[Dark] OC ponies! Have some Octavia Luna(Lol last second changes) until someone draws them.
Author: Nicknack
Description: Passions. They built monuments. They conquer nations. They drive ponies insane. Crossfade is a pony who knows the driving force behind a passion; however, like all passions, it comes at a price.Two Beats
Additional Tags: Duality, Choices, Tempo Shift, Gritty, Specific Ambiguity
75 comments:
octavia what
ReplyDeleteOctavia? That's Luna.
ReplyDeletePurty durn sure that's Luna.
ReplyDeletecurse you trollestia, now instead of honest feedback, the author is getting these comments.
ReplyDeletethat's the most amazing Octavia ever.
ReplyDeleteAwwww happy Luna!
ReplyDeleteNice, an OC ponie fanfic, with an Octavia pic that is actualy Luna.
ReplyDeleteOnly good octavia pic: is of Luna.
ReplyDeleteYeah, that is Luna... Nice one Seth!
ReplyDeleteLovin' that Octavia.
ReplyDeleteLuna is now Octavia. Quick someone draw her playing a double bass!
ReplyDeleteThat's Luna, not Octavia.
ReplyDelete...
SEIZE HIM!
Well written and very meaningful. If someone doesn't like this story, then said individual has no appreciation for literature.
ReplyDeleteThat Luna is a spy!
ReplyDeleteSeth, are you sure your cutimark has nothing to do with goofing up?
ReplyDeleteSeth you really need some sleep...
ReplyDeleteOh, so that's why Luna wasn't at the Gala. Because she was!
ReplyDeleteIs that Octavia disguised as Luna?
ReplyDeleteIf not then Seth either had a MAJOR typo or need some sleep heh.
"have some Octavia" *looks at pic* ....*facehoof*
ReplyDeleteWell, either Seth has gone too long without sleep again or he's been ponyknapped and an impostor is trying to take his place.
ReplyDeleteLuna Octavia is best Octavia.
ReplyDeleteSETH HAS FAILED US FOR THE LAST TIME.
ReplyDelete*Squints* I'm not sure, but I think that might not be Octavia, Seth...
ReplyDelete...Octavia? Did Luna eat you again?
ReplyDeleteGet some sleep, Seth, I think you've earned it. With all you do for us, I think you can afford to sleep.
ReplyDeleteOctavia looks more blue than I remember, and are those wings?
ReplyDeleteSilly Seth, that's not Octavia! Go to bed.
ReplyDeleteI don't know what everyone's so worked up about. Sure, it's not Octavia, but that's one of my favorite Luna pictures ever. That more than makes up for any mislabeling in my book.
ReplyDeleteI might read it just for the cute picture
ReplyDeleteHas anyone even read the story yet?
ReplyDelete@housecat94
ReplyDeleteI laughed so hard.
And now I'm off to read it.
I liked the story, and the open ended ending. It seems the story could easily fit in outside of Equestria, as just the story of someone's life.
ReplyDeleteYou made it! Way to go, Nick.
ReplyDeleteThis is so well-written I'm actually miffed I didn't get the opportunity to help you with it Nick!
ReplyDeleteGreat work mate.
@Garnot
ReplyDeleteI'll take that as the most glowing review I'm going to get. Thank you.
@Flutterguy
I'd rather you didn't. This has a [Dark] tag for a reason.
@The Cyan Flash
Writing it with ponies let me keep the genders of the main character / one night stand person hidden. An artistic point, true, but I'd have to change... things... to make this work outside of Equestria.
@Vimbert the Unimpressive
You and the Samurai, man. I'm glad you talked me into giving this an actual ending, as opposed to a sort of "What now" insurance company commercial.
Hm. I really liked this. It was a refreshingly, for lack of a better term, "gritty" story that had a mature tone that I quite liked and generally don't see in Pony stories.
ReplyDeleteI think the ending was just about perfect, too; though I'd be lying if I said I didn't have to reread a couple of sections to completely "get it."
