• Story: Tabluna Rasa (Update Complete!)

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    [Normal][Shipping] "I was told to post this 'like a motherf^cker'.  I don't see how's that relevant to the plot, but here's another Luna story to make up for it."  If you'd be so kind.

    Author: Slaanme

    Description: After a thousand years in the moon, and even longer of not being yourself, how do you remember what you were truly like? Princess Luna isn't sure who she is anymore, and tries to rediscover herself through how others see her.
    Tabluna Rasa Prologue
    Tabluna Rasa Chapter 1: Dreams of Adventure: Rainbow Dash
    Tabluna Rasa Chapter 2: Dreams of Love: Fluttershy
    Tabluna Rasa Chapter 3: Dreams of Repentance: Applejack
    Tabluna Rasa Chapter 4: Dreams of Fabulosity: Rarity
    Tabluna Rasa Chapter 5: Dreams of Parties!: Pinkie Pie
    Tabluna Rasa Chapter 6: Dreams of Bonds: Twilight Sparkle (New!)


    Additional Tags: Character Exploration, Blank Slate, Luna, Dreams
    Tuesday, August 2, 2011 op
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    114 comments:

    1. Torrential RainsJune 10, 2011 at 12:09 AM

      I get the Tabula Rosa reference.

      It fits, and I approve.

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    2. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 12:24 AM

      I just read all 3 documents and I like them. Chapter 1 and 2 both have that, "Its a dream" feel. Fluttershy waking up in chapter 2 and saying what she said was a bit of a surprise.

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    3. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 12:30 AM

      Tabluna Rasa ... the title alone deserves 5 stars.

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    4. ZettaLuxJune 10, 2011 at 12:33 AM

      Haha I loved it so far. I wonder what Pinkie's dream will be about...

      As for Rainbow's dream: John Madden! And Fluttershy... Oh my.

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    5. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 12:34 AM

      Prologue: Oooh, dreamscape stories~~
      2: MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON BAAASE! :D
      3: .... oh my..... excuse me, I need to.... uh.... walk over pavestones. Yes, that clopping nosie is being made by my hooves..... on pavestones! Yes, pavestones!

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    6. BareeJune 10, 2011 at 12:41 AM

      *Grin* That second chapter was amusing. Feel kinda sorry for Fluttershy though.

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    7. UnknownJune 10, 2011 at 12:44 AM

      I only realized after finishing the first three installments that the title was "Tabluna Rasa". I just read it as "Tabula Rasa" and didn't think twice! lol...

      But the Luna quote at the end of the Fluttershy dream was epic. "Wait, three times this week? But it's only Monday!" The moon base one was good, too. I hope that all the chapters end with something cute and funny like that. XD

      This is clearly on it's way to six stars!

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    8. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 12:46 AM

      Hidden reference, bioshock fans? "would you kindly kill andrew ryan?" ya its kinda lame, whoo hoo

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    9. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 12:54 AM

      Fluttershy is not a filly-fooler. Except with Pinkie Pie. Anyway, yes, humor. Good job.

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    10. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 1:03 AM

      'DAT FLUTTERSHY !

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    11. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 1:05 AM

      It's okay, Luna. I want a moon base too.

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    12. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 1:43 AM

      "Rainbow Dash!" *Lifts hoof to the corner of her mouth* "Welcome to my moon base.."

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    13. Lurks-no-MoreJune 10, 2011 at 2:07 AM

      I wonder if Pinkie will turn out to be a lucid dreamer? It would make so much sense, you know...

      Dash's dream is fitting, I think - she's eager for glory and adventure, and *hates* betrayal, so Luna would make a grand villainess for her to be a hero against.

      Fluttershy's dream I was a little surprised by, but thinking about it, I can see this happening.

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    14. AndrewJune 10, 2011 at 2:39 AM

      I'm quite loving this and really looking forward to more. Especially Twilight Sparkle's. :)

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    15. AndrewJune 10, 2011 at 2:41 AM

      Also, the reference to Final Fantasy: Advent Children was quite epic.

