Author: Choppers Top Hat
Description: For the first time ever, Derpy Hooves is taking the day off. Why would such a hard-working mailmare abandon her duties? That day, when Dinky comes home from school, her mom's strange behavior leads her to discover something that will change both their lives.Today, Tomorrow, and Forever
...And Forever Together, Alternate Ending
Author: Nova25
Description: Poor Derpy, ever since her Little Muffin was taken away, she hasn't been the same. Will fate step up for her? Will she be able to feel happiness ever again? Let's find out.[Normal] Family Forever Happy Hope Muffin
208 kommentaari:
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VastaKustuta.. Still good story trough
I freaking hate you.
VastaKustutaI'm reading this and people around me are giving me weird looks because I'm sniffling and getting teary-eyed.
.
.
.
Damn it.
Manly tears, they have been truly shed.
VastaKustutaThat is the happiest thing and the saddest thing I have ever read.
Awww, shit. [Sad] tag, please.
VastaKustutaI'm in tears, so I suppose this story had its desired effect. Very well written and executed.
Well geez guys, I didn't think it was THAT sad...
VastaKustutaAlthough I wouldn't call it normal either.
It was hard to take it seriously with derpy talking in derp-mode but the overall plot and poem at the end was really nice.
...Nnnnnno this needs a Sad tag real quick like.
VastaKustutaThis made me sniffle, and I don't even LIKE the whole Derpy thing that much.
VastaKustutaNow that's a good mother, I don't understand why they don't think she can handle a foal. What was it she did to exactly have Dinky removed from her care other than being slightly weird?
VastaKustutaYou have to do something horrible and recognizable to lose a child that way, plus someone would have to report you to the authorities as a bad parent.
Plus there is no restraining order, just a removal from Derpy's home it didn't stop her from being a parent or close to the unicorn in question.
Anyone that would report Derpy as a bad parent obviously doesn't know her love of Muffin, also unfit my ass if she holds a freaking job for crying out loud.
Goddamn you. Take the five-star rating I gave you and shove it for making me teary-eye :C
VastaKustutaBtw, why isn't this posted as a sadfic? It def counts as a sadfic.
This was the most bittersweet story I've read since, well, Bittersweet.
VastaKustuta*sniffles* N-no, it's just...something in my eye...
Fidgeting horseflies. That was awesome.
VastaKustutaFor the love of all that is pony, put a goddamn sad tag on this
VastaKustutaAww... :(
VastaKustuta:'( :'( :'(
VastaKustutaThe beginning was slightly awkward with how it was presented, but the rest of it was very well written.
VastaKustutaThat being said OH GOD WHY DERPY ;_____;
Normal?! I've never cried because of a fanfic before until now! This should be saaaaaaad! :'(
VastaKustutaPosing again, for I read it again.
VastaKustutaIt doesn't take away the sadness!
Confound these ponies.
VastaKustutaThey drive me to tears
TT.TT
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VastaKustutaManly tears were shed
VastaKustutahttp://tinyurl.com/khaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan
VastaKustutaWhy ? ...damn why ?!
...the Derpy/Dinky family was the most touching relation and the one I loved the most... and you go and break it ?
Good, sad, yet... Should have NEVER been made.
Make an alternative story or something, whatever anything...
Alos, they lived together for YEARS, without troubles, Derpy has a good strong job and is WELL known for her professionalism... Dinky was fine, good health, no harm wahtsoever... What kind of dumb repport about their family, that they received to make this even SLIGHTLY believeable ?? The hell they go and take Dinky for NO valid reasons ?!
Another Anonymous brought it up too Nova.
VastaKustutaThere's no restraining order saying she can't spend time with her daughter... especially considering with her job she knows where Dinky lives and it's not really sad at all if you think about it. The story really didn't seperate Derpy from Dinky it just made her leave Ponyville.
Yeah, posting again, someone please make make this a sadfic! It has no business being called normal!
VastaKustutaAlso, it's completely nonfanon to me. In my heart, Derpy and Dinky will always be together!
Requires sad tag :'(
VastaKustutaThis makes me sad...
VastaKustutaNothing has brought me so close to tears and I normally don't cry for any film, show or literature.
VastaKustutaJust...damn.
I enjoyed the way this story was put together, the characterizations, etc. The descriptions really were quite well described.
VastaKustuta(However, I do have to agree that inability to talk is not a mental condition, especially for a published poet who holds down a steady job and is trusted by her peers.)