@Seattle_Lite
ReplyDeleteThank you. As for the reviews, it's nothing personal, man. There's more than 7 reviewers on /fic/ now, I don't want to take up everyone's time over the same story.
@TenchiFreak5
Thank you. In regards to 'rereading a couple of sections,' do you mean within the last few pages or do you mean the interactions with the other ponies at the club? (being vague as possible)
Is there going to be a sequel to this, or am I missing something?
ReplyDelete@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteOh yes, of course, I didn't mean that as a bad thing, if that's what you thought. I thought it was a plus side. Having it open like that gives it a certain appeal, I think. Some of it is left to the interpretation of the reader, which I like.
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteEr... both. The former, then I wanted to make sure so I did the latter. I'm actually threw up a forum post to get some Bronies I know to read it so I can bounce ideas off of them to make sure I got it right.
I'm afraid I'm not a clever Brony when it comes to these things sometimes.
@iAndster
ReplyDeleteIt's a one-shot, so that 'end' is the end. I end it on the choice instead of the actions because I'm a fan of letting readers draw their own interpretations.
No, seriously. Someone draw something about this story. (Kidding, I know artists' time is valuable)
@The Cyan Flash
Right, I didn't take it as a bad way. I'm considering converting it to an 'actual story' instead of a fanfic for My Little Pony; however, the gender differences between men and women are a lot greater than those of the marshmallow ponies, so I'd either have to sacrifice my gender ambiguity (which was an interesting challenge to write) or drastically change the setting / events to get something I still wanted.
@TenchiFreak5
Perhaps I'm being prideful, but... you can ask me, here. :)
Crossfade. We All Bleed, don't we?
ReplyDeleteGlad to see I'm not the only one who draws inspiration straight from music.
Nice job bro, you really know to pen a story.
And we managed to go through an entire story without learning whether the protagonist is male or female. I'm actually impressed.
ReplyDelete@Alexstrazsa
ReplyDeleteThank you, but as of now, no. Crossfade's a fun character to write, but anything else would probably require me to give a gender to the character (which became my goal after I set out on writing this).
@Justified
Thank you.
From my rudimentary knowledge of DJ-ing (and, just like German linguists on my other story, I am fully prepared to be shown every example of how I am wrong), a 'crossfade' is the little slider that a DJ uses to switch between the two tracks that are playing. I like the name because it sort of represents finding the balance between two tracks in order to find the right sound for a mix.
@Cold in Gardez
And thank you.
Sex in My Little Pony fanfics is... fairly common. I originally had Crossfade as... one gender, but then when I came to the "You know what would demonstrate a decadent lifestyle? An ecstasy-fueled sex scene" point of writing this, I figured, "Eh... I want to do something different it." That's why you don't know either Crossfade's or the green pony's gender.
@Alexstrazsa
ReplyDeleteThank you, but as of now, no. Crossfade's a fun character to write, but anything else would probably require me to give a gender to the character (which became my goal after I set out on writing this).
@Justified
Thank you.
I hate to disappoint, but that's not the source I used for Crossfade's name. From my rudimentary knowledge of DJ-ing (and, just like German linguists on my other story, I am fully prepared to be shown every example of how I am wrong), a 'crossfade' is the little slider that a DJ uses to switch between the two tracks that are playing. I like the name because it sort of represents finding the balance between two tracks in order to find the right sound for a mix.
Still, though, you are correct in saying that music inspired this piece. I thought of the premise while driving around Chicago with two other people in a 'party car' type situation (one guy goes to sleep at like 10, so we didn't want to hit a club and it be his bedtime).
@Cold in Gardez
And thank you.
Sex in My Little Pony fanfics is... fairly common. I originally had Crossfade as... one gender, but then when I came to the "You know what would demonstrate a decadent lifestyle? An ecstasy-fueled sex scene" point of writing this, I figured, "Eh... I want to do something different it." That's why you don't know either Crossfade's or the green pony's gender.
