Author: Ten Mihara
Description: The Cutie Mark Crusaders are fed up with continually failing to discover their cutie marks. Wanting more direction, they ask other ponies around town how they got theirs. They discover that everypony in town has a little something special to share with them.Lower Deck Chronicles Part 1 (Bluenotes)
Lower Deck Chronicles Part 2 (Daisy)
Lower Deck Chronicles Part 3 (Trixie)
Lower Deck Chronicles Part 4 (Zecora)
Lower Deck Chronicles Part 5 (Ditzy Doo)
Lower Deck Chronicles Part 6 (Mayor Mare) (New!)
Additional Tags: Discovery, Minor Characters, Growth, Fun
65 kommentaari:
I really liked Trixie's Story.
VastaKustutaThe Great and Powerful TRIXIE
VastaKustuta“Did anypony in this town actually grow up here?”
VastaKustutaThis line cracked me up, partly because it seems so true. Still, I'm pretty sure Rarity and Applejack are Ponyville natives. And who knows? Maybe the Pie rock farm is close enough for Pinkie to qualify as well.
Also, I really like the idea that Trixie's "Great and Powerful" moniker is an actual title that gets passed on from stage magician to stage magician.
as of right now just red the first chapter and it was great good job in just everything, maintaining character personalities making new stories and the plot work is wonderful! Great job
VastaKustutaFavorite Fanfic period
VastaKustutaRead the three chapters in one shot, and loved it! Can't wait to read more :)
VastaKustutaLooks like the rio finally tried their hand at the canon.
VastaKustutaAn interesting collection of stories that look like they would be at home as a part of the show if they ever decide to make a sequel to the Chronicles episode.
Looking forward to the next tale.
Bluenotes: I didn't really get what his talent is.
VastaKustutaDaisy: Oddly epic. Never saw that coming.
Trixie: So which number Dread Pira...I mean Great and Powerful is she?
FFS, it's "wagon", not "waggon". One 'g'.
VastaKustutaOther than that, this was an enjoyable read. 4/5.
I'm so glad to see this one pop up because since I was helping with the first one it's been pretty much cooling it's heels waiting for the green light!
VastaKustutaI like this slice of life!
@kriss1989
VastaKustutaBluenotes was less of a talent and more of an ideal. Being able to share somethign you're passionate about with others.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaNot according to my spell checker, but it seems to vary depending on who you ask. Glad you like it though.
@Saurian
VastaKustutaGlad you liked it; it took me a while to come up with something I was satisfied with. I also wanted a couple of small parallels between her and Twilight =P
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaGlad you thought that was funny; I had a couple of one liners in there I thought would be amusing. Other one was 'Cutie Mark Crusader Lawn Ornaments'.
As for the G&P title; I never thought about others, so lets say that she's the 5th <.< However, considering Maximilian was disgraced before the CMC were born, it would make sense that they had never heard of him.
@Lorina Dante
VastaKustutaGlad you enjoyed it. I have three more parts planned, but if I get a lot of people requesting certain ponies, I might put more ideas together.
The name bluenotes doesn't ring any bells for me on which episode can you see him or is he an oc pony ?
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaBluenotes is not an OC (I know that they tend to be shunned a bit around here). His most prominent appearances are in Winter Wrap Up, where he twice gets snow shunted onto him by Twilight. He is also known as Blues (I think).
@Midnight
VastaKustutaAh yes, you were at the Writer training grounds. I owe you some due thanks, since without the help I got from you this might have never gotten through to EqD. Now it's here and recieving 4 or 5 star ratings. So, my gratitude to you for your assistance.
These were all nice little stories. My favorite one was Bluenotes' tale, even though I can't for the life of me recall who he is.
VastaKustuta@TenchiFreak5
VastaKustutaHe shows up a couple times in WWU to get snow dumped on him by twilight, and also is the one who suffered the animation glitch in BNE that made his head cave in.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaI'm pretty sure Dash is a native too. I can't think of any other reason she would fly straight to Ponyville after getting her cutie mark. Actually, Twi and Fluttershy are the only mane cast members we're positive didn't grow up in Ponyville.
No it's definitely wagon with one g.
VastaKustutaGreat stories though, 5/5.