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    16. krypqeJune 10, 2011 at 3:39 AM

      @Andrew

      I'm glad I wasn't the only one who got it!
      *brohoof*

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    17. ShmoogyJune 10, 2011 at 4:58 AM

      lunas new moon base!

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    18. SIaanmeJune 10, 2011 at 5:08 AM

      Author here. Just want to say thanks for the positive response thus far, I'm glad people are enjoying it. As it said in the prologue, I do appreciate constructive criticism, so do tell me if there's something that's not really working.

      Additionally, yes, it has a shipping tag, but that was pretty much just for Chapter 2. I don't have any plans for any other shippy chapters.

      So here's hoping you enjoy the other chapters as much as I enjoy writing them!

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    19. ShmoogyJune 10, 2011 at 5:13 AM

      haa chapter 2 was jus silly keep it comin Slaanme

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    20. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 5:32 AM

      When will the next one be out? :(

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    21. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 5:34 AM

      For those who dont get the title reference.

      Tabula rasa: the epistemological theory that individuals are born without built-in mental content and that their knowledge comes from experience and perception.

      WIKI MAKES ANYONE SOUND SMARTSY.

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    22. SIaanmeJune 10, 2011 at 5:44 AM

      @Anonymous: It'll be done when it's done. And that depends on any number of real world factors. Stupid real world, always getting in the way of my Pony...

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    23. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 5:45 AM

      The sidebar says Tabula Rasa. O U

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    24. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 7:31 AM

      I'm giving this 5 stars for the Fluttershy Dream alone.
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      *clopclopclop*

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    25. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 7:35 AM

      appendix to post above:

      I WOULD give it 5-stars if the star rating thing would actually appear >:[

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    26. blacksevenJune 10, 2011 at 7:40 AM

      Hmm, I think Luna should have recognized Fluttershy from Dash's dream. Just a nitpick but little things like that establish continuity between chapters (at least to me.)

      Also, not that I'm into clopping, but Fluttershy (and the rest of the mane cast) are at age of majority, aren't they?

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    27. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 9:14 AM

      Pfffffft–

      Oh lord, the moon base and "it's only Monday" had me cracking up. Shouldn't this be tagged as comedy as well?

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    28. Shadow DragonJune 10, 2011 at 11:23 AM

      I loved the Final Fantasy reference and how Luna wants a moon base. The only bad thing about this story is what Blackseven pointed out. I think Rainbow Dash did say Fluttershy's name during her dream, so Luna should have known her name. Still though, absolutely great story. Can't wait to see how the rest of the dreams turn out.

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    29. LordOfTheWrongsJune 10, 2011 at 11:29 AM

      But I thought you waaaaanted criticism! :)
      I have some fairly nitpicky editor-type notes. Would you like me to post them here, or email them to you, or annotate your Gogle Docs?

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    30. AnonymousJune 10, 2011 at 12:57 PM

      Oh, I get it. Even know I now know the premise, outcome, and means, I still want to read more, comma.

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    31. MrMaertaJune 10, 2011 at 3:58 PM

      Haha, interesting concept tbh.
      I enjoyed the first chapter, mede me think about Moonbase Alpha.
      The 2nd chapter was funny! It was hilarious!

      Keep up the good work!

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    32. Janne NurmelaJune 10, 2011 at 9:25 PM

      This comment has been removed by the author.

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    33. SIaanmeJune 11, 2011 at 2:51 AM

      @blackseven: Oops, did not notice that. Umm, give me a sec, I'm sure I can come up with some sort of weak excuse explaining that...

      @LordOfTheWrongs: Feel free to email me. It's simply my screen name (siaanme) at hotmail.

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    34. ultra8June 11, 2011 at 3:33 AM

      The Moonbase and "It's only Monday!" jokes had me on the floor. Very nice set up, can't wait to see what lurks in the rest of the Mane6's heads.

