• Story: A Walk in the Sun

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    [Sad] Lyra and Bonbon better be canon for season two!

    Author: Melionos
    Description: On a perfectly sunny day in Ponyville, a wintergreen unicorn visits an old friend.
    A Walk in the Sun

    Additional Tags: Short, Bittersweet
    Thursday, June 16, 2011 op
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    31 comments:

    1. Tim Van RoeyenJune 16, 2011 at 10:11 AM

      Very smoothly and flawlessly written.
      You did a very nice job on not telling us who the main character is straight away, which only increases the touching effect the story has at the end.

      5/5

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    2. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 10:15 AM

      they will never ve canon :(

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    3. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 10:16 AM

      Amazing! Loved the descriptiveness everywhere, and the ending was so sad, yet so amazing. :)

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    4. NinestempestJune 16, 2011 at 10:17 AM

      Great exposition, paced perfectly, no names actually dropped which is perfect, and comes to a slow and well-done conclusion.

      Kind of boring, for me anyway, but it does drum up enough emotions on it's own, so there's that.

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    5. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 10:19 AM

      Oh... oh my...

      Manly tears just happened...

      Such a touching little story.

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    6. NinestempestJune 16, 2011 at 10:22 AM

      SETH

      AUTHOR TAG SAYS SADDLESOAP OPERA

      AUTHOR: MELIONOS

      IS THAT SADDLESOAP

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    7. Narwhals' BendJune 16, 2011 at 10:50 AM

      Lyra and Bon-Bon stories are the best, well, after TwiLuna and Twixie stories of course!

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    8. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 10:52 AM

      Girl-on-girl stuff is SICK.

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    9. Delta PangaeaJune 16, 2011 at 10:56 AM

      Gah, horseapples.

      I'm not very emotive. I don't cry much, I just get quiet.

      I'm not crying now, but I'm certainly teary.

      *sniff*

      No, I'm not crying... I'm not. Stop looking at me like that.

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    10. MaximillianVeersJune 16, 2011 at 10:56 AM

      Want to read...

      But first thing in the morning, just before work...? Bad idea...

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    11. Silver ManeJune 16, 2011 at 11:27 AM

      Confound these ponies, the drive me to manly tears.
      That was a beautiful story, an instant favorite. Even though I knew what was going to happen before the end of the first page, it was still a hard-hitting scene. I think that I want to request this for the dramatic reading now.
      Ex Mortem Vita.

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    12. PureZOOKSJune 16, 2011 at 11:48 AM

      I think that it was a very well written story with an interesting plot. However it made me confused for a bit that it was Lyra BonBon Octavia story, the author didn't say that it was Lyra, nor describe her other than "unicorn".
      But aside from that, it's still a beautiful story and made me smile.

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    13. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 12:07 PM

      Sadly, it will never be canon.

      If it was, all of the moral guardians would come out of their holes and protest how this show is "corrupting our children!!!11!"

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    14. PhoeJune 16, 2011 at 12:17 PM

      @NinesTempest

      You have no idea how much trauma Saddlesoap has caused us when tagging sadfics. "Ok, time to write the tags. It's a three letter word so I'll just type it out." And then Blogger sees this and says to itself, "Why, I do believe that pony is attempting to type out Saddlesoap Opera's author tag! Auto complete to the rescue!" It's a tragedy and a travesty.

      Anyway, it doesn't seem like I get to comment on stories very often anymore, so let me just say that I enjoyed this. It's melancholy and sweet and genuine, and I don't need my objectivity goggles to see that.

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    15. GeekthrasJune 16, 2011 at 12:18 PM

      I feel a sudden urge to play some Debussey... La Filly aux Cutie de Lindt?

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    16. ShadowFox04June 16, 2011 at 12:23 PM

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    17. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 12:48 PM

      Assume spoilers, though I tried not to be spoilery.

      A nice little sad-fic. Till the end. A bit, I don't know, mundane way of loosing anypony but it's more realistic that way. A bit over the top in the whole 'ages of sadness' but I guess? Why the other pony was there, though ... I can see the first but the second? Unless it's a favor for a friend. I'd suggest telling everyone the color of the first pony, though maybe you were trying to hide her identity? If so, Seth and his tags/pictures ruined it. YOU RUINED IT! And why was she buried where she was? A few questions that kinda stuck out for me but they didn't need answering to make this a nice little sad-fic.

      But the end, well. I had to have a lol. That end killed the sad for me. Sorry.

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    18. MrMaertaJune 16, 2011 at 2:20 PM

      *SPOILER ALERT* ONLY READ IF YOU'VE READ THE STORY!

      I'm sorry I didn't quite understand the ending. Does this mean that Bon-Bon was killed during the Gala while pinkie pie sang the pony pokey? If not, please do tell.

      Even though, great story!

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    19. Sunset RoseJune 16, 2011 at 3:09 PM

      It was a very beautiful short story and I enjoyed it. I must say I didn't quite understand the timing of it.

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    20. MarkeithJune 16, 2011 at 3:21 PM

      @MrMaerta

      More likely the Pony Pokey was Bon-Bon's favorite song or something like that.

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    21. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 3:30 PM

      Spoiled the story for me with the pic and the description. I knew what was going to happen before I got done reading the first page, in a story that apparently was going for a dramatic reveal.

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    22. NinestempestJune 16, 2011 at 3:33 PM

      @Phoe
      That sounds like one of the most painful experiences anyone has experience in recent times. Oh well.

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    23. Present PerfectJune 16, 2011 at 9:09 PM

      Agh, why so sad! Why did she need to die? ;_; I feel empty inside.

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    24. SaddlesoapJune 16, 2011 at 9:15 PM

      @Phoe

      All is ashes! If only I had known my name would sow such discord - ALAS!

      Seriously though...sorry, my bad. Sounds irritating. : /

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    25. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 11:48 PM

      Of course it won't be canon. It's junk like this that makes bronies look like pervs. Jeez.

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    26. TenchiFreak5June 19, 2011 at 11:45 AM

      @Anonymous

      *raises eyebrow*






      A good story. The use of descriptions rather than names for the entire thing was a nice stylistic choice that paid off in dividends at the ending. Perhaps a bit too short for its own good, but on the other hand perhaps it wasn't.

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    27. specter114June 25, 2011 at 8:00 PM

      After reading this I think I almost cried learning that one of my favorite characters died added to the picture was almost unbearable.

      Now that we got that out of the way, very good job, easily a 10/10 or even an 11/10! You never know! You should really consider making one with Colgate(the pony, not the tooth paste) in it.

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    28. PixelbitAugust 20, 2011 at 4:05 PM

      Sure, I'm posting a bit late, but I'm just scrolling through the older stories.

      Anyway, this story is wonderful. The absence of names gives it a nice solemn touch, and the story itself is tear-inducing (although I may just be saying that as a huge fan of Lyra, Bonbon, and Octavia.

      Major props to Melionos for giving us a great way to spend a couple minutes!

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    29. AzariasOctober 5, 2011 at 3:18 AM

      This was a good short story.

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    30. KaseOctober 14, 2011 at 7:41 PM

      *cries*

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    31. AnonymousDecember 10, 2011 at 2:21 AM

      This story made me cry... so bittersweet, so sad... The one thing that made it sadder was that I am a huge fan of Lyra x Bon-Bon...

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