Author: Featherwings
Description:In an attempt to learn friendship and make up on a thousand years of lost happiness, Luna visits ponyville for a day with Twilight Sparkle and her friends! But the mane six have their own ideas about who Luna is; can they move beyond their assumptions to discover the real Luna, or will everyone end up covered in tree sap?Giggling Moon
Additional Tags: Feel-Good, Episodic, Giggling Luna
38 kommentaari:
DAT CUTE PIC
VastaKustutaThat picture urges me to read this.
VastaKustutaRead it already ^^ It's pretty good. I loved what Luna did to Celestia at the end XD
VastaKustutaNinja ponies gogo!
VastaKustutaNinja Luna picture called to me
VastaKustutaYou like partying? You're gonna be partying...
VastaKustutaON THE MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONNNNNNNN.
The Picture is from a draw a friend(as most of them are) and only related as far as happy luna. story was excellent though, Pinkie pie getting to hit Celestia with a pie was a highlight.
VastaKustutaThis Happy luna event was brilliant, its provided me with so much more reading material. Added plenty of my list of things to read as a result.
VastaKustutaExcellently done! A joy to read!
VastaKustutaBest Luna story I've read so far.
VastaKustutaI laughed, Then I laughed some more This was a great story I truly love happy luna.
VastaKustutaAlso Pinkie pie is the greatest distraction ever, isn't she.
Really loved this story. Happy Luna us best Luna!
VastaKustutalol solid snake luna is silly
VastaKustutastory is even sillyer someone needs to draw "nightmare moose" so this story can have a more related picture
I loved it, genuinely heartwarming.
VastaKustutaMade me smile so much I had tears
VastaKustutaBest luna story I heard so far....it was very well written...it had me tears.
VastaKustutaWell done and god bless you!
This was perfect, if there was a vote on how to do a Luna episode this would take the proverbial cake! The last part almost felt like the author was in his last breath though as there was a lot of extra words added that made sentences feel awkward and mistakes as it seemed he was grateful to be near the finish of the story but still not wanting to screw it up!
VastaKustutaLike a long marathon he just made it across the finish line by an inch and collapsed, most likely proud, as would I having written such a great story! xD
I hope you had a good nights rest after this one! Oddly I didn't get far into the first place Happiest Luna story so I think I'll go back and see why this one didn't get first place! (aside from a few grammatical slip ups!)
P.S. I hope you write more awesome stories like this in the future, I loved some of the many shout outs to other fanfics in this story <3
Great job! *hugs*
That picture....... One of my >soon< to be brony friends said it made no sense. Shall be reading just becaus I personally LOVE that picture.
VastaKustutaOkay now that I read the stody I fell in LOVE with rhe story!!
VastaKustutaLove the story. LOVE IT!
VastaKustutaBut everytime I read "Banished to the moon" I just thought of that youtube video with trollestia and her rocketing people of to the moon for them not liking bananas or liking bananas. GOD sat laughing at the bus, but what do I care ^^
Very well discribed characters, I hated rarity for putting Luna through all of the dressmaking, but then I realised "She is just being Rarity" and went OK with that.
This is amongst my favorites, yay for happy Luna, and silly worried Twilight.
Looking forward for more work from you, preferably a part two.
Lets see what Twi can teach Luna :)
A lovely story indeed, it was quite fun to read and gave a warm feeling in the gut afterwards.
VastaKustutaA tidbit of advice, sometimes i had trouble understanding whose saying what exactly so you could add some "Said, replied so on"
Pie The Princess!
That was a very enjoyable read! Thank you ^_^
VastaKustuta>"It's against the rules! Parties must have cake. No cake, no parties.
VastaKustuta-Hummmm... Pinky Pie is the Super-Master Party Pony... she MUST know that 'Having FUN' is THE element #1 of a party, NOT cake.
She's very deeply knowledgeable about that, you know, not just about the surface.
>but you know X important it is
-Is the word ''How'' missing there (marked with an 'X' ) ?
>"Also, we did have ovens."
-1000Years ago... Surely she means stone-ovens, and not the electrical kind, right ?
>"We had celebrations and festivals.
-Yeaaaah, I still find it hard to believe that PINKY PIE, of all ponies in the world, would have been ignorant of anything remotely touching ''parties'' and/or any form happy-celebrations in general...
It's Pinky Pie, you know ?
>"Don't worry though, you're talking to Ponyville's resident licenced, certified party expert!"
-Well, the way the author is showing Pinky Pie's knowledge, about parties ''in general''... I'm not so sure ?
Really, Pinky Pie here is shown as if she didn't know that ''Having Fun'' was THE thing defining ''Parties'' ?
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>"I've always thought socks were cute, I guess."
-Of course they are. ;)
>I can't stand the thought of socks on someone as majestic as you! And cute?
-Huh ? What's Rarity's problem ?
One would think that she would have considered them as ACCESSORIES, no ?
