• Story: Lower Deck Chronicles (Update Complete!)

    [Normal] Time for some crusading!

    Author: Ten Mihara
    Description: The Cutie Mark Crusaders are fed up with continually failing to discover their cutie marks. Wanting more direction, they ask other ponies around town how they got theirs. They discover that everypony in town has a little something special to share with them.
    Lower Deck Chronicles Part 1 (Bluenotes)
    Lower Deck Chronicles Part 2 (Daisy)
    Lower Deck Chronicles Part 3 (Trixie)
    Lower Deck Chronicles Part 4 (Zecora) 
    Lower Deck Chronicles Part 5 (Ditzy Doo)
    Lower Deck Chronicles Part 6 (Mayor Mare) (New!)

    Additional Tags: Discovery, Minor Characters, Growth, Fun

    65 kommentaari:

    1. I really liked Trixie's Story.

      VastaKustuta
    2. The Great and Powerful TRIXIE

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    3. “Did anypony in this town actually grow up here?”

      This line cracked me up, partly because it seems so true. Still, I'm pretty sure Rarity and Applejack are Ponyville natives. And who knows? Maybe the Pie rock farm is close enough for Pinkie to qualify as well.

      Also, I really like the idea that Trixie's "Great and Powerful" moniker is an actual title that gets passed on from stage magician to stage magician.

      VastaKustuta
    4. as of right now just red the first chapter and it was great good job in just everything, maintaining character personalities making new stories and the plot work is wonderful! Great job

      VastaKustuta
    5. Favorite Fanfic period

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    6. Read the three chapters in one shot, and loved it! Can't wait to read more :)

      VastaKustuta
    7. Looks like the rio finally tried their hand at the canon.
      An interesting collection of stories that look like they would be at home as a part of the show if they ever decide to make a sequel to the Chronicles episode.
      Looking forward to the next tale.

      VastaKustuta
    8. Bluenotes: I didn't really get what his talent is.

      Daisy: Oddly epic. Never saw that coming.

      Trixie: So which number Dread Pira...I mean Great and Powerful is she?

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    9. FFS, it's "wagon", not "waggon". One 'g'.

      Other than that, this was an enjoyable read. 4/5.

      VastaKustuta
    10. I'm so glad to see this one pop up because since I was helping with the first one it's been pretty much cooling it's heels waiting for the green light!

      I like this slice of life!

      VastaKustuta
    11. @kriss1989

      Bluenotes was less of a talent and more of an ideal. Being able to share somethign you're passionate about with others.

      VastaKustuta
    12. @Anonymous

      Not according to my spell checker, but it seems to vary depending on who you ask. Glad you like it though.

      VastaKustuta
    13. @Saurian

      Glad you liked it; it took me a while to come up with something I was satisfied with. I also wanted a couple of small parallels between her and Twilight =P

      VastaKustuta
    14. @Anonymous

      Glad you thought that was funny; I had a couple of one liners in there I thought would be amusing. Other one was 'Cutie Mark Crusader Lawn Ornaments'.

      As for the G&P title; I never thought about others, so lets say that she's the 5th <.< However, considering Maximilian was disgraced before the CMC were born, it would make sense that they had never heard of him.

      VastaKustuta
    15. @Lorina Dante

      Glad you enjoyed it. I have three more parts planned, but if I get a lot of people requesting certain ponies, I might put more ideas together.

      VastaKustuta
    16. The name bluenotes doesn't ring any bells for me on which episode can you see him or is he an oc pony ?

      VastaKustuta
    17. @Anonymous

      Bluenotes is not an OC (I know that they tend to be shunned a bit around here). His most prominent appearances are in Winter Wrap Up, where he twice gets snow shunted onto him by Twilight. He is also known as Blues (I think).

      VastaKustuta
    18. @Midnight

      Ah yes, you were at the Writer training grounds. I owe you some due thanks, since without the help I got from you this might have never gotten through to EqD. Now it's here and recieving 4 or 5 star ratings. So, my gratitude to you for your assistance.

      VastaKustuta
    19. These were all nice little stories. My favorite one was Bluenotes' tale, even though I can't for the life of me recall who he is.

      VastaKustuta
    20. @TenchiFreak5

      He shows up a couple times in WWU to get snow dumped on him by twilight, and also is the one who suffered the animation glitch in BNE that made his head cave in.

      VastaKustuta
    21. @Anonymous
      I'm pretty sure Dash is a native too. I can't think of any other reason she would fly straight to Ponyville after getting her cutie mark. Actually, Twi and Fluttershy are the only mane cast members we're positive didn't grow up in Ponyville.

      VastaKustuta
    22. No it's definitely wagon with one g.

      Great stories though, 5/5.