      Poor The Other One, they really need to get around to naming the other 4 Wonderbolts(or 16 if you count that one scene from the VIP area).

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    35. AnonymousJune 11, 2011 at 2:21 PM

      Why is it that now I want to read an actual shipfic between fluttershy and Luna? Author, what have you done to my brain, because I kinda like it.

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    36. richfilesJune 11, 2011 at 11:10 PM

      "Now I want a moon base" and "But it's only Monday!" were truly epic. I've not laughed so hard reading a fic in ages.

      I don't know why, but I find the living in a hopeless internal fantasy Fluttershy to be a very believable Fluttershy. I half imagine her to be the type who would endlessly fantasize about the one she desires, but always being too shy to ever act upon it. It actually makes some sense in a sad, but cute way.

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    37. AnonymousJune 12, 2011 at 2:43 AM

      Apples... honestly, if I was AJ, come morning, I'd be a little creeped out.

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    38. AnonymousJune 12, 2011 at 6:01 AM

      The Applejack dream had a D'AWWWWWW ending.

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    39. blacksevenJune 12, 2011 at 9:49 AM

      "Applelanch" was pure genius.

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    40. BareeJune 12, 2011 at 10:44 AM

      Hmm.

      I loved the Applejack chapter. However, it doesn't feel like a dream. At all. Its more a normal story. The Pinkie Pie and Twilight bit certainly doesn't help. "Meanwhile, across town" in a dream?

      Still, like I said, I don't really want you to change it. It is a very enjoyable chapter to read as it is :P

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    41. AnonymousJune 12, 2011 at 4:53 PM

      APPLELANCHE!

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    42. SIaanmeJune 12, 2011 at 7:26 PM

      @Baree: I knew that would end up breaking the whole dream feel, but I liked the idea of Luna kicking an apple tree in the Library too much to ignore.

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    43. AnonymousJune 12, 2011 at 11:31 PM

      AJ's a down-to-earth pony, so it makes sense her dream is fairly normal. Except the kicking the tree into the library thing. That's definitely dream physics.
      Love the story so far. Can't wait for the rest.

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    44. AnonymousJune 13, 2011 at 9:25 AM

      Pinkie Pie has got to be a lucid dreamer. Or maybe Twilight will be.

      Fluttershy is just dreaming up material for her writing career.

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    45. AnonymousJune 13, 2011 at 2:09 PM

      Great stories so far. Rainbow Dash was slightly amusing; the others leap up in scale like the Filly Fantasy joke.

      Fluttershy's dream was cute. Applejack's dream got me snickering to myself repeatedly, especially with the 'Twitchy tail!' scene shift. I was actually rather surprised, as I anticipated it would be more of a sadfic from the title. Not that I'm complaining about it being a gladfic, though.

      The only thing I predict is that Twilight will have an idea of who Luna was pre-Nightmare Moon; regardless of how fragmentary said idea is.

      And is it 'Nightmare Moon' or "Night-Mare Moon"?

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    46. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 12:14 PM

      Hope no one reads comments before the chapters because that first one with "Now I want a Noon Base" while picturing a frowny faced Luna saying that had me laughing for a good while.

      And why do I keep reading these Stories with a sort of Fluttershy voice only with a hint of an English accent??

      Speaking of which chapter two caught me by surprise, in a few ways!
      1) I was expecting a heat to heart moe scene with the two girls talking about their fears and likes.
      2) The fact that some how that seemed to fit Fluttershy far as fantasying about her desires, like how bad she wanted Luna lol!
      and 3) "THREE TIME!?! BUT IT'S ONLY MONDAY!"

      Idk Fluttershy and Luna seem to go great together but it seems in most stories she's got the whole Nightmare vibe speech going or a really cute more intellectual out spoken Fluttershy speech vibe.

      Sorry if that sounded weird or made no sense and for the length but I felt it worth mentioning anyways.