@Ten Mihara
VastaKustutaI would like to point out the medical incatuccys of zecora's tale
vaccines do not cure illness they prevent you from getting sick
the way they work is a vaccine is the virus that has ether been killed or weakened considerably it causes your immune system to reconise the virus (and therefore destroy it faster) because it "remembers" the encounter it had with the vaccine version
@bobbin the unicorn
VastaKustuta@bobbin the unicorn
VastaKustutaI figured at least one person would point out a medical inaccuracy. I state in my defense that I never studied medicine in any form. However, if you feel that said inaccuracy detracts from the story, then that's only fair.
@Ten Mihara
VastaKustutaThere is something like what you described called an antiserum, but it would only work if Zecora had recovered on her own first.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaInteresting. Again I state that I never studied any kind of medicine, but this is still interesting stuff. If I ever need medical terminology again I know where to look =D
Pretty good, and by that I mean terrifying and nightmare-inducing.
VastaKustutaAbout that whole ''rhyming'' thing with Zecora and the Zebras...
VastaKustutaIt is theorized... and it's a simple and realistic theory... that only SOME of the zebras have to rhyme.
That only specific zebras have to rhyme, something related to what they do.
Like... the enchantresses, medical zebras, maybe the chiefs too, and the like, you know ?
This allow some good diversity by having SOME rhyming zebras (characters) and allow to use of zebras WITHOUT having to constantly making ALL of them rhyme all the time.
Simple, easy, practical, all-purpose, see ? :)
@7heSama
VastaKustuta>nightmare-inducing
-Clearly, that person does not have the same definition of ''good and interesting'' than the rest of the Internet ? (that or he/she needs a dictionary)
@Nova25
VastaKustutaAn interesting theory to be sure. However, I was not aware of said theory at the time I wrote this. I just figured that was how they spoke and went with it. By no means does anyone have to take my example, especially if it seems to lack diversity.
@Nova25
VastaKustutaI'm a little confused myself. Not entirely sure what parts of these stories would count as nightmare inducing, regardless of respective levels of 'good' and 'interesting'.
Ah can't wait 'till this continues. The stories are so great!
VastaKustuta@Apple Blossom
VastaKustutaGlad you like them; actually sent the next part to Seth a little bit ago, so there will be an update sometime in the next couple days or so (depending on the queue). It always makes me happy to see people enjoying my work =D
I wasn't one for the Derpy story but it was pretty good keep up the good work!
VastaKustutaThe dialogs are weird. A kid wouldn´t use that vocabulary.
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaWhy not? I don't mind giving it a look over, but I wanted to portray Ditzy as a (future) companion first, and a child second.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaI figured some people might be opposed to the inclusion of the Doctor in a story not specifically dedicated to him, which is why I placed a warning at the top of the chapter. Still, glad you like it anyways.
Vincent (Van Goh) And The Doctor, not Leonardo Da Vinci.
VastaKustutaBut...but...if Ditzy travels with the Doctor, who will take care of her Dinky muffin!?
VastaKustutaOh, and I like these stories a lot. But the matter above was a pressing concern for me. I AM INVESTED IN THE LIVES OF THESE FICTIONAL CHARACTERS.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaTime Machine, remember? She could go gallivanting off with the Doctor for a month and still be back 5 minutes after she left. Or she could wait until the next day, either way. Fear not, I would never write a Ditzy that would abandon her Dinky muffin =D
@Xuncu
VastaKustutaWhoops, how'd I mix that up? Gonna fix post haste. Thanks for the correction.
Wow, I love every single one of these. *Checks Wiki for background characters*.I actually want a Snips and Snails, because (Don't kill me) I like Snails. There, I said it. It was mostly a fanfiction on here that made me totally feel bad for him, and before that he was just adorably stupid. However, I know that most people hate him/them, so if you can't do that, I have a list!
VastaKustutaLyra, Bonbon, and/or Caramel.
A small list, but a list still.
And may I say, Ditzy Doo's was my favorite so far. You're a fabulous writer, especially for the Doctor.
@heartbeatpony
VastaKustutaI was actually kind of worried about whether or not I did the Doctor justice, although my friend who got me into Doctor Who seemed to like him. Glad you like the stories though.
As for your list, I shall have to see. I only had one last story planned, so I'm not sure what else may come of it. If I'm struck with good inspiration then there may be more stories. It's all a matter of needing the right idea. I'd never considered Snails before though, mostly because he was still a colt. I shall ponder it.
