• Story: Equinox

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    [Normal] Some Luna stuff from Squeak.  And those still aren't eyes.
    Description: Luna says hello to an old friend.
    Equinox
    esmaspäev, 14. märts 2011 op
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    34 kommentaari:

    1. Squeak14. märts 2011, kell 16:54

      Thanks for the upload, Blog Brony!

      Comments always appreciated!

      VastaKustuta
    2. Anonüümne14. märts 2011, kell 16:58

      I will read the story riiiiiiiiiight after I comment about ass eyes.

      Ass eyes.

      VastaKustuta
    3. Sandman14. märts 2011, kell 17:08

      I dawwww'd.

      Then I quickly clicked 'X' because the eyes, the eyes, they won't stop staring.
      ...
      ...
      ...MAKE THEM STOP STARING!

      VastaKustuta
    4. Squeak14. märts 2011, kell 17:11

      @Sandman

      Thank you!

      Why do I get the suspicion I'm going to get more comments about the eyes than the fic?

      Not to say I blame people....they never stop staring...

      VastaKustuta
    5. Sandman14. märts 2011, kell 17:29

      @Squeak Yeah the eyes will get more comments, it seems like when stuff like that is completely unintentional it is creepier/funnier.

      VastaKustuta
    6. Anonüümne14. märts 2011, kell 17:40

      That's one small step for Princess Luna, one giant leap for ponykind.

      That story was really nice - made me go 'awwww'

      also...


      the eyes

      VastaKustuta
    7. Pride14. märts 2011, kell 17:46

      Really, really liked this. Was bloody adorable.

      VastaKustuta
    8. madmax14. märts 2011, kell 18:23

      @Squeak
      squeak that was beautiful and lovely
      luna is not alone :)

      VastaKustuta
    9. uSea14. märts 2011, kell 19:11

      That was very nice.
      If I can offer any criticism it would be that it seems you used an overabundance of commas in some areas. I can't really talk though. I'm just as guilty.

      Also, I'm staring at the eyes, not her ass.
      Honest!

      VastaKustuta
    10. Cereal Velocity14. märts 2011, kell 20:03

      Five stars. Five unabated stars.

      This brought a tear to my eye. Excellent work, Squeak.

      VastaKustuta
    11. PodoTepworth14. märts 2011, kell 23:34

      Beautiful cadence, lovely imagery, brilliant execution. This story wants to be read aloud. I read parts aloud just to hear it.

      Very Beagle-esque style. A wonderful choice for this character and this story.

      The only thing I found slightly awkward was the Celestia/Luna exchange upon arrival in Ponyville. That paragraph lost the rhythm for me, just a little.

      That didn't matter, though.

      I loved this. Read it three times, then it dragged me out of my comfortable bed to get in front of a real keyboard and praise it. Read it again while writing this. It is the only Luna story I've seen so far that has felt exactly right... You've enlarged the character for me. Bravo, and thank you.

      VastaKustuta
    12. TooMuch15. märts 2011, kell 00:10

      It feels like a fairytale. Awesome.

      VastaKustuta
    13. LordOfTheWrongs15. märts 2011, kell 03:26

      Of course they're not eyes!
      ...they're decoy eyespots.

      VastaKustuta
    14. Lurks-no-More15. märts 2011, kell 03:30

      The early part made me kind of sad; the later part likewise; then the ending turned it all around. Nice!

      VastaKustuta
    15. Anonüümne15. märts 2011, kell 08:09

      aww i love luna and this story, but the way you kept saying 'the moon was silent' made me think it was gonna start talking and then i had a visual that the moon from the mighty boosh was having a chat with luna lol

      VastaKustuta
    16. Anonüümne15. märts 2011, kell 09:01

      @LordOfTheWrongs

      "And here we see the pinkie piacis, hunting in its natural habitat. It sneaks up to its victim, but, confused by the decoy eyes, it attacks the rear instead... turning this hunt into a mating session."

      VastaKustuta
    17. Squeak15. märts 2011, kell 09:55

      Wow, so many new comments! How wonderful!

      I suppose I shall make my way down the list in order.

      @Anonymous
      Yes, one giant leap! Thank you, glad you liked it! I now have the urge to write a story about pony space travel....I suppose I'll save that for the Whoof fic.

      @Pride
      Thank you! I do like adoribleness, so that is quite the compliment!

      @Maxie
      Thank you, Maxie, I'm very happy your liked it! Indeed she is not alone.

