Author: N.K.
Description: It's said that the fastest way to a colt's heart is through his stomach. When Soarin's sweet tooth begins to arise while visiting Rainbow Dash, he's advised to pay a visit to Sweet Apple Acres. Will he recognise the mare who made the pie of his dreams when out of dress?Nopony Can Resist 'Em
Additional Tags: Short, Sweet, Light-Hearted, Cuddly, Pies
37 kommentaari:
Yep, pre-reader 15 pretty much hit the nail on the head. A pretty well-written story, and I found it really cute!
VastaKustutaBow chika wow woooow
VastaKustutaEeyup. Twas amusing. I liked it.
VastaKustutaSo, what happens when a drunken Big Mac comes home to find his sister in bed with some stranger?
VastaKustutaI say Pitchfork Wedding.
Haha, this one was pretty good. I'd like to see more of this ship.
VastaKustutaThey did or did not have sex?
VastaKustutaWell that progressed... quickly. Very interesting read, and apparently a new pairing to keep on my radar...
VastaKustuta@Bobcat
VastaKustutaI say sequel.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaI agree.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaI agree with your agreement.
andthentheyallfucked.gif
VastaKustuta@Brett Turner Now now, only one or two bases were crossed.
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaSounds like they did not go all the way.
That was so cheesy I think my arteries are clogged.
VastaKustutaAnd I mean this in the best way possible.
Fun little read.
As said before, fun little read. But I found the progression to be a little too fast, to at least be realistic. Nonetheless, nicely done.
VastaKustutaGot a good laugh out of this one. Pre-reader #15 was right on the money.
VastaKustutaThat was a cute, funny little story. Nothing really game-changing or revolutionary, but a solid little piece of work, and quite amusing.
VastaKustutaAnd then Applebloom was an auntie.
VastaKustuta@supervanman64
VastaKustutaMy thoughts exactly. ;)
Yeah...it did progress a little quickly...
VastaKustutaI like it, we need more of this pairing. It makes so much sense.
VastaKustutaYou drag us right up to the bed chamber and don't even give us a peak inside. Lame.
VastaKustutaI enjoyed this TOO much... oh Celestia... WHAT'S HAPPENING TO ME?
VastaKustutaI agree with Kyle, and also, I think the last line is the best one.
VastaKustutaCould've used a bit more of a build-up, either between the pie and the kissing, or between them kissing and going to bed, but otherwise solid.
VastaKustutaAuthor here - thank you for all the comments and feedback, it's much appreciated. :)
VastaKustutaMajor problem point seems to be the rush - I think you're probably all right, though I kind of set myself the goal of doing a quick story as my first ever piece - 3000 words in 2 hours was the goal, and I didn't want to try and go NSFW on my first ever MLP story - hence why the naughty is only implied, and not fully at that. AJ strikes me as the kind of girl to not go the absolute full hog at the very first. Of course, you're free to imagine how the night went otherwise. ;)
Anyway, thank you for the comments and reviews, and I shall be submitting and writing a few more fics before the month is out.
-N.K.
That was really cute! Great job Nyoko!!
VastaKustutaThat was a cutie and lovely story!! and I imagined all that, it was an amazing story so well written and so charming!
VastaKustutaI hate Google docs. it's slow on my comp (which is outdated sooo lol)
VastaKustutabut.
I had.
to read this.
FHEJKFJADSKLAFJDKSJEWOIA
INTRO PIC WAS ADORABLE
AND I HAD THE DASH FACE THE ENTIRE TIME I WAS READING THIS!!!!!
SO.... CUTE....! /)>3<(\
I even found the implied sex adorable. is that weird? O.o
anyway, yeah, i agree that it was a bit rushed too, and the ending was confusing; was it Spitfire or RD outside the window? or both? that needed to be a bit more clear.
GRRR, FIRST APPLEDASH
THEN BIG MACXFLUTTERSHY
NOW SOARIN X APPLEJACK
CRACK PAIRINGS FTW.jpg
Not bad, not bad at all.
VastaKustutaIt needs a sequal, It was amusing, but ending did not amuse, and the rush part should be less rushy
VastaKustutaHa, that was adorable! Even considering how easy Applejack was, I couldn't help but smile the whole time. It's definitely sexual in implication, but as well, it was just so cute and playful that it almost seemed...innocent? Not the word i'm looking for, but close enough. Very enjoyable read.
VastaKustuta@supervanman64 Tucker shut up!
VastaKustutaI, for one, disagree with the complaints of it feeling "rushed". If it was treated like a discovery of the 'one true love' between strangers, then maybe, but here it seems more, well, a one night stand (hold the sex) between two company-hungry ponies, who just might develop into something more down the line.
VastaKustutaI mean, hell. Complete strangers do more over less.
Oh and yes. Loved it.
Goodness, how I wish this would be continued :)
VastaKustutaAlthough SoarinDash is my favorite shipping, im goign to read this one...
VastaKustutaJust listened to a reading of this on Youtube. It's fast, like others have said, yet the setup rings true for the start of a relationship between them. I'm glad you left it open as to what they did in bed (I don't see AJ jumping straight to sex, but I can see her just spending the night with a colt like that). Frankly, I just can't resist this ship.
VastaKustuta