Really liking the series so far, and hoping there an't a long wait till the next one. Just keep doing what your doing =]
VastaKustutaAlso big ups on your version of Ditzy, as I agree with you on the end comment about her.
If it's not out of place to say, do you think you'd ever do one about Colgate's Cutie Mark
@Vulcan539
VastaKustutaNot sure about the wait for the next part, still hammering out some of the details. I will say however that I originally had planned it to be the last part (Grand Finale and all that). However, seeing as how people are enjoying these stories, I might just do some extras (if some good ideas strike me at least).
Glad you liked Ditzy, I grew rather fond of her as I was writing her as well. Might end up doing a Doctor Whooves story some time, again provided that I get a good idea for one.
@Ten Mihara
VastaKustutaAll goods, just great to know more is on its way=]
Also you've had at lest 5 good ideas so far, so i'm sure there are at lest a few more to come. =]
@Vulcan539
VastaKustutaThe part currently in progress was originally intended to be the final part. However, what I think I'll do is conclude this set of stories like I planned, but then put together another set of stories once I have more ideas and scenarios put together.
Loving these stories even though we won't get these stories anymore...Well looks like you will have more stories can't wait to see them!
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaGlad to hear you enjoyed them; people enjoying my work is what drives me to continue and improve. Thanks for reading.
That was very enjoyable, well done!
VastaKustutaAnd I must agree with your view of Ditzy; I find this version of her much more refreshing and enjoyable. Also, great work with the Doctor!
@zaptiftun
VastaKustutaThanks for the praise. I wrote Ditzy's Doctorate after a marathon of Series 2, so it felt less like writing the Doctor and more like channeling him. Glad you like Ditzy too.
Thanks for reading.
LOVED that Ditzy story... Wish she came across as being more of a child then she did. But that was a minor issue for me cause I enjoyed the idea of a smart Ditzy with a special "lazy eye" also the idea of a Child helping the Doctor save the day was awesome in my mind. Would love to see more Magical Pony Doctor stories from you.
VastaKustutaRandom thought that somehow that Chapter made me think up is that Pony Doctor's TARDIS has a minor magical chameleon arch effect if if it lands somewhere that'll hurt him upon steping outside. And that's why the normally Earth Pony Time Lord was a Winged Hourse here.
Thoughrly enjoyed all chapters=]
VastaKustutaAnd mayor mares name I think at lest, suits her perfectly.
I hope to read more of your work=]
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaDitzy was meant to be the focus of the chapter, not the Doctor, hence my desire to make her seem unique and stand out (which is not easy next to the good Doctor).
As for him being a pegasus for his stay in Cloudsdale, I suppose there`s an explanation for that. I just haven't figured out what it is yet. Maybe he'll explain later.
@Vulcan539
VastaKustutaThanks for reading. Stay tuned; I have no intention of stopping here >3
Read it, love it.
VastaKustutaDitzy's special ability somehow reminded me of Madeye Moody from Harry Potter. :D I really like the way you call her Ditzy and make her a functional pony, as opposed to the "funny" but cruel portrayal of her being mentally handicapped, plus the rather unflattering and derogatory name "Derpy".
Your writing shows a lot of respect for the characters, and I really appreciate that.
@Enfid
VastaKustutaThanks for the sick praise; characterization is one of the trickiest parts of writing I find. You can't like a piece of work if you don't like the characters after all. Thanks for reading.
@Ten Mihara
VastaKustutaWhat you didn't like my explanation for the Wings? Cause you can totally use that if you want.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaOne of my friends hypothesized that as a Time Lord, his true (pony) form was Alicorn, and he simply hid one part or another to blend in.
I personally thought about the DNA shifter thingy (forget what it was called) being used to switch between Earth Pony and Pegasus when there was need.
Still, this story was supposed to be about cutie marks, not the Doctor. I'll keep your idea in mind if I ever do a Doctor Story in full.
The Mayor's story was best.
VastaKustutaCutie mark for talking, LOL.
That was so awesome! I especially loved the Trixie part. The idea of her earning her title from someone else is marvelous.
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaScootaloo's sentiments exactly. Glad you enjoyed it.
Ten Mihara here; although I doubt anypony is still reading this after so long. Just wanted to let anyone who enjoyed my work know that my next project (or at least the first couple parts of it) have made it through the pre-readers, and will be showing up here soon =D
VastaKustuta@Jordan
VastaKustutasweet =]
Will they be under Ten Mihara or Jordan?