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April Friend Off Submission Rules
I deviated a bit from the template, but it's still pretty basic below.
New Art has a Blue Label
New Fanfiction has a Red Label
Entries are CLOSED! Thanks to all that participated! Enjoy the crazy amounts of content!
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All entries after the Page Break!
1 (Drawfriend)
Source -Obsidian Solitaire
Source 2
Source 2
Story: Bubbles
2 (Drawfriend)
Source -Obisidian Solitaire
Story: Today, Tomorrow and Forever
3 (Writefriend)
Author: CrazyRedEmu
Description: A brief look into Dash's home life on the day she gets her cutie mark. Written before the Cutie Mark Chronicles episodeAdditional Tags: Daww, Family, 20% cooler, life, cute
4 (Writefriend)
Author: Hikuro14
Description: What if the beloved weighted companion cube from Portal turned out to be a pony?Additional Tags: Portal, Weighted Companion Cube, Ponies, sad, love.
5 (Writefriend)
Author: Usea
Description: A morning with Dinky and her mother.Additional Tags: Short, Ditzy Doo, Rhyme, Pic Related
6 (Writefriend)
Author: Blueshift
Description: Twilight Blimple has to deliver some important medical aid to the magical land of Airquestria. But the Great and Powerful Trixieberg is also on the same mission - could love really be in the air?Additional Tags: The Great and Powerful Trixie, Twilight Sparkle
7 (Writefriend)
Author: Pen Stroke
Description: Twice now dragons have been disgraced and beaten by the tiny ponies of Equestria, and their king Kronos has decided its time for Equestria to learn its place. Celestia flies to face the High Dragon alone, and the Elements of Harmony stand ready in case the sun princesses fails. Luna has been told to stay behind, the moon princess to weak to fight... but can they really expect her to just sit by while Celestia enters a fight she has no hope of winning?Additional Tags: Sisters Unite to Save Equestria, Luna, Celestia, Nightmare Moon, Minor Mane Cast Appearance
Author: Prince Shadari
Description: Trixie gets a letter from her brother telling her that her mother's condition is worse. On her way back she is reminded of her origins in Hoofington, the village that she lived in before her time spent traveling.Additional Tags: Memory, Origin Story, Death, Trixie
9 (Writefriend)
Author: Lia Sadako
Description: After being shown up at her own cute-ceanera, can Diamond Tiara ever show her face--and cutie mark--in public again?'Additional Tags: Diamond Tiara
10 (Writefriend)
Author: Twinkletail
Description: Princess Celestia is in trouble, and it's up to Twilight to save her!Additional Tags: Twilight Sparkle, Great and Powerful Trixie, Shipping
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11 (Writefriend) #2
[Shipping] Twilight&The Supreme and Omnipotent Trixie
Author: WhitemageofDOOM
Description: Twilight hasn't been receiving letters from Celestia, when she goes to canterlot she isn't prepared for what she finds.Additional Tags: Twilight, The Great&Powerful Trixie,
12 (Writefriend)
Author: Alice-Human-Sacrifice
Description: little filly Pinkie Pie learns from a visit to her grannyAdditional Tags: Pinkie pie, Fluttershy, Rarity, Rainbow dash, Surprise, Firefly, Posey, Sparkler
Author: Narwhals' Bend
Description: Twilight feels left out when all her friends have found somepony special but her. She pours through book after book for help, only to realize she is already in love. However, it’s not what she expected. (Diary Format)Additional Tags: Twilight Sparkle
14 (Drawfriend)
Source-Josh
15 (Writefriend)
Source 
Author: Tales
Description: Celestia claims that Luna has an actual fan! But when Celestia pulls a seemingly harmless prank, does she realize the damage that's been done?Additional Tags: Sad, Luna, Celestia, Fan
16 (Writefriend)
Source 
Author: Blueshift
Description: Twilight Sparkly-Night is just a normal painting living a peaceful life in the magical land of Artquestria. But when the boastful Trixie: Composition in Great & Powerful, No. 2 is hung next to her, Twilight's life might just change forever...Additional Tags: The Great and Powerful Trixie, Twilight Sparkle;
17 (Writefriend)
Source 
Author: Ten Mihara
Description: The Great and Powerful Trixie returns to Ponyville, but finds an unexpected audience.Additional Tags: The Great and Powerful Trixie, Nurse Pony, unnamed fillies,
18 (Writefriend)
Source 
Author: Ten Miahara
Description: With the loss of Rainbow Dash, will the Great Pony Brigade ever be the same?Additional Tags: Scootaloo, Rainbow Dash
19 (Drawfriend)
20 (Drawfriend)
Source
21 (Writefriend)
Author: Hawkysu
Description: needAdditional Tags: Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle,
22 (Writefriend)
Author: Author: MikauSchekzen
Description: When Rarity falls asleep during work and Sweetie Belle silently takes over, it seems as though they are out of golden silk. Sweetie Belle decides to create some herself, but she seems to create something far greater instead...Additional Tags: Rarity, Sweetie Belle,
23 (Writefriend)
Author: Chris
Description: The Great and Powerful Trixie may have fled Ponyville after the Ursa Minor incident, but that was only the beginning of her troubles...Additional Tags: Trixie, The Great and Powerful TRIXIE, wilderness, peril
24 (Writefriend)
Author: Trelatyraelis
Description: A journey inside Ditzy's mind, dealing with something she had never experienced before.Additional Tags: Derpy/Ditzy, Blues