I'll give it a 3/5 purely for the fact the the inappropriate line breaks get ridiculous after a while. Otherwise, great story.
VastaKustutaThis is probably the first sad ponyfic I've teared up to
VastaKustutaand cupcakes didn't even make me flinch
Pierce submitted the report to Foal Services.
VastaKustutaCurse my cold black heart and my apathy, I just can't get on the sad wagon here. A four star to you for an excellent short story despite my psychosis.
VastaKustutaIf it helps only two things (That didn't involve me) have made me cry so don't feel as if you failed. It's a pretty exclusive club.
It's a conspiracy to get Derpy out of Ponyville!
VastaKustutaOne thing I find so fascinating is that Derpy began as just a background pony that someone with keen eyes spotted. And since then she's been given a full life; a name, job, personality to match the show's main six - by just the fans. Reading something this powerful is made all the more impacting by the fact that the story is about a character that we've all been involved with from the start - more involved with than any other character.
VastaKustutaI was expecting derpy to be the new mailpony in coltsburg, I wonder what she is doing now though
VastaKustutaI cried.
VastaKustutaWhy do Dinky stories always make me cry. =,C
Damn man... First story to ever make me shed a tear, and THAT'S quite an achievement.
VastaKustutaI think that's the first Sad fic I've read. It's really interesting how my instant gut reaction was "5 Stars!" without hesitation. It gets into your brain and stimulates some sort of sympathetic impulse that just takes control. This merits more research...
VastaKustutaSPIKE, bring me the newest copy of "Mind Control Through Fanfiction," stat!
I did enjoy reading this, even if after a few moments of calm thought it makes me wonder some of the same "but, why?" thoughts other commenters have left. I should probably read more Sad fics to get a basis of judgment.
I didn't expect this to be that sad.
VastaKustutaI shed tears ;_;
@Anonymous
VastaKustuta>MFW I TYPED THAT ON GOOGLE DOCS CHAT
Damn anon, I dunno if I should be flattered or what
That's pretty much what I was going to say here, the story is powerful enough on it's own, but the fact that it's about a character that the fans have sculpted and brought life to brings it to cause manly tears. Derpy is OUR character, so we all feel a greater attachment to her. The author who wrote this obviously saw this, and wove a tale that would get inside our hearts... that was clever, if slightly cruel...
Well, your mislabeling skills are quite impressive, Sethisto...
VastaKustutaAnyways, lovely story. I adored how Derpy Hooves mantained contact with Dinky even though Social Services are being stupid and abusive again.
Lovely use of title and powerful message, too; the inscription really speaks of how powerful her love for her daughter is.
PS. I'm holding back tears right now. Awesome tears.
You know I'm one of those people who never cry at films, TV shows or charity adverts where they show a whole bunch of dying kids. But this tugs at my heart strings for some strange reason, maybe it's because nothing should be this way in Equestria.
VastaKustutaDAMN YOU AUTUMN! SHE WAS A WONDERFUL AND LOVING MOTHER AND YOU WILL PAY FOR THIS!!
VastaKustuta^ You have my bow
VastaKustutaI don't mean to be rude or manipulative, but I think the impact of the story would be lessened if this story was marked appropriately.
VastaKustutaSethisto, I know I get on your ass on tags sometimes, but for the sake of impact, leaving it as [Normal] would be a better choice.
Dear Sethisto,
VastaKustutaSeriously, don't tag a story like this as normal when it's clearly sad. I went in there without being prepared, and now I feel horrible.
Sincerely,
Somepony
@CupcakesNom
VastaKustutaPurpose of sad fiction:
> Reader: "What? You think you can make me cry, story?! I've survived the internet, bub, there's nothing that can bring ME to tears!"
> CHALLENGE ACCEPTED
> Reader... reads story
> "Ch-challenge acc... acc... BWAAAAAAAA!!!!"
> FIVE STARS ALL AROUND
That, of course, is my opinion.
This deserves the Sad tag, for it is sad. I cried manly tears.
VastaKustutaMy only question is why is Dinky a unicorn?
I didn't cry...just one...manly....tear....*sobs*
VastaKustutaManly tears...
VastaKustutaDAMN YOU OPPP YOU OPP.O.S.! You're the only one who could have turned Derpy in just for talking funny! You just lost the "love" of my love and tolerating the shit out of you.
I dont usually call for follow-ups, but something must be done in the name of friendship.
