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Author: Polecat
Description: Luna's last night as the "Mare in the Moon", after spending a millennium watching Equestria under her, prepares herself to return. A speculative look at what this final day may have been like for Princess Luna.Coming Home
Additional Tags: 1st Person Luna, Contemplative, Talking to herself?
11 comments:
yay more luna we all love luna
ReplyDeleteI liked it. It's not often we get Luna portrayed as being trapped in the moon as opposed to on the moon. First person's not something I see an awful lot either. One of the minor problems I had was the insistence on labelling NMM as "It". The quotation marks got on my nerves after a while, it would have worked just fine if it was It instead.
ReplyDeleteI really like this. I love the idea as Nightmare Moon being apart of Luna, but birthed from her angst and pain. I love the schism you show with their interaction. This is definitely an older and wiser Luna than I typically see.
ReplyDeleteThat picture for the header. Even Nightmare Moon looks sad in it... I wonder if she likes hugs as well as normal Luna...
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed it. I would've liked to have seen some more names for Nightmare Moon except for just "It"; some variety would've been nice.
ReplyDeleteI've noticed that Fanon Luna has been very consistent, and this just adds to it. Very nice.
I really enjoyed this story. That's not much of a review, but I can't really think of more to say.
ReplyDeleteThat was good. Really good. Only complaint is the same as SIaanme said; having "It" in quotes was a bit jarring. Just caps on the I would probably be sufficient. That's a really minor complaint though. Everything else is top-notch.
ReplyDeleteThank you for all the responses. I'm glad everypony is enjoying it so much. As I said on my DA, this was a random inspiration from a song lyric, so I'm glad it's gone over so well.
ReplyDeleteIn regards to "It" being quoted, I originally had it written without the quotes, but found that the differentiation between It as a formal name, and it as a pronoun were lost in the shuffle. The reason for putting it into quotes was to make it read more easily, and shed some light on how Luna thought about NMM.
I like the subtle hint that Luna organized the tests that proved to Twlight Sparkle that they were the elements of harmony.
ReplyDeleteMy first reaction upon seeing this posted was, "Oh God, that sounds exactly like what I've been writing." You see, I've been working on a first person Luna's time on and exodus from the moon story as well. However, not only was it completely dissimilar in tone and story, but it was very well done.
ReplyDeleteMy interpretation of events is considerably different, but I really enjoyed seeing it from someone else's view. The idea of Nightmare Moon as a parasite and altogether separate consciousness I found intriguing because the dynamic of being alone on the moon changes under that scenario. Luna is, in effect, lonely but not alone, having to deal with the hate-filled monster that brought about her banishment. I liked this dynamic quite a bit.
As for the "It" that others have mentioned, I also found it slightly jarring, but the alternative would have had very little impact. I think you made the right decision out of two potentially problematic approaches.
I really enjoyed this story! The only problem I had with it was the fact that you made Equestria flat. You can still have the sun and moon rise and fall without it being flat.
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