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    [Sad] Sad Derpy time!

    Author: AdmiralCubie
    Description: Bright Eyes, the mailmare of Ponyville was just an ordinary mare- well, other than her eyes of course, and her language.
    Unashamed


    Additional Tags: Derpy
    Thursday, June 2, 2011 op
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    27 comments:

    1. OleetarJune 2, 2011 at 9:06 AM

      If previous fanfic is anything to go by, sad Derpy is a winner. Must read.

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    2. KyradrenJune 2, 2011 at 9:09 AM

      At first, I was revving up some tears, but then I read it and was all like "Mate. Hell. Yes."

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    3. shmoogyJune 2, 2011 at 9:12 AM

      will there be muffins?

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    4. BareeJune 2, 2011 at 9:13 AM

      Eh. It written well enough, but its rather short and the general premise is overdone.

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    5. ScribblesJune 2, 2011 at 9:13 AM

      Very nice man. Very nice.

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    6. RedCoreJune 2, 2011 at 9:14 AM

      Short, sad and good.

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    7. DoombahJune 2, 2011 at 9:17 AM

      I dug it. It pulled at some heart strings.

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    8. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 9:27 AM

      awesome. it almost makes me wanna stop calling her derpy.

      not quite as awesome as the other sad derpy fics, but thats an impossible standard anyway

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    9. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 9:28 AM

      I read like Bubbles for the most part, but it's still pretty good.

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    10. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 9:28 AM

      Uh, was the dig at religion really necessary?...

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    11. Lectro DubJune 2, 2011 at 9:40 AM

      Eh, it started off good, but then all the parts just kinda clashed. Moving too quickly, summarizing too much. The entire story seemed well off topic from how it began.

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    12. Nova25June 2, 2011 at 9:41 AM

      @Anonymous
      Are people still afraid from the last 20th May ? Really ?

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    13. RedCoreJune 2, 2011 at 9:44 AM

      @Nova25
      Didn't you hear?
      He had calculated wrong with 5 months. So if we start joking with religion now, we will never enter paradise!!!!

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    14. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 9:49 AM

      Seemed like nothing more than a way for the author to project their own hangups. Garbage.

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    15. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 9:53 AM

      Very much enjoyed.

      I think the point of the religious content was not a dig, it was a comment on how one learns to stand on their own, as Bright Eyes ends up doing. Not a revelation for everyone, granted, but I enjoyed it.

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    16. TenchiFreak5June 2, 2011 at 9:57 AM

      Didn't really feel much for this one. There's certainly the potential for a really good story here, but none of the content was really fleshed out enough.

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    17. McBehrerJune 2, 2011 at 10:34 AM

      Just to clarify, the douchebag who predicted the Rapture is NOT a Christian, nor does he represent us in any capacity. Just because one person makes an ass out of himself doesn't mean we're all psychotic nutballs.

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    18. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 10:40 AM

      Just one quick thing that most will probably overlook, but it bugs me since I have lazy eye. It's not that you only can see from one eye at a time, it's that only one eye has any focus, the other eye is treated strictly as peripheral vision.

      Barring that detail, it was an enjoyable quick story, but then I've got a real soft spot for our lazy-eyed mare.

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    19. mbulshtJune 2, 2011 at 1:58 PM

      I wouldn't say the author was digging at religion. Her throwing her religion away was a tool to allow us to understand more about how she thinks. I'm sure the author meant no offense.

      In this story, Bright is not a stupid pony, she is a simple pony. She does the things that seem logical to her and has developed her own system of beliefs, and her own system of communication.

      The author has a pretty good one-shot here. Thought I would have liked a little more detail, and in some places I felt the author was just spouting exposition so he could get to some later bits. Not that I want this to be a multi-chapter work, I would just like to see a little more time put into some of the scenes, like her hospital scene.

      Overall very good. MOAR PLEEZ?

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    20. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 2:21 PM

      The story has been done before, which isn't an issue since everyone is entitled to their versions, but for that reason and others, I simply didn't like it.

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    21. AdmiralCubieJune 2, 2011 at 2:24 PM

      I feel kinda guilty posting on my own fanfic but I felt that I had to reply to what mbulsht said.

      He has it completely correct in the first paragraph- the religious dig was just to give a bit more insight into Bright and how she thinks. I'm sorry if I offended anypony- I try to keep anything religious out of my fanfics.
      Also, I understand where those of you who wanted more detail are coming from- I am aware of this problem in many of my fanfics. I need to not rush certain parts.
      As far as more goes I entered in a short about Fluttershy called, "Dear Diary," but I think they thought it was to short and rejected it- at least, that's what I caught from pre-reader response. But yeah...
      Kthnxbai.

      -AdmiralCubie

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    22. Shadow PhoenixJune 2, 2011 at 3:27 PM

      All I could think of at the ending was "Break My Stride" playing in the background.

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    23. AnonymousJune 2, 2011 at 6:05 PM

      All I have to say is,
      awwwwwww.

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    24. AnonymousJune 3, 2011 at 8:54 PM

      @McBehrer

      ah, the "No true Scotsman" logical fallacy

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    25. bubsAKAverminJune 6, 2011 at 3:09 PM

      Good story, but I'm not liking how a lot of people are seeing Derpy as being an idiot. I prefer to just have Derpy as an excellent mailmare with a minor lazy eye, nothing more, nothing less.

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    26. blitzthedragonJune 6, 2011 at 4:24 PM

      I like this concept a lot. It could have been longer and more detailed, and the past-present tense was inconsistent. I really, REALLY wished this story had brought the "God has betrayed me" undertone full circle with an eventual resolution, because that would have to come naturally with self-acceptance.

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    27. AnonymousAugust 5, 2011 at 12:52 AM

      Very touching story. It was so nice to see her overcome her hardships!

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