• Story: Apples From a Foreign Land

    [Shipping][Adventure] This is actually a commissioned story for a brony and filly who met thanks to ponies! Grats guys!

    Author: HiddenBrony
    Description: Twilight Sparkle receives a letter from the Princess explaining that it's time to start teaching on her own, and Twilight soon finds a red unicorn stallion in her home! However, a chance meeting with a local mare has the new colt in town head over heels, with Twilight vying to keep the unicorn on his studies!
    Apples From a Foreign Land Chapter 1
    Apples From a Foreign Land Chapter 2: The Apple Falls
    Apples From a Foreign Land Chapter 3: Far From the Tree Part 1
    Apples From a Foreign Land Chapter 4: Far From the Tree Part 2

    Additional Tags: A story for David's love

    "For that special pony girl that has to leave so soon. We'll meet again, don't know where, don't know when, but I know we'll meet again some sunny day."

    20 comments:

    1. Even the description makes you have to daaawww.

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    2. Love this fic, and I can't wait for the conclusion.

      Flint is a very... unique character, that's for sure.

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    3. ALSO SETH YOU DERPED CHAPTER NAMES

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    4. SHIPPING WITH NO LESBIONIC PONIES?!? sign me up

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    5. Wow! Congrats guys! Also- liked the story. er... most of it. :D (Not finished)

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    6. Seth, chapter names. Derp.

      Also, Hiddenbrony? I did not know he had found love via ponies, or love at all. Good for him. I won't read this though, a promise I've made to myself; don't let stories take all your time.

      I have enough stories to read in my PC review thread and friends' stories, along with ATTEMPTING (ARGH!!!) to write my own.

      I actually only read like 2-3 stories here on Equestria Daily and that's it. Unless the concept, description, picture, idea and rating is good I won't give most stories a chance.

      Of the ones I read ATM are FoE (DUH!), Divergence and The Empty Room (mediocre, but interesting story. 4-star story, not 5-star at all though. It calls Sweetie BellE for Sweetie Bell! WHERE IS THE E!?)

      Seth, derp, chapter names, derp.

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    7. Awwww <3
      Fandoms are magic cause of stories like this. I also met my wife through a fandom. That was way bofre MLP tho.

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    8. Y'see, it's shit like this that makes me glad I am a monstrously fast reader. Just read this on my iPod on my break at work, and I'm damn glad I did. B
      Now I can beat the homeless with a smile and a warm fuzzy feeling ^^

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    9. lol La Barata.

      This one makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside. But so does this flu I have.

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    10. @DaveIt really is quite the achievement. You'd be amazed how hard it is to be cheery when an enraged drunken bum is swinging a whiskey bottle at your head

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    11. @La Barata This reminds me: I wonder if Patrick Bateman would like ponies.

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    12. @Kim Fluttershy Dykas

      I have no idea on what to take away from your post, only that I remember you from PFA.

      Kinda sad to see so many kneejerk 1-stars the moment this got posted up, and thanks to everyone who gave the story a chance! It was good fun to write.

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    13. Flint's personality... We need to go DEEEEEEEEPER

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    14. Good story but... I'm sorry, Flint Crux? ugh... every time I read that name I cringed. dude, that is not very pony name worthy. not to be overly critical but it sounds so lame, like your trying to hard to make a cool name. Firelight, Risky, Starry Night, Vivid, Rosy Night: all decent pony names for Flint that aren't screamingly human sounding. (i like Risky as a name...)

      Otherwise though, great read, only on second chapter though. look forward to the other veeery long chapters

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    15. Can't do it... new character is too... I don't wanna say annoying, but his characterization is like 10 degrees off, if ya get me. I guess I'm just superimposing the mane casts personalities onto them when I read, so that makes them seem normal, but flint is just sooo... off. like it doesn't fit right with the others... just IMO. makes it weird to read

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    16. @HiddenBrony I can tell you what I got from @Kim Fluttershy Dykas I was misspelling Sweetie Belle! Of all the unforgivable mistakes! (Interesting that he deigns to comment when he doesn't read and doesn't comment at all when he supposedly does.)

      Anyway, to your story, which I did read.

      I think it was sweet. I liked the ending... it's cool to see that there wasn't an immediate like for each other and that it took time for things to develop, and still it is only a beginning of sorts for the two.

      The Sleipnir was a good addition :) brought good memories of depictions of Odin.

      Anyway, good stuff! Thanks for sharing!

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    17. Not bad, although I gotta say it would be a LOT better if it could be reworked; hone Flint's character, flesh out the story more thoroughly, rewrite all the wordy parts, ect. Other than that, it was cute.

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    18. I was struggling a bit with the "dryness" of the dailogue until my head started rendering all Flint's lines in a faux Russian accent.
      Then it fit together much better.

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