      Chapter 3 btw is AWESOME. "Oh but I replanted them and only 'half' of them upside down!" "Applelanche!" and the off shoot scene with Pinkie and Twi is just priceless, and IMHO because I've had plenty of dreams drift off in some such ways, I can totally see it fitting in with the dream and how she knew without seeing it land that it hit town.

      I am really wondering how your going to do Rarity's and Twilight's. Pinkie well I'm bracing myself for a few laughs but imo she seems to be pretty good as taking peoples feelings into consideration when she does things.
      I doubt she'd see Luna as an evil tyrant, a lover, or cupcakes, or a big meanie mcmean pants.

      Idk and this has gotten pretty long so can't wait and hope to see this story through to it's end great job! <3

      chapter 1 4of5 Stars the bits of comedy at the end earned it an extra star but was a bit too slow for my taste but kudos to that FF:AC ref. Still the Austin Powers one was epic.

      Chapter 2 5of5 stars I almost blushed yet was too busy laughing in the bed scene as that quickly got too much thank goodness Fluttershy woke up before 'it' happened. Also LOL at going to TWILIGHT for COUNCILING on what her dream meant!

      Chapter 3 5of5 It was too Applejack, and that was both a good and bad thing but gave it 5 anyways because of how she saw Luna being an over powered klutz! and the Twi Pinkie scene was a nice flavor to the whole thing.

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    47. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 12:15 PM

      "Now I want a Moon Base" I meant dang typo's =_=

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    48. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 3:41 PM

      Great story so far, I love it! Moonbase, only Monday and the Applelanche left me laughing on the floor for minutes! I even dare to compare this story with Progress...

      btw. Why do I have the feeling that Pinkie's dream will end with her leaving Luna to warn Twilight about a falling apple tree?

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    49. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 7:53 AM

      @Anonymous

      Because she cares not for the 4th wall.

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    50. AndrewJune 17, 2011 at 11:10 AM

      Sorry I didn't read this sooner! It's well written, funny, and heartwarming all at the same time! Wonderful work!

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    51. CoffeeGruntJune 25, 2011 at 3:43 PM

      Applelanche? Dear Celestia!

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    52. AnonymousJune 25, 2011 at 4:02 PM

      What the...when I click a link it sends me to the Google Docs homepage.

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    53. Rated-R PonyStarJune 25, 2011 at 5:05 PM

      Damn...just damn

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    54. HawaiianShirtedPonyJune 25, 2011 at 6:31 PM

      Shindig reference!

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    55. zaptiftunJune 25, 2011 at 8:27 PM

      Looking good thus far (nice Firefly reference in Chapter 4).

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    56. AnonymousJune 25, 2011 at 11:12 PM

      MOOOOOOOOON BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASE

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    57. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 12:37 AM

      These stories literally get better with each chapter. The only criticism I can really offer is that I felt that the prologue was a little to exposition-y, a bit too far on the telling the audience the big picture side of things, as opposed to the showing the audience the effects and letting them piece things together for themselves. Still, this isn't really a criticism so much as an opinion, and it definitely felt like you did that on purpose; it certainly helps get the story moving faster, at any rate.

      Rainbow's chapter was... well, fitting. I dislike seeing Luna in a negative role, so I'll end it there.

      Fluttershy's chapter was possibly the cutest little cloptease I've read, and though I'm sad that it was so one-dimensional, and that Flutter's affections wouldn't be returned, I enjoyed it.

      Applejack's story was great. I loved the dynamic between the two, and even though the story's been done before, you pulled it off well.

      Rarity's chapter was easily the best of the bunch so far. Even though I wasn't a fan of stuck up Luna at the beginning, I ended up loving everything about the story. You did an amazing job with Luna's "rough exterior" characterization here, and though I thought Rarity was a little too willing to leave all her friends behind for the chance at Canterlot, that's really the only criticism I have of the chapter.