25(Writefriend)
Author: Moabite
Description: Derpy explains to Dinky why her eyes look so strange.Additional Tags: Derpy Hooves, Dinky
26 (Drawfriend)
Source1- Sir Leadhead
Source2- Logan
Source2- Logan
27 (Writefriend)
Source 
Author: Lurks-no-More
Description: "Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Twilight Sparkle and Applejack all share their stories of how Dash and Applejack became a couple."Additional Tags: Four ponies, four different perspectives
28 (Writefriend)
Source 
Author: Jazelock
Description: A lab pony and a companion cube. Oh, and GLaDOS, of course.Additional Tags: Pinkie Pie
29 (Writefriend)
Author: x()~,
Description: Come in, come in. Let blind old Madam Tarot tell your fortune. I see all, heh heh heh.Additional Tags: Celestia, Tarot, OC
30 (Drawfriend)
The Party Never Ended
31 (Writefriend)
Source-Megasweet
Author: Psycho Streak
Description: A series of events in the not too far off future following ScootalooAdditional Tags: Scootaloo, Rainbow Dash
32 (Drawfriend)
All Comic Pages Here
33 (Writefriend)
Author: Bookish Delight
Description: One day, all of Rarity's hard work will pay off––but until then, she has her dreams, and her loved ones...Additional Tags: Rarity, Applejack, Rainbow Dash
34 (Drawfriend)
Source-Ari
35 (Drawfriend)
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36 (Drawfriend)
Source
37 (Writefriend)
Author: AMereLurker
Description: When late Trixie's daughter Trixie (Yes Trixie named her daughter Trixie, is that surprising?) fails to complete a mission, she has to escape from Canterlot. But a dark force is not going to let her get away.Additional Tags: short-story, Everypony
38 (Drawfriend)
39 (Writefriend)
Source
Author: Jetfire
Description: When Braeburn is endangered, Applejack must revisit a shadow of the past.Additional Tags: Applejack, Braeburn, OCs, Everypony
40 (Drawfriend)
Source 
41 (Writefriend/Drawfriend)
Source-Applejuice
Author: d d
Description:Filly Applejack has tea with her UncleAdditional Tags: Applejack
42 (Drawfriend)
Source- KK
Chasing Rainbows
114 comments:
I'm curious to read "Twilight's Best Friend" now.. O.o (36)
ReplyDeleteSo much friendship!
ReplyDeleteYou would post this right as I'm heading out. Admit it Sethisto, you did that on purpose.
ReplyDeleteOh well, I'll be back tonight and see how many of these I can make it through before sleep deprivation claims me!
Can't wait to get reading all this stuff, luckily there's a bank holiday tomorrow!
ReplyDeleteSpecial thanks to the artist of number 36, that pic is absolutely a perfect representation of what was in my head while I was writing it! :)
*sighs wistfully*
ReplyDelete...Next time. I swear to Celestia. Next time, I'm making it into a Friendoff, come hay or high water.
At least there's a lot of awesome new content for me to peruse.
I knew about it yesterday, but I still can't believe that madmax drew something for Antipodes. I'm still freaking out about it. (in a good way, of course!)
ReplyDeletethat antipodes image is epic
ReplyDeleteI said "What the fuck?" outload when I saw the sixth one.
ReplyDeleteOh god, that deserves all the rewards.
Well, I've checked out all the drawfriends that are up, and I love all but two of them (won't say which though). But Seth,I've noticed that for some story posts you've replaced their pics with the drawfriends, and for some you haven't. Why?
ReplyDeleteNow, off to read all the Writefriends. And I mean all of them. Ever. Cos I haven't read the ones from previous months yet.
OMIGOSHOMIGOSHOMIGOOOOOSH! First ever entry into a friendoff! A note though regarding my submission (31) is that it ends up quite happy and uplifting, isnt all sad
ReplyDelete@chinlamp
ReplyDeleteIt's mainly if I remembered to or not tbh.
I was in a music grind for the last 2 hours doing this, I bet there are a bunch of small errors.
wow I made it up on here, I am so happy, my submission is 12, I hope people enjoy it ^^
ReplyDeleteTo the author of "Trixie's Great and Power Revenge":
ReplyDeleteExcellent opening. I liked how you got the action and the information together in one paragraph. It was great, the way the repetition of Twilight running across a hall was filled in with her "It was supposed to be a normal day" monologue.
The scene with Trixie doing... intimate things with Twilight was... confusing for me. On one hand, I usually ignore these parts, and skip them very quickly; however, this particular series of... scenes caught my attention, probably because of how semi-original, bizarre, and quite funny giving a hoof-job to a horn is. I need to thank you for putting this series of events in my head... or something. I'm not really sure.
The end part with Twilight making poor excuses, hiding in her bedroom, and having what is the Equestrian equivalent of a telephone number was bloody brilliant. I have to say though, it's 3 days, not 1; 1 day still seems desperate.
I D. Shadows have nothing better to do then criticize every single one of these entries down to the last. In a positive light no less.
ReplyDeleteBut I'm only going to do the first five if anyone wants me to write more I will.
1. Combo breaker, two pics for the price of one. Nice work on the bubbles art.
2. Super sweet art that is, someone better put it up as their background I can't as I'm running a cupcake related evil empire in the background after tornado incident.
