[Sad] Poor Pinkie Pie...
Author: Present Perfect
Description: How could Pinkie Pie have forgotten her own birthday? When you've had birthdays like she has, maybe some are worth forgetting.Pinkie Pie, and Nothing More
Additional Tags: psychological, MPD, birthdays, facing your demons
27 comments:
I feel like I've read this before...
ReplyDeleteI know that I have, I was able to predict everything said, even entire lines...
Has anypony else read it before?
Doesn't change the 5 I'm giving it.. but still.
This fic has an incredibly interesting premise, but the ending lacked something... I just can't put y finger on exactly what. 4 Stars.
ReplyDelete*my
ReplyDeleteThis story was good. Like, really good. It just didn't quite have the punch you come to expect from a story with the [Sad] label.
ReplyDeleteIt was meh
ReplyDeleteThe title reminds me how badly we need a pony version Edgar Allan Poe's "The Raven". It could be called "The Parasprite" or something.
ReplyDeleteWow. That was sad, deep, and gives a new perspective on the Pinkie/Pinkamena chasm that DOESN'T involve her being latently homicidal (fuck you Cupcakes). I actually really like it.
ReplyDeleteYou're breaking my heart with that picture, Seth.. </3
ReplyDeletePhew! I finally made it back! I fell off the EqD wagon around the middle of June and have been clawing my way back to the present for the past week and a half. i didn't read any fics, but watched every PMV or at least started ones that I didn't want to finish, read every nightly roundup and looked through all the drawfriends from then until now. I had to adjust the older pages to show 200 posts each, and it was still over 5 pages!
ReplyDeleteThis is the post I caught up to, and the first fic I've read in over a month. I liked it, good writing!
What's this? Pinkie Pie having psychological issues that DOESN'T involve grimdark? Blasphemy!
ReplyDeleteOH dear... I do hate pictures like that. I know its natural to see different emotions... I just hate seeing any of the mane 6 that way. I'm going to read this story soon.
ReplyDelete*Clop Clop* Good job! :D
ReplyDelete7 stars for this one! Oh wait... SETH?! WHY YOU NO MAKE 7 STARS?!
... Looks like you'll just have to go with 5. :P
Oh well...
Anyway, Good ob! I really liked it and you touched on Pinkie's emotions really well. I thought the personal note helped the story along rather nicely, even though it wasn't technically part of the story it gave some insight behind your reason for writing this. Anyway, good job!
-AdmiralCubie
P.S. Seth- I know it isn't really your fault there isn't an option for seven stars. :P
A very good story about the other side of Pinkimena without killing someone. xD I liked it a lot, though I'm more a fan of longer stories, but I like a short story every now and then. A good length with details of WHY it's going on and a somewhat decent conclusion (I just don't like how quickly Pinkie comes to live with the fact that Pinkimena will never leave).
ReplyDeleteOverall: a solid 4/5.
If nothing else, I'm impressed by your range as an author.
ReplyDeleteI liked this. It did a good job explaining why Pinkie is the way she is without jumping off the cynical slope (not that there is anything inherently wrong with that, but it is something that requires a good amount of setup), and her actions and thought patterns are (for the most part) quite believable.
I'm not sure if I quite agree with this interpretation of her character, but you've made a fairly convincing argument for it nonetheless.
When I saw the MPD tag, I wondered if it was going to be a Pinkamena vs Pinkie rehash. It wasn't; it was better.
ReplyDeleteReal personality disorders take years, sometimes decades, to heal, even with intensive therapy. They involve lots of self-talk because they live in the verbal memory. Real MPD doesn't involve a true split, but something more akin to shifting hats.
I love how Pinkie's parents are presented here. Hard-edged, unyielding as the rocks that are their talents, but caring enough for their daughter to move her from where she was. It has that mix of caring and miscommunication that makes it feel like FiM. I love the plot twist, presented at the perfect moment in the story. I love that Pinkie isn't completely whole at the end.
I liked this a lot.
ReplyDelete5/5
I usually shy away from all fics tagged [Sad] - being a perpetual coward - but I decided to read this one since it was apparently short. Test myself, as 'twere.
ReplyDeleteAnd I don't regret it for a second. I don't really feel like trying to dredge up any "but"s here. I really, really liked it. I like this take on Pinkie, and I liked its execution.
Thank you for writing this!
I liked it, it was an interesting take for pinkie, without being murderous or anything. Though I couldnt show it to my friend, he loves pinkie pie, and doesnt want her "IM SO HAPPY" facade ruined for him, thats why hes stayed away from cupcakes.
ReplyDelete@ZAquanimus: ZAq, you probably read it when I was spamming #EquestrianStudy with the previous draft.
ReplyDelete@TenchiFreak5: That's maybe the best compliment I could ask for. Getting into fanfic with MLP, I've been trying to do a lot of different things, give my take on some of the tropes. I'm glad things seem to be going well!
@Anonymous: And I don't actually know anything about psychology!
@Cloudy Skies: Thank you for giving this a shot! I'm glad it was a worthwhile risk for you!
Oh and look at that; I just figured out how to include comment anchors.
Dat... Dat picture D:
ReplyDeleteI here you about the whole birthday thing. Two more years and I turn twenty, and I feel that I've wasted my youth on loneliness and working.
ReplyDeleteOverall, I really liked it. It's an interesting take on Pinkie's character and it read very well. Stylistically, there are a few instances of passive voice that are distracting, but other than that it was well done.
ReplyDeleteHmm... I usually like Pinkie Pie/Pinkamina fics, but this one was missing something. The beginning part was very well done and completely believable, but the inner monologue/dialogue between the two seemed very... out of character? The word choices seemed rather stilted compared to the silliness of Pinkie Pie and the bitter, sarcastic nature of 'Pinkamina.' I can't see either of them having very 'analytical' attitudes or speech patterns like were displayed in this fic. I actually lost track of who was who halfway through, even WITH the different type-facing.
ReplyDeletePerhaps sprucing up the inner monologue with Pinkie Pie pacing around, looking at things, or generally just interacting with her environment in a mindless way would also help the pacing. I can't see her just standing there staring into a mirror for five minutes, even when she was 'Pinkamina' mode. Even in Party of One, Pinkamina displays a high level of energy, running around, getting her 'friends' cake and all that sorta stuff.
This was a good attempt, for sure. I don't want to discourage you from writing in the slightest! I'm just trying to give you suggestions on how you could make this play out a little more naturally and in-character. I hope my suggestions are useful and you consider them worth considering!
1. Happy belated birthday. :)
ReplyDelete2. I like the fic, even though you maybe went a little bit too far regarding the changes of Pinkie's character, I have to say you did it in a good way; she's not a total nutjub, but in conflict with herself, trying to understand her inner demons by analysing her past. Well done.
SyrinKitty: If you lost track halfway through the monologue, it's probably because the italics switch characters as regular Pinkie "takes control", so to speak. So, kind of intentional, but I do apologize regardless.
ReplyDeleteInteresting backstory to Pinkie, but... it just felt flat.
ReplyDelete.......I have come to a conclusion. Pinkie needs a hug.
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