      Overall, I absolutely love what you're doing here. You say that this is your first fanfic, but it definitely feels like you've done a good amount of writing before. I love how in every new chapter the characters get more and more complex, moving from Rainbow's action movie to Fluttershy's... fantasy... through AJ's aesop and now with Rarity you're actually writing full, fleshed out characters whom I want to see more of (I especially enjoyed the little complications from Rarity's fluttering heart!). At this rate, by the time you crank out Twilight's chapter, you'll just have a magic portal suck us into the computer and drop us off inside a fully realized version of your Equestira.

      I've really done any non-academic writing, but I can't imagine that it's easy ramping up the complexity like you're doing, much less completely re-writing Luna as a different, more complex character each chapter. Slaanme, you're doing a great job, and I can't wait to read more from you. Keep it up!

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    58. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 12:39 AM

      ^ I [haven't] done any non-academic writing. Stupid Anon-eyes can't proof-read.

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    59. AnonymousJune 26, 2011 at 11:49 AM

      Man, if Luna had guessed Candle Jack in the Applejack story I would ha-

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    60. AnonymousJune 28, 2011 at 1:11 PM

      The shipping in the Fluttershy part was hilarious. But it felt kind of tacked on in the Rarity segement

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    61. AnonymousJuly 2, 2011 at 3:15 PM

      I was liking the Fluttershy one, too bad she denied that one hardcore... Shame :)

      lol would love to see that.

      Great stories too, Really passing the time :D

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    62. RaiserxiJuly 9, 2011 at 11:44 AM

      These are very well written, and did anyone else get the radiata stories reference in fluttershy's story?

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    63. CoffeeGruntJuly 18, 2011 at 7:57 AM

      I can't wait for the next update. :3

      I wanna see Pinkie's insane visions of Luna. :D

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    64. Lucas BrönnimannJuly 24, 2011 at 3:10 PM

      That was a really good interpretation of Pinkie's forth wall breaking powers. Pinkie didn't break it to make a silly joke, it was a lot more elegant than that. Really liked that ending of the dream.
      The prank was pretty foreseeable with the acquisition of fake blood beforehand though.

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    65. nifboyJuly 24, 2011 at 3:31 PM

      Haha, that was great. I'd been thinking way too much about writing a similar prank, but that's the only way it could possibly end.

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    66. CasperJuly 24, 2011 at 3:38 PM

      Part 6 NOAWZ

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    67. CoffeeGruntJuly 24, 2011 at 5:04 PM

      >Assume everyone's invited!
      >Assume everyone
      >everyone

      Aw lawds no!

      But otherwise, awesome. I laughed a whole bunch at the flash mob. Chapter 6 plzzz.

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    68. SIaanmeJuly 24, 2011 at 5:22 PM

      @CoffeeGrunt

      >_<

      You slip up ONE time....
      Fix'd.

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    69. BlankFlankBronyJuly 24, 2011 at 5:33 PM

      Why am I not surprised that Pinkie Pie is a lucid dreamer?

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    70. poopnateJuly 24, 2011 at 6:21 PM

      @Slaanme

      I always thought "everypony" was a replacement for the word "everyBODY" and not "everyone." Since the words are nearly completely interchangeable, I know that "everypony" is used more often in replacement for both of them, but "everyone" could still be used if you really want to. Don't worry about using "everyone." Just don't EVER use "everybody." xD

      Good Chapter! I took this story off my list because it had been so long since an update, but it looks like it'll go back on for a while. :D

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    71. SIaanmeJuly 24, 2011 at 9:14 PM

      @poopnate
      I'll try and get the next one out sooner this time, although it's likely to be the last one.

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    72. The J.A.M.July 24, 2011 at 10:32 PM

      Drat. She didn't meet Pinkamena :D :D :D

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    73. KoolerkidJuly 31, 2011 at 6:13 PM

      Huh. Pinkie's dream was surprisingly... sane. I'm going to assume she made an effort to keep everything relatively normal for Luna's benefit, seeing as how she's apparently a lucid dreamer - Pinkie Pie's dreams would NOT be a pleasant place to be once her subconscious really lets loose.

