Author: Skratch Okami
Description: A look at the prehistory and history of Equestria.Part 1: Era of Dragon
Part 2: Era of Alacorn
Part 3: Era of the Unicorn
Part 4: Era of the Pegasus (New!)
Additional Tags: Mythology, History, Dragons, Centaurs, Alacorns
23 comments:
Dear Luna that is a word wall if I've ever seen one
ReplyDeleteCRITICAL WALL OF TEXT.
ReplyDeleteOther than that, not bad.
I really wish I could get into this. But the wall of text is daunting, it's 2:20 AM EST right now, and the font is too small to be read comfortably.
ReplyDelete3 stars from me for now.
Read the whole thing. HUGE wall of text though! Not reccomended for reading on a Smart Phone!
ReplyDeletePS: We shall soon reach the year when Tyrant Celestia launched the final world war. After complete world domination, she erased all of this recorded history and replace it with her own
It's very good but as has been said, needs better formatting.
ReplyDeleteIt's because it's a published Google document, those are hard as shit to read.
ReplyDeleteI made that mistake on Epiphany, eugh. Making public is a lot better.
Do published documents have a viewer limit? (I ask because I don't see the usual right side chat-box)
ReplyDeleteIt may be why it was chosen in this case if there is no more limit when the document is published.
But next time perhaps add extra line-breaks to prepare for the published formatting.
If no pony minds my asking, is it alicorn or alacorn? I ask, because I've seen alicorn before, but this is the first time I've seen alacorn, which I assume is referring to the same thing.
ReplyDeleteA pony Similiarian? It's more readable at least.
ReplyDeleteWall of text is debated a lot in pre-reader reviews.
ReplyDeleteOn one end, its technically accurate.
On the other, it's not "internet" accurate.
We are spoiled.
I'm noticing alot of Alliterations from old Edda. And some intertextual references to Ovid's Metarmophosis.
ReplyDeleteNicely done mate.
...Darn it, I wanted to do this.
ReplyDeleteCURSE YOU LAZINESS
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThat's just because of reading properly-formatted text in a browser.
That's not a wall of text, TRUST ME...I've seen walls of text and they're not pretty.
Hey guys i saw what y'all meant by the "wall of text" i separated the paragraphs so hopefully it's easier to read ^.^
ReplyDeleteSo who do we poke if we find typos? ^^;
ReplyDeletelol if y'all find typos you can email me at pyropup789@yahoo.com, just make sure you tell me in the subject.
ReplyDeleteLots of types, misuse of words and grammar - but an editor could fix that up. The concept was good, but at times it felt a bit rushed. Too many ideas thrown at the reader makes it hard to focus.
ReplyDeleteAlso, the transition from 'lore-telling' to 'real-time' is a bit bothersome, if that makes sense. This would be a good pure lore-telling story anyways.
@Jorlem Definitely with an "i" if you ask me ;-)
ReplyDelete>Reads description
ReplyDeleteThis looks interesting
>clicks link
......that is a BIG wall of text....
>backs away slowly
@Jorlem and Allicorn: The reason i use "Alacorn" is because Unicorn is Latin for "One Horn". Alicorn would mean "Other Horn"...which sounds kind of odd. Alae/Ala, on the other hand, is the Latin for wing. ^.^
ReplyDelete@Ivan: I'm not really sure what you all mean by "Wall of Text." I tried to separate it to make it easier on the eyes but aside from that i don't know what to do. If you could tell me how to fix it i would very much appreciate it.
Why no era of the Earth Pony?
ReplyDeleteEra of Earth Pony is what we're currently in.
ReplyDeleteNice read and well thought out
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