The more I think about it, though, the more I wonder if this is really an appropriate story for EqD.
ReplyDeleteNot because of the sex or drugs -- those are fine. It's more the fact that this story doesn't seem like it has anything to do with MLP:FiM. Aside from a few references to hooves and mentioning that the green pony is a green pony, this could very easily have been a standard piece of fiction.
Which is fine. I have no problem with that. But EqD is about MLP, and I'm not sure this story really was.
@Cold in Gardez
ReplyDeleteIt's set in the MLP:FiM universe, so it's MLP:FiM fiction. Just because it's not fanfiction (as in using other people's characters) doesn't mean that it deserves any less recognition.
Besides, who died and made you king of Equestria Daily? Sethisto seems to think it's good enough to be posted, because he posted it.
@Cold in Gardez
ReplyDeletePart of me agrees with you, and especially with the reception / posting errors that occurred, I'm beginning to doubt whether or not this should have left my private folder that Google owns.
At the same time, though, I wrote this in-universe. There's a lot of deeper themes from the show. One such example would be that friends and fun are important, which is why Crossfade's so miserable doing dull work with others that aren't exactly friendly. Now, to be fair, the coworkers have their reasons for not liking Crossfade, and it's more than shyness: Crossfade's pretty much a jerk to everyone and doesn't realize it due to a lack of introspection / empathy.
Now, granted, the 'jerk no one likes' angle could have played out in any universe. But still, the Friendship is Magic universe works a bit better for this because of how important friendship seems to be as an almost tangible entity.
I'll also say what I said before: I really enjoyed writing this story with a gender-neutral main character / 'romantic interest' pair. If I translated this over to a 'standard piece of fiction,' I'd have to get rid of, basically, what amounted to a good amount of the challenge and motivation to write this in the first place.
@The_Owl
Thank you for your defense. I don't mind critiques or questions, though, even if they're meta. :)
@Cold in Gardez
ReplyDeleteThis fits in with MLP far better than any of the Noir stories that I've read on ED do.
@Nick Nack
I got the ending. But I started overthinking regarding how much the drug use played a part in the events of the story and screwed myself up.
Then I came to the realization while I was busy rereading some parts of the story and confusing myself over that little chestnut that Crossfade could be a dude or a girl (Though I think the gender of the Green pony, existing or not, is a bit more obvious. Which may be my interpretation/prejudice/whatever overriding the writing more than it is the writing itself.); and that basically just shut my brain down because my up-for-18-hours-at-that-point brain couldn't handle both reveals at once.
My forum post asking for help with it was a successful one (and I'll say that they all enjoyed reading it), so I'm gonna see if we can hammer out something as a collective before I throw my hands up and just ask about the thing I'm having trouble coming to terms with.
@TenchiFreak5
ReplyDeleteI will give you one hint: re-read the first bar scene, and pretend that it's just 4stro$RF and the bartender. Does the interaction make a bit more sense?
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteDoing exactly that is what caused me to get confused in the first place, because I realized it could work either way (lol).
Especially when I acted on a hunch and looked up what the significance of the water was (damn you and your ability to make me look shit up in response to fan fics), because that just made me wonder if any of it happened.
---Spoiler Warning, For Great Justice!---
Anyway, here's the consensus we came to:
Crossfade is a dude or a chick (I know, right?). Green Pony is most likely a girl. First two encounters with the Green Pony may have actually happened, but Crossfade is tripping so much balls at the time that he/she thinks they didn't. Second night (obviously) did not happen.
Of course, the thing with the water makes this all even harder to sift through, because then you start dealing with philosophical-level "what exists and what doesn't" crap. Basically, you broke all of our minds.
@TenchiFreak5
ReplyDeleteI came here to post something along the lines of, "That's not what I intended when writing this," but then I realized... so much emphasis, I placed, on letting people make their minds up over what happened in this story: Crossfade's gender, the decision at the end, how Mills actually feels about Crossfade... why not leave the green pony's existence up to readers as well?
