[Crossover] Another half-life pony story! This time taking place after the rocket takes off in episode 2! I don't have any unused half life pony images, so have some mad scientist Twilight Sparkle instead!
Author: Bongo
Description: Gordon, Alyx, and the rest of the team at the rebel base, White Forest, are suddenly transported into the My Little Pony universe when an unknown error occured after their rocket hit the Superportal. Now all on their own, Gordon and Alyx, and the rest of White Forest begin to make contact with the native ponies of the land. Soon enough, Equestria is plunged into a dark and bitter war between the Human Resistance and the Combine Alien Force which found its way into this universe, with the poor ponie stuck in between the mess.Hλlf-Life|Hλlf-Pony|ALL Freeman
Hλlf-Life|Hλlf-Pony|ALL Freeman Part 2
Hλlf-Life|Hλlf-Pony|ALL Freeman Part 3 (New!)
Additional Tags: Half-Life 2, War, Aliens, Lambda, Crowbar
71 comments:
Oh wow! So THAT is what happens when you put the gnome in the rocket...!
ReplyDeleteSome one should write Half-Pony: Full Pony Consequences
ReplyDelete@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteMy friend already did write it, but he submitted it to ED and it hasn't been posted or acknowledged yet...
At some point will we get a "Portal | Pony" fic? "Pony | Fallout"? We can hope...
ReplyDelete@ Anonymous
ReplyDeleteFunny thing was that while working in the yard, I had the idea of just making a whole bunch of crossovers with popular games. Maybe if this story is successful, I may as well do it.
And as the author of the fic, I must say that even with just 4 commens, I feel really happy. I accidentally left a couple of gramatical errors in the story, so please excuse me for those.
Thanks for the support fellow Bronies!
- Bongo
WOW. this was such a well done crossover, i would love to see more!
ReplyDeleteThanks! Chapter II is in the works right now and should be completed soon enough.
ReplyDeleteThe only problem that keeps on holding me back is how I want the character interactions to go. Its pretty easy once you have both sides established with one another, but its harder to write out HOW you want it to start. I swear by Celestia's Beard that I went through 4 revisions of the interactions because I felt that they were not the right ones!
See, this is how you do a crossover. Having the two francises being completely seperate universes was certainly the proper way to start. But besides that it's well-written.
ReplyDeleteI was skeptical at first but I would like to see more. Since I haven't played Half-Life yet (Anyone know where I can purchase Episode One?), I appreciate the wiki-links for visuals.
Good job. The only way it could have possible been even cooler was if you used Freeman's Mind Gordon.
@Batty Gloom
ReplyDeleteYour best bet is Steam, friend. At least the games are cheap now. I think the original game is going for $10, and HL2 is $20 now, as memory serves.
Also, to the story proper... Awesome. I found the links mid-story as references annoying at first read, but a second go-through made me realize that, well, it works.
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to the second chapter here, too.
now this is a well made crossover. and so far is the best fiction i have read, in my opinion it would be a shame if you didn't continue it because you left us on quite the cliffhanger, but you can do as you please.
ReplyDeletealso i enjoyed the links it really did add ambiance to the story
i can see it now in the near future
ReplyDeletefalloutXpony
starcraftXpony
TEAMFORTRESS2XPONY
and the one that will probably kill them all is
warhammer40kXpony (w/ necrons)
While the subject and execution seemed rather good, I just couldn't finish because of how awkward the wording was. While it was all technically correct, it just didn't flow. Lack of contractions was the major contributor to this.
ReplyDeleteStill the parts I was able to read were rather good.
The sentence structure is kind of weird and the dialogue is a little off, but the premise and the plot is interesting enough to keep my attention and I think you got the characters right. I'm liking where this is going, and I like the detail that the ponyverse is visibly cartoon looking to the Half-life characters.
ReplyDeleteI'm hoping Gordon and Alyx turn out to be total bronies. And I also have a silly hope for the natural conclusion of a Half-life/MLP crossover: Twilight Sparkle in a modified HEV suit.
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteI wholeheartedly agree with your last paragraph.
And FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU- dat cold ending.
Lol'd when Gordon marked X-es on the trees with his crowbar to mark their trail. Classic.
ReplyDeleteIf any pony dies in Part 2 I'm gonna kill you :)
ReplyDeleteSeriously though, can the Part 2 please please be not sad? *puppy eyes*
That was a struggle to read. So many redundant words and awkward sentance structures, not to mention to often robotic dialogue.
