• Story: Garden Party (Updated Chapter 4+5!)

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    [Normal] For some reason, I like normal Luna more than shipping now days.  I think something is wrong with me.

    Author: Ninja Tales
    Description:  When Luna finds a stranger in the castle garden, she is unsure of how to act around another pony. But as the relationship between the two ponies grows, Luna hints about secrets in her past. There are some nightmare's that you can't wake up from.
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    29 comments:

    1. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 2:38 PM

      I guess someone was being a vandal against the document..

      Or the blog brony's computer has been taken by a trolling relative.

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    2. SonicBrawler1992March 19, 2011 at 2:40 PM

      WHYY!?

      D8>

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    3. IggyMarch 19, 2011 at 2:41 PM

      WHO DUNNIT?!

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    4. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 2:42 PM

      Looks like the author accidentally let the story be editable by everyone.

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    5. Victorian R. HellslyMarch 19, 2011 at 2:42 PM

      This looks like a job for inspector Pinkie Pie!

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    6. Roy G. BivMarch 19, 2011 at 2:44 PM

      Poor story...

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    7. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 2:50 PM

      D:

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    8. Nova25March 19, 2011 at 2:50 PM

      @Roy G. Biv

      Hopefully, the autor will repair the story and disable the Edit-thing.

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    9. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 2:54 PM

      It was fun trough turning the stuff into a small chat when we waited for the paste,

      The document is still open trough, Better lock it before another "Creative Revision"

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    10. Night FlightMarch 19, 2011 at 3:10 PM

      Good job! I cant wait for the next part. Luna fics are the best. Next time don't forget the permissions (although i did use it to fix a spelling error)

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    11. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 3:29 PM

      I'd like to read it, but when I got to a random insertion of the word "dicks" I realized it was still editable. Then I saw two Anonymouses editing it further down... So I give up for now. I don't want to find that two paragraphs are missing or the whole ending is gone or something. D:

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    12. Mikel E. CrawfordMarch 19, 2011 at 3:56 PM

      Fixed the damn editing problem. Now we wait for the author to repost it.

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    13. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 6:12 PM

      It's dead jim.

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    14. AnonymousMarch 19, 2011 at 6:16 PM

      Author: DOUBLE FACEHOOF NUTS AND SHOES APPLESAUCE
      This is what I get for submitting things at 4am.

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    15. AnonymousMarch 20, 2011 at 12:05 AM

      NEW LINK: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-ml_haBR3AoS0DowuF1ZUP4rS2UKYj_35dM7mte0Gbw/edit?authkey=CKTcqtsM#

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    16. AnonymousMarch 21, 2011 at 6:21 PM

      "Part 1"? So it will be continued?

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    17. Immaneuel KanterMarch 31, 2011 at 4:06 PM

      Well, I'm glad all that was sorted out, but did something happen to part 2? The end seemed so abrupt.

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    18. SamMarch 31, 2011 at 4:51 PM

      @Immaneuel Kanter

      I believe it was a cliffhanger.

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    19. EscherMarch 31, 2011 at 10:09 PM

      Oof. Part 1 was promising. Part 2, not so much.

      I expect a certain amount of angst in any Luna story, but that last line... not a good sign, there.

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    20. AnonymousApril 6, 2011 at 5:28 PM

      Am I the only one who d'awwed at Socially Awkward Luna?

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    21. DuskWolfApril 6, 2011 at 8:21 PM

      That was an absolutely adorable and talented bit of writing. Normally I don't go in for fanfics, but this one I really did enjoy. A rare thing. A rare thing indeed.

      Well done, NP!

      @Display Name

      Noap!

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    22. AnonymousApril 6, 2011 at 9:30 PM

      Hmmmm...not bad, but it fell a little flat, we aren't given a whole lot of insight as to what the characters were feeling.
      Perhaps some more FEHLING DAHLING!
      .................I GO!

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    23. DuskWolfApril 7, 2011 at 3:50 AM

      @Anonymous

      We are given subtle hints, but remember, we're dealing with a pair of characters here who're entirely introverted. Possibly both of them are INFP personality types.

      I worry that just cheesing emotion in there too early on and rushing it would actually ruin the story. Luna deserves time to blossom, rather than it just being forced. She does seem the kind of pony who's good at hiding her feelings. But given time, that can change. I just wouldn't want it to change overnight.

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    24. AnonymousJune 18, 2011 at 4:10 PM

      This is good, I anon humbly approve of this story!

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    25. La BarataJune 18, 2011 at 6:38 PM

      MOAR. Also, Seth, fix this plz. It should be ranked 6, not 4. Review box must be broken.

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    26. Nova25June 20, 2011 at 6:26 PM

      The story seems to be taking a... strange turn...

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    27. La BarataSeptember 1, 2011 at 11:40 PM

      Yeah, dude? I've got brain damage and have managed to get more chapters out in the last month than you have in total. There's something wrong here.

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    28. a01421October 17, 2011 at 12:13 AM

      good so far, just taking aaaages to update...

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    29. KliceDecember 31, 2011 at 7:14 AM

      Yeah.. Too much ages to update ! Come on Tales, bring those updates on !

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