Author: A.J
[Normal] A Start
Description: Determined to become more powerful than Twilight Sparkle, The Great and Powerful Trixie decides to study up on her magic skills. But without a teacher, she must turn to the one pony she'd rather not have to face again.A Start
[Shipping] My Hero
Description: Rainbow Dash is having trouble sleeping after the Best Young Flyer's competition, but what's Fluttershy doing awake so late?My Hero
[Normal] The Bet
Description: Snails is caught by Fluttershy after losing a bet to Snips.The Bet
17 kommentaari:
I only read The Bet, but I just wanted to comment on how it was quite well done, albeit very short.
VastaKustutaI think that's a certain charm you've always had though.
I remember reading your fics back when the show first started, and out of all the shipping fics I would read, yours seemed the most believable because they ended hinting at the beginning of a relationship instead of 2 characters slobbering all over each other.
Another thing is, while reading, I really feel relaxed, like I don't have to worry about any of the characters getting messed up horribly or something.
Overall The Bet was an enjoyable quick read, and actually a scenario that I could see playing out in the show.
Good Work.
Feedback IMMENSELY appreciated. I want to get better so you guys can continue enjoying what I write. It's why I write in the first place. So please, please, PLEASE! tell me what you think and what you would like to see from me in the future.
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You're all awesome and thank you for reading!
Seems quite incomplete though but they are nice stories
VastaKustuta@AJ
VastaKustutaI read your story "My Hero" and I found it quite cute.
That was a wonderful Fluttershy.
I quite liked the Trixie/Twilight story, my only complaint would be the amount of times you used the full "Great and Powerful Trixie". Even though this is how Trixie acted, it gets annoying reading it every sentence.
VastaKustutaI really liked the Fluttershy/Rainbow Dash story, it was short and sweet.
The other story will have to wait, I'm out of time!
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaIncomplete?
Short but quite nice, all three of them.
VastaKustutaTrixie's self-centered frustration, even when she is trying to apologize, contrasted nicely with Twilight's matter-of-fact attitude about it all.
After "Sonic Rainboom" I'm honestly surprised there hasn't been more Dash & Fluttershy shipping. Cute little story!
AJ, I love how your writings are easy on the eyes, per-say. They aren't forcing a lesson down your throat nor, with your shipping fics, are they forcing you to accept that "THESE PONIES KISS AND STUFF". Pretty short, but the simplicity of it all adds to your charm!
VastaKustutaI have no constructive criticism to give you, AJ, and for that I apologize.
@AJ
VastaKustutaI Mean its too short and it feels like only a part of a story thats left unfinished
@Anonymous
VastaKustutaYou've GOT to use the full "The Great and Powerful" every single time when referring to Trixie. It may be annoying, but it's meant to mimic the experience of actually having a conversation with her. When you're getting irritated The Great and Powerful Trixie cheers.
And so do I . . yay . .
Oh my, Cottonmouth said something positive... now I have to read it.
VastaKustutaI read all three of them. I like how in the shipping one, you write like they're going to have a real relationship rather than SURPRISE FLANKSECKS the whole story. Plus it feels good to finally read something short, rather than a 700-page epic poem about Applejack and Rainbow Dash sucking face. :)
VastaKustutaI read My Hero, and A Start. Both 5/5, and I would love to see more from their respective authors!
VastaKustutaAre these all by the same person? I'm having trouble telling, but the writing style seems kinda similar.
VastaKustutaI really liked each one. I'd say 4 stars just because not enough happens to grab my interest, even though they're simple and fun. I think A Start was probably the best, and normally I always fall for shipping.
I saw the title for My Hero and thought of Foo Fighters, and then I misread "The Bet" and.... yeah... my mind started being spammed by another Foo Fighter's song lyric.
VastaKustutaJust read My Hero, and I have to say that its a very nice story. Short, but that's just fine with me. It's like a simple scene to link to the actual episode it stems from, I wouldn't go so far as to label it as a 'deleted scene', as that just sounds ridiculous all things considered.
I aim to read the other two tales over the course of the afternoon, after I've listened to some Foo Fighters
you, said "anyone" :p
VastaKustutaIt keeps saying that the google docs don't exist.
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