ReplyDeleteI love the premise but I wonder if English is the authors' first language.
It would be easier to bear if the chapters were shorter, hint hint.
I enjoy this crossover.
ReplyDeletePlease keep it up.
I love this. Can't wait for more amazing Gordan quotes like, ".........."
ReplyDeleteclassic Gordan.
I just hope this doesn't have the same length as Episode 1, or the wait time between updates like the real Half-Life series.
@AnonymousHmm... Now why is it that I can easily picture twilight playing the part of GlaDOS?
ReplyDeleteDon't worry fellow bronies, for Part II is nearing the final leg of its writing. It should be posted very soon after a couple more revisions.
ReplyDelete- Bongo
Once upon a time in the magical land of Equestria, Dr. Magnusson learns the magic of friendship.
ReplyDelete"Oh, Gordan, I wasn't going to eat that dinner burrito anyway. You are a great friend."
He then gave Gordan a hug.
MAY THIS BE IN PART II!!!!!
Just sent Seth the second part. I don't know how long it will take though...
ReplyDelete...Oh the suspense!!!
Oh, damn those cliffhangers!
ReplyDeleteI hope you update soon 8)
Part 2 was pretty cool.
ReplyDeleteTo the author: How many parts are you planning to have by the end of this? I hope it's a double-digit number. But I wouldn't blame you if it wasn't.
Also, I'm not convinced with Gordon's character. I know you're trying to give him an emotional presence... but to be honest, it just isn't Half Life until Gordon starts jumping around like an idiot, juggling props with the gravity gun and mindlessly whacking a wall with his crowbar. Seriously.
@ Anonymous
ReplyDeleteIf I am able to include enough *functional* filler, things should go into the double digits.
Yes, I know Gordon should not a simple pawn just being thrown around. Its just that it is hard to focus on him with other ponies/people involved. I mean, who would want to read;
"Gordon stared at a wall
Freeman grabbed his crowbar
Dr. Gordon Freeman blushed at this statement"
Go replay the HL games. Gordon does play a role in the character dialoug scenes, although the story revolved more around the characters than Gordon himself during those scenes, while when he is alone, like when he was traveling on Highway 17, the story then shifts to him.
That is my plan; To seperate Gordon and Twilight from the rest of the group so I can build a bond between the two and expand upon the *quite lacking* character of Gordon. I am doing this to make a very emotional scene between the two even more emotional.
In Laymen's Terms; Gordon becomes a bigger character when alone with Twilight...and those with a dirty mind, shame on you...
Heh... Ass tatoos
ReplyDeleteDespite being a picky on how you write, I admit I find it very interesting on how you handle this crossover.
ReplyDeleteBut I can't help but feel you can have Gordon interact a little more. Sure he's as good as mute, but that doesn't mean he can't exactly do anything. IDK feels odd to read so much of Alyx.
That aside, I do look forward to part 3 O3O
Man, still like the general plot but the dialogue is getting pretty cheezy. Alyx in particular was narmy. We're definitely entering into so bad it's good territory, and I don't mean that as an insult.
ReplyDeleteStill enjoying the ride, though. Let's keep this party going. Rainbow Dash vs. a Strider!
@ ShotgunCake
ReplyDeletePlease refer back to my other reply to the Anynymous user. Gordon will have the spotlight in time...and that spotlight will be shared with Twilight...
And part 3 ia in the early works, so in the mean time, have your little brony minds keep on dreaming on what I will write about, because this may take a while ;)
- Bongo
I like the story so far, but there have been a few instances of weird grammatical mistakes that really popped out. Plus, there's this comedy nugget:
ReplyDelete"My leg! A chunk of concrete fell on my leg! OW!"
Can anyone say "narm"?
@ Anonymous
ReplyDeleteJust to keep on using your imagination; I will spoil you a bit...MUAHAHAHA
Rainbow Dash will have a modified shotgun
Applejack will be lobbing over grenades thanks to her special kicking power
Rarity will help design HEV suits for the main cast
Fluttershy will become a medic
Pinkie Pie will become a spy, just like how Barney did it with the Combine in HL2
Twilight becomes the co-leader of the group next to Gordon and Alyx due to her vast knowledge. They will come in handy in tough situations. She will also form a bond with Gordon when they get seperated are are completely alone...
