[Sad] "POST IT WITH A VENGEANCE." - Pre-reader #13
Author: Somber
Description: What does it mean to have a dream? What does it take to hold onBlood, Sweat and Tears
to that dream and make it a reality? And what does it cost when it's
all taken away from you?
Additional Tags: Background, OC, Happy Ending
43 comments:
Sounds interesting.
ReplyDeleteY U MAKE SAD PONY!?
ReplyDeleteBut seriously good story
Applejack and Big Mac story...i'm tempted, but that OC and sad tag aren't encouraging me...
ReplyDeletebut it has a happy ending
ReplyDeletesee that tag!?
~Good End~
ReplyDeleteFor some reason i feel like making a farm.
ReplyDeleteVery nice. Not as good as Simply Rarity, but still entirely worthy of 5 stars.
ReplyDelete>Happy Ending
ReplyDeleteOkay, I'll read it.
Wait, it is the same person who wrote Simply Rarity...yeah, okay, i'll read it.
ReplyDeleteI hate sadfics.
ReplyDelete...but I don't hate this.
I liked this, I didn't find it particularily sad per-se, but perhaps that's because My thought processes differ from some. Of course I felt more moved by Simply Rarity, but I loved this story too.
ReplyDeleteI especially liked the nods to the whole Circle of Life thing with that last scene and all that. Good job Somber.
Inventig the move is a little too much IMO
ReplyDeleteI love these character pieces you write. Big Macintosh comes across as a bit unsympathetic, but aside from that, it's an excellent piece to go with the others.
ReplyDeleteVery nice.
ReplyDeleteI will say that there were one or two 'Taints' where there should've been an 'Ain't' and a few other tiny grammatical errors like missing apostrophes, nothing that would ruin the story though.
Overall, I think this is good story, I believe the beginning was a bit too slow but I still gave it 5 stars!
ReplyDeleteOkay, I read it...yeah, it wasn't up there with Simply Rarity (Which is still probably one of the best pieces i've read on this site) but it was a great story, probably helps that Applejack is my favorite pony though.
ReplyDeleteNot sure if I'm double posting, sorry if I do.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, a very well done story and one that I can relate to in many ways due to the kind of business that I am involved in with my dad. A lot of what was written and followed as a result can be pretty much word-for-word the story of my life.
It's great to see the lesson of anything worth doing takes hard work pay off in such a satisfying and happy way by the end of the story. And I will admit that I did shed a tear or two...<_< >_> I have paperwork to get to.
Darn good read there. Sad a bit, but glad it had a good ending.
ReplyDeleteI read this and it really got me thinking how Applejack has had one of the most difficult lives of mane cast. I mean after all, REAL farmers have pretty tough lives with constant labor. She was always my favorite character, really honest and simple. She is WINNING because she's got pony blood and she's bangin' 7 gram apples cuz' that's how she rolls. Can't WAIT to see her in Season 2!
ReplyDeleteThat was excellent. :D
ReplyDeleteSlow clap for this piece right here.
ReplyDelete*clap clap clap*
Well I'm glad that some folks liked it. Sorry I couldn't make it better. Thanks for slogging through it.
ReplyDeleteWow. Where do I start? How about how this is f*cking AMAZING! Exceptionally well written. Six star material, bar none. Maybe I'm over enjoying it because Applejack is my favorite character, but that doesn't mean I don't know a great piece when I read one. Excellent work with this.
ReplyDeleteIt had a few bumps though. Mostly spelling/grammar mistakes. Probably typos, but still errors nonetheless. Also the constant skipping had me confused for a bit, but after a while I got into the feel and pace of the story.
Regardless, this was amazing. It deserved the Sad tag. Manly tears were shed. I had to stop and dry them so I could keep reading!
TL;DR, this story is f*cking amazing. Applejack was characterized exceptionally well, and the plot added some much needed back-story on her and her family.
Five Stars. Deserves 6.
