[Normal][Random] It's... not what it looks like. Let's not go to the movies today, it would be much better to just curl up and have some story time. Yay! (All right, let's be a bit clearer: picture and story not actually related!)
Author: Tenure and Midnight Shadow
Description: A mysterious blacksmith with a troubled past trundles into Ponyville as he wends his way to nowhere across Equestria. A chance encounter with three boisterous foals leads him and them to an adventure they'll never forget, which will change their lives forever.
Crusaders of the Lost Mark
Additional Tags: cutie marks, crusading, soldiers, monsters, teamwork
23 kommentaari:
>Nazi's
VastaKustuta>nope.avi
The best Indy stories ALWAYS have Nazis! To hell with whether or not there's ponies involved, I DEMAND NAZIS!
VastaKustutaShit, that came out wrong. I DEMAND NAZIS... so Indiana Jones can kill them!
atleast its no zombie nazis riding on dinosuars with laser beams attached to their heads other then that decent read
VastaKustutaLoved it, excellent OC, everypony had good dialogue, And an effective writing style to boot.
VastaKustutaThough the accent was kinda... Over the top.
*ka-whuff...shuffle shuffle* Hilarious. Also, the picture's pretty misleading. Went in expecting an Indiana Jones crossover, and instead got a humorously-accented blacksmith and a rather bizarre trip into the Everfree Forest. It's good, I don't doubt that, it's just... misleading.
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaNow I feel like a foal for not bothering to read before commenting. Whoops. So, not totally Indiana Jones related, which means no Nazis. Eh, still good.
The ending was PRICELESS.
VastaKustutaSince there's been some confusion as to quite what this story is in lieu of what I thought was an hilarious coincidence, I've edited the post a teeny bit to adjust everypony's expectations.
VastaKustutaThis was an awesome fic.
VastaKustutaRead the smith's voice as Heavy from TF2 and its even better.
@Phoe Thanks, Phoe!
VastaKustutaNot Nazis. Russian. The OC is obviously from some Russian analogue nation.
VastaKustutaAnd I rather liked the Brick Joke at the end of the story. Makes for a nice bookender and is quite lol worthy.
Okay, someone make an Indiana Jones crossover right now!
VastaKustutaGreat story. Smithy reminds me of Heavy every time he talks.
VastaKustutaI apologize for not having nazi's for indiana foals to kill!
VastaKustutaThe title was too much fun to pass up, sorry!
having said that, I'd like to see an indiana jones type or crossover...
I thinkink that this story is good one, comrade.
VastaKustutaI like it very much.
Glad you all like it. Me and Midnight worked pretty hard on it.
VastaKustutaExcellent story :) Five stars
VastaKustutaBrilliant story, although in a few cases the rule "Show, don't tell" would have bettered the results. (This seems to apply mostly to AJ in this fic)
VastaKustutaGood story! I really liked the OC and his interaction with the CMCs; sort of reminiscent of a grumpy grandfather who has a heart of gold. The accent worked pretty well, I thought, although I didn't get why "Da" became so infectious. On the other hand, it was nice recurring gag, so I'm not sure it needed an explanation.
VastaKustutaIt did strike me a little odd that the CMC became such impressive soldiers after it appears one day of training. If they got more training than that, then I just didn't pick up on it.
One grammatical mistake that seemed to get repeated over and over was confusing "it's" (the contraction of "it is") and "its" (the possessive form of "it"). It's probably not a big deal in general, but it happens to be a pet peeve of mine, and ended up being distracting.
Dude! That was frikken awesome!
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustuta...we missed messed-up its/it's ?
damn. consider me chastized.
>Smithy was the Black Butcher
VastaKustutaGLORIOUS TWIST ENDING
Epic. Fucking. Win.
VastaKustutaOne minor thing, minuscule, really. You used the wrong 'to' in the forest with the crusaders arguing, to instead of too. Nothing other than that