- Bongo
@ Anonymous
ReplyDeleteYou guys keep on posting faster than I can keep up! :P
Anyways, 'narm'? Whats the joke in it? No habla espanol...
Dat cliff hanger i'm at the edge of my seat I gotta know what happens D:
ReplyDelete"Narm" as defined by TVtropes.org...
ReplyDelete"A Narm is a moment that is supposed to be serious, but due to either over-sappiness, poor execution, excessive Melodrama, or the sheer absurdity of the situation, the drama is lost to the point of becoming unintentionally funny. It can be extremely subjective.
It is named for the famous scene in the last season of Six Feet Under, where the main character Nate suffers a brain embolism. He suddenly grabs his right arm and repeats "Numb arm!", but it quickly becomes "N'arm! N'arm!" Despite being the climax of one of the best shows HBO has ever created, the scene was overwhelmingly found by fans and reviewers to be funny rather than sad."
Um... part 2 sucked compared to part one. That outburst from Alyx was totally out of character, and the ponies should have been able to tell that Freeman and crew were not going to hurt them.
ReplyDeleteI have read part 2... and I must say I`m dissapointed. Part 1 was fine despite the few grammatical errors. But it was probably because you can overlook the silly bits in it. In this one I just can`t.
ReplyDeleteLike in the comment above Alyx`s sudden flasbback and her sudden break down is so much out of character for her. It literally made me cringed and this then amplified every other silly or awkward parts in the chapter. For me there can be certain parts in a story than can make or break it and this was it.
I should like this story as it combines two things I really love, but the awkward attempt at drama and mine expectations being a bit too high, this story falls flat for me.
@Anon who keeps talking about "Narm"
ReplyDeleteAs far as I know, this is a generally normal reaction for the buddleheaded rebels in HL2. I wouldn't be surprised if I heard one say this in game.
I love you. Take my daughter and have her babies. Do it man!
ReplyDelete“What’s with all the tattoos on their asses?”
ReplyDelete“They’re normal Frank. I could show you mine if you wanted…”
Oh you...
I quite enjoy this fic. Just, as people have already commented, maybe make Gordon do stuff. Of course that's hard with a character who never speaks, but still, maybe when there's action 'n' stuff...
Let me guess:
ReplyDeleteDerpy is trapped in Aperture Science during this crossover?
Muffin is your coffin
Muffin is your coffin
Muffin is your coffin
Muffin is your coffin
Muffin is your coffin
I must say, at first the little episode that Alex had was unexpected, but I've played every HL game there is, and I've sort of seen a mental breakdown like that coming. A lot of people seem to think the HL world and the real world are the same, but they're not because the social norms have been screwed up by the whole "alien overlords" thing. Play the games, people, or you'll end up completely lost. Also: OMFG I LOVE THE IDEA OF DASH FIGHTING A STRIDER!!! :D
ReplyDelete@Dat Fucking Writefag The Muffin is a lie...
ReplyDelete@ Anonymous
ReplyDeleteTHANK YOU! TAKE MY DAUGHTER AND BABIES I GOT FROM ANOTHER ANONYMOUS!!!
Someone finally understands! I tried to explain it in the best way as I possibly could, but people just don't listen! If you were placed in a cruel harsh world for a long time, you would have to have a mental breakdown sooner or later, right?
Plus, this is just dialoug filler! Action scenes always have to come later! Just be patient! Play the games again; story filler always has to come first!
EXPECT THIS FILLER UP INTO CHAPTER 5! ACTION SHOULD START UP NEAR THE END!
That is all...
- Bongo
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteThe Pie is a fake
@Chris
ReplyDelete"Rainbow Dash will have a modified shotgun"
Have you ever been told that you are an awesome person and that you should feel awesome?
Also, will this be more of a one time thing or will it require me listening to Ride of the Valkyries while reading the story?
I found it surprising you didn't have the main characters retell the most startling figure of the Combine occupation, that 90% of the human race was killed during the intervening twenty years. Not to mention the fact that the Combine set up a big drain at the bottom of the ocean to suck it all away to another planet.
ReplyDeleteI don't see why everyone loves this story so much. The idea is there, but the writing is painfully awkward. I had a difficult time slogging through this just so that I could try to see what all the fuss was about.
