Author: Nightbreak
Description: After Applebuck Season, Applejack's pretty banged up and is ordered to take it easy for a few days. Of all ponies, it's Rarity who has an idea about how to make her feel a bit better.Pain In The Tail
Additional Tags: Hurt/Comfort, Applejack, Lotus, Insane Epilogue
49 comments:
YAY! More Lesbian ponies! Zippity-FRIGGIN-Doo-Da!
ReplyDeleteI derped... 6_9
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteNot like there's a huge roster of male ponies to work with.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteRule Idea: No Shipfics
Huh? I don't follow....
ReplyDeleteInsane indeed.
Great story! .... THAT ENDING???
ReplyDeleteI honestly don't see it as very shippy.
ReplyDeleteAnd I agree with Derptastic: THAT ENDING!!!
Wat.
ReplyDeleteIt's like someone wrote a story, then decided "This needs more robots"
So they added robots.
My brain is derp.
Huh, so far so good... Decent pacing, the characters personalities seem consistant with their canon selves... So far, so good. Just a little piece of fl-
ReplyDeleteWait, epilogue time...
What?
What?
WHAT?!
http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_li7z4c8vr91qafrh6.jpg
Suddenly, robots....
ReplyDeleteWell, that was certainly, something.
ReplyDeleteTransformers? In My Little Ponies?
ReplyDeleteIt's more likely than you think.
Banged up? So shes pregnant? No? Then gtfo you did it wrong
ReplyDeleteThis was great until it got unnecessarily crazy at the end. The ending kinda ruined it all. And it´s also not shipping.
ReplyDeleteDid somebody edit the ending as a prank? Please tell me it was a prank.
ReplyDeleteWell that was...interesting. Not really shipping.
ReplyDeleteBut it took me a few seconds to realize that there is something really off.
Why is there transformers in my MLP?
First I was like Whoa!
ReplyDeleteThen I was like whoa.
And then I was like...whoa...
Lovely story; it's rare you get to see Applejack being vulnerable.
ReplyDeleteAnd that epilogue was, indeed, insane!
There is random, end then there is that epilogue.
ReplyDeleteI like it :)
"Oh, spice and cinnamon, that rattled her teeth!"
ReplyDeletehow
HOW
HOW did you manage to so consistently match up Applejack's characterization with the show? It was a real joy to get in her head for a bit <3 <3
also . . . . MARES! DIG! GI-ANT RO-BOTS @.@
Well that was a rather nice story, a nice little bit of character development, now, 3 months later... What?
ReplyDeleteAlways nice to have a bit of random thrown in.
A great story about Applejack getting a massage. Didn't really notice any shipping, though.
ReplyDelete>"Will you catch me if I start going down again?"
ReplyDelete>"Always."
D'aww!
...Tell me there's a Part 2 coming. I *have* to see where the delightfully sudden influx of insanity is going. :)
ReplyDelete@wolfemann
ReplyDeleteYes, my brain has come up with a sequel, after I hit 'complete'. :P Rainbow Dash is up next!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI decided to tag it shipping, although I did also say that the shipping is 'if you tilt your head, squint, and wish really really hard'. Think of it as Applejack being open to considering her options. When someone takes away your pain, you see them in a different light.
Wait, whaaa?
ReplyDeleteThe story was absolutely brilliant. I thought Applejack was fantastically represented, as was Rarity.
ReplyDeleteThe ending utterly ruined it.. can only give 3 stars.
@Anonymous @ 6:57 and others
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading. I'm very happy you found the main body of the story to your liking. Applejack would be the last person to visit the Luxury spa, so I wanted it brought to her. :D
If you hate the epilogue, then I am sorry. I may have gotten caught up in an idea and tried to extend it too far, but perhaps Rainbow Dash's story will explain a bit more, once I get that written.
Also, I couldn't resist, really. I mean, Hasbro did give us Applejack's fugly pink truck toy for a reason!
It was either that or Rainbow Dash discovers that the Wonderbolts are cyborgs and that her dream to join them would mean being 'upgraded' (Idea free to a good home. :P)
This was a great little story (aside from the incoherent epilogue, which I ignored - sorry, NB, but it simply didn't fit with the rest of the story in any way shape or form. Should probably be part of a separate story).
ReplyDeleteHowever, I too have no idea why this would be called "shipping". Applejack just got a massage and made the accquaintance of the massuse. You could call almost any interaction between ponies "shipping" by that standard.