3. Some spelling and grammar mistakes and there is no description of Rainbows parents blunting the effect a bit. But otherwise overall good idea.
4. Weighted Companion Pony equals win. But don't be sad the weighted Companion Pony will be back again, but that would be spoiling it entirely now wouldn't it? (Play Portal 2 subliminal advertisement here, co-op mode is fun when you can cause your friend to explode)
5. The toaster "that could fire through walls" sells how quirky Ditzy's household is.
@ entry 7
ReplyDeletePic was requested from Rubrony by me. I don't read fanfics, but I'd take quick look at this one and it is fun to see how my conception behind that picture *totally* differs from the authors' view.
That's why I love the art - many people see different things behind the painting. Awesome.
Yay! I can't believe people are actually reading my story!
ReplyDeleteAlso, these all are amazing (the pics, and all the fics that I've read so far). SERIOUSLY.
The quest for the friendship stones image wins. Wait, we aren't doing a vote? Well it wins anyway.
ReplyDeleteSO MUCH CONTENT i'm gonna read and see so much today yay¡¡
ReplyDeleteI love that you used the [airshipping] tag on #6 :)
ReplyDeleteGuys, number 28.
ReplyDeleteNumber 28 contains win of untold proportions.
Number 28.
To the author of "Twilight, and the Supreme and Omnipotent Trixie":
ReplyDeleteYou need work with your formatting.
The content was great. I really liked how the situation was incredibly jarring for Twilight, but you made her assume that Trixie had the hots for her too soon. It would have been better if Trixie had... interacted... with her first before Twilight assumed that, or it could be that the logical conclusion came after crazier, more illogical theories.
The end was kind of lacking in its bittersweet quality. You could have had Twilight have a realization that Celestia was still there, and that all of it was a dream, THEN have her break down crying than mush it all up in one lump. Try a style like "Clerical Error", where Twilight's despair is made only after a Twilight Sparkle moment.
The part with Celestia and Trixie being behind all this was nice, but you really should give a new person a line. Don't lump dialogue from different people on a single paragraph. It's confusing.
Anyways, with a little reformatting, and some tweaking, you'll have a fine story on your hands.
@D. Shadows
ReplyDeleteCould you criticize number 9 as well?
@D. Shadows
ReplyDeleteDo more!
You have the color of the font wrong on entry 37. Just letting you know.
ReplyDeleteNumbers 17 and 18 are mine =D It pleases me to see my work being shared, I just hope they turned out well. I've noticed a few people reading them via the share requests (forgot to make them public lol), so hopefully they liked what they saw.
ReplyDeleteAugh, number 2... my favourite fic, turns tears on instantly when I read that damned poem.
ReplyDeleteMy commission was #4, I hope you like it :)
ReplyDeleteI got shivers when I read, "For My Sister". I'd love to see more of that universe. Luna truly beating Nightmare Moon and getting that body? I wish that were cannon.
ReplyDeleteI rofl'd at the blimp/airshipping fic and the Portal ones were good too but all the Derpy made me d'awww.
ReplyDelete12 was awesome, 15 make me frown..
ReplyDelete36 is cool for a cool history and 1 makes me cry a lot.
Well, this pretty much sums everything.
I know I've asked this before, but I've gotten no response.
ReplyDeleteWas there a fanfic where there was a drought in Ponyville, and Rainbow Dash was racing to push rapidly dissolving clouds into place before they evaporated?
I fail at linking... anyway, I hope you enjoy my fanfic with the twist ending once the link is up. It's probably not as good as these others, but who ares!
ReplyDelete@DJ Kat
ReplyDeleteOnly great and powerful ones ;)
#8 and #11, I love both of them.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI believe I know which story you're asking about.
It's "Letters, Letters, Letters" by EsperDerek. A shipping fiction between Twilight and Celestia.
I think that's the one you're looking for, but I make no promises.
I meant to comment on it before (or did I already? Curse this forgetfulness!) but #6 has been an infinite source of laughs. :) Well played.
ReplyDeleteOMG! Luna's Biggest Fan WHAT HAVE I DONE??
ReplyDeleteTrixie's Treatment: I need to read that right now!
Scootabelle, just as planed ;D
Writefriend reviews, in random order:
ReplyDeleteAirshipping is Magic (6): O_o
The Art of Friendship (16): o_O
Both of these I saw on DA, and these are both hilarious, if for no other reason than because they simply exist.
Cutie Castastrophe (9): A good short that expresses its sentiment cleanly and without lingering on it too long.
The Origin of Suncloth (22): Although the story itself is average, it sports an unusual writing style that is strangely effective.
Madam Tarot's Readings: Celestia (29): It works well for what it is, grammatical distractions aside.
A Proud Day (3): ... A cute little scene. I'm wondering if "weather or not" was a deliberate misspelling (grammarnazi: it's "whether").
Trix and Stones (8): It's... so beautiful *sniff*. It's now one of my favorite Trixie stories.
Trixie's Treatment (17): D'awww. It's sweet, and I am reminded to brush my teeth lest this story give me cavities.
This Is Your Life (33): I wasn't sold on this at first, and then I hit the second part and I'm like, oh, I get it now.
Dinky's Morning (5): I love the writing style on this. It's peppered with amusing little details that give the morning a lively feel.
