Author: Roy G. Biv
Description: This story is an attempt to not only write a happy Derpy Hooves/Ditzy Doo and Dinky Doo story, but also delve into who the unicorn filly's father is.Dinky Doo's Father Revealed
Dinky Doo's Travels
Dinky Doo's Homecoming (New!)
Additional Tags: normal, shipping, Absolutely not grimdark
75 kommentaari:
>absolutely not grimdark
VastaKustutahmm
absolutely not grimdark tag is win
VastaKustutaread when he submitted.
VastaKustutaFantastic story, I think it should be "official" derpy back story.
Also, not really shipping tag, more sad/normal.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaExactly my suspicions fellow anon.
Not grimdark and OC Ponies.
VastaKustutaI have a bad feeling about this...
~Scratch
I got bubbles on my butt.
VastaKustutaoh gosh this is so sweeeet my heart is melting so bad
VastaKustutaconfound this ponies they made me have feelings of happines when dinky met her dad
It actually isn't grimdark. It's sad, but the ending is happy.
VastaKustutai srsly cry while reading
VastaKustutaI'm not a fan of developmentally disabled Derpy. Not part of my personal head canon.
VastaKustutaJust finished the story.
VastaKustutaCurse this OC pony story, it drives me to respect them.
Apart from maybe being a little bit more subtle about them having sex, it was an amazing story.
Bravo Roy, 5/5 stars.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaNaturally I forget to sign my name. *Applies hoof to the front of my cranial region*
~Scratch
My heart didn't melt, it fucking vaporized.
VastaKustutaFantastic and remarkable story. :)
VastaKustutaIt was very interesting, really.
It was soft and light, touching... but it was also strong, in the sense that, the 'happy' (the feeling, emotion) that Dinky feels in the story, we can also feel it since it well shown and explained to us... and then, smile back at the story. ;)
Golden Muffin Award for this Ditzy-Dinky Family story. :happycry:
@Nova25
VastaKustutaYou should REALLY remove the ''Absolutely not grimdark'' tag... It makes people wonder ''bad'' questions...
Excellent story.
VastaKustuta"Absolutely not grimdark" haha. Definitely wasn't.
this person has won the muffin award
VastaKustutaReally nice even if I don't like mentally challenged version of Derpy.
VastaKustuta*Spoilers! Avert your eyes!*
VastaKustutaWhile I enjoyed the story, I feel it would have worked better had the father died before Dinky learned of him. I know, that's horrible of me.
I understand they would be unable to raise Dinky at the Farm, but why not visit the father? Why hide he exists? Why hope Dinky never asks, if he's been alive all this time?
If not dead, then have Dinky be younger or something, so her lack of knowledge of her father is more understandable.
But, all in all. I enjoyed this and it warmed my heart.
I've a soft spot for Ditzy/Dinky stories, and this is no exception. 5/5 would read again.
VastaKustuta@DeviousPsychopath
VastaKustutaI agree, it would have made it better, but it wouldnt have made it any more realistic. Dinky cant be any older than the equivalent of 9.
And it isnt unreasonable to not ask why, especially considering she had likely never seen her father more than a few times at birth.
Will read tomorrow!
VastaKustutaHope it's not a Denver Bronco...
The ending made no sense. Ditzy / Derpy acted like Dinky was going to learn something really sad. I figured her dad divorced her at first, then figured he was dead. Then it turns out he's alive but working somewhere else. I don't see why Dinky wasn't told sooner, why her father didn't come to visit, and why he didn't get replaced much sooner.
VastaKustutaThis was such a nice story! I love how this turned out and have a better appreciation for Derpy and Dinky now!
VastaKustutaWhere does Quarterback being Derpy's brother come from? Is that fanon, or what?
VastaKustutaManly tears.
VastaKustutaI think my only "problem" is the use of an OC pony instead of say Ponet or Pokey or... well there aren't that many male background unicorns now is there?...
But still, manly tears.
@Present Perfect
VastaKustutaIt's part of Roy G. Biv's personal story continuity. See "Trapping the Quarterback" for where it comes from (at least as far as I can tell).
Reading this story while listening to Winter Wrap Up caused a waterfall.
