Description: Rainbow Dash asks Fluttershy to help her clear the cloud buildup around Ponyville, and ends up giving her a quick lesson on how to fly like a pro. As the two take flight together, they find that they have feelings for each-otherFlight Lesson
19 comments:
I dawwwwed
ReplyDeleteA cute piece of fluff.
ReplyDeleteSometimes, a brony needs this kinda thing.
It's like cotton candy for your soul.
ReplyDeleteVery daww, and you don't even have to count it as true shipping in the romantic sort of way if you don't want to (or if you dislike shipping).
ReplyDeleteThis was very cute. I have to admit, I've been a bit bored lately with so few Dash fanfics to read. I hope there are more to come.
ReplyDeleteNice! that was a really enjoyable story.
ReplyDeleteThanks,
Cuddly works... just a bit of Dash with anyone huh?
ReplyDeleteI liked everything but the ending it just came off rushed.
ReplyDeleteI like you - oh noez I destroyed are friendship!
no you didn't I like you 2 =D
and then they fell asleep watching the sunset
wat
If it was longer and took its time I wouldn't mind it.
It just feels like what should have been a full conversation was smashed into one sentence.
That said I did enjoy reading it.
Its just felt to short its supposed to take place over a day but up until it mentioned the sunset I was under the impression it was taking place over the course of an afternoon.
I guess I can forgive it because time fly's wen your having fun and i think its safe to say fluttershy and dash were having fun.
4/5 stars from me it was good but I think its length is what prevented it from being great
@Pacce & @Phoeare right... This was nice. This story is good, and you should feel good.
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone! Especially Sethisto for posting it :3
ReplyDelete@Anonymous I agree completely, and it's a terrible habit I get into with all my work. I always do a huge build-up, and then smack it down with a rushed ending. I'll keep that in mind if I ever decide to write another one.
@Dylan
ReplyDeleteim that anon you reply 2
I really do like it and I would love to see you do more. If you can at least try and kick that habit I would love more stuff like this.
It's very sweet; makes me think it could work as a close friendship between them as well
ReplyDeleteThat was really cute. I loved it.
ReplyDeleteIt had lots of potential to be longer though, like the above anon said.
my favorite ship. i agree on the length comments above.
ReplyDelete4/5
Regarding the length concerns, this was originally 1 part of a 5 part story. I didn't particularly like parts 1, 2, or 4, so I just integrated part 5 into part 3 and called it a story, that's why it might seem a little short.
ReplyDeleteThat said, thanks for the kind words, everyone!
moar
ReplyDeleteIf only the ending were a bit less rushed I'd think it was perfect. But AMAZING! I loved the story! 4.8/5 :)
ReplyDeleteThe ending did feel slightly rushed, but I loved it. I really liked the "class" especially because Fluttershy was playing along.
ReplyDeleteScrew reading this. I already know it's awesome. And...I guess I'll continue this comment in a couple minutes. Just let me read it. *legitimately reads it* Ok, yeah. Awesome. It may have been slightly rushed, but it was....hm....oh! It was "Hella damn awesome!"
ReplyDeleteAnyhow, I'm lovin' it more than a fat kid on a McDonald's burger made of cupcakes.