Will read/review the rest of these later. Don't want to rush through these!
#6 is pure win.
ReplyDelete#15 'm your biggest admirer Luna
#20 amazing
Well until Seth puts the link up, my fanfic (#13) can be found here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NWvMabD7IL-QTBpX0WwlMekMN73dyZ0CxfJM1jtc94I/edit?hl=en&authkey=CN_9gN4G
ReplyDeleteWell okay, I'll do five more considering I'm reading or looking at all of these.
ReplyDelete6. Hilarious outcome and reminds me of an some old cartoons where all the character in the worlds are vehicles. In particular those cartoons were about a car that wants to be a hot rod and a baby jet plane racing around the world, this brought that memory up. Also there certainly is airshipping.
7. Wordy and kind of like power rangers mixing into Sailor Moon. But otherwise Kronos was very patient and not very rude with waiting to fight two ponies who stopped to chat, then got magical upgrades before curb stomping him.
Even Bahamut couldn't have lost quicker then that. I wonder what compromise; if any, did they come to, to make Kronos leave the ponies alone.
There's also the subtle hint that Luna knows of Trixie.
8. Sticks and stones can break bones and no matter what anyone tells you, WORDS CAN HURT!
Even if they are not written or said in anger, some words like "good bye" hurt the worst if it's forever.
So be careful what is said or done, because it might all come back on you for one.
Trixie's story is quite a sad tale, but the show must go on as they say as well.
9(requested). Not everyone can understand that there are multiple interpretations that can be placed on a single symbol, Tiara is overestimating herself there.
A crown or tiara does not necessarily mean you were meant to rule, it could also mean you were meant to be a hatter or you had a love of dressing up.
Which brings up the interesting question to how she got her cutie mark in the first place. If you threw that in the story it would be a bit more interesting and how exactly did the CMC ruin the party? It went on without a hitch, but just without her.
From what I understand it was because Diamond was full of herself that things went bad, because she chose to target someone for being different and it backfired on her.
It is a character building story that needs a back story on how she got her mark, plus Silver Spoon had gained hers relatively at the same time so thats probably why they are best friends.
Tiara will eventually become a high society pony like those seen in Fluttershy's temporary job as a model. In fact that's the direction I can see Tiara going, because she's one for the glamourous lifestyle.
Silver spoon will eventually follow being spoon fed whatever information she can find and will likely one day be a reporter. Her mark can mean being exceptionally well off or just very lucky.
In the ending I thought it was sweet if a tad bitter in comparison to those who've seen 'Griffon the Brush off'. The ending morale strikes true however "Treat others how you want to be treated" and now I know Twilight is creepily stalking Applebloom for frienship lessons to write to Celestia.
Even if that was unintentional it's a good laugh once you realize Twilight can't possibly have known about their conversation unless she was there snooping around like she was watching Pinkie Pie again.
10. I've always thought of Trixie as more of a masochistic person myself. But she certainly has powerful if dainty hooves, for magical massaging. She certainly makes Twilight "Sparkle".
@Narwhals' Bend
ReplyDeleteSorry was busy learning how to photoshop.
@Sethisto
ReplyDeleteNo problem. I still haven't found out how to use photoshop yet either.
gonna start reading through the fics in a bit, but all the drawfriends did a great job! i especially love the one for hop skip and jump, and so awesome that madmax did one for antipodes!
ReplyDeletethanks to those who commented on my fic (#10, trixie's great and powerful revenge) so far. glad people are enjoying it ^_^
it was actually inspired by a combo of the pic shown and a second pic: http://ponibooru.413chan.net/post/view/7366
Number 2 made me tear up a little. Such a powerful image.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThank you for honest criticism. I haven't written anything for over 10 years and nothing I enjoyed since high-school. Still not bad for a first-time brony.
x()~
Going through the ones that stood out for me:
ReplyDeleteA Proud Day (3)
Overall a nice and heartwarming perspective for Dash's cutie mark origin! I especially like her rambling speech. :)
Though with this, it may well be high time we finally put the 20% Cooler meme to bed. I do believe everypony is guilty of putting it in stories now. ^^;
Trix and Stones (8)
I liked the Trixie origins--especially the explanations for how she got her title and how the Ursa Major rumor got started. (I wonder how many hometowns Trixie is going to have by this time next year. ^_^)
However, I really couldn't quite get into the "sad' parts--overlapping those on top of a fanon origin story made my mind glaze over a little.
Still, it's easy to tell some hard work was put into this. Good job!
For My Sister (7)
I was about to give up on this story, then Nightmare Moon showed up, the story woke up, and I was having lots of fun! Seriously, the interaction you have between her and Luna is top notch! So you win. ^_^
This needed a beta reader quite badly, though. The amount of grammar and spelling errors is astounding. Satisfying nonetheless!
Cutie Catastrophe (9)
Oh, this! A perfectly show-accurate epilogue to Call of the Cutie! And I love how the rich fillies stuck together as well! Simply marvelous! Thanks so much for writing this! :D
And finally, for now:
The Great & Powerful Trixie's Seduction Brigade! (10/11)
...actually, I take it back. For the first time in a long time... I've got nothing. ^_^; I will say I was amused by these, however. In distinct but good ways!
Gosh, marathonning these can be draining! I'll get back to the rest as soon as I can!
