• Story: The 4th Crusader

    [Normal] Derpy and Dinky Time!



    Author: Crimson Bristle.
    Description: The Cutie Mark Crusaders get a new member. Things, naturally, take a turn for the chaotic.
    The Fourth Crusader


    Additional Tags: Normal, fillies, comedic, shenanigans, failponies

    26 comments:

    1. Liked it, loved it, I want some more of it!

      This would be good as an episode, I think.

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    2. I loved this story. I agree that this was practically a whole episode.

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    3. Twilight performing surgery struck me as a bit odd (was it just a way to get her involved so she could write the moral?), As did Dinky's speech (is that a bit of fanon that I've managed to miss?)

      Adorable fic, though.

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      o.O woah...

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    5. It was kind of a way to shoehorn her in, yeah, I'll admit. That's why I threw it in as a desperate gambit by the fillies that worked out, instead of a logical and sane plan.

      As for Dinky's speech, I mostly pulled that out of my flank, as it were. It was to provide contrast with Ditzy's usual depiction, while still making her a bit...Different.

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    6. really nice i couldn't help but imagine ditzy's breakfast and want some of it

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      ;_;

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    8. Im still wondering why im not crying on a Derpy and Ditzy story, but anyways it was awesome, it felt almost like if it where an actual episode

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    9. That was a fun read. I always love the Derpy and Dinky stories. She loves her little muffin so much <3

      I also liked Dinky's impressive vocabulary for a filly of her age. It's funny to think she's more all there than her mother.

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    10. I love how people think that a pegasus pony and a unicorn (prob'ly) pony can reproduce to make a unicorn pony without problems. Can one compare this to a Homo Sapien reproducing to a Neanderthal?

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    11. @Anonymous Not only has Faust already said theres no reason why the differnt types of ponies cold get together, but it has been confirmed that H. sapian and Neanderthals have mixed and produced viable offspring.

      on a differnt note "to many people already veiwing document" D:(

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    12. A story involving Dinky and Derpy that DOESN'T make me sob? Unthinkable! Good read.

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    13. "There are too many people already viewing this document."

      Welp, everyone loves Derpy and Dinky stories!

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    14. Anonymous@May 7, 2011 5:55 PM, They're all ponies, just some have certain extra bits tacked on. I'd say it's more like a Husky and a Lab getting together.

      Anyway, a lighthearted fanfic that doesn't involve serious drama or angst about Ditzy and Dinky. I loves it!

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    15. Damn good story, I love how you said Ditzy Doo and not derpy hooves! Thank you so much for a wonderful and exciting story!

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    16. Great story. Should have said "what can we do ya fer?" instead of "what can we do for ya?" it fits her accent better.

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    17. Sweet little story all around. And 'maneonites' still has me smiling. Heh.

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    18. This is the first fan-fiction that I read that didn't represent derpy/ditzy as a retard. Good job!

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    19. This is not a bad piece; your technicals are all good. However, I found this fic rather disappointingly bland. I don't feel like I know Dinky any better for having read it, and I got no emotional connection with even the established characters. I agree that it feels a bit like an episode, in that this is more a script than a story.

      It seemed like Dinky wasn't important to the plot. She was playing Idea Generator, but the CMCs do that anyway. Ideally, her appearance should thow off the balance of the group.

      Bloom, Scoot, and Sweetie make up a Power Trio, which traditionaly has two very opposite elements and a third who acts as a mediating force. (Bloom being the mediator or "brains", with tomboy Scoot and girly-girl Sweetie as the foils.) Throwing in a fourth member ought to somehow upset that stable group.

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    20. I enjoyed it. Liked that Derpy didn't speak in nonsense.
      Though I agree that Twilight and minor surgery seemed a little forced. Other than that, I would like to read more of your Derpy/Dinky goodness.

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    21. That was great, everyone was in character and well written to boot, keep it up

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    22. Continuation:
      and then a cutie mark suddenly appeared in dinky's flank.... to everypony's surprise the cutie mark is a broken leg with a mailbag!

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    23. I love the idea of the CMCs teaming up with Dinky.

      I also really want Dewdrop Decimal to be the name of a famous librarypony.

      I wondered how they'd be able to screw up a party with Pinkie. That's a pretty epic fail right there.

      Dinky is remarkably literate.

      That was very cute. A little rushed near the end, but enjoyable nonetheless.

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