??? IM SO CONFUSED RIGHT NOW!!! very good now i must read the rest to put it all together
VastaKustutaYES, YES, AND AGAIN, YES.
VastaKustutaThe Torchwood to the Doctor Whooves fanfics. Absolutely fantastic--I was wondering when it was going to happen. :D
Of course, since you said that you've never really watched any Who, I'm assuming that you don't even know what Torchwood is, so congratulations for making a badass fanfic off of something that you know little or nothing about.
God damn you. Now that I've read the end, I gotta figure out what happened.
VastaKustutaHey, sorry I never finished reading/reviewing your fic, I tend to forget to do things, then I don't wanna do them and blah blah blah.
VastaKustutaBUT, I saw the funniest thing today and I thought I'd show you. I don't know if you saw it but there's a Sears ad on EqD sometimes that has this guy who is basically the human version of Contrast. Dark skin, shades, white hair. Seriously, I laughed for so long, it's amazing.
Here's the link = http://imgur.com/cT0Ro
(Snipped right from the page, sorry for shit quality.)
Other than that, keep up the work on your fic, I may or may not finish it sometime in the future.
Dude, update man, I'm dying here. I'm left with a bunch of cliffhangers that make not much sense.
VastaKustutaPS, why did you scatter the stories?
I like the ideas presented in these chapters, but i want to know more about where Colgate fits into this!
VastaKustutaPlease tell me this is going to continue!
I don't get why people are complaining. I thought that was awesome and it didn't confuse me at all. I especially liked when Celestia told about how difficult it is living for over a thousand years and keeping up the kingdom.
VastaKustutaAnd listening to this http://www.youtuberepeat.com/watch/?v=i32iVAGE6CE while reading through the whole thing made it truly epic. Thanks for making this.
Does anypony know what happened to this guy? Did he fall off the face of the Earth, or is time travel involved?
VastaKustutaMy only question, will there ever be an update?
VastaKustutaMy only question, will there ever be an update?
VastaKustuta