[Normal] Some Celestia and Luna bonding stuff that apparently got lost in the hopper for a while! Well, Seth found it. Enjoy.
Author: Tales
Contributing authors: MudBug, Skye
Description: Luna and Celestia struggle to gain back their relationship after a thousand years. But this is not an easy road they must travel, and things may never be the same as they once were. Can the bond of sisterhood withstand the test of time? Can an old yet new friend help overcome old memories and forge new bonds between the sisters?Two Truths and a Skye
Two Truths and a Skye Part 2
Two Truths and a Skye Part 3
Two Truths and a Skye Part 4
Two Truths and a Skye Part 5
Two Truths and a Skye Part 6 (New!)
Additional tags: Luna, Celestia, Relationships, Skye, Time
25 comments:
MOAR
ReplyDeleteVery good, let's hope for a continuation!
ReplyDeleteI don't like downer endings. They make me sad... I don't like sad. I don't like mixing sad with ponies...
ReplyDeleteThat being said, that doesn't stop this from being a heartfelt and touching piece. Though forgiveness is a major theme of the show itself, it can't be easy to forget a thousand years of solitude.
And being the elder sister of the one who spent those thousand years... let along being the one that put her there, there's bound to be some tension.
It was well written. It made it's point, but I'm hoping this was not a one-shot and that you will continue to sort it out. If such is the case, I will eagerly continue to read it.
Seeing as how we have yet to meet 'Skye', whoever he/she may be, I can only assume this story is meant to continue. It was bittersweet, and might require at least a partial 'Sad' label. I look forward to reading more; your writing and storytelling are superb.
ReplyDeleteEither way, I'm printing out that image and making myself a bookmark.
ReplyDeleteI love it,I hope you decide to write another chapter.
ReplyDeleteI"ll happily review this. I think it's an interesting beginning.
ReplyDeleteI had to look up what a peryton was. A very interesting choice for a mystical animal, and a fit companion for Luna. I've been waiting for either the show or fanwork to do something with deer- they're a glaring omission from all the forest scenes- and this one begins to satisfy my wishes.
Beyond that, I think you accurately portray the tension that would exist between Luna and Celestia. There's no way they could just kiss and make up after a thousand years of separation and bitterness.
This deserves more attention. It's a good story, and the tension is well portrayed. Though the whole peryton deal seems to have come out of nowhere to me.
ReplyDeleteBut still, a good story.
I imagine folks are turned away by it because it reeks of self-insert. Things like that tend to shy away the audiance.
ReplyDeleteI thought it was pretty good.
The first one was fantastic, and very well written, but yeah, once the second one kicked in with Skye it just seemed way too self-insert-y, and scared me off.
ReplyDeleteReeks of self-insert quite an apt description. Do not want.
ReplyDeleteIt always amazes me which stories get hate and which don't. If this is self-insert, it's infinitely more tasteful than any of this human crap. Chapter 3 was a massive improvement over 2 and made me interested in the fic again.
ReplyDeleteOh, I'm not hating -- as I said, the writer is very talented, but the peryton bit was incredibly jarring.
ReplyDeleteI'd love to have more form the writers of this, but without the self insert. <3
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI am also the author of Garden Party (which does include an OC, but has a lot of Princess Luna and exciting things to come), Luna's Biggest Fan (which was part of the April Friend-Off), and Dashed (which was myself writing a story outside of my element). All of these can be found here on ED.
It wasn't really intended to be a Self-Insert. The whole thing started out as a Roleplay and turned into what you see here. It's so very hard not to be a Gary-Stu when working with Original Characters, but the presence of one never hurts! :)
ReplyDeleteI always remember that -all- characters in a show are Original Characters, but they belong to writers and producers of the show, and I've seen some really well done fan OC's, so I'm always looking forward to seeing the creativity of the fans, myself!
Yay for updates!
ReplyDeleteI don't know how this would turn out but ok. Keep it coming!
ReplyDeleteHaving a hard time accepting the part where they are worried about the well-being of Luna in chapter 5. The plain fact of the matter is that Luna is a deity that not only can use magic, but can fly. Therefore, the worries of Celestia and Skye seem to be rather...out of place. It's as if the characters are ignoring the truths of their world. Your audience won't forget these facts though, so suspense (if that is your objective) really can't build here. Other than that, the only other thing that bugs me in the fic is the employment of a "Marty Stu" type character.
ReplyDeleteOther than those two little items, it's a pretty good fanfic. The dialogue is good for the most part. The characters seem to be "in character". It's not bad, but that nagging feeling that Skye is a Marty Stu is REALLY getting to me. I really recommend that you avoid that in the future. It kind of colors everything for a great number of readers.
3.8 out of 5 so far
@TwinkiePinkie
ReplyDeleteHello!
This story actually originated as a series of forum Roleplays between MudBug (Celestia), Skye (Skye), and myself (Luna). It ended up being really long, and we thought that it would be good enough for a fic. So, I've been turning the RP format into a more readable format.
Now, onto your concerns!
The thing is, Luna is dealing with a very different world than the one she lived in 1000 years ago. It's an entirely different culture, not to mention the landscape has likely changed drastically.
It's also a possibility that Luna has lost a considerable amount of power. She was transformed back into a younger version of herself, before she became Nightmare Moon. How young her body is now, we can't know because the show doesn't tell us. Without appearances in season 1, we don't really have a lot to go on. But that's kind of where we're coming from. She can still use magic, yes, but she might not be very good at it, definitely not as powerful as Celestia. Yet.
I think that Celestia has a right to be concerned. Luna is her sister, newly arrived to Equestria, and now she's mad. Celestia can't predict exactly what she'll do, to herself or to others. Luna is still very bitter, as we saw from Chapter 1.
But, I think that we were expectant that not everypony was going to like Skye. Sticking OCs in with cast characters doesn't generally go well, and we knew that.
But I do thank you all for your comments, good or bad. Whether or not you liked this story, I invite you to click the Author: Tales tag to see some of my personal, non-collaboration work. :)
ReplyDeletestory about princess luna instant five stars for you from me :D
ReplyDeleteHaha I never thought that I would come across you guys' story by tag hopping. I really like how this story is going. I hope to finish the other 2 chapters that are available when I have more time. Good job!
ReplyDeleteA bear . . . Luna, a GODDESS, is in danger because of a bear?
ReplyDeleteNo.
Just no.
Even Rarity could defeat a bear, and probably without whining either.
@Sebiale
ReplyDeleteAgreed. Hey, even the CMC could probably get away from a bear, couldn't you have picked a threat a bit more dangerous? There are so many options to pick from, a whole pack of wolves, an ursa minor, a dragon, Hydra - pretty much anything else would have given the scene a dramatic effect, this however was just silly instead.
make more, i hate reading a lot but this is one story that i just love
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