Actually, I did #26. Its not the best, I know, but I was actually drawing it when the competition started, so i decided to enter. I was actually planning on making a comic on it, but first i need to contact the authour! *goes to do just that*
ReplyDeleteI like that everypony seems to like my story =D It's amazing the reviews it's been getting considering I put almost no work into it (Relatively speaking. It's not like I closed my eyes and just pushed something out in fifteen minutes. I didn't go all OCD over it though like I do with my professional work).
ReplyDeleteSome of these are really good. I was checking out almost every fic and really enjoying some of the art made from stories. However, when I got to the one with Applejack and Granny Smith(34), I laughed and noted it was a lot like... my... fic...
ReplyDeleteHoly shnikes. I nearly died. Someone made a beautiful piece of art that... well, now I feel awful for not participating. Accursed finals week... I'm so submitting next friend off, and that's a promise.
For now, I've so much more to read. Every fic is an adventure, and made for our enjoyment. It's only right to extend such gratitude.
Just wanted to say:
ReplyDeleteAll of these are excellent. So very much.
Great job everypony!
Also, description for Scootabelle:
http://hawkysu.deviantart.com/journal/40108346/
Mine was number 3 and I didn't describe the parents so you would be forced to look at the art that is was based on hehehehe.
ReplyDeleteIm half Hillbilly so the spelling and grammer...yea I suck.
Now to read the other peoples stuff..or look at it if its art
My dangerous quest to give constructively honest comments continues!
ReplyDeleteLuna's Biggest Fan (15)
...why would you do this that comic made me sad enough without even more substance being added to it ;_;
The (Modern) Art Of Friendship (16)
...Shift? I think it's time for an intervention. This needs to stop. At the rate you're breaking them, there won't be any minds left to read anyone else's stuff. :)
Scootie Lagann (18)
Concrit time from a fellow crossover addict: I wanted to like this more than I did, but... well, for starters, it kept switching narrators. The idea and the crosscasting are both perfect, as is the scene you set, but I found the prose hard to decipher, and containing far more recap than might have been neccessary. I suggest a retool of the narration (perhaps switch to full-in third person?) and maaaaybe fleshing some of your recap stuff out if you have time--'cause this has got wicked potential! :)
Trixie's Treatment (17)
I like seeing folks giving Trixie a softer side sometimes; seems she's always being written into super-climactic vs. Twilight showdowns. (Which I also like, but... yeah.) This one gets downright noble in places and was a joy to read.
The Origin of Suncloth (22)
Aha! My rival in Rarity-sleep!
Oh, hey, your story made suncloth, mine made mooncloth. What are the odds, huh? ^^ Loved the premise, though it seemed you wanted to get to the end of things a little quickly...
2 (Drawfriend)
ReplyDeleteSource -Obisidian Solitaire
That picture is interesting... It works for both the ''Base Story'' and the Alternative Story Ending.
That's a good point.
Uh... Crazyredemu that picture only has one parent pony the other pony in the picture is Rainbow Dash, thus the need for parental description is actually required or else Rainbow Dashes mom could be a cloud shaped like a pony for all we know.
ReplyDeleteThen again I'm not even sure that is her father, as the picture was just the inspiration for the story.
I'm back, and you know what that means? It's time for MINI-REVIEWS! I'll confine myself to the stories; I don't feel even slightly qualified to judge art. Suffice to say, it's all awesome.
ReplyDelete3 (A Proud Day): Has some grammar problems, but the story concept is certainly in keeping with the spirit of the friend-off. A heartwarming read.
4 (My Little Companion Cube): I've never played Portal. I'm going to assume this story would make more sense if I had (but that's hardly the author's fault now, is it?). The writing was solid.
5 (Dinky's Morning): I thought I was going to explode from sheer awesome when I saw the Pony+Diskworld+Dune crossover joke. The rest of the story was very sweet, and the poem was a nice touch.
6 (Airshipping is magic): SO...MANY...PUNS! I can't take it! This is so nonsensical bizarre, I love it!
7 (For My Sister): Ooh, a long one! Well, let's dive in! ...Well, that was quite the epic tale. It would have been improved by another round of editing (badly), but it was excellent nonetheless.
8 (Trix and Stones May Break My Bones):Incredibly poigniant, this story does a marvelous job of making Trixie sympathetic without glossing over her bravado and attitude.
More as I continue reading...
Well I sent them both links, Oh well, if you read the description on the DA page it has the links and yes that art is an oc dad for Dash.
ReplyDeleteI have more stories with them in it and at the beginning of them I put a paragraph at the top telling people to check out the art first.
http://ellis1342.deviantart.com/ she has a bunch of art with parent ponies in it some are ocs and others are from the older Pony shows. Im not that great at fiction but her art rocks!
Continuing on...
ReplyDelete9 (Cutie Catastrophe): The author has a real feel for the hyper-dramatics of middle school girls. The story is simple and straightforward, but funny and enjoyable. Heck, it even has a moral!
10 (Trixie's Great and Powerful Revenge): I'm not much of a shipping fan, but this one was pretty funny. The way Trixie kept using 'revenge' as a euphamism reminded me of a certain Oglaf comic, which (despite being funny as hell) I won't describe for decency's sake.