      @uSea
      Yeah, my comma usage has occasionally been a bit of a problem, I shall try to work on it! Thank you for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

      @Cereal Velocity

      Wow! Thank you! I'm so happy this story seems to be doing so well! Unabated five stars! *Squeeee*

      @PodoTepworth

      Wow, that has to be one of the best comments Iv'e gotten. Thank you. Funny you should mention Beagle, I happen to be reading an anthology of his at the moment! I thought the story style would fit, so that's what I was going for! I'm glad I accomplished it! Thank you for the feedback as well, I shall work on it! I'm really giddy that you enjoyed it to such an extent. Perhaps I shall try to get my brother to do a reading for you. Thank you very much for reading, and taking the time write me a comment.

      @Toomuch
      Thanks! I was leaning towards that fairytale style of things.

      @Lordofwrongs.
      Of course....it all makes sense now...

      @Lurksnomore
      Thank you!

      @Anonymous
      Glad you liked it, but now I'm going to be thinking about the Mighty Boosh all week!

      VastaKustuta
    18. Pacce15. märts 2011, kell 15:10

      Beautiful imagery, I even got a touch misty at the end.

      VastaKustuta
    19. The RPGenius15. märts 2011, kell 17:46

      This was nice. The grammar needs some tidying up here and there (most notably, the word is "its" without the ' when it's meant to be possessive--it only has the ' when it's being used as a contraction ("it is")), but that's the only real criticism to be given. Otherwise, it's short and sweet, fairly well-written and a nice glimpse at a character who continues to be sadly underused. 4 Stars.

      VastaKustuta
    20. Squeak15. märts 2011, kell 21:20

      @Pacce
      Thank you Pacce! *Eeehhh* I made someone misty!

      Justasplanned.jpg

      @TheRPGenius

      Thank you! The Its have been corrected. I'm glad you liked the story, and thank you for the helpful feedback! Much appreciated!

      VastaKustuta
    21. SlyWit15. märts 2011, kell 23:56

      Very sweet story. My workshop-critical side wanted to change only a seldom spot or two, which is certainly rare in fanfiction (other stories have me going of like a warning klaxon). I admire your natural talent at imagery and especially at evoking bittersweet emotions. There is a reason I always come back to your fics and this is no disappointment.

      VastaKustuta
    22. Anonüümne16. märts 2011, kell 06:14

      Wonderful job on this, thanks for the great story.

      VastaKustuta
    23. PodoTepworth16. märts 2011, kell 14:34

      @Squeak

      >Perhaps I shall try to get my brother to do a reading for you.

      How very cool! I hope this works out... I'll look forward to listening!

      VastaKustuta
    24. Squeak17. märts 2011, kell 18:39

      @PodoTepworth

      He won't....

      Sadfluttershy.jpg


      But, somepony has apparently been listening to us, and did this!

      http://yourlisten.com/channel/content/85863/Equinox_

      VastaKustuta
    25. Anonüümne18. märts 2011, kell 20:01

      @uSea
      Yeah, she has nice eyes doesn't she?

      VastaKustuta
    26. Squeak19. märts 2011, kell 18:50

      @SlyWit

      Thank you, Slywit!! I've corrected a dew mistakes since your comment, so hopefully I caught those errors! Thanks again, I'm really ecstatic at your comment! I'm glad you weren't disappointed!

      VastaKustuta
    27. Fire.Esper28. märts 2011, kell 10:34

      Your writing style is booming with sophistication, like Abraham Lincoln punching his fist through a steam engine.

      Well-done.

      VastaKustuta
    28. Tigerflame30. märts 2011, kell 17:24

      Thanks for uploading this nice story! it was sooo cute and the added music helped make it even cuter! Thank you! <(^~^)>

      VastaKustuta
    29. That Swede27. aprill 2011, kell 16:14

      a tastefull piece on a moonless night such as this.
      i enyojed it.
      5 stars.

      VastaKustuta
    30. Naxts3. mai 2011, kell 13:48

      I really wished I read this earlier. This is a really sweet and simple story.
      Its absolutely lovely.

      VastaKustuta
    31. BronyMike4. mai 2011, kell 01:12

      Aw... got some tears of sweetness outta me at the end of this kid. Well-done. So, am I interpreting this right? Was it the moon itself that decided to appear mid-day to cheer up Luna? Heartwarming.

      A bunch more errors are still in the thing, though. In this show, the plural of Pegasus is "Pegasi". Also, when it's possessive, the word is "its". It's only "it's" when short for "it is".

      VastaKustuta
    32. Wierdplatformer7. oktoober 2011, kell 16:21

      This is a cute little story. I'm surprised that it doesn't have more views.

      VastaKustuta
    33. Luna12. märts 2012, kell 22:16

      a great and heart touching story (made me all sappy)

      VastaKustuta
    34. Unknown31. august 2012, kell 06:18

      Miss O is always here.You can run&hide.I shall catch u!"!"Careful

      VastaKustuta

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