[Grimdark] [Crossover] [Adventure]
Author: Andrew-64
Description: After being asked about Luna's reason for banishment, Twilight accidentally travels back in time to watch history unfold before her eyes. Unfortunately, the land of Equestria was much different in times of old...
Colts of War: Prologue
Colts of War: Chapter 1
Colts of War: Chapter 2
Colts of War: Chapter 3
Colts of War: Chapter 4
Colts of War: Chapter 5 (New!)
Colts of War (All Links)
Additional Tags: Long, Gears of War, Sci-fi, some shipping, alternate history
53 comments:
Oh wow, very intresting.
ReplyDeleteNot sure if I want... :(
ReplyDeleteGears crossover?
ReplyDeleteI agree with Dusty, here.
I've read it a while ago on FF.net
ReplyDeletedidn't caught my attention
Not interested in Gears of War...
ReplyDeleteBut not a bad read, an your timing is pretty good since GOW3 is coming out in 5 Days.
Not a bad read, everypony,
I give it 4/5
@gillnavisingh
ReplyDeleteA 4/5? I'll take it, thanks :)
Oh, FINALLY!!! I Gears/MLP crossover! It really fits that season 2 begins tomorrow and that Gears of War 3 comes out this monday.
ReplyDeleteITS ABOUT DAMN TIME.
ReplyDeleteYep didn't want. Sorry, not my thing. I'm so sick of Tyrant Celestia, you would never even imagine it.
ReplyDeleteI made it a few pages into chapter 1 after reading the prologue... I'm sorry, but... no. Aside from the fact that Grimdark, War, and Tyrantlestia all just add up to a great big stone in my stomach, this is the flimsiest reasn for a story I've ever seen... probably ever.
THere's no reason. NO REASON that Celestia couldn't have just told her what happened. Or it there was, there was no reason to be so vague about what she was getting into. I'm sorry, if you wanted to do a Gears of War thing... in the past for some weird reason but whatever... then you could have just done it in flashback with OC ponies. But this is the flimsiest, weakest reason I think I've ever seen to thrust Twilight into a situation like this, and it's so OOC on so many ponies' parts... I'm sorry, no. This fic is no.
@Dusty the Royal Janitor I didn't expect everyone to like this, and I was bound to get a bad review at some point. You give some (incredibly) valid points, but I appreciate you not hating on it without valid reasons or even reading it.
ReplyDeleteThe thing I am most grateful for is that it is not a Human in Equestria fic.
ReplyDeletePlus AJ on protein shakes. LOL
I'm not much of a Gears fan, (like the games(not really the games but the third one since I'm apparently really awesome at it(beta(hierarchy of parentheses))) but not so much the story behind them) but I think I will enjoy reading this.
ReplyDeleteA thing to note, for the author, any fic that is about a game that is exclusive to any console will almost assuredly have a lower rating due to butt hurt fan boys of the opposing console down rating it in an attempt to make themselves feel better for not having the game available to their system of choice.(this applies to Xbox 360 and PS3) It just so happens that in this case, the butt hurt ones are PS3 owners rather than 360 owners.
ReplyDeleteSo don't worry as much about your ratings as you do in comment feedback because your ratings will be a representation of those who don't own the console necessary to play the game.
@Jelfes Even without butthurt (that word always makes me laugh) fanboys, I don't expect this to get amazing ratings anyways (It's a Gear fic, it's Grimdark, it's my first fic so it's obviously not gonna be amazing), but thanks for the heads up. I'll try to keep my cool.
ReplyDeleteI really hope you enjoy reading it all the same!
Congrats on getting your first fic here,didnt read it 5 starts because usually butthurt people rate stories down for no reason,so i do the opposite hehe
ReplyDeletekept track of it on FF.net but didnt read it yet,got enough stuff to do already besides spending half of my day on ponies when i should study for exams :(
Not familiar with Gears of War so pardon me if my questions answers should be obvious. Getting past the "What the hell was modern day Celestia thinking?" and "What the heck is going on with past Celestia and Luna?" I'm really wanting an explination on several things. 1) Why did all of Ponyville end up getting transported to the past? 2)What the heck do they have to do to get back to modern day? 3)If you die here in the past are permanently dead? 4) Related to 3, since all of Ponyville is there once they get back to the present this is going to be ugly for Celestia. It'd be one thing if just Twilight or the Mane 6 had traveled(they might be loyal enough and understand enough) but when its the whole town I can't imagine people are going to be pleased about what a tyrant Celestia was in the past and the fact she covered it up.
ReplyDeleteIt's early but the story has me interested.
Just finished reading the prologue, you did a good job of hooking me but I just want to know why you don't have the second chapter linked here?
ReplyDelete@DoctorWhooves Thanks, I appreciate it :) I know that feeling though, college student myself.