11 (Twilight & the Supreme and Omnipotent Trixie): Ooh, two stories about the same picture! This should be interesting! ...Sadly, this story was so poorly edited it was almost unreadable. I'm trying to be nice with my reviews (It is the FRIEND off, after all), but this story is a crime against proper punctuation.
12 (A Story of Granny Pie): When I glanced at this, I accidentally read the Author line as the tags line. I was worried for a minute there... Unfortunately, this story is also very poorly put together. Writers, there are plenty of nice people over on Ponychan (and elsewhere, I assume) who are willing to help you edit your stories if you just ask!
13 (Qualities of a Lover): The diary format was an interesting choice, and I think it served this story well. The ending was perfect, though it does make Twilight sound a little...unbalanced. Maybe she just needs to get out more? I'm sure she'll figure it out eventually.
Still reading...
15 - Poor Luna
ReplyDelete20 - 300% cooler indeed.
21 - Urgghhh need closure D=
27 - My favorite... loved the perspectives. I think this captured the characters extremely well.
@D. Shadows
ReplyDeleteWow! Thank you for being so in-depth, that was very helpful, and I appreciate your honesty.
Also, I totally didn't realize that about Twilight, but I fully LOLed when you pointed it out. Awkward Twilight creepiness...
@Bookish Delight
Thank you veryveryvery much!
@Chris
Thank you! I did have a lot of fun writing Tiara's histrionics--and I would say a middle school girl would be good at writing that type.
More and more mini-reviews!
ReplyDelete15 (Luna's Biggest Fan): I tried to sympathize with Luna, I really did, but the joke is just to funny. It probably doesn't help that I was an eldest child, and I can relate to pulling pranks like this on my younger siblings (yes, sometimes I made them cry). Well-written and funny (whether intentional or not, that's a good thing).
16 (The Art of Friendship): This is giving Friendshipping is Magic a real run for its money in the 'what in Equestria am I reading?' competition. I love this story to pieces (I'm a sucker for famous references and name puns), it made me laugh out loud repeatedly! The only thing I wish this story had was a bit at the end explaining what each painting name was a reference to: I got most of them, but 'Scrapplejack' eluded me.
...and I am now desperately resisting the urge to quote about fifteen different bits of that story. Well done.
17 (Trixie's Treatment): A very sweet story. Somehow, manages the improbable task of keeping Trixie basically in-character while also makeing her the good guy (mare).
18 (Scootie Lagann): I don't know how awesome you imagined this turning out, but it seems it came out pretty darn awesome to me. Heck, I don't even know what this is a crossover with, and I loved it!
21 (Scootabelle): Aw, the ending made me sad, and I don't even like shipping! Despite your warnings, I didn't think this was boring; it's true, not much happened, but the story doesn't needlessly pad itself, instead content to be an easily-consumable amuse-buche (I probably spelled that wrong, didn't I?).
22 (The Origin of Suncloth): Damn, I need some of that stuff! An interesting idea with the fabric, and very well explained.
23 (Bad Luck): This one's mine. Read it. With any luck, you won't hate it. If you do...sorry, my bad.
Onward we go!
@Bookish Delight
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you liked Trixie's Treatment, I put a fair bit of effort into trying to soften Trixie, while still maintaining the more absolute aspects of her personality. As for Scootie Lagann, I admit I wasn't quite as serious about it, and just ran with a crazy idea I had. For the most part it covers bits of Gurren Lagann eps 9-11 with a pony twist, and the only part that was really meant to be of any concenquence was Scootie's epic moment near the end. Not sure if I want to do this one in full, as I already have other writing projects on the go. However, the 'potential' comment makes me wonder if I could (with proper serious effort next time) do the whole series. Thanks for the input, and glad you liked Trixie at least.
@Chris
ReplyDeleteMy days on FF.net have given me a habit of replying to anyone who reviews my stuff.
Glad you liked both of my stories, although given a few points made by another commentator, Scootie Lagann (Crossover with an anime called Gurren Lagaan for anyone else unfamiliar) could have turned out better. Said comments also have me thinking about doing up the whole story, instead of just the one super awesome inspired moment. As for Trixie's Treatment, I put a lot of effort into my attempt at maintaining Trixie's personality, while at the same time beginning to soften her up. The title, in addition to her treating the fillies with laughter and magic, is also meant to show that innocent wonder can treat her chronic case of being a braggart.
*check watch*
ReplyDeleteSo it begins.
29 reminds me to continue on my Arcana... Time to start painting some of these sketches I think.
ReplyDeleteAlso I got trips! *dances*
#28
ReplyDeleteA wonderful appetizer. I want the full meal, please!
Boy, these are all so good!
ReplyDelete24 (Derpy's Bebop): (Dangit, you've made it this far without quoting, don't start now...ah, to heck with it) "F*** YOU, TREE!" This story has a seriously sweet ending, of which I whole-heartedly approve. Remember kiddies; names can hurt!
25 (Mother May I?): I hate it when ponies laugh at Derpy just because of her eyes. Is it bad that I feel protective of a fan-created flying pony with bubbles on her rump? Despite the 'normal' tage, this story is sad, in a good way.
27 (Dashomon): Four stories for the price of one! Each version is interesting in its own right and adds something to the mix; very well handled.
28 (Every Opportunity to Succeed): Another Portal story! Someday I need to play that game. Nothing to complain about here.
