• Story: Apple Whine

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    [Normal][Comedy]

    Author: Thorin N. Tatge
    Description: A silly little slice of life story! Five friends are enjoying a sleepover at Sweet Apple Acres. But can they find a way to keep Pinkie away from the alcohol without hurting her feelings?

    Apple Whine

    Additional Tags: Short, Sleepover, Silly, Whining, Alcohol
    Thursday, August 4, 2011 op
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    34 comments:

    1. Streek471August 4, 2011 at 9:04 PM

      Wine coolers.

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    2. TenchiFreak5August 4, 2011 at 9:07 PM

      Oh boy. I love Pony stories involving Friendship Lubricant.

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    3. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 9:12 PM

      haha the ending was awesome. fun story to read, even though it was lacking a certain character of the mane 6 in the storyline.
      great work nonetheless.

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    4. showmetheblueprintsAugust 4, 2011 at 9:14 PM

      Haha, why does the Mane 6 (and Big Mac) drinking alcohol feel so right?

      And the ending was hilarious.

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    5. ArdashirAugust 4, 2011 at 9:17 PM

      Great little story but that ending -- does weed even affect equines?

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    6. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 9:29 PM

      I read this yesterday.

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    7. frostedWarlockAugust 4, 2011 at 9:32 PM

      @Anonymous

      Everyone knows that Fluttershy is a mean drunk. She refuses to get near the sauce.

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    8. NTSTSAugust 4, 2011 at 9:41 PM

      I really liked the dialogue in this piece, it was very well written, especially the back and forth between Rarity and the other ponies, the author clearly has a talent for her speech in particular.

      Now that it's pointed out, however, where was Fluttershy?

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    9. Star Winged BritAugust 4, 2011 at 9:45 PM

      I really wanna know what Pinkie Pie and Rarity are like drunk now.

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    10. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 9:51 PM

      Ganja?! Oh shit.... Just wait, next slumber party, she's breaking out the brownies. Course, I can kinda see AJ pulling a Willie Nelson and smoking an apple bong. Actually, Pinkie NEEDS weed to chill her out. I know a guy who's really mellow all the time. Then the cops scoped him out and he had to ditch his stash... Two days later he was skipping down the street singing "Follow the Yellow Brick Road..." Some folks need it. That, or Ritalin.

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    11. BitmunAugust 4, 2011 at 10:08 PM

      That was remarkably silly. You have your whining Rarity down to a tee.

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    12. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 10:12 PM

      Nice story, but the ending... Eh...

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    13. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 10:13 PM

      @Unknown
      Fluttershy doesn't drink, and the slumber parties get in the way of the animals needs. But she does dabble in other things.......

      Hint: Who the fuck do you think Pinkie got the weed from?

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    14. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 10:21 PM

      Ahahah! That was great! I really enjoyed reading it.

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    15. C. Theron VulpinAugust 4, 2011 at 10:26 PM

      Rarity's whining actually had me cringing, and I was just reading text! Goodness man, you're an expert! Well done.

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    16. Yaro KasearAugust 4, 2011 at 10:53 PM

      I've been a friend of Thorin's for a while. He's definitely got a talent in creative things. This is the first story of at least maybe four or five he's told me he's planning on doing.

      I won't give any details on the other stories, as one incoming one is potentially going to be very epic that I know the full plot to, as I more or less helped him develop it through role-play and the like.

      In short, keep an eye on this author, I can personally vouch for him that his stories are gold and a good amount of you will just love what's to come.

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    17. JetfireAugust 4, 2011 at 11:35 PM

      Five enthusiastic stars. I could totally hear every pony's voice!

      The ending is also great, just ignore the haters. And I agree with one of the above comments: Pinkie totally gets her weed from Fluttershy.

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    18. ThorinAugust 4, 2011 at 11:49 PM

      Thanks for the kind words, everyone! :D If a little piece like this can get such a nice reception, I'm rarin' to write a longer one!

      As for those of you wondering where Fluttershy was--she isn't really the all-nighter type. I figure she keeps an early bedtime and went home hours ago to tend to her animals and her *ahem* medicinal garden. ;)

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    19. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 11:55 PM

      This was just so... perfect! I loved the little time skips between the debate, and Rarity's whining... brilliant!

      Also, I am fairly sure Applejack's quip about why you wouldn't want to live in a fair world just won a place in the quote hall of fame. that entire back and forth was great!

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    20. AnonymousAugust 5, 2011 at 12:15 AM

      @Ardashir ...Yes.


      Well, I know they can get High, anyway...

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    21. SIaanmeAugust 5, 2011 at 12:20 AM

      "Teetotally awesome. "

      Thank you sir for giving me a new way to describe myself. And the fic was aweome as well. 5.

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    22. AnonymousAugust 5, 2011 at 12:38 AM

      How about we have Pinkie bake some special brownies for everypony?! :D

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    23. Nova25August 5, 2011 at 12:59 AM

      Oh boy!

      Possible drunk pony(ies) and the Comedy Tag ?

      Will surely be great, can't wait to read it... tomorrow. 3AM here, already ?

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    24. AnonymousAugust 5, 2011 at 8:02 AM

      I'm thinking Zecora would be the dealer, not Fluttershy. Two reasons, 1: she lives out in the forest where she can keep an eye on her crop, and 2: she is the one who makes all kinds of "natural remedies"

      side note: Zecora would have the awesomest sales pitch ever! Rhyming dealer!!

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    25. KoshLovesYouAugust 5, 2011 at 8:21 AM

      Oh jeeze. You got me with that ending. Masterful presentation of a Rarity/Applejack willpower struggle, too, as well of Rarity having fun at Twilight's expense.

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    26. McBehrerAugust 5, 2011 at 1:01 PM

      IS FUNNY TO ME

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    27. Nova25August 5, 2011 at 2:55 PM

      @Nova25
      Well... it's was mildly funny, but really not 'as much as' I thought it will be... and the alst line makes me raise an eyebrow.

      I think it could have been funnier, surely.

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    28. KmScMTAugust 5, 2011 at 7:16 PM

      This is probably the most depressing story on the site. Poor Pinkie...

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    29. Nova25August 5, 2011 at 7:43 PM

      @KmScMT
      Ha ha ha, oh funny joke ;). It is not, and by far.

      Ever read : The Empty Room ? ...yeah.

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    30. WierdplatformerAugust 6, 2011 at 1:43 AM

      That was goofy to say the least.

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    31. ThorinAugust 8, 2011 at 12:13 PM

      @SIaanmeYou're quite welcome! If you actually do use that phrase, I'll be tickled...pink!

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    32. ThorinAugust 8, 2011 at 5:45 PM

      @SIaanmeYou're quite welcome! If you actually do use that phrase, I'll be tickled...pink!

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    33. AnonymousAugust 11, 2011 at 9:05 PM

      Although I'm sure your longer stories are good, it was refreshing to read a short and sweet story. I want another short story like this only I want to see your interpretation of drunk ponies. Congrats once again.

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    34. FlintLockAugust 12, 2011 at 12:31 PM

      MLP with alcohol and drugs? Seriously, there's something very disturbing about that.

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