ReplyDelete@iastfan112 I expected everyone to be confused with that, and that's what I was going for. I'm not being a lazy writer I'm (pretending) to be smart. The Gears universe is always full of mystery that keeps people guessing, and I kinda wanted to take that aspect. I have a few ways for all of those to work. So, don't worry, I'll clear all of it up. (Hopefully everyone will think it's clever and not just a stupid plot device... A little worried to be honest .__.)
ReplyDeleteAnd Jefles, that was a huge fault on my part. Long story short, I already email Sethiso about it, and it should be updated soon, as well as the inclusion of the fanfic.net link
Ooooohhhh boy, someone else tried an XBox game/MLP crossover.
ReplyDeleteIn my experience, you end up having to twist both canons to the point where non-Gears fans'll avoid it, because it's Gears, and Gears fans'll avoid it, because their favourite canon has been changed to fit.
But I used Halo. Gears' canon is smaller, so you should be able to fit most of it in. (Pendulum Wars, the Imulsion gold rush, fall of Jacinto, E-DAy, etc, etc.)
Problem is Gears itself isn't exactly stellar on the storytelling. I wish you the best of luck with this, and I hope you can bring yourself to see this through to the end. I know that, personally, I moved onto new pastures.
Basically, the amount of people that cared about Gods and Demons, versus the effort taken to write it just didn't match something like Allegrezza. I found I was just trying too hard in the end.
But again, good luck.
@CoffeeGrunt Thanks, I appreciate it. But to be honest, I'm using more Gears elements than the actual story. Obviously I'm using it as a springboard for the start, but the mane 6 isn't going to drill into the earth to try and find their enemies hometurf, that'd just be silly. But I see where you're coming from, and if people enjoy it, I will gladly see this through until the end.
ReplyDeleteWait a minute. Ponydog Dash?
ReplyDeletegears is awesome!!
ReplyDeleteHoly crap, GoW... awesome but no sure if I want to read... hmm
ReplyDeleteDammit... I've been writing a Gears of War / Pony crossover for almost two months now. I was all the way up to chapter six and just about ready to submit it.
ReplyDeleteBut you had to go and beat me to it! :P
Really tempted to read this, but I can't for fear it'll influence my own story.
Man... oh well, I can be second. Hopefully we won't draw too many readers away from each other when I conquer my writer's block and get my story ready to submit.
@Wisdom Thumbs
ReplyDeleteOh, well now I just feel bad. Good luck with your story all the same!
@Andrew_64
ReplyDeleteDon't feel bad. I was dragging my heels anyway, so at the very least you've probably just kicked my writer's block for me.
This was by far the most awesome fan-fic i have ever read in my life. It's pretty amazing how you put the mane 6 in a totally diiferent world and that they still stay true to their characters, this is how i'd imagine they'd act in this world. You don't need to know anything about gears for this to be awesome. I say good job and please write more!!!
ReplyDeleteMan I love good reviews!
ReplyDeleteAnd I'm writing more as we speak, but, I'm trying to go over them over and over again so that they make sense in the long run, characters stay in character, the stories not dumb as bricks, stuff like that, you know. Best it can be, and all that good stuff.
I want a GoW crossover where instead of the Locust, Ponies emerge from the inner surface of the planet, wreaking chaos with love and harmony. No wait. I just want that to actually happen...
ReplyDelete@Jelfes
ReplyDeleteUh huh... Not sure where you get that idea from.
Heck. I hate the 360 because I AM an owner of one... I've been an owner of FOUR of them in the span of two months where each one broke including the one I still have.
But from my experience, people either hate a system or a game, if people give this fic undue hate it will be because it deals with Gears of War, not because it's a 360 game.
Your idea that his ratings will be mostly due to irrational and stupid people that can't get over the system a game is played on just sounds insulting to people that will actually take time to give a detailed reason for not liking the fic.
For me. Not someone that got interested in Gears. Having a chainsaw on your gun was interesting, the character models were uglier than sin, gameplay was nothing special but decent, the plot was interesting in that the enemy was from underground instead of from space but nothing really new outside of that.
As for the fic.... This taking place in the past is a really weird choice. I don't think it's even necessary to put this during the time of Nightmare Moon, especially when you're changing the past so much that this might as well just be taking place in an alternate universe. It would certainly make explaining Celestia's OCness (Regardless of time, this is extremely drastic) and how all the technology is so advanced in the past yet so, not, in the future much more believable. These kinds of mash ups feel off to me. Seeing Team Fortress 2 collide with ponies works for me because TF2 has humor in it while Gears of War... doesn't. It's also aesthetic, My Little Pony is cute, colorful, nice, pretty and friendly, Gears of War is manly, dull (Color wise), mean, ugly, and aggressive. There's just a line that tells you whether a combination of two unlike things will be hilarious or just uncomfortable. For me, this fic crosses that line. It's just... not my thing.