In short, you have your interpretation of what I wrote, and I have mine. I'm... really happy that they're both different and yet they both make sense.
Unless Crossfade somehow hallucinated the green pony helping him/her carry all that equipment up those flights of stairs, I'm inclined to believe she had a real, physical existence for all but the final scene.
ReplyDelete@Cold in Gardez
ReplyDeleteAnd I quote:
It was an extremely awkward task to maneuver the cart up the stairs by myself. If it had been daytime, I would’ve even paid the kid in 12-B to help me get it up the stairs.
Which is saying that Crossfade CAN get the cart up the stairs on h-- own, but it's very awkward. The awkwardness makes it dangerous, which is why the usual 'safe route' of unloading everything and taking it up, bit by bit, is usually what Crossfade prefers.
It's possible that, minus the worrying about danger due to an illusion of safety, Crossfade would have 'risked' taking them up the stairs alone.
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteAgreed, but, I have to look at what is the most 'likely' thing to have happened.
It's one thing to hallucinate someone coming into your room and kissing you for a bit, especially if they had a romantic encounter with you the previous evening. It's another thing to hallucinate someone helping you cart a bunch of equipment up several flights of stairs.
Again, what's nice about this fic is that it's so open-ended. I'm not sure the gender ambiguity added much to it, but the hallucination aspect has certainly led to a lot of thought.
@Cold in Gardez
ReplyDeleteFair enough. I'll only add that, from what I understand in people with mental disorders, the mind works in mysterious ways in order to compensate for discrepancies between their beliefs in reality.
I cut out part of the scene where 4stro$RF meets the green pony outside of the apartment complex; originally, TGP threw a water bottle as part of the conversation. I liked it because it was in holding with the conversation 'they' had at the bar, but then I realized that it would've been... illogical, for 4stro$RF to imagine something that was thrown from another direction. Also, it was slowing down the pace of the 'nighttime' side of this story.
Just wanted to pop in and say my mind is now rambling on about this story due to the ending, the possibilities of the hallucinations, and genders. I really enjoyed it and like your writing style. Hope to see more of your work if you have anymore planned.
ReplyDelete@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteI TOLD YOU, MAN. I TOLD YOU.
Heh, I'm just glad my advice helped so much.
Holy crap, I had to comment on this one.
ReplyDeleteAs a club-style DJ myself I could relate to what was going on and the dual life aspect of the story. As I kept reading on, I even got a vibe like 8 mile going on, with a darker ending.
Dealing with club owners and event people is like dealing with angry sharks in my experience. My own personal decision was to leave all that behind, and this story reminded me of what life was like before I went in the direction I chose (and how hard those decisions can seem at the time).
Of all things, ponies? I got this kind of vibe from a site about ponies...? I read the story imagining cute ponies and up with such a dark and personal realization; it is SO surprising. I liked it! If I can get something out of this I figure its made someone happy.
P.S. This got in my queue cause of the Luntavia pic.
Also P.S. I used to use a NickNack sample CD when I started DJing, thats all I thought of when I saw the name.
@Anon Pony With A Name
ReplyDeleteProbably nothing this literarily artistic, at least for a while. This story was strange in that it came to me with such a prevalence and flame that I put my other work on hold in order to finish it.
I'm glad you enjoyed it, though. I do like the 'open and closed' nature of one-shots, so if I get inspired again, I'll definitely write something.
@Vimbert the Unimpressive
Hear, hear. It wasn't the first time I was reluctant to believe a reviewer; it probably won't be the last, either. Thank you for sticking to your guns and convincing a thick-headed author such as myself to make a change for the better.
@lamebunny
I'm glad you liked the story, and equally glad that I did an adequate enough job that it reminded an ex-DJ of the experience. I probably made the club owner a little nice to mirror your experiences fully, but I'll be the first to admit that I don't know the first thing about the employer/employee relationship in clubs. Did everything else turn out okay?
Also, I find that to be an uncanny coincidence that NickNack made a CD you DJed with and that, completely ignorant of the "other NickNack," I wrote a story that reminded you about the DJing experience.
