Author: Cloud Wander
Description: Luna decides to work on her Element of Laughter. The Commander of the Lunar Guard gives chase.Tonight I Shall Be Laughter
Additional Tags: Happy, Luna, Pinkie Pie, Comedy, OC Ponies, YourObedientSerpent
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[Comedy] Winner #1 from the Happy Luna competition!
Author: Cloud Wander
Additional Tags: Happy, Luna, Pinkie Pie, Comedy, OC Ponies, YourObedientSerpent
Labels: Author: Cloud Wander, comedy, Complete, Fanfiction, Luna, OC Ponies, Pinkie Pie, Star-6, StoryShare This!
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YES!
ReplyDeleteyes and first!
ReplyDeleteThis was my favorite Happy Luna fiction. Managing to combine humor and references to the pilot, all together a very good read.
ReplyDeleteI loved this story, especially that crazy yet brave commander of the Lunarian Guard, Bucephalus. Luna is adorable and awesome D'awwwwwww!
ReplyDeleteYay for happy Luna!
ReplyDeleteYay for happy Luna
ReplyDeleteI greatly enjoyed this. I was smiling the whole way through, and the ending is absolutely perfect!
ReplyDeleteThis was fantastic. Can't think of much else to say.
ReplyDeleteLoved it =)
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ReplyDeleteAwesome story! Hope to see more of Bucephalus and more from you in the future. Oh and....Bucephalus to the fore!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful story I loved it
ReplyDeleteAll the happy luna spawned by the event pleases me. Also luna in one of pinkies hats, D'aww.
ReplyDeleteYay! I was the 50th person to rate it! :D
ReplyDeleteReading this made my face hurt.
ReplyDeleteI haven't laughed this much since Twilight October. Awesome story!
ReplyDeleteThis story left me smiling for hours!
ReplyDelete-Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria
I'd like to use profanity to describe how much I like this story, but, I'll just say it was very, very good.
ReplyDeleteI liked Luna's epiphany with the Elements of Harmony, the Brave Captain's thought processes, inside Pinkie Pie's head, the guest appearances, and the Clone High reference, (John Dark?)
Also, Pinkie Pie, being Pinkie, derailing Luna's revenge train of thought.
Also the satire of "tradition" with the Lunar Guards. Guard. (haw-haw!)
Many things to like. Is there a posting limi
best. knight. ever.
ReplyDeleteway to sneak that in, I have to say. Bucephalus to the fore!
First of the 60 entries that I've read, got to say it's utterly brilliant. A very worthy winner, the 'best knight ever' line is pure genius :D
ReplyDeleteFive point oh rating.
ReplyDeleteFIVE POINT OH.
I didn't even think that was POSSIBLE.
Bucephalus to the fore! Close your eyes and think of Equestria!
...Maid costume. Luna in a moustache is way funnier than it should be.
Jabberwocky reference! Steven Magnet cameo! Action! Adventure! Love! (Love?) COMEDY! This is a perfect storm of hilarity and dearly deserves that rating.
Beyond excellent. I can't even work up a good envy of your writing because I'm so busy being in awe.
ReplyDeleteThis is fantastic.
Excellent, excellent, exceedingly excellent!
ReplyDeleteYou know I already commented but I just remembered why I almost felt Bucephalus felt familiar. Have you read Good Omens? Because I swear Bucephalus reminds me of Witchfinder Sergent Shadwell what with being the last of a long "distinguished" company of soldiers. Oh and once again Bucephalus to the fore!
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing short story. When you've got the readers laughing along with Luna, you know you've written a good story. 5/5 will read again.
ReplyDeleteSpectacular, funny, awesome, touching. This story has it all ^^
ReplyDeleteA most excellent tale with awesome characterization. Bucephalus sticks out as one of the better OC characters I have read.
ReplyDeleteAmazing story! Read it in the happy fic post but it really does need its own spot! The entire scene of Pinkie waking up was simply spectacular! And I am sure everyone has experienced that feeling when their own Three Names get dropped!
ReplyDeleteSea monster is named steve. In the show he is voiced by Steven Magnet. I see what you did thar
ReplyDeletethat was... utterly enjoyable :]
ReplyDeleteBucephalus was awesome, ejoyed his and pinky pie's thought processes, all of it was great. definitely deserved the win.
can't wait to see Bucephalus and luna again!
My only complaint was that a Whitman reference could have been thrown in at multiple points. But hay, I'm being nitpicky, and that was a fantastic tale!
ReplyDeleteI have read this and shall rate it five stars now that it has it's own post.
ReplyDeleteThere were a few (3-4) typos and missing words when I read it but nothing that could prevent me from making sense of the sentence they were in. Maybe those are fixed now, so that doesn't even matter.
It's a great story and I could totally see that as a Luna episode in S2. It's short enough that I think 22 minutes is plenty of time to tell it in moving pictures form. All that is perhaps missing is some form of friendship report (Which would be written/said by Luna for her sister I would think.)
I really enjoyed this story, I hope to see more work from you Cloud. I also hope to see more of Bucephalus (Still not a 100% sure how to pronounce that)I really enjoyed his scene in the amusement park (Also ponies and water slides, Yay)
ReplyDelete5 Stars all the way across the sky
Beautiful story, I loved it. It was a nice change from all the sad stories I've read lately. Now I need more happy Luna stories!
ReplyDeleteI'd like to thank everyone for the many positive comments. It really makes the effort I put into this story worthwhile.
