Author: Whitemage of DOOM
Description: Twilight's father sure has a familiar cutie mark doesn't he? One day, Trixie finds out just how similar. Booze is drunk, stories are shared, books are chucked at people, enemies become friends and rivals.Twilight's Sister
Twilight's Sister Part 2: Moonlight Illusions
Additional Tags: Bawwwww, Drunk, Death, Sisters, Backstory
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22 comments:
I personally know Woomod. Hes going to make it Trixie x Trixie
ReplyDeleteOh Cool this finally made it on here, Im the one that edited the second piece. Hes gonna make it Trixie x Trixie like anon said.
ReplyDeleteI am going to do no such thing.
ReplyDeleteOh you're no fun Woomod.
ReplyDeleteOh shit right. I wasnt supposed to say that yet was I. My bad.
ReplyDeleteLooks like an interesting story, but it could use some editing. Not the best writing out there, really.
ReplyDelete@Display Name, Take it up with my editor.
ReplyDeleteThe First piece was edited alot less than the second. The main issue is the scriptlike conversation. I made efforts to avoid this when editing Moonlight Illusionist and split it up a little.
ReplyDeleteHi I like turtles, also I fully support Trixie X trixie.
ReplyDeleteFer chrissakes, Trixie does NOT have a moon in her cutie mark!
ReplyDeleteAre you sure about that Anon, Its pretty blatant.
ReplyDeletehttp://bronibooru.mlponies.com/data/7f49563f11096953658b9f04612b9375.jpg
Thats her cutie mark. No moon eh?
Yes she does. Its a crescent moon with stars.
ReplyDeleteIt's not a moon, it's a swish of magic from the wand.
ReplyDeleteNow that anon mentions it...
ReplyDeleteTrixie`s cutie mark is a magic wand shooting magic in crescent shape, but is not a moon crescent. Please pay more attention people.
ReplyDeletePunctuation could use some work, too. It's like the words come out in torrents, rather than articulated sounds. Come on, you can do it.
ReplyDeleteI came here for Trixie x Trixie x Trixie
ReplyDelete1 Star from me. Sorry, but it was HORRIBLE in every possible way - looks more like a writing prospect than actual story, with silly, plastic and washed out of all emotions dialogues, and the point of the story itself was superbly rushed to a point of idiocy. The general ideas are ok and even could potentialy tug some strings, but now with that kind of writing and sense of suspence and tension.
ReplyDeleteMy eyes bleeds.
@Blueshift Sorry blueshift, but I'm not gonna write shipping. And one fanfic can only contain so much smug anyways.
ReplyDelete@Fireant Fair enough, no need to apologize.
A little rushed in places in the 2nd one, but overall very interesting.
ReplyDeletePitty we couldn't see the rest of the cast's reactions to Trixie being Twilight's sister that would have been fun to read.
Looking forward to what happens next.
Interesting concept, but it needs work.
ReplyDeleteread until she got into twilight's house, then i stopped. then i looked at the comments, then i wrote this, then i read a different fic.
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