Like Pinkie Finding out what happened, Dash Zooming around Equestria to find Derpy, Rarity starting a PR campaign/fundraiser thing, Fluttershy shyly going around collecting signatures and statements that Derpy was a good parent, Twilight taking up position as Derpy's Attorney, and AJ giving OPPP some sorta Honesty talk and showing her the error of her ideals.
FUND IT!
Absolutely perfect. This touches me in a way no book or movie ever has.
VastaKustutaSounds like people want to write a counter to this fiction. DO IT! Then get it on Equestria Daily.
VastaKustutaMein Gott! Trying to resist tears, not working very well. Must avoid strange looks.
VastaKustutaI hate you so much
*rates 5 stars*
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaI'm with you! If someone can write an alternate fic for Ships That Pass in the Night, they can certainly write a happy followup to this!
One question though. Who or what is OPPP?
@ Brian
VastaKustutaOPPP stands for Overly Protective Pony Parent.
You deseve a Medal, You are one of the first in a long while to make me cry during a fan fic.
VastaKustutaThat... I... buh...
VastaKustuta;_;
Definitely gonna have to join the masses asking for a sad tag on this. I was so not ready for that.
Aaand now my mom is wondering why I'm crying.
VastaKustutaManlytears.jpg
Oh god I'm not even a big fanfic reader except the Derpy and Dinky stories, even that made me want to weep womanly tears. Definitely needs a depressing tag on it.
VastaKustutaI am an adult man, and I cried for. Bravo.
VastaKustutaNow I know I'm too tired. I read this and didn't shed a single tear, but it still felt like I should have. Very good story.
VastaKustutaMission Accomplished good sir.
VastaKustutaYou, sir, do not play fair.
VastaKustutaYou do, however, play well.
Five stars.
AMAZING story. I just wish it wasn't so sad. >:
VastaKustutaIt wasn't as sad as "Bubbles", but I did shed a tear. .. .. Frickin' 5-star.
VastaKustutaMan, you just kept going and going and going with the sad. I could hardly read the ending through all the stuff I got in my eyes.
VastaKustutaSo I read this...
VastaKustutaAnd now all I can hear is 'Flow of Time' from Clannad...
Great Job.
Sad tag, SAD TAG.
VastaKustutaAlso 5-teary-eyed-stars.
Sad tag sad tag sad tag.
VastaKustutaRight now.
Also, 5 stars.
Suddenly got reminded of 'Flowers for Algernon'.
VastaKustutaExcellent story. I teared up for a bit. :'(
This is the second Random Derpy story that I liked.
VastaKustutaI was there when this was requested to be written and it still got me. Damn.
Flawless execution, only complaint is at the concept. There's no way that in the magical land of Equestria they wouldn't see that Derpy's a great mom. She just looks and talks different.
Also: SAD TAG EFFING WHERE!
perhaps I'm missing part of the fandom; but I thought Derpy's daughter was also a pegasus pony? Correct me if I'm wrong.
VastaKustutaAnyway, definitely as sad ponyfic, and a good one at that. I never thought I'd find Derpy so touching and well, deep.
Good job >.< Even if you make me cry inside.
So... I've been crying in the rain for about 5 min. after reading this... Sad tag please. Just. Please. Also 5 star.
VastaKustutaThis is the kind of story that I like mentally challenged Derpy in. It's a good counterpoint to laughing at her.
VastaKustutaEr sad tag added!
VastaKustutaO...omgosh. ;____; Derpy. *lipwobble*
VastaKustutaSo unfair...give the strange but dedicated mailpony a daughter, then RIP HER FROM HER ARMS AS THOUGH HER OWN HEART WAS BEING RIPPED OUT!
VastaKustutaOk...with that said, such a sad tale that deserves...nay, demands a follow-up.
It was sad, not as sad as "bubbles" but i still enjoyed it!
VastaKustutaDerpy makes the best sadfics. 5 star.
VastaKustutaLets see here...
VastaKustutaMentally handicapped [Check]
A crappy childhood [Check]
Single mom [Check]
Hmmm... how can we make her even more miserable? Ohh i know!
Take away her only daughter [Check]
Instant drama, just add mental handicap. Can we get some sad fics about someone other than Derpy?
VastaKustutaJust click the sad tag. I'm sure there are others. There's always my Rarity story. :)
VastaKustutaWell, you really hit my sensitive side... As a brony who went through the Foster care service as a child, I can share Dinky's pain. No child should have to go through this. Ever.
VastaKustutaDammit. You made me cry.
VastaKustutatesla coil, Its too dangerous to go out alone
VastaKustuta^this
Oh God, I don't know if it's just because it's late, but that's the first time in a while that I've cried because of a fanfiction.