VastaKustuta6/5
Thanks Anon, I wondered about that.
VastaKustutaVery heartwarming story about Ditzy Doo. I loved it. :3
VastaKustutaI cried. :,)
VastaKustuta*Manly Tears*
VastaKustutaFlawless. Victory.
Great story, 5/5, D'AWWWWWWWW, ...
VastaKustutabut Seth should change the [Shipping] tag into [Normal] [LightShipping] [HappySad] or something. Not exactly the kind of story one expects from [Shipping]
I swear I cried when I read it.
VastaKustutaThe ending was so beautiful. It brought me to tears. The way the story was told just made me feel (what's the word I'm looking for? In tagalog "Nakakakilig"). The bond between that family put a good feeling in my heart.
6/5 stars.
A great, heartwarming story.
VastaKustutaI agree with the criticism above that the reason for the father being away seemed fairly contrived (I too was expecting the situation to be that the father had died), but it ultimately doesn't really damage the integrity of the story.
a truly sweet story, loved it very much.
VastaKustutalike the ending, it brings hope for possibly a happy ending for the family.
<:')
This was so sweet I think I got a cavity just reading it!
VastaKustutaYou bronies are making me fall in love with Ditzy and Dinky more and more every day!
<3
5/5 from me but I wrote a reflection on my DA.
Paragraph 4 near the end, I believe you meant to write 'glimmer' not 'slimmer'.
VastaKustuta'It was just one of the many quirks that Ditzy (Ditzy or Dinky?) loved about her mom that made her unique.'
'They also began to teach me how to fly properly, something that have (has?) been a challenge in school due to my lazy eye. I learned the painstaking task of over-compensating (compensating or over-compensating?) for depth perception, and how to think that objects could be much closer than they seemed.'
I tried to calm down as they taught me to do in the speech classes. to (you might want to capitalize) manage the right words Finally, the words came slow, but I was able to manage what I wanted to say "You are no my brother. You are new pony. But you be nice and cheer me up. But how come you no tell Ditzy this yourself?"
'Several other residents started bushing (pushing?) our still stunned bodies up towards the stage as we felt toy crowns rested atop our heads.'
Other than those absolutely tiny spelling errors, that was positively wonderful! Love it, love it, love it!
Amazing. I have a whole new perspective of Derpy Hooves now.
VastaKustutaAnd thus the universe life and everything was created.
VastaKustutaFamily tip for young child/teen heading out: Working at gay bars can get you some good money, information, and favors. I loled, but aside from that this was really touching, can't wait for the end!
VastaKustuta...has some fairly major issues, in my opinion, but good effort.
VastaKustutame personally this is the onlyoc shipping i agree with kinda..but my only problem is that he makes derpy sound retarted retarted
VastaKustutaThe first part was enjoyable, but the newest chapter practically dived into the "everybody is gay" trope in the first few paragraphs so I stopped caring. I give 3/5 stars for a highly enjoyable first chapter appropriate to every conceivable audience and a second chapter which embraced the most absurd excesses of shipping.
VastaKustutaThe only reason I rated "Party Never Ended" the higher 5 stars was because it never went to the excesses of shipping til' the end, even though it left me wondering if Equine society was going to be annihilated by sheer demographic instability.
Hmm. Interesting fic idea for a deconstruction of shipping.
Pretty much what Benschachar said.
VastaKustutaAfter the whole meeting with Dinky's aunt, my interest just dropped and I stopped reading after a few more paragraphs.
Setting score from 5/5 to 3/5 because I'm rating the story as a whole.
^ to continue my thoughts: I think the story was fine with just the first one, personally. :/
VastaKustutaIt wasn't a bad story, but if I could possibly convey the amount of apathy I experienced during it, this website would most likely implode.
VastaKustutaI couldn't shake the association between the nurse Mare Blucher and Mel Brooks' Frau Blucher. Extra points for creepy (incorrect) urban myth if that was the intention.
VastaKustutaNow you have me anxious to see the third part. Well done so far, Roy G Biv!
VastaKustutaPart 2 :
VastaKustutaWell, it was interesting.