      VastaKustuta
    23. @Ten Mihara

      I would like to point out the medical incatuccys of zecora's tale
      vaccines do not cure illness they prevent you from getting sick

      the way they work is a vaccine is the virus that has ether been killed or weakened considerably it causes your immune system to reconise the virus (and therefore destroy it faster) because it "remembers" the encounter it had with the vaccine version

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    24. @bobbin the unicorn

      I figured at least one person would point out a medical inaccuracy. I state in my defense that I never studied medicine in any form. However, if you feel that said inaccuracy detracts from the story, then that's only fair.

      VastaKustuta
    25. @Ten Mihara

      There is something like what you described called an antiserum, but it would only work if Zecora had recovered on her own first.

      VastaKustuta
    26. @Anonymous

      Interesting. Again I state that I never studied any kind of medicine, but this is still interesting stuff. If I ever need medical terminology again I know where to look =D

      VastaKustuta
    27. Pretty good, and by that I mean terrifying and nightmare-inducing.

      VastaKustuta
    28. About that whole ''rhyming'' thing with Zecora and the Zebras...

      It is theorized... and it's a simple and realistic theory... that only SOME of the zebras have to rhyme.

      That only specific zebras have to rhyme, something related to what they do.

      Like... the enchantresses, medical zebras, maybe the chiefs too, and the like, you know ?

      This allow some good diversity by having SOME rhyming zebras (characters) and allow to use of zebras WITHOUT having to constantly making ALL of them rhyme all the time.

      Simple, easy, practical, all-purpose, see ? :)

      VastaKustuta
    29. @7heSama
      >nightmare-inducing

      -Clearly, that person does not have the same definition of ''good and interesting'' than the rest of the Internet ? (that or he/she needs a dictionary)

      VastaKustuta
    30. @Nova25

      An interesting theory to be sure. However, I was not aware of said theory at the time I wrote this. I just figured that was how they spoke and went with it. By no means does anyone have to take my example, especially if it seems to lack diversity.

      VastaKustuta
    31. @Nova25

      I'm a little confused myself. Not entirely sure what parts of these stories would count as nightmare inducing, regardless of respective levels of 'good' and 'interesting'.

      VastaKustuta
    32. Ah can't wait 'till this continues. The stories are so great!

      VastaKustuta
    33. @Apple Blossom

      Glad you like them; actually sent the next part to Seth a little bit ago, so there will be an update sometime in the next couple days or so (depending on the queue). It always makes me happy to see people enjoying my work =D

      VastaKustuta
    34. I wasn't one for the Derpy story but it was pretty good keep up the good work!

      VastaKustuta
    35. The dialogs are weird. A kid wouldn´t use that vocabulary.

      VastaKustuta
    36. @Anonymous

      Why not? I don't mind giving it a look over, but I wanted to portray Ditzy as a (future) companion first, and a child second.

      VastaKustuta
    37. @Anonymous

      I figured some people might be opposed to the inclusion of the Doctor in a story not specifically dedicated to him, which is why I placed a warning at the top of the chapter. Still, glad you like it anyways.

      VastaKustuta
    38. Vincent (Van Goh) And The Doctor, not Leonardo Da Vinci.

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    39. But...but...if Ditzy travels with the Doctor, who will take care of her Dinky muffin!?
      Oh, and I like these stories a lot. But the matter above was a pressing concern for me. I AM INVESTED IN THE LIVES OF THESE FICTIONAL CHARACTERS.

      VastaKustuta
    40. @Anonymous

      Time Machine, remember? She could go gallivanting off with the Doctor for a month and still be back 5 minutes after she left. Or she could wait until the next day, either way. Fear not, I would never write a Ditzy that would abandon her Dinky muffin =D

      VastaKustuta
    41. @Xuncu

      Whoops, how'd I mix that up? Gonna fix post haste. Thanks for the correction.

      VastaKustuta
    42. Wow, I love every single one of these. *Checks Wiki for background characters*.I actually want a Snips and Snails, because (Don't kill me) I like Snails. There, I said it. It was mostly a fanfiction on here that made me totally feel bad for him, and before that he was just adorably stupid. However, I know that most people hate him/them, so if you can't do that, I have a list!
      Lyra, Bonbon, and/or Caramel.
      A small list, but a list still.
      And may I say, Ditzy Doo's was my favorite so far. You're a fabulous writer, especially for the Doctor.

      VastaKustuta
    43. @heartbeatpony

      I was actually kind of worried about whether or not I did the Doctor justice, although my friend who got me into Doctor Who seemed to like him. Glad you like the stories though.

      As for your list, I shall have to see. I only had one last story planned, so I'm not sure what else may come of it. If I'm struck with good inspiration then there may be more stories. It's all a matter of needing the right idea. I'd never considered Snails before though, mostly because he was still a colt. I shall ponder it.

      VastaKustuta
    44. Really liking the series so far, and hoping there an't a long wait till the next one. Just keep doing what your doing =]

      Also big ups on your version of Ditzy, as I agree with you on the end comment about her.