P.S.: I've never seen 8 Mile. People keep talking about it, though, so I'm thinking about taking the plunge.
@Nick Nack
ReplyDelete*Celestia voice* I knew you could do it.
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteIts a really good story, I really enjoyed, but there more into it.
This might be a little bit late, but where did you get the inspiration from to create that story?, I could associate with many events that happens on my life, but there are some aspects that should be address, aspects that keep me analysing this story for about two days, no kidding.
Probable Spoilers:
Crossfade experience a Symbolic Realization during as hallucination, caused by a brief episode of psychosis trigged by an overdose of a psychoactive drug(probably meth or some sort of psychostimulant drug), which was reinforced by a constant status of psychosocial adversity.
I found it quite fascinating because, A, it closely resembles me(but not in a DJ form), and B, its really unique, which leads me to formulate the question of "where did you get the inspiration from?"
Its a really good story, the fact that it made me do all of this means that is good, I will appreciate any answers you can give me.
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteOh, I'm still a DJ. I have my turntables not more than 2 meters from where I'm sitting here. I just don't try to make money off of them. Not a single local DJ I know is able to do that for a living.
For the DJ part though, which I think you were asking about, DJing is less the techincal stuff and more the feelings and flows of what you play to me. It IS a great feeling to make a connection with a crowd and guide them on a journey with music. Little detail: most DJ's use headphones for cueing. Mixers usually only need to use one earphone to cue with, not both ears like in the story (its possible but not the common use).
As for the story with the DJ aspect aside, it was a very interesting read. I wasn't sold on it right away until the mind screw aspect crept in. I couldn't stop reading after the first night at the club. Wondering whether or not you're seeing reality is really uncomfortable (If you've ever been there... Well, its hard to explain).
@aquila13
ReplyDeleteMy inspiration for the story was... basically, I lived an extremely, extremely shitty summer. I'm not going to get into much, but I had some pretty miserable living conditions, and it really started to take its toll around the end of July. Around the beginning of August, though, I got Spotify and started listening to a bunch of Electronic/Dance music. I liked how energetic the music was, and it became my own sort of escape for a few days. This culminated in a road trip to Chicago, and a very outgoing acquaintance (I'd call us friends, but we've met twice) drove us around the city for a few hours blasting the same music that I'd been listening to. I got the back seat, but even in the roar of music, I realized that the fun I was having was an embodiment of the difference between my life with and without the energy of that type of music. I then got the idea that I wanted to have a story with two different paces: slow and fast. I figured, then, why not have a DJ who hates her day job but loves night life? The original ending to Mixed Beats was to have then-nameless DJ pony sobbing the realization "It's the only way I can feel alive," while being held by the still-nameless green pony.
Sex is the easiest and most popular thing to write about in this fandom (harrowing in its own regard), so I figured if I was going to have a night of base, meaningless sex, I needed to make something challenging about it. That's when the genders dropped out of the picture.
Then, I realized, "Man, both of my stories focus on two females hugging one another and crying at the end." I'm not exactly a fan of being a one-trick brony, but the story built up to that conclusion, so I submitted it to my pre-reading friend, Garnot. He gave me the idea on how to fix it by saying, "I'm still not certain whether or not the green pony is imaginary." I looked up the side effects of MDMA, and 'hallucination' was on the list, so... that's how the green pony became a hallucination. Then Vimbert said, "You can't just end it on the hallucination vanishing," and that's how the two choice paradigm at the end came about.
@lamebunny
ReplyDeleteEr... wow, I read 'used to use a single' as 'I'm doing something else now.' I apologize.
So, I flubbed the headphones. I've seen a small amount of DJs in like TV commercials, music videos, and movies; I've seen some holding their headphones by one hand, but I figured that one would need both hands for mixing. I was wrong, but I guess it doesn't completely ruin the story to a point where I'll have to edit it (and I don't like editing live documents unless I have to).