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    74. nemrynAugust 2, 2011 at 11:16 PM

      Ooh, I get it now. These are all the different personalities that the fandom has assigned to Luna. That's kinda clever.

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    75. poopnateAugust 2, 2011 at 11:18 PM

      Wow... The new chapter has been up for 30 minutes now and no new comments? Surprising...

      I found the endin to be quite nice, but I need more Luna now! Why does she have to be my favorite character if there's absolutely NO cannon for her yet and I've run out of Luna stories to read?! D:

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    76. poopnateAugust 2, 2011 at 11:20 PM

      @nemryn

      Why did you have to make the first part of my comment false? This always happens to me. D':

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    77. AndrewAugust 2, 2011 at 11:26 PM

      A good final chapter to a good fanfic. I rather liked it a lot.

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    78. shibbolethAugust 2, 2011 at 11:40 PM

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    79. C. Theron VulpinAugust 2, 2011 at 11:41 PM

      Cactus juice tea? :3 is that an Avatar: The Last Airbender reference? :3

      That was a great story, and I hope you'll be able to find the time and inspiration to do more.

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    80. shibbolethAugust 2, 2011 at 11:42 PM

      This pretty much sums up all of our collective speculation on what Luna's character will be like until Season 2 finally reveals who exactly Luna is.

      It will be kinda sad, in a way, when our wild mass guessing on Luna's personality will be over.

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    81. YuriAugust 2, 2011 at 11:50 PM

      But who is holding the chalk? Cause it sure ain't you or me!

      Great story! Just now noticed that the personalities are fandom inspired! Awesome!

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    82. AnonymousAugust 2, 2011 at 11:56 PM

      Aww...that was nice. Was hoping for an epilogue of sorts, but it's nice here too.

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    83. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 12:06 AM

      Great story! The ending felt a bit short but the message was clear enough.

      now a request... Could this be put on http://www.fimfiction.net/ too? I'd love to see more complete stuff there (so I can favorite it and vote!)

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    84. Valmir_R0yalGuArdAugust 3, 2011 at 12:25 AM

      You need to write a love story with Luna and Twilight, or at least some adventures with those two. Hehe. Maybe she just doesn't realize that she's a "Filly-Fooler" yet and just needs the right person. :P

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    85. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 12:36 AM

      It needs a epilogue about Pinkie´s party~

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    86. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 12:38 AM

      @Anonymous Eeeyup

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    87. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 12:49 AM

      After reading this, I now need to find a Luna x everypony harem fic.

      This was a really fun read, and while reading Rainbow Dash's chapter all I could think of was Moonbase Alpha.

      Luna: I want a moonbase
      Me: JOHN MADDEN!

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    88. TwinkiePinkieAugust 3, 2011 at 2:06 AM

      Wait, wait, wait, wait...was that explanation of what happens when two magic bodies collide the same as the explanation for what happens when you cross the streams in Ghostbusters? I had to stop reading to quickly comment on that.

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    89. TwinkiePinkieAugust 3, 2011 at 2:42 AM

      I think this story deserves a round of applause. It's pretty strong all around. The character dialogue is good. I could easily read the conversations in the voices the mane six. Also, I believe that Slaanme deserves recognition for successfully employing humor without beating us over the head with it. The flying apple tree hit the library after the twitch was somewhat funny, but having it pop up later in Pinkie's dream was hilarious.
      The plot progression was predictable, but that's pretty much a good thing for a story in this format. I really liked the different portrayals of Luna by the ponies. Rainbow Dash's was my least favorite, but that's just because I thought it was predictable (plus, i'm a Luna fanboy at heart). There was a moonbase in that chapter though, so I cannot speak ill of it. From there though, it got much better. Fluttershy's portrayal was just delightfully awkward, AJ's was like the general fan perception, Rarity's was like what I imagine all the pony's in the ponyverse believe, Pinkie's was filled with that special brand of awesome that only Pinkie can give, and Twilight's was just illustrative. The talk in the final chapter between Twilight and Luna seemed just a bit short, but I feel it was more than sufficient to get the final point across.
      Overall, I say that this story is probably deserving of a 5-star rating. It's not quite at that legendary 6-star status, but what it did, it did really well. Good humor, good character voice, good plot. It was an enjoyable read. I'd eagerly commit to spending just as much time reading a story that was half as good as this one.
      Good job Slaanme. You are awarded the golf clap in recognition of your successful writing in this fic. Keep up the good work