29 (Madam Tarot's Readings: Celestia): Very pleasently creepy. Madam Tarot's reading sounds entirely genuine (if anything about tarot readings can be called 'genuine').
One more round of stories and we're done!
Anyone comment on number 32?
ReplyDeleteOkay, let's finish this!
ReplyDelete31 (Scooting Onwards): This story really needs further editing. Scootaloo is always cute, though, so that tempers my ire somewhat.
33 (This is Your Life): That sounds like exactly the kind of half-baked idea the CMC would come up with. The silliness of the premise (and dialogue!) was very much in keeping with the spirit of the show itself.
37 (The Lunar Republic Strikes Back): A ponified retelling of one of the most iconic scenes in movie history? This has promise! The story can't seem to decide if it's a straight retelling or a parody, but is still enjoyable despite the lack of clear direction.
39 (Hard Cider): This story does a great job of combining western pacing and style with ponies. However, I can't help but wonder if AJ smokes those terrible fruit-flavored cigarillos, or the slightly more tolerable mini cigars.
...And that's it! At least, as of 1:30 local it is. If anyone submits a story after this, tough beans! It's way past my bedtime.
Good job everyone! And again, GREAT work by all the artists. Even though I didn't review your stuff, you are all amazing.
@Chris
ReplyDeleteDaww thanks
I hope my submission made it on time
ReplyDelete@Chris
ReplyDeleteScrapplejack is a bin :(
OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh, OhMyGosh!
ReplyDeleteI am... so honored! Thank you, Logan and Sir Leadhead!!
@Kkat You are very welcome!
ReplyDelete#9: D'awwww! That one made me feel all warm inside. The lesson at the end was a nice touch, too.
ReplyDelete@Psycho Streak
ReplyDeleteHey, I loved that one!
Oh darnit all. Now I have so many new tabs open again and I have work to do. :(
ReplyDelete@Chris
ReplyDeleteThanks for the input. I agree on your critique. I was shooting for a serious retelling, but since the scene is so well known and (over)used, it does come off a bit like a parody
#10 Trixie's great and Powerful Revenge
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed this.. It's also strangely arousing..
#4 Whyyyy ;(
ReplyDeletePortal 2 ending to the rescue!
@Fast and Free
ReplyDeleteI guess it was unclear, but I loved it.
Though it made me quite sad
@Fast and Free
ReplyDeletethe Portal 2 ending may make it a happy ending or a horribly morbid one if you think about it too hard
@crazyredemu
ReplyDeleteI don't do this "thinking" thing everyone keeps talking about.
Happy end for me! Happy and cute
Hmm, someone needs to draw that. Please?
happy ending for 15 "luna's fan" please ='(
ReplyDeleteDon't worry swordman we'll install Glados into the fan and then Luna will have a good friend who can talk about disturbing things like trying and failing to incinerate a companion pony.
ReplyDeleteAll Aperture science thingies can survive heat to incredible degrees. such as a dragons breathe so basically Companion Pony is invulnerable to being thrown "into a fire".
Double happy ending for all.
@Kkat You're welcome! Although I should be thanking you for the great fallout pony greatness you keep putting out! Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteYou know in Portal 2 where Glados destroys two companion cubes before you can finish the test? Now I keep seeing them as ponies :( it is horrible!
ReplyDeleteoh, dont worry about it. They are sentient, but there are warehouses of the things, so no problem with supply there. GLaDOS can kill as many as she wants and still have plenty of them left over
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed Hard Cider. It's a more graphic version of what I hoped the Appleousa episode would be.
ReplyDeleteYa know guys. I had absolutely no intrest in reading arthropods until now.
ReplyDeleteBoy do I have some catching up to do.
@KkatOut of curiosity, are Littlepip's colors in that picture accurate? I don't remember whether she ever described herself or not.
ReplyDeleteLittlepip never described herself. I asked Kkat what her colors were, and she (or he? I've heard it both ways XD )said that she never described Littlepip's colors and stuff on purpose, leaving it up to the reader's interpretation. So those colors are the ones I imagine Littlepip having. The coat is based off of the default green color Pip-Boy's are in Fallout 3, and the mane is based off of the default amber color of the Pip-Boy you get in New Vegas ;)
ReplyDeleteIf I get permission to make Fallout: Equestria a comic, I will be making it black and white (to me it just seems to fit better) with the occasional splash of color. So I dont have to worry about that. Now if only Kkat would respond to e-mails. XD
ReplyDelete@ Anonymous (1:44):
ReplyDeleteOh. OH! That makes so much more sense now. I was thinking it must be some post-modern sculpture (some of which, you must admit, are indistinguishable from refuse bins).
@Chris
ReplyDeleteThanks for the review! I'm sure Twilight will find somepony who love her someday! (...but that pony better like books...)
Um... Can somepony kindly review my picture? It's the last one...
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI really love your picture, and the story taking place in it. It especially pleased my OCD senses to see that you artfully made the edges curved. My only critique is that Rainbow Dash looks a little gleeful. Or is she supposed to?
@Ten Mihara:
ReplyDeleteFusions are tough enough to manage without trying to process the entire series. Don't want you to burn out! But I will say that between you and the artist, the image of Scoots!Simon refused to leave my head all day. For what it's worth, I definitely feel it's an idea worth coming back to--but only if your heart is in it. :)
@Chris:
Thanks! So glad you liked--keeping things whimsical was easily the most fun part. Though as a side-effect, my mind now keeps wandering to thoughts of an FiM-futureverse. Curse this runaway muse! :)
All right! Let's see if I can process the rest of these entries tonight!