@Bryan
ReplyDeleteI don't blame you for feeling that way, on either count. My comment on the Applelotus being 'if you tilt your head, squint, and wish very hard' just didn't make it through the tagging process, I think. I may have been too general in that assessment.
I saw the ending as more of a "Life goes on" sort of thing, even if that life includes battling Transformers, one of whom is apparently the pink truck that comes with the Applejack toy.
ReplyDeleteI liked it, but that crazy ending threw me for a loop. That was too bad, the story was otherwise symetrical and well paced!
ReplyDelete@KoshLovesYou
ReplyDeleteThanks. ... and give me some time. I might yet redeem myself for that last bit. :D
Why hello there WTF ending.
ReplyDeleteWell the only interesting thing that actually happened was the epilogue. Sorry to say but that was a very boring story : /
ReplyDeleteThis is great. The look into Applejack's head and the intimacy of the massage were pleasures to read, and while the fic didn't end up being very shippy, you've now got me thinking about Applejack and one of the spa twins and that's probably going to cause some trouble down the road.
ReplyDeleteBut that epilogue alone deserves all the stars. You are a mad genius.
While I greatly enjoyed the read, I can't really say anything that hasn't been said before: Not really shipping, very good look into Applejack (and I totally read this in her voice) and what drugs exactly were you on while writing that "epilogue"?
ReplyDeleteGood story, coherence a bit ruined by the LOL LOOKIT ME SO RANDUM ending. 4/5 - 5/5 for the main story, to be honest.
@Anonymous at 2:39
ReplyDeleteIt was sort of a pre-emptive shipping tag. I was anticipating people saying 'why isn't there a shipping tag on this?'. Of course, now I have "Why is there a shipping tag on this?'
There was some reasoning behind the 'madness' of the epilogue, but I understand that it really feels random. But I'm afraid I had that crack from earlier on ED about Applejack's pink toy truck being a Transformer stuck in my head and there's a very nice pic of the Lotus twins being badasses. It just sort of merged. Like I said, let me see if I can make some sense out of that for you all with some time.
Patriot Dash: Oh, dear. Sorry you were bored. I do appreciate you taking your time to slog through it, though, plus leaving the comments.
Uncle Friendly: Glad you liked it from beginning to end. That sort of surprise isn't everyone's taste and it's a lesson I keep learning.
Dat ending
ReplyDeleteScrew that noise.
ReplyDeleteThe story was wonderful, Applejack seemed spot-on and Rarity seemed quite Rarity-like, for what we did see. And the description of tension flowing out of AJ's body wasn't just effectively written, it was relaxing and soothing to read. Hell, it actually made *my* spine feel better just for reading it.
That ending was awesome. Sure, it was crazy-crack out of nowhere, but who the hell says we can't have bizarre crossovers? We've already had Fallout, Doctor Who, Dragon Age... If you can't have GIANT HOOFING ROBOTS in ponyville, you also can't have a blue police box, I say.
Hell, I'm trying to write up something that has Luna poisoned or feverish, and hallucinating the Mane Six as reformed Hell's Angels on a vengeance quest.
Yeah, totally called the ending.
ReplyDeleteTo clarify my earlier post... Yeah, the ending is a random bag filled with doorknobs and WTF smacked directly in your face, but I got a good laugh out of it. The main story was good in a calm, realistic way and the epilogue was good in it's "WHAT THE CHRIST AM I READING?!" zaniness. Five stars.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteUhhh... "banged up" means injured. "Knocked up" means pregnant. L2P, noob. :)
I didn't read any shipping at all in here, seriously.
@Anonymous @ 2:15
ReplyDeleteI tagged it shipping to head off the questions of 'why isn't this tagged shipping', but instead I've ended up with 'why is this tagged shipping?' I guess I was being pre-emptive for something that didn't really materialize. However, if people wish it, it could be. You just have to really be wearing goggles. :D
not really shipping, and the epilog was...strange. kind of tacked on. really I feel it hurt a otherwise very good normal almost episode quility fic.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteYou're mostly right. I probably should have let the fic sit another day or so and really consider whether or not the epilogue was right for the situation. I usually do, but I think I rushed this.
Yeah, I'm with the others, see no reason for this to be marked shipping, and it isn't really random either except the part where you gave me LSD at the end.
ReplyDeleteApart from that it was an interesting story. :)
At first I was annoyed by that ending, but then I was like, "Well, if your gonna start something, you better finish it!" So yeah, now i'm super curious about what the ending would lead to. Oh, and the actual story was eh. Nicely written, but rather boring and pointless, especially thanks to THAT ENDING.
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