• Story: Moon Dancer (Update Story 2!)

    [Normal] Twilight Sparkle's parents time!  Can they come anywhere near the best pony in the show using their family bonds?!

    Author: Donald Lewis (GhostSoldier)
    Description: When Twilight Sparkle's parents meet for the first time there is literally magic in the air.
    Moon Dancer

    Additional Tags: Sweet, Cute, Heart Warming, Magical, Love

    Story 2 After the break!



    Story #2


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    Description: When the day of Twilight Sparkle's parent's wedding arrived no pony could have predicted the weight that would be placed on one young unicorn's heart.
    Cold Hooves (New!)


    Additional Tags: Romance True-Love Uncertainty Nervous

    27 comments:

    1. whoops, got a not-fanfiction tag on there

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    2. Explain to me how this qualifies as not fanfiction.

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    3. WHAT THE HELL IS THIS DOING IN MY NON FANFICTION??????? THIS IS BULLSHIT.

      actually I don't mind but you should probably change it :P

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    4. @Hornet

      >implying Trixie can do things

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    5. Aw crap, I was too late to use >inb4 20+ people mentioning the same minor mistake

      Anyways, that was a lovely read.

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    6. Loved how twilight's name appeared first on the journal

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    7. I freakin' d'aaaaw'd. I really do love sappy, romantic stories like this. X3

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    8. It was so sappy I came sugar.

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    9. Fanfics? In MY non-fanfiction?

      It's more likely than you think.

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    10. INSULIN

      I NEED IT

      NOW

      HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG

      *dies*

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    11. Very nice short story! :) Thanks for sharing it!

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    12. Cute story and relationship, but the plot developments, the character's emotions and the sense of danger the story should convey for the duration of the adventure aren't quite where they should be. If the author is so compelled, he could definitely make the story click; it just needs a little more work.

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    13. >Not_fanfiction

      ಠ_ಠ

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    14. Aw... wait a second, Isn't Twilight Spakle's mother looks like G1 Twilight? ._q I mean, the color of the body and mane match almost perfectly in both ponies. o_q

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    15. @Anonymous

      "Author's Note –
      Since the names of Twilight's parents aren't specifically mentioned during "The Cutie Mark Chronicles" I went with the names listed on the My Little Pony Friendship is Magic Wiki. In the event their names are mentioned in future episodes I will edit the story accordingly. That being said, enjoy. "

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    16. Thanks to the not-fanfiction button, I was able to forget that this part of the community existed, and live in blissful ignorance of the terrible artistic decisions that some bronies make. But this reminded me and now I am sad.

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    17. Not the biggest fan of characters falling madly in love the same day they meet, but it's pretty cute all the same.

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    18. Eh, cute story, but like Kyler Thatch wrote I'm not a fan of instant love. I like a little build up.

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    19. Wasn't Moondancer one of the ponies in Canterlot during the pilot? Y'know, the one spike had a gift for?

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    20. Mmmm, sugary...
      Oh, hello, I didn't see you come in!

      Great backstory!

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    21. This story bugged me for two reasons. One thing has been discussed; I dislike the instant romance element and in general everything feels like it's happening because the plot demands rather than flowing naturally from the characters as we come to know them. (This is a common difficulty with writing oc ponies.)

      Second, the whole fated issue seems weird. You made a point of the characters being stunned by the nearly impossible coincidence but there really was no payoff. Given the setup I was rather expecting the last scene to be Celestia looking down at their wedding and saying, "Exactly as planned." (She could arrange for Sparkle to find the spell that requires moondancer, for Nightlight's journal to be in the right place, even for the sun to hit just so to illuminate the journal at the right time...)

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    22. This story was so adorable. I truly didn’t mind the cheesy love-at-first-sight element of it at all, plus you guys should cut it some slack considering that it’s a single-chapter short-story. Confound these ponies, bringing out my inner fangirl.
      (also, kudos on first fanfic I didn’t catch any spelling errors in)

      I wonder how many more people will absent-mindedly state that this was in non-fanfiction, somehow missing the previous 500 people who did the same.

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    23. Haven't read it, but plan on doing so... however... shouldn't these have a "shipping" cathegory? or is that only for non-canon pairings?

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