• Story: The Grief of a Nation

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    Author: Scorch_Mechanic
    Description: What does it feel like to banish your own sister to the sky?
    The Grief of a Nation

    Additional Tags: exile emotions mistake forgiveness elements
    Wednesday, May 18, 2011 op
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    23 comments:

    1. ZKPonyMay 18, 2011 at 12:07 AM

      eh. Just a retelling? :( dissapointing. I didn't even tear up.
      However, it did give a little backstory.

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    2. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 12:08 AM

      Eh, sometimes the simple things work better?

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    3. SigilMay 18, 2011 at 12:12 AM

      Interesting story. It is a good take on the battle that occurred between Luna and Celestia. And maybe it is just me but I kind of like the depiction of Celestia feeling bad over being force to banish her own sister. Good story overall.

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    4. MaximillianVeersMay 18, 2011 at 12:17 AM

      Dialga evolved into a Nightmare Moon!

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    5. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 12:17 AM

      Scootabuse :'(

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    6. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 12:40 AM

      I like this retelling of the story through the eyes of Celestia. It's a neat change of perspective. :3

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    7. Ten MiharaMay 18, 2011 at 12:50 AM

      Wow. For whatever reason, this piece really resonated with me; I was moved almost to tears. Perhaps it is simply my reading of it, but I found this to be quite epic. Bravo.

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    8. KyleMay 18, 2011 at 12:53 AM

      I have to admit, that's a pretty good reason for why Celestia banished Nightmare Moon instead of destroying the corruption...

      She couldn't. Since she was borrowing the power of the Elements, she couldn't use them to their full potential. That makes sense.

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    9. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 1:04 AM

      GUISE who is responsible for this drawing? :O

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    10. PangolynnMay 18, 2011 at 1:21 AM

      @Anonymous

      Scootabuse on the frontpage, no less.

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    11. chiseliteMay 18, 2011 at 1:23 AM

      @Anonymous

      Look up scootabuse in google. There is a nsfw gallery which has this picture AND the picture that came before it.

      I unfortunately don't know who drew it but whoever they are, bless them.

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    12. PangolynnMay 18, 2011 at 1:27 AM

      @Anonymous

      It's Tsampikos.

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    13. PangolynnMay 18, 2011 at 1:31 AM

      @chiselite

      It's Tsampikos.

      Sorry ahead of time if this is a double post. Blame derpy.

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    14. Midnight ShadowMay 18, 2011 at 4:38 AM

      I like this one. It's short but to me it worked. It's always hard dealing with backstory - and whilst this was indeed just a quickie retelling it left enough world-building to whet the tastebuds for something more.

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    15. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 6:56 AM

      @Anonymous

      I think that the drawer is Tsampikos

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    16. Aoshi StarkMay 18, 2011 at 7:11 AM

      Read this at least four times now, enjoyed it every time. well done. :)

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    17. Scorch_MechanicMay 18, 2011 at 9:48 AM

      @Sigil and Ten Mihara

      The only thing I really wanted to get across with this story is that what Celestia did is almost unforgivably horrible, and she knows it.

      Think about it. She banished her very own sister to the moon for a thousand years, with only evil thoughts to keep her company. It's a testament to Luna's will that she didn't go outright insane.

      If even a little bit of Celestia's pain was conveyed to my audience, then my work is done.

      @Midnight

      Quick? Certainly, there's more to explore, but I rather think my fic contains all the salient points of importance. In this case, I actually did less world building than in my previous fic. Everything in that story link is readily inferred from the known canon and from comments made by the show's creators.

      As for more, I make no promises. I'm not an artist of any note, but I know better than to let a flash of inspiration slide on by. The short story is my favorite format, simply because it leaves room for the reader's mind to expand on the details however he or she sees fit.

      Still, I'm glad you liked it.

      @theredangelz, Anonymous, Anonymous, and Anonymous

      That settles it. From now on I'm going to gently suggest/supply images for my stories when they're published on EqD.
      Whenever I next write, and whatever it may be...

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    18. Scorch_MechanicMay 18, 2011 at 9:51 AM

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    19. Scorch_MechanicMay 18, 2011 at 9:58 AM

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    20. Scorch_MechanicMay 18, 2011 at 9:59 AM

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    21. AnonymousMay 18, 2011 at 1:18 PM

      Well, I personally think this is one of the most interesting fics I've read yet. One has to remember, it's not the tale that makes a story great, it's the storyteller. So what if it's a retelling? The detail of the battle, the imagery of Celestia's feelings, none of that existed before.

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    22. B.June 14, 2011 at 1:03 AM

      Very well written.

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    23. TrivialAugust 27, 2011 at 3:57 PM

      I liked this. The language used was interesting. Good work.

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