Author: Bongo
Description: Nuclear bombs have struck Equestria and the world is plunged into a nuclear winter. Princess Celestia is soon sick with radiation poisoning while trying to protect her smaller sister, Princess Luna. The great emotional intake is starting to take its toll on Princess Luna, as her world starts to grow darker and darker with sadness and grief... Based off the apocalyptic nuclear wasteland of Fallout: New Vegas. Best read when listening to Frank Sinatra's Blue Moon.Blue Moon
Additional Tags: Fallout: New Vegas, flashback, nuclear radiation, Frank Sinatra, Blue Moon
23 comments:
@ DJ Kat
ReplyDeleteThanks...?
It was my first attempt at writing a Sad fic, so I did not know what the reaction would be. Your comment is making me hopeful, however.
Chapter II is in the works at the moment. I will not spoil it, but I will say that it will be less depressing and get a little more heartwarming. You will feel like you have just watched An American Tale or The Land Before Time; sad yet heartwarming...hopefully I will pull that off correctly...
- Bongo
It's unfortunate Luna's parents have been dead a lontg time and I don't think there is no magical valley full of happiness and plant growth.
ReplyDeletePulling the age old classic animated movie character builder from the depths of despair thing is hard to work with. I root for you good sir.
@ Anon
ReplyDeleteThanks for the root. I shall use it in the next stew I will make :P
Also, I did not know whether to include Luna and Celestia's parents or not, so I just came to the conclusion of them just being 'born' and being given the tiaras by some sort of Pro-Creator...
I did not specifically say that they had parents, so I just left it pretty much open ended so that you can imagine how they were born. Heck, they could be born from an alien race for all I care!
- Bongo
This was pretty awesome! I'm really enjoying reading it :) I seem to have a love for post-apocalyptic ponies! I really felt the PAIN of Luna's... it was very vivid and depressing and gloriously written...
ReplyDeletemy only... complaint is that the dialog seemed.. awkward.. in comparison...
but.. it's a minor detail. beautiful. Beautiful story. Part 2 now please? :D
That was close, I'm planning ot making a story revolving around the song Big Iron.
ReplyDeleteI was expecting Lu~na Shock!!
ReplyDeleteI guess it was never meant to be...
@Anonymous
ReplyDeleteYea, dialogue never seemed to be my strong point, no matter how hard I try. Setting up the story, however, really is my strong point. I really hope I can expand on that.
- Bongo
"Pegasus ponies could also be seen frying n all directions away from the nuclear blast."
ReplyDeleteFrying... tee hee hee
@DJ Kat
ReplyDeleteI just dislike those *Boom, haha, you're all dead. Dot.* stories...
Whatever people can argue that it's well made or anything... It's not something that I see as good for stories...
There's also one thing that always irritates me. The underestimation of the powers, abilities and capacities of ponies...
For Pete's sake. Whatever how you choose to see it, Celestia controls the Sun in this world... One would THINK she had some sort of ''relative'' advantages in term of powers...
Heat, fire, light, solar RADIATION, I don't know? The SUN?
Surely, there had to be way to keep Celestia ''alive'', while keeping the emotional stuff, impact...
All I know is that I can easily see, at least, 5-6 different ways or concept or ideas, something, that could easily change the *Depressing, I will jump of a cliff* into *Just sad, good sad*.
But maybe I'm just dreaming ?
@ Anon
ReplyDeleteD'oh! Seems like a word slipped through Microsoft Word's Spell Checker. I will have to fix that. Thanks for pointing it out.
@ Nova_25
Well hey, its the world of FanFics. Authors may do whatever they please with them.
As for the Celestia dying to easily due to something as simple as radiation, I had to stretch the show's concept about the magic of unicorns a little bit in order to have the story work. I know it is not the best way, but it was the best I could do.
And yes, I DO intend on making a spin-off series based on taking a song (Specifically from Fallout) and basing a story around it. In fact, I already have a rough conception for the Ink Spot's 'I Don't Want to Set the World on Fire'.
To add to that, most of those spin-off series won't really center around the mane cast probably because A) They are all dead B) The present parts of the story are set about 20-25 years after the bombs fell, so I will most likely include a cameo *wink wink*
Also, most Spin-Off series will also focus less on the death and complications of trying to live in the new wasteland (Ex: The songs 'Dear Hearts' and 'Wonderful Guy' can provide perfect examples of ponies trying to start a new life.)
On a final note, if you read the very ending where I put in some Author's notes, you will read that the story was originally written to calm my stressed out body, so naturally, I wrote something that I found calming for some strange reason; Luna, Death, and Fallout. After it exceeded 5 pages and got a few more details than needed, I decided that I should share it with the community.
I did not know whether or not people would like the story. Judging by the comments and ratings, some like it while some dislike it. Kind of a half/half situation right here. I will not let that discourage me from moving onward though, because I felt that the experience from writing this story was very rewarding.
Did I get a little too in depth for you?
Chapter II is still in the works
- Bongo
@ Anon
ReplyDeleteOops, I just dun goofed up! Seems like the mess up got through Microsoft Word's Spell Checker. I will fix that right away. Thanks for pointing that out!
@Chris
ReplyDeleteDialog-Anon here again :D
No shame in admitting your weak points.. you've done really well with the story and the set up and, good goddesses, the emotional impact. I eagerly await :D
(BTW, have you considered finding a good proof reader? They might help also with your "frying" pegasi.. (though I lol'd at that.. I thought it was intentional. XD)
@ Anon
ReplyDeleteThanks! As hard as I try, I always have to have someone else do the dialogue for me...when they are available of course...speaking of which...
Thats my problem. I don't really know anyone out there willing to proof read my stories, and I only trust friends with that, so that discounts and public forums or Ponychan or anything else that I know of. All the friends I have right now are pretty much uninterested in doing it, too. Although I must admit, after reading through that line a second time though, I did give a chuckle at my own mistake.
- Bongo
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ReplyDeletesoooo, any idea when chptr two will come out?
ReplyDeleteJust hold up guys. While I was in the middle of Chapter 2, I got a writer's block, and it doesn't want to leave, so you will just have to wait.
ReplyDelete- Bongo
@Chriswell, i am writing a chapter two, because i got bored with waiting (I'm notoriously impatient. thats all) hope you don't mind.
ReplyDelete@ Anon
ReplyDeleteWell, that is fine by me, although I may post my chapter soon, so you better hurry up! ;)
PS: Google screws and eats up mu comments, so I just resorted back to changing my name to Bongo
@Bongorecent events, including an mlp star wars crossover(with the ponies being anthro) i don't know when i will have my chapter 2 up, which is going to deviate from the mood already set at parts, simply because my style is more actiony, and i thought it might be a good idea to have radioactive zombies. any objections from anypony?
ReplyDeleteThis was undeniably a good story, but it seemed like the author was making the sadness too dramatic. I know that that is probably how it would really happen, but at a certain point it just wasn't sad anymore.
ReplyDeleteAuthor here. Yes, I know I made it too dramatic, but that's the way I want it to be; Over the top drama, because, let's face it, if you ever played a Fallout game, some of the drama is a little overplayed, while some is done very well.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I am trying to add some action to the 2nd chapter, then back to a short Drama chapter in the 3rd.
ALSO, I am working on a different FanFic, done by request, and that is also getting in the way.
never been a fan of celestia for banishing luna, but this story really raised my opinion of her, the story was well written and very sad. good work and cant wait till part 2
ReplyDeleteso whens it update
ReplyDelete