@Specter Von Baren The idea of sending them into the past was something I fooled around with for awhile. I won't give anything away for those who do care, but it made sense for the story in my insane head.
ReplyDeleteAs I said before, I knew this fic wasn't going to be for everyone. However, I appreciate you not just going "ew, Gears" and leaving it at that.
If this doesn't end with Twilight screaming bloody murder at Celestia for sending her off without any warning into the middle of a bloodbath filled mass war, resulting in a year of solitary confinement, I'm going to be sad.
ReplyDeletehm, finally got around to start reading it. Haven't played the game from GoW2 but I've been following the story so this sure is nice to see.
ReplyDeleteOh I wish I could do some art for this but I'm no good so hopefully someone does
@Atiarotias
ReplyDeleteTo be honest, I would be estatic if anyone made art for this!
And don't worry if you haven't played Gears 2, I'm gonna stray from the Gears story as soon as possible. Don't want it to just be a ripoff.
Does Chestnut have any brothers?
ReplyDelete@Timber Does Pinkie Pie like parties? :P
ReplyDeleteDid I inspire you to write this? If I did, I would be proud.
ReplyDeleteI ask because I remember saying in several places (the ED IRC chat, TVtropes WMG page for FiM, etc) that in my personal head-canon (inspired by "Heart of Gold, Feathers of Steel"), one of Celestia's lesser known titles, is, in-fact, "Hammer of Dawn". I assume, regardless of if you got the idea for this series from me, that she will be fulfilling that role in this story?
@Draco Dei Unfortunately, no, this was written on a whim, and deciding whether I wanted to play GoW or watch MLP.
ReplyDeleteHowever, yes, she will be. :P
Heh, this is pretty awesome.
ReplyDeleteI groaned when I read "Private Chestnut". Not that I dislike the Carmines, but, as most GoW fans you'd probably know why...
I ran out of fan-fic to read then this update. woo, thanks again
ReplyDeleteDoctor Valor: To be honest, I'm debating whether or not to kill him off just yet ;P Maybe give him an injury and send him back? Or let him die on the spot. Decisions decisions...
ReplyDeleteAtiarotias: I aim to please :)
Wow. This is amazing. I've never really given a thought to Gears of War... (In fact, I only barely recognized the name), but this is more than I ever would have expected. Everypony reacted exactly as I would imagine they would given the circumstances that they've been thrown into. Also, I can't help but wonder if "Twilight Sniper" didn't get some inspiration from a little TF2. =P
ReplyDeleteExcellent job, and I hope that you will finish this one. I was really upset when I found out that you only just updated today. Weeks until another completed chapter. =/
Sniper influenced by TF2? Guilty as charged, I'm afraid :P
ReplyDeleteYeah, sorry about the updates, college's been rough, and this is kind of last on my list of priorities =/ Not to mention Gears 3 came out, and you can't blame me for that haha. I'm hoping to update more often than I have been, don't worry.
I'm making a platoon over on BF3 (PC) and I was trying to come up with a good name and remembered this. Is it alright to use Colts Of War as a name?
ReplyDeleteAnyway, thanks, and keep up the good story!
I'm a long-time brony and an avid Gears of War fan. However, one thing I have not followed very well is the MLP Fanfic community. I didn't even know about Fallout Equestria until recently. The premise is the same as Gears, but substitutes ponies in place of the humans in Gears, and Equestria instead of Sera, the world of Gears of War. Locust will still be the subterranean creatures who want to take over the world, but the main change will be with the inclusion of ponies instead of humans. So my point is, if I were to write a Gears of War-style MLP fanfic, would everyone just automatically ignore it because they would consider it a Fallout Equestria ripoff, or would people actually give it a chance?
ReplyDelete@Dusty the Royal Janitor agreed
ReplyDeleteThis... Is...
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Frekin amazing!!!
Brohoof
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You my friend are a Genius
A mad genius but a genius all the same your story entirely blows my mlp/naruto crossover into the dust and also making this into slight shipping as well you are bucking awesome, wow my keyboard just royally fucked up i kept pressing o and all i got was a line of u's
Omg omg omg omg I can't belive I a gears "fanboy could miss a mlp and gears crossover fic ! You sir, take all of my internet now let the reading COMMENCE!
ReplyDelete@Rick
ReplyDeleteNo one with a couple of brain cells should see it like a fallout ripoff so I say go for it :D
I haven't read chapter 2 yet, but im hoping that the beasts resemble Locust.
ReplyDeleteFive years later.... the story still isn't finished.
ReplyDeleteIt's been months when the going to be an update
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