Oh my... I love this story!
ReplyDeleteIn the middle, I cried harder than I ever had on ANY fanfic I have read on this site. It did deserve the sad tag.
But this story was just awesome!~ I love how this told lots on Applejack's (2nd fave pony <3) past.
It was long and I stayed up late reading it, but it was worth it!
Like the person above me said, it had some typos and confused me a bit, but I eventually got it.
AND the happy ending also made me shed a tear, for that was the perfect ending!
5 stars. Ayup.
Im so sad.. but I am so happy too! What a great story, 6/6 stars for sure :)
ReplyDeleteto be an alicorn made me weep tears of sadness.
ReplyDeletethis is the first time I wept tears of joy.
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ReplyDeleteSpoilers (for Simply Rarity, not this story :P)
ReplyDeleteHeh. Here's really something. I've been reading fanfics for months now. I've read hundreds and hundreds. I reckon I read between 150 - 400 pages of fanfic a day, depending on what gets released and if I am in the mood to re-read something or not. When something gets released, I click on the link and I read it. Usually I leave a comment. I almost never pay attention to the author tag. Which is horrible, I know.
Today was one of the rare times I did pay attention to the author tag and it was the very first time I went "Awesome! he wrote something new, this should be good!"
And I wasn't disappointed. I see a lot of comments comparing this to Simply Rarity, and finding the latter better. I think I enjoyed this story more. The ending wasn't quite what I expected, and yet it still was in a way. And that is probably why I like this better, what happened to Unique in Simply Rarity really bothered me.
Its interesting though, it is again Twilight who talks to AJ about everything (though I have little doubt the farmer pony will explain the significance of everything to her other friends as well). I don't know if you will write more of these stories for others of the mane 6. But I can't help but wonder if Twilight is going to be the one pony everypony else has complete faith in if you do. The one pony they all reveal one of their deepest secrets too. In a way, it would be kind of beautiful. The one pony who was sent out to make friends turns out to be the central pillar of support for the ponies who embraced her friendship when she first arrived. Well, I probably read to much into this. Twilight doesn't quite grasp the impact of what this means for AJ after all, its different then the diary from Rarity. We saw all that happened to AJ, she did not. Its not as strong for her I reckon.
I don't know why you are so hard on yourself when it comes to writing. Simply Rarity already received a very well deserved 6 stars. This is a 5 star easily, and I won't be surprised if it reaches 6 stars as well. It is in my book. Looking forward to your next submission. You know, I would love it if you would have an author tag on here. Just so there is an easy way to see all of your work with one click.
Thanks Baree. I really needed to hear that someone liked this more. The response I got from Simply Rarity was really overwhelming and I wondered 'is this going to be the best story I'm ever going to write?'. I don't have much, and for the first time in years I can write again. (Now if only I use proper grammar...) I don't want it to dwindle away again.
ReplyDeleteAs to the story, next is Pinkie Pie. I am dreading writing Pinkie Pie... I'm trying to do one stand alone for each of the mane six and Spike. I'm writing from the perspective that before Twilight Sparkle came along none in the mane six had many real friends. Just as they made her stronger, so to did they make each other stronger as well.
Anyway, that you so very much for your response, and for everyone's response. I can't get better if I don't know where I messed up, and I need to get better. Next in the pipe is Chapter 9 of PotP.
This is a fantastic story. Pulls at emotions and warms the heart. I could feel the sense of pride beaming through Applejack as I read this. Wonderful work.
ReplyDelete@Somber
ReplyDeleteWell, I already saw someone offered to be a grammar nazi for you. My English isn't perfect either, but I am confident enough I can be of some assistance, so if you'd like another I'd gladly volunteer.
I reckon Perils would get more exposure too, if you got an author tag. I would ask Seth about it. And make a google doc with links to your various submissions, that is what he asked for a while ago.