>Her usual short black tiara had been replaced with a full crown
-Rarity replaced Luna's crown/tiara ? ...isn't the Royal Crown/Tiara of a Monarch/Ruler a piece that CAN'T be substitued or replaced ?
You know... the ''symbol'' of their reign ?
>'we all love mayor Vanilla Bean" festival.
-I think it's the first name I hear for the Mayor. :) Seems like a good one.
>conquring one's fear of falling.
-conquering (small error)
>They paused as Fluttershy dropped from the clouds again, again stopping to levitate above the ground.
-And so, Fluttershy discovered the joys of ''magical-bungee !'' ;)
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>Instead, Dash rose up, pulled a flip, and barreled headfirst into Luna
-Sooo...
everypony is happy...
everypony is having fun and joy to no end...
Luna is clearly, even to a deaf/blind/mute pony, good and happy...
then RD decides to be an 'ass' and incredibly dumb, and to ATTACK deliberately Luna even after seeing and knowing everything that preceded that moment... the heck ?
This make no sense, no logic to proceed that way ? RD isn't that reckless and BLIND to reality, seriously.
>“I was being safe! What if Nightmare Moon had come back, huh?”
-Seriously... I really don't see the necessity to make RD look dumb there ? Because this is really what it looks like...
-->Happy Luna / Having Fun Luna / Helping Fluttershy Luna / SUDDENLY OUT OF NOWHERE RD ATTACK LUNA ...attacking Luna, in case LUNA becomes, LATER, Nightmare Moon, which she's NOT CURRENTLY, just in case it happens LATER ?? ...(sigh)...
>I had to be sure! It was the only way to be safe!”
-By... ATTACKING HER ?! (*massage my temples* Really, Mister author ? RD isn't THAT reckless and dumb, you know ?)
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>"Surprise! You're banished to the moon. We're even now!"
-Add a pie and that will be good. ;)
>-SPLAT-
-Well, what do you know... a pie ;)
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VastaKustuta@Nova25
In the end, don't get me wrong, **overall** it's an 'ok' story... personally, I would have said 'great', IF it hadn't been for Pinky Pie's, but really MOSTLY for Rainbow Dash's ''odd'' (if not pushed to an extreme) personally, to say the least.
... Pinky Pie not knowing that much about what's really im portant in parties, and about other party-like related events ? ...
... RD being WAY too illogically reckless (and dumb), to a point where it's 'almost' painful ? ...
Sincerly, those 2(mostly RD) are far from being properly 'themselves' in this story. 1 isn't herself enough... and the other 1 is way too much something that she isn't really that much.
You know... I will give a 'suggestion', something simple and you tell what you think of it :
VastaKustutaInstead of having RD literally ATTACK Princess Luna...
->When RD is doing the rainbow trick with Luna, she would ''attempt'' to confront Luna to make her confess that she was Nightmare Moon all along, BUT!... since Luna is having so much fun flying with rainbow stuff around her and her wings... Luna doesn't see RD and go straight on her. Then, it goes as in the story, crashing in the forest and etc...
That way :
-You don't have a sudden *RD illogically attacking (Princess!)Luna out of nowhere*
-They still crash in the forest, Luna is still covered in sap, and she still throw a shield to protect RD's fall.
-Luna being the one to (accidently) hit RD will ACTUALLY give RD a justification for saying ''See ! Nightmare Moon ! I told ya !''.
-Also, it would work better with the what follow next... the 'Luna not being andry or anything' and stuff.
Pie The Princess, my new goal in life.
VastaKustuta@Nova25
VastaKustutaPinky's dunderheadedness when it comes to "the nature of a party" is not as OOC to me as you see it. I feel she is a character who has a variable train of thought which arbitrarily decides what to take literally and what as a metaphor. Also she is very compartmentalized, relating to things almost entirely through her own personal experience rather than being able to put things in perspective.
As for Dash's dumbassery, you got to keep in mind she represents the Element of Loyalty. Even if she is presented with logic to the contrary, even if she is internally conflicted, ANY inkling they her friends could be in any kind of peril, no mater how unlikely would be impossible for her to put down without absolutely being proven wrong.
However I will say that a sincere apology should have been in order and the fact that one was not presented does seem jarring.
@DPV111
VastaKustutaBeing 'Loyal' doesn't = 'Dumb', you know... Or illogically reckless, for what it matters.
It also doesn't mean being the ''Judge, Jury, and Executioner'', especially when its based on nothing but a 'vague sentiment' and a 'distant possibility'...
It's about always being there for 'someone', to always be ready to help them or to side with them, to not betray them... not about ''hunting and/or seeking possible threats to *eliminate*''.
My 'suggestion', here : @Nova25 is something that, I believe, would solve the ''anomaly'' in RD's action.