VastaKustutaIt makes sense though, I mean, every once in a while, I've had dreams where my parents were seperated from me in some fashion or another. God those were some of the most painfully sad dreams ever. I'm being very empathetic here, I suppose.
This was very sad, but it was good. One thing else, though-
VastaKustuta'“Um, I could tell you a story,” offered Spike. “Once there was an awesome dragon superhero. In his secret identity, he worked for this fussy nerd who-”'
You NAILED Spike's personality, there. Hahahaha!!
D:
VastaKustutai demand a sequel when dinky is older and looks for derpy.
VastaKustutaYou got me bawwwing like a baby back bitch. I love you.
VastaKustutaI love these sad Derpy fics, great work.
VastaKustutaThat poem really got me.
Manly tears were shed.
Manly tears
VastaKustutaThe have been shed
Nothing particularly manly about my tears.
VastaKustutaI sniffled a lot and bit my lower lip and wished the work day was over so I could hurry home and hug my mom.
Stand there gazing stoically into the distance if you want. I'm looking forward to my hug.
I think this is a certified five star story.
VastaKustutaCRYYY SUM MOOOOAAAAAARRRRRRR!
VastaKustutajust for the record I dont know why I love these sad Derpy stories so much, I guess its because of the massive amounts of love for her daugther that just shines from her in these.
My eyes got watery so succesfull sad story.
Imma rate it five stars but I was thrown off as to why on earth anyone would take Dinky away from her mother. Anyway it served as drama enchancer so its okay.
Sad Leadhead is BWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
VastaKustutaand now people in the cafe are asking if I'm ok. I tell them I'm fine. But we know the truth. Nothing can make the end result of this story 'fine'.
Good work, sir, good work. Tis a masterpiece.
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaThat's what a lot of the 'mentally challenged Derpy' stories remind me of, too.
***** <-- Five stars for you, sadface-making author person.
This is beautiful. You can feel this story. 5 stars from me no doubt.
VastaKustutaAlso: I had no idea Dinky and Derpy were two different characters. I thought it was just another name, like Bright Eyes. Silly me.
I just read part of the story, again (I real the full story, last night), and it still managed to bring tears to my eyes X D
VastaKustutaI Bawww'ed so hard its a good sad story, Id rank it at about the 16th saddest story I'v ever read, the first one I never finished
VastaKustutaHoly CRAP! I never expected this story would get such a huge response. Thank you all so much for your comments.
VastaKustutaTo the people who were asking about the rationale for having Derpy declared an unfit parent: originally the letter from the agency was going to be much longer. It would basically imply that Derpy was getting screwed by a system that values a "normal" upbringing more than the happiness of the child. But I also wanted to balance that with the message that the agency weren't bad guys and they had the best of intentions.
Unfortunately, getting that all out was slowing the story down considerably, and taking focus away from Derpy and Dinky, so I cut the letter down to essential information only. Hopefully the trade-off was worth it.
Anyway, thanks, everyone!
“It's dangerous to go alone!”
VastaKustutaOh you~...
But sereously, that was an amazingly touching story.
*salutes*
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaGo! With time-reality-breaking speed. Ludicrously-pony haste !
The one that shall create an Alternative Ending shall be forever known as : *THE GREAT DERPY-DINKY FAMILY* savior !
...for all time and forever to come.
(and be damned, if 'somepony' has to throw a prize with it...)
I was reading this thinking i wasn't gonna tear up or cry and I was doing good until that poem. It was so beautiful that I instantly started crying. Manly tears of Manliness.....*sniffle*
VastaKustutanevermind.
VastaKustutaThanks to Megatron, Derpy got to keep the custody of Dinky
The highest praise I can give this story is that the entire time I was reading it, I envisioned it in Noel's art style. Very, very nicely done.
VastaKustutaMAN-TEARS INCOMING!
VastaKustuta@JabberwockyPie
VastaKustutaOh my god, I cried. I . . . I need to use an extra Sweetie Belle toy and make Dinky right away and never ever ever seperate her from her mama.
Wow. The worst part is that this sort of thing happens IRL (try being a lesbian mother in the South). Derpy is a bigger person than me, I would have started a war on the spot. I wonder what an angry Derpy looks like... I mean what if she actually snaps.
VastaKustuta"Some ponies just want to watch the world burn"
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VastaKustutaAlright, now that I've had a minute to think, here's try number 2 at a review.