      If it's not out of place to say, do you think you'd ever do one about Colgate's Cutie Mark

      VastaKustuta
    45. @Vulcan539

      Not sure about the wait for the next part, still hammering out some of the details. I will say however that I originally had planned it to be the last part (Grand Finale and all that). However, seeing as how people are enjoying these stories, I might just do some extras (if some good ideas strike me at least).

      Glad you liked Ditzy, I grew rather fond of her as I was writing her as well. Might end up doing a Doctor Whooves story some time, again provided that I get a good idea for one.

      VastaKustuta
    46. @Ten Mihara

      All goods, just great to know more is on its way=]

      Also you've had at lest 5 good ideas so far, so i'm sure there are at lest a few more to come. =]

      VastaKustuta
    47. @Vulcan539

      The part currently in progress was originally intended to be the final part. However, what I think I'll do is conclude this set of stories like I planned, but then put together another set of stories once I have more ideas and scenarios put together.

      VastaKustuta
    48. Loving these stories even though we won't get these stories anymore...Well looks like you will have more stories can't wait to see them!

      VastaKustuta
    49. @Anonymous

      Glad to hear you enjoyed them; people enjoying my work is what drives me to continue and improve. Thanks for reading.

      VastaKustuta
    50. That was very enjoyable, well done!

      And I must agree with your view of Ditzy; I find this version of her much more refreshing and enjoyable. Also, great work with the Doctor!

      VastaKustuta
    51. @zaptiftun

      Thanks for the praise. I wrote Ditzy's Doctorate after a marathon of Series 2, so it felt less like writing the Doctor and more like channeling him. Glad you like Ditzy too.
      Thanks for reading.

      VastaKustuta
    52. LOVED that Ditzy story... Wish she came across as being more of a child then she did. But that was a minor issue for me cause I enjoyed the idea of a smart Ditzy with a special "lazy eye" also the idea of a Child helping the Doctor save the day was awesome in my mind. Would love to see more Magical Pony Doctor stories from you.

      Random thought that somehow that Chapter made me think up is that Pony Doctor's TARDIS has a minor magical chameleon arch effect if if it lands somewhere that'll hurt him upon steping outside. And that's why the normally Earth Pony Time Lord was a Winged Hourse here.

      VastaKustuta
    53. Thoughrly enjoyed all chapters=]

      And mayor mares name I think at lest, suits her perfectly.

      I hope to read more of your work=]

      VastaKustuta
    54. @Anonymous

      Ditzy was meant to be the focus of the chapter, not the Doctor, hence my desire to make her seem unique and stand out (which is not easy next to the good Doctor).

      As for him being a pegasus for his stay in Cloudsdale, I suppose there`s an explanation for that. I just haven't figured out what it is yet. Maybe he'll explain later.

      VastaKustuta
    55. @Vulcan539

      Thanks for reading. Stay tuned; I have no intention of stopping here >3

      VastaKustuta
    56. Read it, love it.

      Ditzy's special ability somehow reminded me of Madeye Moody from Harry Potter. :D I really like the way you call her Ditzy and make her a functional pony, as opposed to the "funny" but cruel portrayal of her being mentally handicapped, plus the rather unflattering and derogatory name "Derpy".

      Your writing shows a lot of respect for the characters, and I really appreciate that.

      VastaKustuta
    57. @Enfid

      Thanks for the sick praise; characterization is one of the trickiest parts of writing I find. You can't like a piece of work if you don't like the characters after all. Thanks for reading.

      VastaKustuta
    58. @Ten Mihara

      What you didn't like my explanation for the Wings? Cause you can totally use that if you want.

      VastaKustuta
    59. @Anonymous

      One of my friends hypothesized that as a Time Lord, his true (pony) form was Alicorn, and he simply hid one part or another to blend in.

      I personally thought about the DNA shifter thingy (forget what it was called) being used to switch between Earth Pony and Pegasus when there was need.

      Still, this story was supposed to be about cutie marks, not the Doctor. I'll keep your idea in mind if I ever do a Doctor Story in full.

      VastaKustuta
    60. The Mayor's story was best.

      Cutie mark for talking, LOL.

      VastaKustuta
    61. That was so awesome! I especially loved the Trixie part. The idea of her earning her title from someone else is marvelous.

      VastaKustuta
    62. @Anonymous

      Scootaloo's sentiments exactly. Glad you enjoyed it.

      VastaKustuta
    63. Ten Mihara here; although I doubt anypony is still reading this after so long. Just wanted to let anyone who enjoyed my work know that my next project (or at least the first couple parts of it) have made it through the pre-readers, and will be showing up here soon =D

      VastaKustuta
    64. @Jordan
      sweet =]
      Will they be under Ten Mihara or Jordan?

      VastaKustuta