Description: Twilight Sparkle has spent weeks learning all she can about friendship, and is ready to pass on what she's learned so far to a unicorn she sees so much of herself in. But does she stand a chance against great power and pride...?Reforming Equines Can Be Tricky
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Nice! I'm keen to see how the target of this all will take it.
ReplyDeleteLoose labels spoil fables
ReplyDeleteIf you're talking about the tags, they were the ones I submitted. I'm merely a fan of theatrics--secrecy is hardly my aim here.
ReplyDelete...or is it?... :)
This whole story is a bit too ambiguous for my tastes. Very little is revealed about what Twilight is doing or about why she's upset with Rarity near the beginning. While I believe I know what the author is implying throughout the story, not revealing anything makes for an unsatisfying read.
ReplyDeleteYou know, I love the style this is written in. It's the type that doesn't treat the reader like a moron. It makes the leap of faith that the audience can take implications and inferences for what they are, instead of dumbly stating things like "I don't get it". It makes me want for other stories to be written like this.
ReplyDeleteWhen I read this, I didn't feel like the story was trying to hint and poke at some mystery I should be puzzled about because the characters don't know or because it's not relevant yet. I felt like the whole thing was trying to tell me a story with a critical piece of info held ransom.
ReplyDeleteEventually, I did figure out the missing piece of info to make the whole thing click, but it just left me with a generally unpleasant feeling. It certainly doesn't feel like it was written poorly or anything. I just didn't enjoy it.
(I keep getting the title mixed up with "Reform School Fillies".)
I liked this, even if it was a bit vague at some points. But the vagueness fit what you were going for, for the most part. They were talking about something that was both "hush hush" and something of a sore subject, so its understandable for their dialogue to be a bit evasive and cryptic to people not "in the know." Still, some people may have a bit of trouble picking up on certain references and figuring out the specific details... At any rate, I'm looking forward to the next chapter - I want to know if this works out or backfires miserably! XD (Hoping for the former, actually... I'm a sucker for redemption tales...)
ReplyDeleteOi, Seth! The rating star thing is broken. This is listed as only having 3.8 stars as opposed to 5. Might wanna get on that
ReplyDeleteThis shows great potential I look forward to seeing whether or not Twilight succeeds in her little project.
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