VastaKustutaOverall, this is a very fine piece of writing. and one of my favorites. Not perfect, but then nothing is. I read a lot of sad stories for whatever reason, but this one hit me a lot harder than I expected. Looking back, I'm not sure why it was so much worse than all the others I've seen, but this is one of two, maybe three times in all my years that I cried at something I read. Not got a little teary, but actually wept.
I didn't mind the way Derpy talking the way she did, but I though it was a little overdone, it made it hard to take the story seriously at first.
I do think that you made the right decision about the letter, making any part of the story much longer would have lessened its impact, and the message is still relatively clear. The exact reasons for declaring Derpy an unfit parent are irrelevant. She knows what they are, and we, the readers, just need to know that the decision has already been made.
Its sad, but its the ending that makes it all worth it to me.
VastaKustutaA Sad fic? Pffffft. I've read dozens of these and they never....
VastaKustuta....*Sniff* make me cry...
I saw this exact same topic on /co/ Except megatron was in it derpy dies and was brought back to life and it had a happy ending... This was more of a emotional mystery. I am very pleased by this artist again!
VastaKustutaOkay....I am not ashamed to say that I cried to this not the 'manly tear' crying but the snot in nose loud crying out kind of stuff. That poem at the end just breaks you man. Oh wow...it's nice that the author didn't hold back but man that just pulls on ya...
VastaKustuta@ZZZZZXXXXX77777
VastaKustutacould you send a link to that story?
God dammit this was the last time I read a fanfic..
VastaKustutaThis is .. so fucking .. sad...
Oh my god. This may be my new favourite fic. Made me cry more than any other. I now have favourite sadfics for long (Bittersweet), medium (This), and short (Circle of Friends) fics, and this is now easily my favourite Derpy fic.
VastaKustutaIncredible. I started reading this on the bus and at the climax I was starting to get a bit watery-eyed. Bus ride ended, though, so I had to take a break right after the major... event... comes to pass (and we take the next-day break). The fact that I was able to pick up from there, read the rest of it, and have a face covered by tears says something. Amazing fic.
I can mark all the times I've cried for something fictional:
VastaKustutaFirst time: Mufasa dies. (Lion King)
Second time: Leslie dies (Bridge to Terabithia)
Third time: conspirators die, then dog that looks just like mine is put to sleep. (Valkyrie and very end of Marley & Me)
Fourth time: John Coffee dies. (Green Mile)
Fifth time: Andy gives away his toys. (Toy Story 3)
Sixth time: Dinky Hooves is taken away from her mother. (Today, Tomorrow, and Forever)
Dammit, I am not an emotional person. I'm NOT. But this story left me weeping openly. Bravo, you magnificent bastard.
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VastaKustutaSomething [New] (in red) and ''Alternive'' is coming...
VastaKustuta-To give the reader a Choice, I wanted to try.
(Also, small typo in my Title ?)
That made me cry :(
VastaKustutaThe alternative ending made me happy again :)
Yeah I give this story a 5/5 just because of the amazing characterization of Derpy and Dinky. As for why the Agency might think Derpy unfit to be a mother. Possibly someone in Ponyvile sent in a complaint about Derpy as per her Logorrhea and wall eye; using this as a reason to get Dinky removed to a safe home.
VastaKustutaI havn't read the alternate ending but I have one of my own in my mind that I might put down and submit. :p
You pulled my heart out, tore it up, and threw the pieces off a cliff.
VastaKustutaBut damn, this is one of the saddest things I have come across in a while. No shortage of manly tears here.
I was reading comedy Derpy stories before, but this made me see her in a new light. Now I want nothing more than Derpy to live happily with her daughter forever.
This really hits home, hard. But, as for the Alt end, I can't read it yet. Sad tends to stick with you more than happy, I find, like a main character dying at the end. (Titanic wouldn't be known across the world if Jack had survived at the end.)
All in all, 5 very weepy stars.
Dammit, how *dare* you write such high quality fanfiction?
VastaKustutaThe alternate ending ruins the whole goddamn thing.
VastaKustutaBut you don't have to read it, so four stars for a great story.
I agree, the alternate ending is nowhere near as good. It makes the whole thing a lot less sad, and in a sad story that ruins the entire point.
VastaKustutaThis is an excellent fanfiction...
I figured it out when Dinky started asking questions. "OK, so she'd know if it was her birthday, obviously there's no other occasion, so why . . . oh. Oh, no."