ReplyDeleteFor those of you who don't know this already, Bucephalus is named after Alexander the Great's horse. The historical Bucephalus even had a city named after him!
The name "Bucephalus" means "ox-headed", which inspired my take on the character. When in doubt, put your head down and charge!
@MobyD: While I didn't have Good Omens in mind, yes, I did think of Captain Bucephalus as a Terry Pratchett-style character (maybe a bit like Captain Carrot Ironfoundersson, particularly in his original Guards! Guards! presentation).
@Colgate55: Walt Whitman? Were you thinking along the lines of "Do I contradict myself? Very well, then I contradict myself, I am large, I contain multitudes." If not, could you enlighten me with your reference?
As for Happy Luna: I really hope that Season 2 will see her happy and among friends. I don't think My Little Pony requires a resident "Gargamel" to be interesting or exciting.
>"But, Your Highness..."
ReplyDelete>"Who's the Princess here?"
>"Very good, Your Highness."
-Yeah, put those socks on ! Everypony in socks, NOW ! It's a Royal order :D
...oh wait, this has already been done isn't it ?
Well, Luna in socks is still rather cute. :)
>Since I wish to maximize my fun level
-Made me think of the Sims games ;)
>"A pleasure to meet you, Miss Cookie,"
-And suddenly I came to realise that, well... Where are all the COOKIES in MLP:FiM ?
I mean, we hear about a lot of different sweets and pastries (in the series or in stories), but almost never of cookies ?
...someone has to make a story about that ;). Maybe a Luna VS Cookies story ?
>Banana-fanna fo-fescent >Mi my mo-mescent
>Banana-fanna fo-finkie >Mi my mo-minkie
-Huhhh... Is it inspired by some old song(s) ?
Seems like an odd music.
>"BWA-HA-HA-HA-HA!" chortled Luna, giving her black moustache a twirl.
-Ahhh, riiight... The ''Diabolical moustache of classic Evilness''. Such a powerful (and humoristic) artefact ;)
>The unicorn reached up and, to Bucephalus's amazement, pulled away his moustache. >"Princess Luna!"
-The mighty powers of the ancient Moustache artefact shown once more ! ;)
>Jocks, she thought.
-? Jocks ? *search on urban dictionary* ...ah ok, you mean ''show-off''.
Also... no 'thought/comment' from Rarity or Futtershy ? (ALL the main cast was invited, right ?)
... Well, I was an interesting AND enjoyable read :). Luna was nicely portrayed in the story. And, I found interesting that one of the small detail from the begining looped and came to ''conclusion'' near the end (the ''Am I/Will I be kindness, loyalty, etc... tonight?'') ...
@Nova25: The Name Game: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Name_Game
ReplyDeleteAlso: Rarity "So distinguished!" Fluttershy: "Yay!"
It kills me that I haven't done a Rarity story yet. She's my FAVORITE PONY, in part because I didn't like her at first.
"Best Knight Ever!" lol
ReplyDeleteCan't... stop... smiling!
ReplyDeleteI'm usually very skeptical about Luna stories, regardless of genre, but now I can't wait to go read more.
Loved it :)
I find most Luna stories tend to end in some dark place. This however, dealt with all that Luna would face from the treat of Nightmare Moon but still made me laugh. This is truly one of the best stories I have read. Well done.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. Just beautiful. Priceless, even.
ReplyDeleteLoved how Bucephalus (to the fore!) wasn't just portrayed as a crazed soldier, but actually had some sense in him, especially towards the end.
The story had me laughing openly throughout, it's surely one of the funniest I've read here. Simple concept, brilliant execution. All of my love <3
I love this story. The first place award is well deserved!
ReplyDeleteI got that major Pratchett vibe from Bucephalus (actually from the whole story!), and I loved that he lives up to his name. I always wondered if Alex The Great's horse was just named that or if he really was a total mule. Metaphorically.
"Close your eyes and think of Equestria." Pffft!
Excellent. The best part was the beginning with Bucephalus going about his usual routine, hilarious.
ReplyDeleteI needed that!!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
This story is amazing. Just amazing.
ReplyDeleteA good read, I enjoyed it, thank you.
ReplyDeleteIt was a fun ride.
I loved every bit of this story from begining to end. Bucephalus is now my favorite OC pony by far. Happy Luna is the best Luna.
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ReplyDeleteI made this after reading it. This fic was hilarious and I loved it.
I know this is a silly thing to say, but... This was beautiful. Thank you for writing it. It made my day, and maybe even my week. If there was anything wrong with this story, it is that it was so perfect the rest of ponydom will pale in comparison. Seriously. Thanks.
ReplyDelete@Rollout It's one thing to imagine something. It's another thing to see it. Woot! Woot! Woot!
ReplyDeleteI now regret not giving "Crescent Cookie" a French accent. "Ah, Pinkies Pie! Ze cupcakes! Are zhey not magnifique?"
Oh my god,
ReplyDeletePinkamena Diana Pie: Put down the detonator!
I lol'ed
THIS WAS AMAZING. This genuinely made me laugh many times. I will read this again some time.
ReplyDeleteI can see why this won first place in the contest.
ReplyDeleteIt certainly deserves it.
This was a lovely story. I wish I had given it a look sooner.
ReplyDeletevery, very nice story. sweetly concluded with that last entry on the book
ReplyDeleteThat was a really entertaining story, both for the humour and the all around niceness to it.
ReplyDeleteGotta admit, laughed almost all the way through
ReplyDeleteAwww to few comments for such a brilliant story.
ReplyDeleteVery very amusing.
I loved it ^^