I'm glad that you persevered and ended up enjoying the story, though. I've never seriously been in the "is this real or is this fake" type of mindset, but I'd like to think I know enough about our brain's shortcuts to perceive reality that I don't completely take reality for granted, either.
@aquila13
ReplyDeleteThis really should have been posted before that last comment, but something goofed.
Here be spoilers.
The drugs Crossfade takes are all MDMA (ecstasy). S/he started going to clubs around age 14; s/he's been pretty gung-ho about taking them ever since getting h-- first hit at a club one night. I hinted at long-term drug use, but that has really picked up around the events of this story because Crossfade's beginning to realize that things aren't going to be getting better.
My interpretation of the events in the story, and by that, I mean 'my intention for the actions and what they meant,' is that Crossfade's subconscious is coming to terms with hating h-- life in a sort of spin off the Kubler-Ross model. I say subconscious, because s/he's not consciously doing anything about the problem until s/he admits the problem. Hiding behind drug abuse for two weeks until s/he hallucinates the green pony (from the beginning, in my view on things) is denial. H-- hatred towards a hallucination that embodies everything shallow about the fast night lifestyle is anger. Note that, while Crossfade is pretty much a bitch/douche, s/he's usually a bit less hateful towards overnight guests. I kind of skipped bargaining, but I figure that Crossfade's too proud to beg the cosmos for mercy. Depression finally sets in during the second night, and Crossfade begins to reject the night life's shallow side. Personally, I love Crossfade's reaction to the "I can do better" line; it's basically the fast nightlife telling h--, "We can have even more fun than just E'd-up sex," and Crossfade saying, "I don't want that." Finally, acceptance comes when Crossfade admits that s/he hates all of h-- life, not just the factory, and h-- subconscious says, "Okay, time to cope with reality" and pulls the plug on the hallucination.
Oh wow. When this story came up on my list, I almost skipped it... but I turned around and read it at the last second. I'm glad I did. I'm afraid I have to agree with the critique that it's not very MLP-esque (it may be set in the universe, but it could work just as well on Earth with only a few changes, largely in terminology), but it was a really enjoyable story nonetheless. A nice psychological tale, and the ambiguity involved (I must admit I didn't even notice it until I read the comments, since I'd already filled out the character's gender in my mind) adds an interesting texture to it. Good work!
ReplyDelete@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteThanks, that clears up a lot of question about the story, but there is a couple of things that I'm afraid I have to ask directly, in order to complete the full picture.
The first one would be the existence of the Green Mare, you see, there is a logical flaw that I found in the progression of events, specifically in the second night when she gets out of the night club, and then she has to deal with the trouble of carrying the equipment, at that point is when I find my contradictions, she said that it will be too problematic to get her equipment up to her apartment(hence the reason of thinking about asking for some neighbourly help), however , the hallucination helps her in the act of carrying all upstairs, the problem is that the segment suggests that she couldn't not carry that stuff upstairs, but something else(non-existing) helps her(rejecting the non-existing stuff).
The problem is that is not open to interpretation, unlike the the first night for example, when she just have to deal with the sex scene, which can be interpreted as real because the manager saw her putting her arm over the other one, or can be interpreted as the manager's reaction towards an impression of an aberrant "putting arms in the air".
The problem with the second night is that the Green pony is never identified as real, that's what everyone should know, but the real problem is to know if the green pony was a conceptual construction of her problems, or just a representation of these problems by using an existing green pony as a layout.
Ergo, the green pony and the nights might be interpreted as delusions(for me, just for me), because the validity of the real actions executed by other characters(bantender, manager and the whole DJ-ing)comes into question, because some of the actions can be consider as delusions, this aspect is reinforced by the second night, which doesn't provides an accurate representation of the events succession to determinate what is real and what is not(unless that is the desired reaction).
That's the sort of thing that only I consider, because I'm searching for a reasoning behind all these actions in a coherent way, I really don't think that the story needs some tweaks, however it would be extremely useful if you can provide me responses for these questions:
>Did the Green pony exist?, in the sense that it was real for a moment and then it was replaced by the delusion.