VastaKustutaA few paragraphs later:
"DAMMIT WHY DID I HAVE TO BE RIGHT."
I'm a bit concerned about the image for this fic being replaced with the one from the friend-off, since it contains spoilers for the poem.
VastaKustutaI think I just died a little on the inside
VastaKustutaWhen I found out what the party was about, it was like a bullet to my soul...
VastaKustutaThank you for the Alternate Ending - It made my cry for a second time - but this time tears of happiness. ^_^
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VastaKustuta@nova_25
VastaKustutaA child could be taken away if CPA deems that the parent is not able to care for a child due to mental disabilities.In Derpy's case, they probably assumed that she wouldn't be able to care for her due to her inability to communicate properly...
God this is a sad story... T.T
Her speech impediment kinda slowed things down for a second, but when you got used to it and got to figure out what she was saying with those nonsensical words it sped up again. Also, her forcing the words there at the end was just... just... T.T
VastaKustutaI have Asperger's Syndrome, its a disability on the autistic spectrum, and its not as bad as what Derpy had, but I get how hard it is to vocalize something without sounding like a complete moron... Derpy turned out to be a great mother, despite what the agency claimed.
Okay, I'm not an emotional person. I don't get angry when people yell at me, I don't cry when I watch sad movies. It takes a lot to get me, and I cried when I read this. Not like sobbing or anything, but yeah, a tear ran down my cheek.
VastaKustutaPowerful stuff, bravo... but poor Derpy and little Dinky :C
I cried. Like a baby. Harder than I have for anything on the internet in a very long time. It felt good.
VastaKustutaThank you, author.
I've always thought that people who cry reading fanfics were either stupid or melodramatic until I read this. And now I'm crying like a baby...
VastaKustutaThank you for this beautiful story.
Despite the quality of this fic let me just say that I hate you. You people are just cruel with Ditzy/Derpy's character. On one hand she functions just fine but you make he into as totally retarded as opposed to just being a bit off.
VastaKustutaIt's just insulting. Not to mention no one apparently cares about her and she's alone.
Oh and what about Dinky's father? Let me guess, Derpy was raped or something and Dinky is the result?
Well written and emotional though.
If you are going to portray a speech impediment, portray it in a serious and respectful manner.
VastaKustutaNot just DURR MUFFINS!!
Got to stop reading these sad Fan Fictions about Derpy!
VastaKustutaWhy can I not laugh at the funny crossed eyed pony anymore! I feel so bad for her...
I-im trying to comment on this, but im crying too much :<
VastaKustuta@GamerPony
VastaKustutaFrom what you say, I can deduce with a 99.999% accuracy that you haven't read the Alternative Story Ending I made, and which is on this very page...
And just take a couple of *SPLAPS* and a *Boot to the Head* for your moronic mention of 'rape'... Seriously, some people have issues.
Reading it with the Alternate ending... it was... wow. I simply loved the story. After reading most of the Derpy fanfics. I've bacame a true Brony because of her. I Adore her and her determination. I truely hope she get Chance to shine in the spotlight in season two and becomes more than "just a side pony" or the "Spot the Derpy"... if you will. :) Five Stars all they way for the story and the Alt Ending!!!!
VastaKustutaI was making a plush Derpy since morning... and then, in the evening, a friend LINKED ME THE GOOGLE DOC. Not a word, no description, and I just clicked it open and READ IT.
VastaKustuta*hugs headless Derpy-plushie*
........not sure if I can finish the plushie now Q_Q
*ponders whether or not try the Alt-Ending*
SMASH THE STATE
VastaKustutaJUSTICE MUST BE DONE FOR THESE TEARS I SHED
In the original story(non-alternate ending) I hated that child-protection services pony more than I hated twilight in that grimdark fanfic where she kills everpony just for their powers TT-TT
VastaKustutaPleeeeaaaaase let the alternate version be happy.......
What in the hay possessed me to read this while seated at the front of chemistry lecture!!!!!! D'':
VastaKustutaAwwww.... You gave Derpy Receptive Aphasia.
VastaKustutaNot sure how that warrants removal of kids though.
Neither am I sure how this water got in my eyes.
Manly tears...they have been shed. 5-star fiction right here.
VastaKustutai read bubbles and i was a little sad but i wasnt prepared for this o_o i shed LOTS of manly tears
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaYou have a strange sad ending, and an alternative happy one.
Don't like happy stuff ? Don't read and don't comment for no good reason, ok ? I don't go around insulting you, so a bit of respect.