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    90. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 2:47 AM

      I demand an epilog of luna making her visit to ponyville

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    91. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 3:09 AM

      @Anonymous
      Razcora, there will be one

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    92. UnknownAugust 3, 2011 at 3:27 AM

      Awesome ending there! I love how you brought it around full circle. And, I agree! There are lots of ways to make Luna a great character! I can't wait to see which one they come up with for the show. :)

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    93. CasperAugust 3, 2011 at 4:28 AM

      Awwwwwwww, i was hoping for some Twiluna in the end, oh well, epic fic, loved it, now make a sequel with luna visiting ponyville and for goodness sakes, TWILUNA! 1415/5, i wish.

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    94. SIaanmeAugust 3, 2011 at 5:30 AM

      @Everyone requesting a Epilogue: I'm unlikely to do one until we get Canon!Luna. Sorry, but that's how I can justify it to myself. I went into this with very little thought of how to characterise Luna outside of the dreams since that wasn't the important part. So I have NO idea how she'd react. But you never know, I might change my mind. Unlikely, but hay, there's hope.

      @Everyone requesting TwiLuna: I make no promises. Writing shipping isn't my preference, even if it seems everyone did enjoy my foray into it with LunaShy. Although I do have a potential story that could develop into TwiLuna of a sort.... *tease tease tease*

      @C. Theron Vulpin: Yes. The better question is, why would Twilight have such a beverage?

      @11:06 Anon: Okay, I can do that I guess. Links here when they're up.

      @TwinkiePie: Yes, that was a description of Total Protonic Reversal. I'm surprised no-one commented on that sooner.
      Also thank you for your thought-out review. I enjoy seeing what others think of my work.

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    95. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 11:08 AM

      Dammit, I keep overlooking updates will all the ponyfics I jump between.

      Don't suppose you could work on getting this onto fimfiction.net's site, could ya? I really wish more good stories would pop up there. Those green little check marks makes mass pony consumption easier to manage. =P

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    96. AmbivalentAugust 3, 2011 at 12:09 PM

      It seems like everyone just gives 5 stars if they like a story at all, but I try to keep it truthful. This isn't on the level of "Dangerous Business" or "Simply Rarity", but it is still a great read. I would encourage the author to write more.

      The one piece of advice I have concerns shipping. This story takes it's setting and characters straight from the show, which isn't a bad thing. It's fan fiction, so we all know what's going on. When the bits of shipping come in (mostly the pinkie pie and dash) it pulls the story into a new setting that hasn't been properly explained. It seems like a small nag, but it really broke the mood of the story for me.

      TL;DR: Less shipping and the story would have been a 5 star or better for me.

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    97. jorgeAugust 3, 2011 at 2:18 PM

      "Luna's magic had grown since then, and scientists had estimated that if she were to go head to head with any other unicorn with her level of magic, or even just very close, the worst that could happen would be all life stopping instantaneously and every molecule in existence exploding at the speed of light."

      Got it. Don't cross the horns.

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    98. BareeAugust 3, 2011 at 2:24 PM

      And thusly we reach the end. I don't feel like I have much to say, other then that I enjoyed it.

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    99. AnonymousAugust 3, 2011 at 5:36 PM

      Just needs an epilogue.

      With fabulous lesbian Moon Base party.

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    100. Sgtm14August 3, 2011 at 6:09 PM

      This was a very good story, I enjoied every bit of it. It had laughs, it had sadness, had love, and most of all, it had a great message. 5 out of 5 for you good sir! and please continue to make more.