ReplyDeletewow pinkie, "lesser species"? ponies racist much?
ReplyDelete@ Anon
ReplyDeleteDon't worry. When the time comes, I post links to appropriate sites and Youtube music links. Plus, I suggest you read through a second tie, except imagine the dialogue the way you want it.
@ Cody
I will save that for the talk between ELi, Kleiner, and Princess Celestia and Luna as they explain what will happen if the Combine gains full control of Equestria
@ Anon
I am so very sorry. Dialogue is not my high point, although setting up the story is. You see, in real life, I work with visuals to express myself. I let other people handle the scripts and stuff.
@ Anon
Pretty much :/
@Anonymous
ReplyDeletePain-what awkward-hunn writting ?
You're funny ! No really, what a joke ! It was one, right ?
...also, like the other Anon said... Why do Pinky says such a weird, out of place, quite racist-like comment ? She's not that kind of pony.
"Gordon who was sipping some coffee from a mug spit out the steaming brew and the mug fell to the floor and shattered into millions of pieces and gapped in fear at the statement."
ReplyDeleteThere you go, Gordon actually does something and doesn't seem so much like an empty shell that just takes orders.
@ Anon
ReplyDelete@ nova_25
I never really intended that to be a racist statement, but I guess some people interpret some things differently.
@ Putuk
Well, that was the best I could do. I mean, what else could I say?
"Gordon stared off into nothingness as Dr. Kleiner and Twilight Sparkle rambled on for the player had just left his computer to eat..."
What the
ReplyDeleteWhat am I reading
Moar sweet jesus moar!!
ReplyDeleteIts... quite bad, actually.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue is bland, the emotions are shallow, the actions seems forced, there is too much description and at the same time not enough.
Is a very bad Fic.
Didn't like it in the slighthest.
After many attempts at trying to revive the project, it will most likely never see the light at the end of the tunnel. I am sorry, but all the errors and unpleasant things I wanted to fix was too much for me to handle, for I got no help. I could not finish it, so if somepony would like to continue from here on end, be my guest.
ReplyDeleteJohn Sparkle, who was Twilight Sparkle's brother...
ReplyDeleteTHEY BLEW IT UP! THE MANIACS THEY BLEW IT ALL UP!
ReplyDeleteWHY GOD WHY DID YOU END THIS FAN FIC SO SOON *crys*
ReplyDeleteI am starting to think of reopening this fic...please stand by...
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this, and I hope you continue it. Perhaps you could go join the Equestria Daily IRC sometime and go to the fic room, they're really helpful when you ask nicely. There is certainly room for improvement, but please restart it.
ReplyDeleteIRC? Where is that? Can you give me a link? I can't seem to find it on this web page.
ReplyDeleteLove it, please continue Bongo.
ReplyDeleteIRC is here. http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/06/temporary-chat-embed.html Link to the EquestriaStudy room should pop up in a welcome message.
ReplyDeleteI hope you plan to continue the story, I'm really enjoying it.
ReplyDeleteWhy the hell is the word "defiantly" used every single bloody time the context calls for "definitely"?
ReplyDeleteJust how illiterate does one have to be to get such different words confused so consistently?
I'm giving this two stars. The potential of the premise has been ruined by the writing.
I like this story, but it has some issues:
ReplyDeleteThe interaction between the two races is stale, and under-detailed, but the fact that you acknowledged Equestria's outlines made up for that.
Every instance of the word definitely, was replaced with defiantly.
Applejack said "bloody"... Which someone reminiscent of the most American, American culture would NEVER say.
I am more worried of the ponies getting a disease than the humans.
The combine feel like they are going to make this story too grimdark for me to continue on, even if you complete the story.
Guns, and the concept of murderous killing hasn't really been elaborated on very well.
Sometimes the grammar was rushed, and sentences came damn close to being indecipherable, and I had to make up my own lines to replace them sometimes.
Magic wasn't freaked out about enough.
Magic was taken seriously the first time.
I am wondering if a HUGE hemisphere of earth was dumped on top of the everfree forest, or if parts of earth became blended with the surrounding land, or if it got pushed aside, or erased.
Random outbursts, AJ didn't need to pipe up all of the sudden.
UPDATE THE DAMN THING PLEASE
ReplyDeletePlease update Half-Life is my favorite game of all time and I love MLP so I hope your still reading these because I really want more
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