And so people have no knowledge of Child Protection Services and assume that the sadness was forced. A child can actually be taken away from a parent with a mental disability.
VastaKustutaAlso nova, just because they didn't like an alternate version doesn't mean they don't like happy stuff. I personally hate every "Alternate Happy Ending" fiction ever made because all it does is say that the person can't handle feeling emotion. None of it ever turns out well written either. Granted I haven't read yours, so I can't judge, but it's disrespectful to make a happy ending to someone's fanfiction. If you can't handle these kinds of stories, just look at the tags before viewing them.
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VastaKustutaI'm going to go and see if I can get a Derpy Hooves plushie.
Then I'm going to buy it.
Then I'm going to hug it.
I know this is pretty old, but this is the first time I've read it.
VastaKustutaWhat a touching story. I cried...
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VastaKustutaI was fine until I read the poem. I burst into tears.
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VastaKustutaAnother Fanfic that I will carry into the future, along with Black and White.
VastaKustutaI ho[e this is read on and on, 'till the end of time, it's that good.
Manly Tears were not shed, no, I cried like a baby. I love you Chopper.
I love you man.
im a guy and this made me cry... Given the proper jazz music by Saori Yano.
VastaKustutaBut seriously folks. THIS is a fanfic worthy of a fanon pony. 6/5
this goes straight into my archives of good reads.
Compliments to the writer.
Derpy Hooves postcard poetry.
VastaKustutaI have never cried like this at a story before.
YOU SON OF A BITCH! DAMMIT! FUCK!!!
VastaKustutaWHY!!!
Why the hell did you have to do that huh?! WHY. Do you take pleasure in ripping people hearts out?! The hell is wrong with you?!
Aww. :(
VastaKustutaI'd like to make an alternate version wherein Derpy's bestest friend Raindrops adopts Dinky legally and they all live together happy like. :)
And since I consider "bubbles" canon, I want to see Derpy have a happy adulthood.
Good story though. Seriously.
...I hate you so much right now...
VastaKustuta*cries*
Truly a sad story Choppers Top Hat. Brought tears to my eyes, thank you. Its been a while since a story did that
VastaKustutafuck derpy I hate her. Someone make a fanfic where she gets brutally mutilated.
VastaKustutaDamn you Chopper, damn you for making me cry. 5/5 :'(
VastaKustutaAnd thank you Nova for changing a very bitter-sweet ending into a happy one. You still made me cry. 5/5
Damn...this is one of the few times I've cried like this with a written story T^T...and also the first time I cry with a happy ending...
VastaKustutaReally a great job, 5/5 to both of you (Chopper & Nova) T^T!
These are Manly Tears damn it, Manly Tears...
VastaKustutasideways 8 stars
okay, seriously. wtf?
VastaKustutaWhy oh why oh WHY does everyone assume Ditzy Doo (derpy Hooves, whatever) is ass retarded or something?!
She is seen soooo many other times as a background pony with a perfectly straight face, no weird eye derp.
Hell, cheerilee (think I spelled that wrong...) only had three legs for all of 10 seconds in WInter Wrap Up but you don't see everyone writing heart-wrenchingly sad, tear jerking (good job Choppers Top Hat) fics about her living life as a disabled pony fighting hard to overcome her lack of a leg... or something.
Really, can't Derpy (I really, really prefer Ditzy. I hope they don't change it) just be a beloved, normal background pony, like DJ Pon3, or octavia? (go read the Vinyl Scratch tapes. NOW.)
Its getting tiresome...
I give this fic four manly tears and the max number of stars available for emotional impact. Thank you for not making it longer I probably would be crying myself to sleep tonight.
VastaKustutaAlso, thanks for the alternate ending. I choose the alternate ending because DAMN YOU I REFUSE TO SEE THAT FAMILY BROKEN UP. Well done.
That's... That's... D'AWWWW.
VastaKustutaWow... I hate and love you at the same time... You suck. But that was brilliant.
VastaKustutaI love how everything derpy said made perfect sense when you made the connections. That helped hit it home. Thank you.
you sir have made a teenage male cry at my little pony
VastaKustutaOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO F*CK ME. F*CK ME. F*CK ME. :'(
VastaKustutaName: Dr. [DATA EXPUNGED]
VastaKustutaDate: XX/XX/20XX
Total items: 2x copies of "fan fiction", retrieved from site "Equestria Daily."
Input: One (1) printed copy of "Bubbles" and one (1) printed copy of "Today, Tomorrow, and Forever."