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    101. AnonymousAugust 4, 2011 at 12:16 AM

      Wow... this was very in-character, for everyone (except maybe the Fluttershy and Rarity lesbian pairings). The thing with Pinkie Pie realizing it was a dream was surprisingly unsurprising (we all know Pinkie Pie has powers beyond understanding). Also, the message at the end was very appropriate - we don't know what Luna's going to be like any more than the Luna in this story does.

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    102. SIaanmeAugust 4, 2011 at 8:59 PM

      And FiMfiction version is now live for all those who requested it.
      http://www.fimfiction.net/story/397/Tabluna-Rasa

      I suppose I should probably email that link to Seth and get it up with the other links.

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    103. A Terrible PersonAugust 12, 2011 at 2:44 AM

      Firstly, am I really reading this fic this long after it got completed? Man, I should really be more punctual with these things.

      Secondly, this was a great story. I detect a little bit of poking fun at the fanon for making a big deal out of a character we've never even really met, but it's still well-done within that. We all need reminders like this from time to time to make sure we don't start taking things too seriously.

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    104. AnonymousAugust 12, 2011 at 2:00 PM

      Nice touch on the total protonic reversal, although she was already in another unicorn's dreams (Rarity). Might just be how she thinks Twilight might be almost her equal in raw power, though, while Rarity's more a normal unicorn.

      And in Pinkie Pie's chapter? 'The payoff!' was worth it.

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    105. Fireheart the unicornAugust 16, 2011 at 5:41 PM

      HEY! does anypony know faust's email?
      if so send her a link to this!
      it would make a great set of back to back episodes...um, buuuut she may need to change fluttershy's dream a little bit.

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    106. SindriAugust 17, 2011 at 4:57 PM

      Darn, now I want a moon base.

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    107. SIaanmeOctober 22, 2011 at 8:10 PM

      I'm willing to bet no-one is reading these comments anymore, but I need to gauge interest: now that we have a canon Luna, do I make a epilogue?

      Also, does anyone else think the Luna I wrote in Rarity's chapter was the closest I got to canon?

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    108. BareeOctober 29, 2011 at 6:02 AM

      @SIaanme

      I read to many fics to remember them all. For that reason, every now and then I just open a few at random and see if it is one I read. Sometimes I open a series that I haven't seen in ages and kind of forgotten about.

      To answer your question: I enjoyed this fic and I would like to see a prologue.

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    109. BareeOctober 29, 2011 at 5:57 PM

      Err, epilogue obviously. *Facehoof*

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    110. AlexNovember 21, 2011 at 11:06 PM

      I have to say, I think a little more thought could have gone into this. I got the sense that you were thinking about what happens in dreams, but not what happens in particular pony's dreams as much. Dash, for example, I guarantee could list the names of the Wonderbolts in order of any stat you care to name in her sleep, and I doubt AJ would think to have Luna comment on the gravity difference between Equestria and the moon. And Rarity's chapter at times was far too much like how I think of Rarity, and I know she's a better pony than I give her credit for.

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    111. MaquabraNovember 23, 2011 at 7:43 AM

      +1 Star for its title. I like smarty bronies ^^

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    112. AnthonyJanuary 8, 2012 at 12:08 AM

      I'm not done reading yet, and this comment may go unanswered by the author, but I have a question.

      Was Rarity's dream deliberately meant to parallel Spike's crush on Rarity? It really came across that she was subconsciously putting herself through the same emotions that someone like Spike might go through: someone with a crush on someone they can never be with.

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    113. SIaanmeJanuary 8, 2012 at 5:50 AM

      @Kyso No, it wasn't deliberate. I'm willing to pretend it was if you are though.

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    114. SweetieBelleFebruary 17, 2012 at 3:53 AM

      You captured the personalities well, defined and independent. Some people make the mistake of following too much of a structure, you did not. There was no sense of repetition, it was entertaining and enjoyable.

      The only thing I would have liked is for it to be longer :D

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