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI love and adore it. I think you did a wonderful job of capturing the scene. I especially like the almost snow-globe like dome effect around the edges, like it's a sealed little world for just the two of them. Very nice touch!
I think we need to have an adendum added to the FAQ.
ReplyDeleteRight next to the note about "fanfiction is usually just 'what can we ship Dash with'", there should be a footnote saying "and/or what we can turn Trixie and Twilight into while shipping them".
@Bookish Delight
ReplyDeleteI have a cast list in progress XD Perhaps I shall share it and see if people think its worth pursuing.
@Ten Mihara:
ReplyDeleteI wish you luck! Especially on crosscasting Yoko, because I've got nothing there. ^_^;
All right! Last of the reviews!
Bad Luck (23)
I should be less pleased at how this ended, but I can never, ever get angry at well-executed dark irony. :)
Dashomon (27)
Posted on your story's page. Good but could definitely use some trimming.
Scooting Onwards (31)
There's something profound in here, I just know it. Unfortunately, it's held back by a lack of a final prereading (lots of misused punctuation here) and possibly some scene-change trasitions. Work on that, because from what I could glean, what you were going for here--epic Scoots/Dash mentorship dynamic?--was really cool.
The Lunar Republic Strikes Back (37)
Okay, I admit it. I giggled mightily. :)
This Is Your Life (33)
...odd. I feel like I've seen this somewhere before. Oh, well! Onward!
Hard Cider (39)
Certainly not "show-accurate," but this story did an admirable job of making me believe what it was selling, and that's the important thing. I have room for a hardcore cowgirl Applejack in my heart now. :) Solid all around!
And that's it! If I skipped you, rest assured it wasn't because I didn't like your story. Odds are it was either (a) I didn't feel I had anything significant to contribute (b) the fact that I've just never been able to "get into" Derpy or (c) I haven't finished Portal 2. ^_^;
Oh and the artists here, naturally, are all great.
Good night!
@Bookish Delight
ReplyDeleteYeaa, I lack the ability to try to edit my own work by reading through it, my glasses fog up and turn rosy... Thanks for the critique X3
24. when MLP stops airing new episodes
ReplyDelete(hopefully a long long loooooong time from now)
and the flash builds are released on the internet, its stories like these that i want to see put into fan made episodes.
derpys adventures kinda thing yknow? with blues and carrot and maybe dinky
I kinda liked Scootie Lagann... but frankly, without robots it sounds just a little "dragonballish", if you forgive my neologism.
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteYou know, I noticed that too. I've been pondering on what could potentially be used as an equestrian equivalent in the event I do a full version, but for the short version I figured sticking to the ponies would be enough. You Neologism is forgiven, even if I'm not familiar with that word lol
Um... Can somepony kindly review my picture? It's the last one... :(
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteIt's already been reviewed. Scroll up a little.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteWritefriend Reviews part 2!:
Hard Cider (39): Mmm, good old fashioned western showdowns. Good stuff.
My Little Companion Cube (4): Obligatory crossover stuff, and definitely cute.
Bad Luck (23): Oh. Oh my. I... Wow. Was not expecting that. Well done.
A story of Granny Pie (12): Ow, that big huge paragraph. Ow. Remember: New speaker, new paragraph.
Twilight & The Supreme and Omnipotent Trixie (11): Needs a cleanup for grammar. Feels a little rushed. AND THEN THEY ALL-*shot*
Qualities of a Lover (13): Oh Twilight, don't ever change. <3 Captures her personality perfectly.
Scootabelle (21): It's cute. It's incredibly generic, yes, but it's still cute.
Every Opportunity to Succeed (28): I like the idea of a cake made with chocolate on a stick. Other than that it isn't much on the cohesive side, like GlaDOS's and Pinkie's lines are just randomly interjected in there.
Trixie’s Great and Powerful Revenge (10): Buttersc0tchSundae has spoiled me on sexy Twilight/Trixie times, so my first impression is that this is a little mild. That isn't to take anything away from this fic, it's still good.
Luna's Biggest Fan (15): Oh, Trollestia, no wonder your sister went berzerk.
Dashomon (27): I like the phrase "bouncing ideas off Pinkie, and getting them bounced back twice as weird". The story structure seemed a little off, since it just gave a semi-omniscient view of what everypony is thinking during the events.
The Lunar Republic Strikes Back (37): It's Star Wars with names changed... eh.
Going to bed for now, will hopefully get to the last few tomorrow.
The Art of Friendship is possibly the most ridiculous thing I've ever seen. I mean that in a good way. It is amazing and I'm going to read it to some friends later.
ReplyDeleteTraveler (14)
ReplyDeleteWow! Now I'm sad that I didn't enter this contest. The raggedy mares are so creepy they're perfect, and I love this interpretation of Twilighttwo's bloodthirsty attitude. I might just have to do that in a later Drawfriend edition. :)
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteOh Twilight... you so silly.
Derpy's Bebop is just amazingly cute. The last line would sound cheesy in almost any other situation, but the author makes it work so well.
ReplyDeleteTrixie's Great and Powerful Revenge(10)
ReplyDeleteWHAT. THE. FUCK.