Interesting thinking with the female Diamond Dogs... remembers me of something, but I can't point exactly what ? Amazons, maybe ?
Can't wait for moar! I love the story, Zeks, love, sadness, battle, unpredictability and no clichés (I could certainly not find any). All a good story need, I know a good story does not need zeks. I wish this could be "official".
VastaKustutaAbsolutly fantastic series so far. Cant wait for more.
VastaKustutaI LOVE this fic, can't wait for more, please let Dinky and Derpy get the happy ending they so deserve
VastaKustutaHow does a Unicorn+Pegasus work?
VastaKustuta@Dave the cynic
VastaKustuta*Stares at Dave* Um... Well, when a MALE unicorn or pegasus and a FEMALE unicorn or pegasus loves each other very, very much... *Cough, Ahem* Stuff happens...
I'll say, I just readall the chapters and that story was just great! The ending was just fantastic. 5/5
VastaKustutaAlso, that part in 2nd chapter: "Well, sure! My mentor Twilight and Princess Luna did that, as did Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash! Ooh, and Lyra an' Bonbon"
I nearly died laughing
@Asgard
VastaKustutaBut they're two different species.
@Dave Mustang, the cynical Brony
VastaKustutaIIRC Lauren Faust has stated on her DA that they could interbreed
@Cola
VastaKustutaYou mean she said it for fanservice?
That "definitely not grimdark" tag needs Sincerity Mode attached to it. 100% WAFF here, and in the best way possible.
VastaKustutaDid the author change the ending to the first chapter? I swear it originally ended with Dinky seeing her father again at her cuteceanera and they conversed in hoof-language. It's seems like the last couple of paragraphs were deleted so the author could continue the story.
VastaKustutaNeedless to say, I was confused when reading chapter 2 and 3 until I reread the ending for chapter one.
Part 3 :
VastaKustutaWell, that was a nice story, even though, like some said (DA), it feels like it isn't really *The End*-end.
Finally, all is good for dear Dinky :)
(and for Ditzy and Bran tonight too ;))
@EonMaster
VastaKustutaI did change it as too many raged & complained that the original had a HUGE plot hole with why didn't he visit or them visit, plus the buildup to him just being across the continent seemed off to many...
@Roy G. Biv
VastaKustutaHuh... when was those change made ?
Recently or ?
I tried so hard to like this as a whole. I absolutely loved the first chapter, and was completely willing to overlook the above-mentioned apparent plot hole because the story still ended on an ultimately satisfying note.
VastaKustutaBut absolutely nothing about the second or third chapter grabbed me. I just could not find any interest in what happened in the story after the first quarter or so of the second chapter because the shift in tones and themes was so extreme, and the third chapter didn't really do anything to win me back (and the way Dinky basically just ran into her father on accident actually pushed me away a little farther).
I really don't want to sound mean about this, but it almost seems as if Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 were made up as they were written, without an overall plan for what was going to happen.
Now THAT is a good Ditsy/Dinky story.
VastaKustutawhile part 1 was tolerable and even sweet at times, part 2 and 3 are prime examples of what gives FanFic a bad name...
VastaKustuta"Dinky blushed, the young mare knowing what would likely happen at home that night."
seriously? you might as well say "and then they banged" ugh.
Family-shipping?
VastaKustutaI've read a lot of Pony Fan-Fics in my day, but this... This is by far my favorite. Excellent job...
VastaKustutaI have never in my life cried tears of joy before. Congratulations, sir.
VastaKustutaVery, very very, very heartwarming.
VastaKustutaI think I can have a nice sleep tonight.
Thank you.
Such a great story i can see why everyone loves derpy so much, and the characterization is great, it always astounds me how much detail is put into background ponies!
VastaKustutaI LOVE THIS FANDOM, and this fan fic :3
Trevor is moved beyond words. Thank you for this fic.
VastaKustuta~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
I thought it was pretty interesting that Princess Luna(WTF?!) and Twilight(DOUBLE WTF?!)were lesbians. Nothing against that, but it just seems like an odd match. Not being stupid or ignorant, just kinda my opinion *cowers*Please don't punch me, internet!
VastaKustutaOh, and the story was super cool too. <3'd it!
VastaKustuta