Setting: Very Fine
Output: One (1) copy of [DATA EXPUNGED]. When read aloud by D-Class Personnel, story caused all living beings present to become incredibly depressed, resulting in [DATA EXPUNGED]. Story now contained in 1' x 1' x 1' steel safe in Dr. Brights office
(If you don't get it, :http://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-914
@Anonymous
VastaKustuta>from a parent with a mental disability
-Good thing Ditzy just have a 'lazy eye' and a 'speech impediment', right ? Plus a job as a professional mailmare, hmm ?
>"Alternate Happy Ending" fiction ever made because all it does is say that the person can't handle feeling emotion
-Huhhh... last time I check ''happyness'', ''hope'' and ''hearth-warming stuff in general'' were kinda emotions and/or things generating emotions ?
Read #1, feel sad, read #2, feel a bit more happy.
Rollercoaster of emotions, woo!
>it's disrespectful to make a happy ending to someone's fanfiction
-Errrrrr... Since when does ''writting'' something alternative to one's story is considered as ''bad'' ?
You should calm a bit, it's like I threw a pie or something... It's purely an alternative choice; Read #1, then choose if you want to read #2.
>If you can't handle these kinds of stories, just look at the tags before viewing them.
-Thank the universe for one of the defining traits of the Human race that is ''Curiosity'', right ?
Again... ''alternative'', aka : YOU make the choice.
And also, nothing is stopping people from loving BOTH stories, you know ?
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaDitzy's (usually attributed) ''lazy eye'' and ''speech impediment'' make it hard for her to express herself properly, which in turn make many ponies believe that she's ''not clever''.
Now these days, most people and authors display her with those 'problems', but with an happy personality and a relatively normal or average level of intelligence.
I don't like fan fiction but things like this are an exception (especially when it involves characters that aren't in the main cast).
VastaKustutaThis story made me cry :(
Man, I didn't cry, but it sure didn't make me feel good. Especially at the end.
VastaKustutaI want to read it but the Sad tag and comments about crying are putting me off. I don't want to cry. CONFOUND THESE PONIES. THEY MAKE ME FEEL EMOTIONS. Seriously, since I've been reading these fics I feel like I'm more easily moved by emotional thing. I am OK with this though.
VastaKustutaSo sad... I want to say something about how it relates to me, personally, but since it's the public and the interwebz, I'll leave it at that it was very well written.
VastaKustutaI... I...
VastaKustutaOw... :'(
Todays 'ma birthday, everypony.
VastaKustuta@Anonymous
VastaKustutaI agree with 'ya,
derpy ain't that type of pony.
Happy birthday, Derpy Hooves. I hope you find peace, wherever you are.
VastaKustutai hate it when there is a letter at the end of a sad story. You think you're going to make it through the end without crying but then the writer is like "NOPE!", and kicks you in the face.
VastaKustutaOh Celestia, WHYYYY? ;_;
VastaKustutaso many tears...
VastaKustutaSaddest story I have ever read. Many tears were shed.
VastaKustutaI'm sobbing. Thanks a lot.
VastaKustutaI have to admit I never did get the whole Derpy/Dinky relationship (or even them as sisters as I have seen some write the two as), where did Dinky come from? Is she a background pony I have been over looking or what? Is she actually Derpy's daughter (did Lauren mention it somewhere or maybe one of the other creators?) I am just completely ignorant on this matter.
VastaKustutaHowever, with saying this, I cried, yes, like the others, I did cry at the fact Derpy lost Dinky, I may not get how the whole Derpy/Dinky thing started but OMG! Poor Derpy and Dinky! I would rather have Derpy as a mother any day then some stranger! Sure, they may take good care of me but NOTHING beats the love of a REAL mother! Even one as random as Derpy!
And then 9 months later Veggie55 makes a comic out of it. LOL
VastaKustuta@Baron
VastaKustutaThe Internet is funny like that, yeah.
I normally dont cry at anything, but buck this is too much.
VastaKustutaOH CELESTIA WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY???????
Holy mother of god I haven't cried that hard in a while...
VastaKustutaAnyone who enjoys reading fanfics NEEDS to read this. This is a testament to what true literature can be.
VastaKustutaI can't hate this. I can't hate you. I can't hate anyone here. Because this is too beautiful, and Faust bless you, Choppers Top Hat. Faust Bless you.
VastaKustutaWow. That was.. Chillingly good. I haven't cried like that since I watched Elfen Lied.
VastaKustutaLovely story i hope they make Dinky canon Derpy's child
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