Also, Perils doesn't have a star rating in the archives, which is probably something Seth simply overlooked. According to its page, it has a 4-star rating, but that is incorrect as well judging from its total stars. It should be a 5, if not a 6 star by now. I've actually debated sending a mail to Seth, but the poor guy is already so busy :P If it displayed the rating it actually has I'm sure you would get more readers.
Yup, that was a sad fic all right. I've, uh, got something in both eyes.
ReplyDeleteQuick question: A few times I was reading this I was led to believe that it took place in the same "continuity" (so to speak) as Simply Rarity, to the extent that it seems like the obvious conclusion to make. That being said, is that the correct assumption to make?
ReplyDeleteIn regards to the story itself, I think it was every bit as good as Simply Rarity. I still slightly prefer that story over this one due to the journal format that it adopted, but this one was every bit as powerful and well-written as that one was.
It also had a certain *something* that Simply Rarity didn't have, but I'm having trouble thinking of a way to describe it.
Coming back, I think there is one minor detail that bugs me. (A very insignificant one, but I it just popped into my head)
ReplyDeleteFirst, SPOILERS
Why were the parents in separate rooms when they were dying, i'd imagine them wanting to be together.
@Baree: I'm finishing Ch9 now. I'll pass on your suggestions. ::Crosses fingers::
ReplyDelete@Tenchi: Yeah. It's usually fair to say that these one overs are my takes on the characters. For instance in another fic, Rarity references Silvercrest. I hope that's okay.
@ Pinkie Pie. I honestly have no idea. It just seemed awkward to have 6 of them in the same room trying to have multiple conversations. I can just say that when they were brought in to the house folks weren't thinking. I didn't want applejack to hear what was being told to Big Macintosh. So I guess we'll just have to chock it up to that.
Oh God, the unmanly tears.
ReplyDelete@Somber
ReplyDeleteOh, don't get me wrong. Its not a problem.
If anything, this sharing the world with Simply Rarity just adds that much more to both stories (even if they never truly "interact," per se). I just wanted to make sure I was on the right track.
Great story, thank you for the read.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, great story, it had a great impact on me and are one of the greatest fan-written pieces of literature I have read in a long time.
ReplyDeleteAside from what might be slight grammatical errors of speech pattern inconsistencies I see nothing negative to take note of.
However when all of this is all out of the way, i find it inconsistent canonically that the little Meadowlark would have known about zebras, considering the fact that none except for Twilight recognizes Zecora as a zebra (and that is when she first sees her.)
The second inconsistency, this might just be me remembering wrong though, appears when Applejack 'invents' applebucking, since (again, I am not 100% sure that this is explicitly stated) the apple family has supposedly been applebucking for several generations.
For the story as a standalone though, it fitted nicely.
Hope this has been some useful input.
Fantastic, I loved it. Twas a very touching piece!
ReplyDeleteI knew from the moment I started reading that this story would make me cry...
ReplyDeleteI was not prepared.
But then again, Simply Rarity had me sobbing like a baby too.
I give it 6 stars.
Hey Somber, great story.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of the better written fics on the site, I can't think of how I would improve anything you wrote about. The imagery in the last scene is stunning. What I do have qualms about, thought, is that the plot is... unexciting. I should probably say I didn't feel as compelled as I would with other fics I've read. There weren't jokes so I didn't laugh, this didn't make me as sad as I think it should (It's 4am and I read Simply Rarity today, so maybe I'm sadded out). I felt like I was following the story, rather than being IN the story.
Still, the backstories you paint for each pony is awesome, keep up the good work.
I'm confused. I was using the advanced archive guide thing and clicked "complete," "Sad," and "Rainbow Dash," and this was an option, even though it doesn't list Rainbow Dash on any of the tags nor the description. I see how the complete and sad parts apply, but I'm looking for Dashie stories right now and I'm not sure if the guide thing was very accurate in taking me here... Sure I'll come back and read this later, but at the moment I think there was a glitch in the system or something.
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