This is an adorable story! I absolutely loved this! :)
VastaKustuta@Nova25
VastaKustutaAnd in a normal well-adjusted / emotionally and mentally balanced pony you would be 100% right.
Dash on the other hand has been frequently shown IC to be overly impulsive, extremely stubborn, and suffering from bouts of anxiety. It's why I like her, the complexity of a character who' driving Ideal is Loyalty yet who's biggest flaw is major trust issues.
I loved it. It made me feel emotions. I think this could easily be an actual episode every character was written so well.
VastaKustutaThe GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor doesn't know how he missed this story! It was beautiful! The GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor approves of this fic!
VastaKustutaGoing to do my usual "drive by grammer and spelling edit". Note that I am not the best at either of these things, it is just that another pair of eyes always helps. I marked things with my initials as I read through and corrected, so I am just going to copy-paste the sentences from my copy. Sorry if the line-breaks get screwed up.
VastaKustutaMuch to Twilight's relief, the message had gotten to all of her friends, and the five of them were waiting for the Princess' arrival. After the requisite bowing and Luna’s requests not to bow they sat down to a table virtually(MPS:remove this word?) loaded with a great array of baked goods.
"We all know what a salad is, AJ." Rainbow Dash interrupted. "I'm pretty sure salads have been around since some pony decided to spill(MPS:Or "store" or "put"?) two different vegetables in a bowl."
(MPS: Indentation was missing)In Dash's defense, it was quite difficult to carry someone Luna-sized.
“Ah, so that’s what’s been falling!” Both ponies looked over to see a Pinkie Pie happily munching popcorn and watching the skydiving pegasus, tail twitching away. ((MPS: No correction here, just gotta say it is Genius!))
"Luna, my dear sister, I'm so very glad to see you've enjoyed today. It is clear(MPS)Twilight has been passing on her teachings. Twilight, my most (MPS?) faithful student, join me?"
It had been even better than she expected then(MPS).
Gah; would you believe China blocks the reply-to-comment form? Either that or I'm totally derped.
VastaKustutaAnyway, now that I'm back in the states..
Thanks to everyone who enjoyed it! I love you all; I'm planning a few more fics partly because how much people liked this one! Star five! Woo!
Also thanks to seth for setting me up with the awesome pic; even if it's totes unrelated.
But yeah, everyone who said it was rushed was right on; I had to hurry to get it in under the deadline. I barely made it, i was writing literally until 11:45 that night.
I didn't get the results until I had already left on my trip and I couldn't fix it for TWO WHOLE WEEKS cuz google docs was also blocked. (I mean, REALLY? geeze China)
I've got a list of fixes, I'll probably post an updated version tomorrow. ^^
Some specific responses!
@Nova25;
A -lot- of critisicm. I /love/ it. Letsee.. noting the grammar issues..
A professional chef doesn't need to know the history of cake to be a baker; and I always figured she'd be the type to make up a bunch of rules whenever it suited her. Still, you do probably have a point. ^^;; Might even out her charry a bit~
And Vanilla Bean isn't my name for the mayor, I stole it from Memories of Friends Who've Gone Before Us - which is one of my favorite fics EVER. Everyone should read it, it's rather short even!
About Rainbow Dash - I had my qualms storyboarding the scene and writing it; she is a bit contrived here. But I think it's only streching her character. It's still number one on my fix-list to make her seem less.. totally crazy paranoid and more rational. But she was willing to launch an old guy across the room in Best Night Ever.
Mostly, I wanted to express her mistrust in a way that builds drama, but I do agree it's a bit.. exploitative of her character. >>;
Also: moon pie. xp
@DPV
I'll take you up on the apology suggestion, it seems to fit.
@Draco Dei: thank you!~ I didn't have the time for proofreaders so I'll take your advice.
@The Thing With Feathers
VastaKustutaPre-readers? Sequals/more fanfics? Is the GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor hearing you correctly?! If this is the case, then the GREAT and POWERFUL Trevor would like to generously offer his services as a Pre-reader for you to exploit! One tries one's best at finding mis-matching information within the story, OOCness, and Grammar. One knows how to criticize without being insulting, while still being helpful. Regardless of whether or not you chose to take advantage of one, one thanks you regardless for the fic, and eagerly awaits future stories!
Wah! I'd love to! I have a few ideas congealing together in random-text-document form; and I'll be sure to take up your offer!
VastaKustuta(also: just finished all the minor grammar/syntax fixes. If it's still relevant.)
HNNNNGGGGG! *dies from a heart attack due to cuteness and happyness overdose*
VastaKustuta*resurrects herself*
Take all of my stars! Take them!
*throws stars at you*
*remembers that stars are huge gas balls burning in nuclear fire*
*stops the stars before they can crush and burn you*
*gives you a five star rating instead*
When I read this, I was unable to comment. So, unfortunately, I've forgotten everything I would have said, save for the following.
VastaKustuta*SPLAT*
Yes. So very much yes. Thank you.