>If she doesn't exist, then why is it green?what tone?(fluorescent, dark green, lemma green, lyra style, etc..), or it was random selection or just some association with the DJ stuff.
>The events I mention previously were real?("The arm over the shoulder of the other pony" scene, and the "taking up to the apartment" scene).
These will be the last questions I will ask, your initial response solved several inquiries about the story and Crossfade/Astrosurf, I just need these ones to complete the full picture, thanks again for your initial response and I'll be looking forward for these ones.
I know that this sounds a bit weird, but by understanding Crossfade/Astrosurf maybe I can solve my own problems.
@aquilla13
ReplyDeleteAgain, these are just my interpretations of the story. It's a fairly open story, so feel free to draw your own conclusions.
Did the Green pony exist?, in the sense that it was real for a moment and then it was replaced by the delusion.
No. Purely delusion the whole time.
If she doesn't exist, then why is it green?what tone?(fluorescent, dark green, lemma green, lyra style, etc..), or it was random selection or just some association with the DJ stuff.
Green's the color of envy, and therefore, of desire. It's sort of like "Crayola Green," or "healthy grass green."
The events I mention previously were real?("The arm over the shoulder of the other pony" scene, and the "taking up to the apartment" scene).
Yeah, Crossfade's hugging air. Hence, the strange look from the club owner. Similarly, Crossfade can get the stuff up solo, it's just very dangerous.
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteIts all good. When people ask me what I do, I say I'm a DJ (even though I dont make money at it).
The headphones thing is extremely technical. I mentioned its just not the usual to use both ears. There ARE reasons to use both headphones (bad reverb off the walls, poor/no monitors, etc). And yeah, you do usually want both hands free.
I will watch for other stories though. I did like what I read. I just try not to read into what I read too much since its all done and over now. I'll think more on it if I re-read it again, but there are so many fics to read.
I cant believe I've posted this much over a story..
Ack! getting techincal on a pony site! Uh..! uh! Long live Fluttershy!
@Nick Nack
ReplyDeleteThanks again for the response, I should add to my original posts that I required the perspective from the creator's point of view, which is the direct source of the idea. Something that could potentially give me some ground and information to keep doing with what I'm doing and get my answers.
Having said that, I'm graceful for your response, these answer turn out to be exactly as expected, which is something extremely good for what I'm doing, I wont make comparisons between me and Crossfade/Audiosurf, however I will point out that similar situations are now clearer thanks to this.
I will continue on my own from now on, I wont need more information about it, and I will be looking forward to your next fics, in a more entertaining/less analytic matter.
That is all.
Neat story; we don't see many like this, and you executed it well (which isn't much of a surprise, considering the quality of your other stories). The ending reminded me of "Nothing But Ice".
ReplyDeleteIt's a funny thing, I came over there from the Gilda story since you plugged this one there to me and I find that I've already read it! I just never put it together that you were in fact the author of this one as well. Pulled a Derpy.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this one as well, it's quite a trip. Started to get the sense that something was wrong in it right up till it became obvious. It was a good read with an entirely different tune to your other story. Well, somewhat, both of your stories have a tendency to reflect emotions very well. Though different things are happening people still feel identifiable to me. Not just because they're like me, but I can see though process. Why they are there, and can feel where they're going.
Excellent as always.
ReplyDeletep.s.Why did you decide to use this picture ? It's deceiving.
@O. Hinds
ReplyDelete>October
How did I forget this comment? D:
Anyway, I read that story, and am honored to be compared to it, if even in a cursory manner. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
@Nyxilis
*bows*
Thank you. I try to work hard on my characters.
@jack
Heh, that picture. More trouble than it's worth, I tells you.
But really, I couldn't really think of anything else. There was a lot of stuff with Vinyl Scratch, but I didn't want people to start off thinking Crossfade was a filly. So... *shrugs* Luna.